2022年1月浙江高考英语读后续写：不可以貌取人需真诚待人 讲义 2023届高考英语作文专题复习.docx

2022年1月浙江高考读后续写简单分析When Dr. Henderson was assigning(指定) project mates for his introduction to experimental psychology class, I secretly hoped he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with. Above all, I hoped he wouldn't assign me to work with the intense, fiercely competitive, singularly serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match. As fate(命运) would have it, Dr. Henderson very deliberately matched everyone in class and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid.I went up to my new teammate and introduced myself. He looked at me as though I weren't there. I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably cause his grade-point average to take a nosedive. He wasn't outright mean or abusive. He just gave me the impression he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone.Needless to say, I didn't look forward to an entire term of being brushed off, but I tried to make the best of it and didnt say anything, lest I make things worse.The project required each lab team to develop a hypothesis(假设)，set up an experiment to test the hypothesis，run the tests，do the statistical analysis and present the findings. Whatever grade the team received would be shared by both students.      When my teammate and I met to discuss our project, I was uneasy. Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good grades the exact opposite of me. I was outmatched. I actually wanted to drop the class at one point，but stopped short because I didnt want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out. I decided to stick to it no matter what. After lengthy discussions, we somehow agreed to do a study on the tactile-kinesthetic perception of space. I wasnt sure what it meant，but at least we had a topic.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1: We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.Paragraph 2: One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.由于版本不同，个别词或句子可能与真题有差别，但查阅了好几个版本，主体内容都差不多。1.  第一遍阅读抓住故事的六要素，忽略个别生词 Character: Dr. Henderson, I(the author), The author's new project mate;  Setting: at school; at the hospital;  Plot: The teacher assign project mates and I was assigned to the fellow I wanted to avoid. I introduced myself to the new mate and met coldness. What we needed to do together to get grade. After the discussion, we decided the topic of our experiment. . . Conflict: I vs myself(my expectation was not met-best friend-fun friend-serious and competitive fellow); I vs my new teammate(学渣 vs 学霸); My new project mate vs nature (a serious disease); Solution 1:  adjust myself gradually(introduced myself actively and met coldness-tried to make the best of the situation-felt uneasy-stick to the project though outmatched and wanted to drop the class) Solution 2: active communication; didn't give up; stick to the project; Solution 3: my new project mate recovered from the disease because of my encouragement/support? Theme: friendship; my new understandings of a serious and competitive fellow.     有的学生阅读容易受困于部分生词，而认为自己没看懂原文，其实抓住故事的六要素就已经算是读懂原文的重要线索和细节了。不必纠结什么是tactile-kinesthetic perception of space, 只需要知道它是一个project的内容即可。2. 分析文章划线的十个词    文章给出的10个词分别为：Dr. Henderson(另一版本Dr. Gullickson), project, serious, teammate, alone, findings, grade, shared, discuss, satisfaction. 可以简单的分一下类，Dr. Henderson 和 teammate是文章的主人公；project，discuss，findings, grade，shared这些都与实验开展(过程、结果、评价)有关；alone, serious, satisfaction皆与主人公的感受有关。在续写时需要提及主人公比较简单，实验的过程、结果和评价的词汇说明续写情节与之相关，三个感受的划线词说明续写要关注主人公的情感变化。在续写时用上五个及以上的划线词应该对于学生不难，只要不是情节太偏，应该都问题不大。3. 根据续写所给的两个句子预测情节、结局和设定主题    故事的明线是完成整个project，暗线是两位主人公在互相合作的过程中，情绪情感的变化，如原文重点描述了作者的情绪变化，disappointed-active-unhappy-calm-uneasy-determined-. .，续写时同样要show作者的情感变化。根据给出的两句话，可以做如下预测：Paragraph 1: We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.Paragraph 2: One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.    情节、情感预测：    第七段：从“We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.“这句来看，并结合文章第四段内容和第六段内容“agreed to do a study on the tactile-kinesthetic perception of space“，本段应该主要围绕plans来展开，即实验开展的过程develop a hypothesis of the tactile-kinesthetic perception of space-set up an experiment to test the hypothesis-run the tests-do the statistical analysis and present the findings. 