2022-2023学年高一英语读后续写解题指导（母亲节的惊喜）课件+.pptx

AMothersDaySurpriseA Practical GuidetoEnglish Continuation Writing读后续写解题指导试题文本2解题指导34范文赏析目录CONTENTS1导入5续写思路及评分标准01.Leadingin（导入）（导入）01.Leading in01.Leading in（导入）（导入）1.Would you give a gift(礼物)or surprise to your mother on Mothers day?2.What kind of surprise you plan for Mothers Day.3.Lets read a story A Mothers Day Surprise 02.试题文本试题文本 AMOTHERSDAYSURPRISEAMOTHERSDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMothersDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jemafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jefturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJeftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeffshandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear！Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右：2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.自主学习检测词词块块检检测测1.decided to boil the porridge_ 2.put some rice into a pot of water_3.broke two eggs into a plate_4.put two slices into the egg mixture_5.turned on the second stove burner_6.heat up the frying pan_7.started frying the bread_8.threw the burnt piece into the sink_9.steam shooting out of the pot_10.the lid starting to shake_11.turned off the gas quickly_12.continue to cook the rest of the porridge_13.touched the hot burner_14.caught the smell of burning_决定煮粥决定煮粥放一些大米到水壶放一些大米到水壶打二个鸡蛋到盘子打二个鸡蛋到盘子放放2 2块面包到鸡蛋混合物中块面包到鸡蛋混合物中打开第二个火炉燃烧器打开第二个火炉燃烧器加热煎锅加热煎锅开始烤面包开始烤面包把烧焦的面包块扔进水槽把烧焦的面包块扔进水槽注意到蒸汽从锅里冒出来注意到蒸汽从锅里冒出来盖子开始摇晃盖子开始摇晃快速关掉煤气快速关掉煤气继续煮剩下的粥继续煮剩下的粥触碰热炉子触碰热炉子闻到了烧焦的味道闻到了烧焦的味道03.解题指导解题指导 文体：文体：记叙文人称人称:第三人称时态：时态：一般过去时文章大意文章大意：本文以母亲节的惊喜为线索展开，讲述了一对双胞胎在母亲节给妈妈送上一份惊喜的感人故事。双胞胎打算亲自做一份美味的早餐献给妈妈，但不幸的是，他们连连失败，后来在爸爸的帮助下，他们成功做好早餐并将其献给亲爱的妈妈。明线：明线：A surpriseA surprise暗线：暗线：love between familieslove between familiesI.文本解读文本解读II.Readforelements(读懂大意，读懂大意，定定六要素和六要素和主旨要义主旨要义)读后续写原文基本是记叙文，而记叙文主旨要义通常有六要素，即：时间、地点、人物、事情的起因、经过结果。而且文章主题句一般在文章开头段文章开头段。Readforelements(定定六要素，六要素，主旨要义主旨要义)Jenna&Jeff(twins),mother,fatherAt homeAt 6:00 am in the morningThe twins wanted to surprise their mother on Mothers Day.The twins planned to cook breakfast for their mother续写内容(待定)The twins wanted to surprise their mom on mothers day,so they were preparing the breakfast but it was mess and burned the finger.III.Readforplotsandfeelings(定故事情节和情感定故事情节和情感线线)故事情节定为四部分，分别是主要情节的开头(beginning)、主要情节的发展阶段（development），主要情节的高潮（climax）和结局（ending），结局也就是我们的续写部分。Thetwinsplannedabreakfastandtheythoughttheyknewthejob.The porridge became a mess andthesecondbreadturnedblack.Continuationpara.2:Thetwins carried the breakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherupContinuation para.1:Theirfatherappeared.The beginning went welluntil the first piece ofbreadgotburnt.Excited;confidentFine;under controlPanicked;Lost confidenceHappy;relievedSense of achievementclimaxReadReadforforplotplot&feelingsfeelingsbeginningendingIV.细读首句，构思框架细读首句，构思框架 仔仔细细阅阅读读所所给给两两段段的的首首句句，结结合合正正能能量量结结尾尾，思思考考大致框架大致框架。