技巧03 如何设计高潮-高一英语读后续写基础技巧与整体演练.docx

优点英语高一英语读后续写基础技巧与整体演练技巧03 如何设计高潮故事中的高潮(climax)是指故事达到最紧张或扣人心弦的那一部分。高潮有时候是剧情中的“危机”点。有时候，它只是达到了关键时刻或者转折点，发生了一些事情，或者主角必须做出决定，从而导致一个结果或其他。 我们在分析叙事类故事或者小说故事的时候常常用下面的图表来表示故事情节。故事高潮设计策略1增加外部冲突增加外部冲突是一种明显有效的可以达到故事高潮的方式。(1)角色之间的冲突【例如】On the fourth or fifth night，we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy.After driving in vain for some time，Mom suddenly got a great idea：Why didnt we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up a tent there? David and I became nervous.【分析】开车找旅馆徒劳无功母亲建议在他人后院搭帐篷David和“我”倍感紧张，心有不悦(母子的观点不一)(2)角色与环境之间的冲突【例如】Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him.he saw instantly that it wasnt a dog at all，but a wolf，quickly catching up with him.Macs heart jumped.he fired the spray at the wolf.A bright red cloud enveloped the animal，and to Macs relief，it fell back，shaking its head.But a minute later.Then it.，tearing open his tent bag.He fired at the wolf a second time，and again，it fell back. 【分析】Mac骑车独行，路遇恶狼，与之搏斗，险象环生。人(角色)狼(环境)大战(3)角色与时间的冲突【例如】The car abruptly stopped in front of him.“Get into the car.” Paul shouted at Mac.Mac jumped off the bike and slid into the car without delay as the wolf was just two steps away and was about to tear Mac into pieces.What a narrow escape! 【分析】汽车突停面前急喊上车Mac上车避险恶狼近在咫尺(此情此景，刻不容缓)2放大内心冲突放大内心冲突(文中角色的内心斗争)也有助于建立一个高度紧张和不确定的时刻。现在我们再来看高考读后续写中的内心冲突是如何体现的。 【例如】(原文见2016·浙江10月)But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Jane was so tired，hungry，and extremely frightened.She thought to herself，“If only I had not quarrelled with Tom.Where is Tom? He must have made the emergency call.What I need is enough courage.If I continue my spirits tomorrow，I will be likely to guide the helicopter.” Lying beside the stream，she fell asleep very soon.Suddenly，she heard the shouts of tigers，which made her scared to death.After she held her breath for a few minutes，everything was quiet again.In the terrible darkness，she slept again.【分析】夫妇争吵妻子独自行走荒野走散，夜色渐黑独处森林阴森恐怖后悔莫及(内心冲突的刻画)内心独白(往昔对比虚拟语气的使用旁白描写是常见技巧之一)1阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。I joined a summer camp just a few weeks ago. Our first day was full of getting-to-know-each-other games to help us learn our way around the campground. Our second day was very hot, so a teacher took us to the best place for cooling down. “Woo-hoo!” the teacher shouted as he led the way into the shallow part of the lake. We all ran after him like ducklings and happily splashed(拍水) around, except for one kid named Max, who sat on the dock(码头) looking sad.Heres the surprising thing about that. The day before, when we took tests to see what level swimmers we were in the pool, Max turned out to be the best swimmer. So why was he just sitting? I swam over and said, “Why arent you in the water? We found out yesterday that youre a bit like a half fish.”“OK, Ill tell you, but its a little embarrassing(尴尬的),” he said. “Even though Im kind of a half fish, Im also afraid of real fish-and of anything else that might be swimming in the dirty water.” “Dont be embarrassed,” I said. “Were all afraid of something. Im totally scared of snakes and the dark, um, avocados(牛油果).”“Avocados?” Max smiled.“I know it sounds strange,” I said. “But theyre just so slimy(黏)!”“Look out!” Max joked. “The big avocado monster(怪物) is coming to slime you.” “You look out!” I replied. “A giant fish monster is heading your way.”Soon, we were both laughing. That broke the ice enough for me to say, “You might feel better if you take a look at whats actually under the water.”I grabbed two pairs of goggles(护目镜) from a bin and put one pair on. “Ill go first,” I said, then went under for a few seconds before coming up. “Nothing scary,” I reported.Max hesitated, then put on the other pair, took a deep breath, and went under the water for about three seconds.注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右;2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。“Any lake monsters? “I asked when he appeared from the water. _In my experience, laughing a little about the thing that scares you can make it easier to talk about it. _2阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。In the village where Charles lived, high in the French Alps, December usually brought garlands scented with pine. Each Sunday, villagers would walk down decorated streets to the old stone Wishing House. There, for the four weeks before New Year, they would light candles in the house and share their stories and pray for the next new year together. Charles loved the glow of the candles.But this year, World War changed everything. Charless father and brother went to do their military service. Families needed ration coupons for things like butter and sugar. Because candles were costly and hard to find, the house would not have any candles this year. Charles was thinking about all of this as he stepped slowly out of bed one morning. He put on his warmest clothes and headed out to do his chores.He opened the big barn door, sunbeams streaming into the barn. He looked up to the loft where his treasure box hid. The box held fishing line, a dried snakeskin, a whistle and his birthday candles. Each year on his birthday, one new candle would appear on his cake. After making a wish, hed quickly blow out the candles, clean them off, and carefully put them into the box for next year.When his chores were done, Charles climbed the ladder and opened his treasure box. He counted 10 candles. The cool wax with already melted edges gave him an idea. Charles wrapped the candles in his handkerchief and put them carefully into his pocket. He hurried down the ladder and ran to the house.