读后续写微技能写作指导情感描写课件-2024届高三英语一轮复习.pptx
读后续写微技能写作指导 情感描写 教学目标教学目标:By the end of the class,students will be able to:1.Master some words about emotions.2.Master some of the writing skills.3.Express different feelings in writing properly.emotion happy,glad,delighted,excited,joyful,pleasedangry,annoyed,mad,crosssad,upset,depressed,sorrowfulsurprised,amazed,astonished,shocked fearful,frightened,scared What do the expressions mean on WeChat?12345 Step 1 Circle the words about emotions(考题回顾考题回顾)Linda,a high school girl,was feeling depressed after she had failed her mid-term exams.Her friends and classmates were worried about her,but she didnt feel like talking about it with them.One day,Mrs.Green entered the classroom and asked her students to prepare for a surprise test.They waited anxiously at their desks for the test to begin.“I want you to write what you see there.”The students,confused,got started on the task.“Er.Yes,madam!”Linda was puzzled because she thought her idea was no better than anyone elses.Feeling nervous,Linda went into Mrs.Green s office.Step2 Writing skills1.be/feel/become+adj.(系表系表结构构)2.Feeling+adj，主主+谓谓+宾宾(非非谓语短短语，作原因，作原因/伴随状伴随状语)3.adj,主主+谓谓+宾（宾（形容形容词，作原因，作原因/伴随状伴随状语)4.(形容词形容词+ly)副词副词(修修饰动词/句子句子/形容形容词/副副词)5.with/in+n.(介介词短短语，作原因，作原因/伴随状伴随状语)Skill 1.be/feel/become+adj.(系表系表结构结构)2.2.听到那个坏消息，她听到那个坏消息，她很伤心很伤心。He _ and sweet.was very happy1.1.他又他又高兴高兴又甜蜜。又甜蜜。Hearing the bad news,she _.felt very sad 3.3.天黑了，她天黑了，她非常担心非常担心她儿子的安全她儿子的安全,情不自禁哭了。情不自禁哭了。she _about her sons safety when it was dark,and couldnt help crying.felt very worriedSkill 2.Feeling+adj，主主+谓谓+宾宾(非谓语非谓语短语短语,作原因作原因/伴随状语伴随状语)1.1.他他感到很激动感到很激动，立刻拿出手机，迫不及待地告诉他，立刻拿出手机，迫不及待地告诉他的朋友这次经历。的朋友这次经历。She went on her way,_,and soon met an old man on the road.feeling upset2.2.她她不开心不开心地地继续赶路，不久就在路上遇到一位老人。继续赶路，不久就在路上遇到一位老人。_,he took out his phone at once,eager to tell his friends the experience.Feeling excitedWang Peng sat in his empty restaurant,_.feeling very depressed3.3.王鹏坐在空荡荡的饭店里面，王鹏坐在空荡荡的饭店里面，感到非常沮丧感到非常沮丧。Skill 3.adj,主主+谓谓+宾宾（形容词，作原因（形容词，作原因/伴随状语）伴随状语）3.3.难过但不恐惧难过但不恐惧，他决定要改变这一切。，他决定要改变这一切。We finally arrived at our destination，_tired and hungry 2 2.我们终于到达了目的地，我们终于到达了目的地，又累又饿又累又饿.Heartbroken but fearless_,Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew.1.1.吓坏了吓坏了，埃利和我尝试了所有我们知道的防御，埃利和我尝试了所有我们知道的防御熊的熊的行动。行动。Frighted/Terrified_,he decided to turn everything around.Skill 4.(形容词形容词+ly)副词副词（修饰动词（修饰动词/形容词形容词/副词副词/句子）句子）1.1.