续写续写:Para1:Para1:As As the the twins twins looked looked around around them them in in disappointment,disappointment,their their father appeared.father appeared.The The twins twins carried carried the the breakfast breakfast upstairsupstairs and and woke woke their mother up.their mother up.负能量正能量反转在在父亲父亲的助攻下的助攻下,早餐顺利做好了早餐顺利做好了母亲非常惊喜母亲非常惊喜!段首句决定故事走向不随意添加新人物段首句决定故事走向负能量-转-正能量V.Readforcontinuationwriting(研究所给首句，寻找原文研究所给首句，寻找原文线索，线索，增加细节，定续写内容增加细节，定续写内容)定续写内容是在前面“二定”对文本理解的基础上，对续写开头语利用主谓推进式主谓推进式进行研读，以开头句主谓内容为基础,在原文寻找线索，以问问题问问题（问问题问问题从语言、动作语言、动作【五官，肢体等】【五官，肢体等】、心理或周围环境、心理或周围环境角度出发）的形式寻找续写内容的切入点。.研究所给首句，寻找原文线索，构思情节研究所给首句，寻找原文线索，构思情节Para.1 As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.承上：思路1(心理）：How did father feel on seeing the mess?思路2（语言）：What would their father and the twins say when their father appeared?思路3（动作）：What did their father do when he knew the plan?思路4（动作）：How did their father help the twins?原文（最后一段）：原文（最后一段）：The next minute,The next minute,the porridge boiled the porridge boiled over and put out the fire.over and put out the fire.But But the stove was a mess the stove was a mess nownow.Jeffs hand touched the hot burnerJeffs hand touched the hot burner and he and he gave a cry of pain.Oh dear!gave a cry of pain.Oh dear!The piece of bread in the The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.pan had turned black as well.研究所给首句，寻找原文线索，研究所给首句，寻找原文线索，构思情节构思情节构思情节构思情节承上：思路5（动作）：What did the twins do to cheer up their mother?思路6（动作、面部表情等）：How did their mother react and feel when she saw the breakfast?思路7：How did the twins feel?What did they understand and realize from this incident?原文细节原文细节2:2:The The twins twins were were filled filled withwith excitementexcitement as as they they thought thought of of thethe surprise surprise they they were were planning planning for for Mothers Mothers DayDay.How How pleased pleased and and proud Mother would be when they proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.brought her breakfast in bed.原文细节原文细节3:3:But But Jeffs Jeffs hand hand touched touched the the hot hot burnerburner and and he he gave gave a a cry cry of of pain.Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.pain.Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.Para.2：The twins carried the breakfast and woke their mother up.主线任务是庆祝母亲节主线任务是庆祝母亲节主线任务是庆祝母亲节主线任务是庆祝母亲节!Jeff Jeff Jeff Jeff 小可爱的小手手被烫伤了小可爱的小手手被烫伤了小可爱的小手手被烫伤了小可爱的小手手被烫伤了.遣词造句、遣词造句、增加细节，定续写内容增加细节，定续写内容Para.1 As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.思路1(心理）：How did father feel on seeing the mess?思路思路1+思路思路2+思路思路3+思路思路4(看到一片狼藉的厨房):父亲双手叉腰,眉头紧皱,从他的表情判断,很明显他Skill1+skill2:面部面部+肢体肢体语言言Judgingfromsbsvoice/eyes/expression/behavior,itwasevidentthatsbwastrappedin+情情绪名名词.(情情绪外露外露)从某人的声音从某人的声音/眼神眼神/表情表情/行行为判断判断,很明很明显他陷入了他陷入了Hiseyebrowsnarrowedandhishandsrestedonhiships.Judgingfromhisexpression,itwasevidentthathewasabouttoexplodedafterseeingthemess.遣词造句、遣词造句、增加细节，定续写内容增加细节，定续写内容Para.1 As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.思路2（语言）：What would their father and the twins say when their father appeared?