“Mama! Grandpa! I know how we can have candles for the Wishing House!” he cried as he threw open the door.“How?” his mother asked.“I could collect peoples used candles and make new ones. Maybe we could melt them down.”“Its a wonderful idea,” said grandpa, “Ill help you.”注意：1. 续写词数应为150 左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Charles and his grandpa visited every house and shop in the village._In the Wishing House were the four candles Charles had made._3阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Brutus had everything in the world: good food, good toys, and good clothes. But the problem was that he had to share them all with his three other brothers, Mack, Jack and Robert.Brutus had to share his favorite cookie box with Mack, who always finished the whole box before Brutus could take a bite. He also had to share his toys with his youngest brother Jack, who always ended up breaking them. Brutus also had the unfortunate privilege of being given his older brother Roberts hand-me-downs of old clothes.Brutus hated sharing and wished he had nobody to share his belongings with. “Why cant I be the only child?” Brutus sighed as he stared at the stars. “I wish I had no stupid brothers,” Brutus demanded at one sparkling star.To his surprise, the star suddenly twinkled and fell towards his direction. The star inched closer and closer to his bedroom window. He screamed and tried to wake his brothers up but it was too late. The star crashed inside their room, followed by an ear-splitting explosion.The next day, Brutus woke up with a bad headache. He rushed to his brothers beds to ask them if they were okay but was quickly shocked to see that their beds had been empty. They were nowhere to be found.Brutus had the fortune of spending the whole morning playing with his toys. He put on his brothers brand new clothes and sneakers which fit him perfectly. As he was checking himself in the mirror, he suddenly realized that his wish had come true. His brothers were gone and he had the whole world to himself.“I can get used to this,” he said to himself happily注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。When he felt hungry, his mother came back with a full box of cookies._In this way, he spent five days as an only child before he felt the empty house was too quiet._4阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was a Saturday afternoon.I was having lunch when Dad told me to get ready. I became unhappy.I dont like Saturdays! Even though it s a holiday for most children,it is not for me because I need to go to football club.Many kids love sports, but I am not one of them.I prefer to stay at home and read. I dont like running. so in a team am a bad player. The coach is tired of me and my teammates sometimes think I m useless.I have no idea how to play football.Usually ,after practice my teammates would ask me to stay out of the game and I would just nod.Last Thursday,the coach told us that we would be competing with some other team in a month and many people would come to see the game. Our opponents(对手)were the last winner and I froze(呆住)at the thought of the embarrassment()I would face if the team lost because of me.So I decided to practice hard for the match and I went to practice every single day.After one month, when the game day came my teammates were reluctant(不愿意的)to take me in the team,and I also wished to stay away from the ground as well. But as luck would have it they were short of one player and had no choice but to take me in the team.Our team was named the Big Blues.There was a great cheer on our arrival in the field.I got very nervous.The game started and within two minutes, I got a blue card. By the time I was allowed back the score was two goals for each team and the next goal would decide the winning team.注意:1续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。When the ball came towards me, I froze._All my teammates ran towards me to lift me in the air._5阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。“Wake up, Mom!” I felt a little hand on my face and reluctantly opened my eyes. There was my son, ready to start the day. I also heard my babies awake in the next room. Ready or not, the day had begun!I loved being home with my little ones, but I felt the weight of the world on my shoulders. My husband and I had just bought a house, and some unexpected expenses made our budget tighter than it had ever been. I was weary of spending more pennies. We werent foolish with our money. We worked hard. We were doing all the right things, but we had had one financial disappointment after another.I was going to pick up my kids photo portraits from the studio at the local mall. Despite our small budget, it was important to me to have pictures of my children as they were growing up. The previous week, I had found a coupon (优惠券) and used some change from the car to buy a $7.99 portrait package, and today was the day I was to pick up the portraits. Since we were going to the mall, I decided to make it an outing and packed some sandwiches for us to eat at the food court. Whats more, there are many ride-on toy cars in the malls food court for fun and for free.After breakfast, we went off. After we parked, we walked into the portrait studio at the mall, and I approached the counter. The young woman smiled.“May I help you?”“Yes, Im here to pick up our photos.”The woman asked my name and opened her drawer. “Ah, yes, here they are. Arent they just so adorable?” She took out the photos, and the smiling faces of my kids warmed my heart.“Yes, they are great. Thank you,” I said.She put the photos into an envelope. Then she spread