他他高兴地高兴地笑了，露出了一排洁白整齐的牙齿。笑了，露出了一排洁白整齐的牙齿。_,I had taught Anthony to sew when he was 13,when he still respected me.Luckily/Fortunately2.2.幸运地幸运地,在安东尼在安东尼1313岁时我已经教过他缝纫岁时我已经教过他缝纫,那时他还在那时他还在崇拜我崇拜我.He smiled_,revealing a row of white and even teeth.happilySkill 5.with/in+n.（介词短语）（介词短语）2.“2.“但是我知道他刚才就在那儿。但是我知道他刚才就在那儿。”露茜说，眼里露茜说，眼里含着泪水含着泪水。She looked at me _.1.她她惊奇地惊奇地看着我。看着我。But I know he was,said Lucy,_ in her eyes.with tearsin amazement 英语课开始了英语课开始了,老师要把改好的试卷发下来。请使老师要把改好的试卷发下来。请使用前面所学的方法描述用前面所学的方法描述Tom在拿到试卷前内心的情感在拿到试卷前内心的情感(60词左右词左右)。When the bell rang,the English teacher was about to give out the test papers she had corrected._Step 3 Micro-writing When the bell rang,the English teacher was about to give out the test papers she had corrected.Tom held his breath and kept whispering,“God bless me!”Nervous and worried,Tom couldnt help squeezing his sleeve(袖子袖子)and he could feel his heart beating faster and faster.He tried to stop mind-wandering but in vain.He felt he might have failed the test and wondered,“How will the teacher blame me?Will mum nag(数落数落)me?After struggling hard inside,Tom got his paper.神神态语言言动作作心理心理Tip：情感描写经常结合心理、动作、语言、神态等多种写作手段有机结合起来，以丰富故事情节。情感情感参考范文读后后续写写评分原分原则：1.1.本题总分为本题总分为2525分分,按按5 5个档次给分。个档次给分。2.2.评分时评分时,先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次,然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次,最后给分。最后给分。3 3.评分时评分时,应主要从以下四个方面考虑应主要从以下四个方面考虑:(1)(1)与所给短文及段落与所给短文及段落开头语的开头语的衔接衔接程度程度;(2 2)应用应用语法语法结构和结构和词汇词汇的丰富性和准确性的丰富性和准确性;(3 3)上下文的上下文的连贯性连贯性。(4)(4)拼写与标点拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面,评分时评分时,应视其对应视其对 交际的影响程度予以考虑。交际的影响程度予以考虑。4 4.如如书写书写较差以致影响交际较差以致影响交际,可将分数降低一个档次。可将分数降低一个档次。根据评分的量化表，评一下自己作文的得分。根据评分的量化表，评一下自己作文的得分。itemscore 1.写作内容写作内容52.语法、词汇语法、词汇53.连贯、衔接连贯、衔接54.书写、词数书写、词数55.拼写、标点拼写、标点5总分总分？高分作文高分作文:高高颜值+好内涵好内涵Step 4 SummaryWriting skills：1.be/feel/become+adj.(系表系表结构结构)2.Feeling+adj，主主+谓谓+宾宾(非谓语非谓语短语作原因短语作原因/伴随状语伴随状语)3.adj,主主+谓谓+宾宾（形容词形容词，作原因，作原因/伴随状语伴随状语)4.副词副词(修饰动词修饰动词/句子句子/形容词形容词/副词副词)5.with/in+n.(介词介词短语，作原因短语，作原因/伴随状语伴随状语)Step 5 Homework1.1.熟读情感描写积累素材熟读情感描写积累素材2.2.完成短文写作：完成短文写作：JennyJenny无意中泄露了她的好朋友无意中泄露了她的好朋友LucyLucy的秘密，为的秘密，为此此LucyLucy大骂了她一顿然后愤怒地离开了。请描述大骂了她一顿然后愤怒地离开了。请描述LucyLucy离开后离开后JennyJenny的情感变化。（词数的情感变化。（词数6060左右）左右）Looking at Lucy storming out of the classroom,Jenny stood rooted to the spot._Tips:Jenny的情绪变化推测：的情绪变化推测：1.愤怒、内疚、伤心、自责愤怒、内疚、伤心、自责 2.冷静下来、换位思考、内疚、决定道歉冷静下来、换位思考、内疚、决定道歉Thank you!