由于过程比较长，词数70词左右，因此第一段应该是进行到了项目的某个阶段，而没有结束，也能基本预测作者的同伴的情绪可能会由冷漠，不屑与我搭档到慢慢接纳我这个学渣，乐于和我合作，比较顺利的开展项目的各个步骤。    第八段：第八段首句突然出现的意外事件，打断了我们开展project的进程，而出现的冲突，为本段的情节作出了铺垫。即该段可能要写我如何在lab mate生病住院的情况下，独自完成项目的剩余内容，当然这个独自也不是完全独自，而是我的lab mate如何以另外的形式参与、指导、鼓励或者帮助我顺利完成整个project，并在结尾点出故事的主题，如作者对整件事的看法或态度。4. 原文语言特点分析    读后续写最重要的是内容和语言，内容即情节的预测之后，语言要模仿原文，达到语言方面的协同，需要考生能够在短时间内抓住原文的主要语言特点。    原文有两个语言特点是比较明显的，一是使用了很多心理描写，如第一段“I secretly hoped he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with. Above all, I hoped he wouldn't assign me to work with the intense, fiercely competitive, singularly serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match.” 这里的心理描写非常生动地刻画了老师在分配项目同伴是作者的心理活动和内心感受。第二段从第三句开始都是心理描写，“I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably cause his grade-point average to take anosedive. He wasn't outright mean or abusive. He just gave me the impression he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone.”从该心理描写可以很明显感受到作者遭受到的冷眼和冷遇，也刻画出了作者同伴最初的给人的印象。第三段也可以说是作者的心理描写，表明了作者在遭遇了冷眼之后的态度。第五段“I actually wanted to drop the class at one point，but stopped short because I didnt want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out. I decided to stick to it no matter what. ”，此处也为心理描写，刻画出作者一方面想放弃，另一方面又不想给人看不起，最终决定无论如何也要坚持完成这个项目。    第二个语言特点是用了非常地道的俚语，如“as fate would have it,” is a standard idiom meaning that fate played a factor in something. Another common use of this phrase would be "as luck would have it", which means that luck had an involvement in sth. 另外一个俚语是cause his grade-point average to take a nosedive, take a nosedive，which means an aircraft goesinto a sudden and rapid descent toward the ground leading with the nose of the plane or a person falls toward the ground face first or sth./sb. suddenly and rapidly begins to decline in physical, emotional, or psychological health or stability; to suffer a sudden loss or decline in value or success. take a nosedive比较形象的说明作者猜测同伴担心作者这么学渣，会极大地拖低他的GPA. 第三个俚语是stop short, which means stop suddenly or abruptly; 说明作者想放弃的念头只出现了一下就停止了。最后一个俚语是chicken out, which means to decide not to do something because one is afraid. 这些俚语都比较生动，会对部分学生造成一些理解上的障碍，在时间非常紧张的学生而言，结合上下文准确理解这些短语非常重要。另外，由于是记叙学校生活，使用了部分informal的词语，如brush off=dismiss someone or something in an abrupt way;  fellow(a man or a boy);     综上所述，续写文本要尽量与原文在这两个语言特点上的协同，需要学生有比较敏锐的文本特点解读能力，能够在续写文本运用心理描写刻画出作者或者作者同伴的情绪变化和心理状态，同时储备了一些非常地道的俚语，能够在续写中信手拈来。考生也可充分恰当使用原文中的某些俚语。5. 下水作文尝试    We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans. After several meetings, we started to click with each other. To catch up with him, I surfed the internet to dig more about our project. Our project went smoothly and we spent hours in the lab every time discussing and designing an experiment to test the hypothesis about tactile-kinesthetic perception of space. After several failures, we finally proved our hypothesis and collected a lot of data to support our findings. We were so excited and my teammate even squeezed out a smile instead of the serious look as usual. Now, we all looked forward to presenting our findings in front of the whole class next month. However, as fate would have it, God deliberately played a joke on us. (119 words)One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease. Shocked and worried, I paid him a visit and when I came in, he wore a smile, which seemed that he didn't want me to worry. I was quite upset when he told me to present the project alone. He seemed to read my mind and said, "You've also put a lot of efforts and you are capable of accomplishing it." With his encouragement, I began to make PPT with all the statistics. The day finally came. Dr. Henderson made the whole presentation live so my teammate could watch it online. The presentation ended, followed by big claps. I could even picture the satisfaction on my teammate's face and hear him cheering loudly. The whole thing gave me a new perspective of judging people, not from one's look, but from one's heart by doing something together. （136 words）学科网（北京）股份有限公司