思路思路1+思路思路2+思路思路3+思路思路4“Ohdear,Ithoughtitwasyourmotherherein“Ohdear,Ithoughtitwasyourmotherhereinthekitchen,anyway,whatareyoudoinghere?thekitchen,anyway,whatareyoudoinghere?“Oh,Daddy,todayisMothersDay,wejustwantto“Oh,Daddy,todayisMothersDay,wejustwanttoprepareaFrenchbreakfastformum,butprepareaFrenchbreakfastformum,but.运用直接引语，增运用直接引语，增加表达的生动性加表达的生动性.遣词造句、遣词造句、增加细节，定续写内容增加细节，定续写内容Para.1 As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.思路思路1+思路思路2+思路思路3+思路思路4了解情况后了解情况后,蹲蹲下来安慰下来安慰,给拥抱抱/拍拍肩膀肩膀,说Havingdone主+谓语1,谓语and谓语3思路3（动作）：What did their father do when he knew the plan?思路4：How did their father help the twins?Havinglearnedtheirplan,hekneltdown,pattedthemontheirshoulder/gavethemabighugandcomforted,“Timeisonourside.Letsdoittogether”.1.Theystartedthebattleonceagain.2.Theycleanedupthemess,cookedtheporridgeandtoastedthebreadonceagain.运用分词短语作状语描写人物动运用分词短语作状语描写人物动作，提高语言的丰富性作，提高语言的丰富性动作链:主+谓语1,谓语and谓语3.遣词造句、遣词造句、增加细节，定续写内容增加细节，定续写内容Para.2：The twins carried the breakfast and woke their mother up.思路思路5+思路思路6+思路思路7思路5（动作）：What did the twins say to cheer up their mother?基础版:Theysaid：”Happymothersday,mummy!”.黄金版:HappyMothersDay!Abigsurpriseforyou!.Theyyelledinchorus,theireyestwinklingwithexcitementyell的使用及眼部动作的描写，独立主格的运用，描述了孩子们送给妈妈早餐时非常兴奋的心情。.遣词造句、遣词造句、增加细节，定续写内容增加细节，定续写内容Para.2：The twins carried the breakfast and woke their mother up.思路思路5+思路思路6+思路思路7思路6（动作、面部表情等）：How did their mother react and feel when she saw the breakfast?基础版:1.Whenmomsawthebreakfast,shewasmovedtotears.2.Shetastedthebreakfast,praisedthekidsandgavethemahug.黄金版:1.Themomentmomsawthebreakfast,hereyeswidenedupandtwinkledwithjoy.2.Deeplytouched,themothersaidthankyouandshetastedtheperfectsandwichaswellastheporridge,sayingthatitsthebiggestsurpriseshehasreceived.Soshockedanddelightedwasshethatshehuggedthetwinstightly,tearsofjoywellingupinhereyes.the moment引导从句，非谓语动词V-ed,v-ing 的使用，使语言表达多样化；so+adj.部分倒装的使用，更突出了母亲的的喜悦，tightly使动作描写更加生动。面部表情描写使故事更打动人。.遣词造句、遣词造句、增加细节，定续写内容增加细节，定续写内容Para.2：The twins carried the breakfast and woke their mother up.思路思路5+思路思路6+思路思路7思路7：How did the twins feel?虽然虽然很累很累,但是但是他们都非常开心和自豪他们都非常开心和自豪although/though/asExhausted/Wornoutas/thoughtheywere,theirheartswerefilledwithnothingelsebutjoyandpride.As/though引导让步状从的倒装完美结局，主题升华房间里充满爱,多么美好的惊喜啊!Thesunwasshiningontheproudmothersfacethroughthewindows.Whatabeautifulandsweetsurprise!感叹句的使用VI.高级句型高级句型1.在父亲的指导下，他们采取了积极的行动，重新开始。(运用固定搭配)their father,they took positive actions and started all over again.2.父亲帮助他们调整火候，这是成功的关键。(运用非限制性定语从句)Father helped them adjust the fire,which was the key to success.3.孩子们听从爸爸的指令，小心翼翼地把火打开，重新把面包放进锅里。(运用非谓语动词结构)Following their fathers instructions,the children carefully turned on the fire and put the bread into the pot again.4.妈妈一句话也没说，笑得很灿烂，把双胞胎搂在怀里。(运用名词动化)Speechless,Mother smiled a bright smile and took the twins into her arms.5.看到厨房里乱糟糟的场面，父亲惊讶地皱起了眉毛。(运用短语修饰动词)Seeing the mess in the kitchen,Father raised his eyebrows in surprise.VI.高级句型高级句型6.他惊讶地发现面包躺在地上，而Jeff看上去也是一副狼狈模样。(运用宾语从句)He was surprised to find that the bread was lying on the ground.and Jeff was like a drowned mouse.7.妈妈睁开眼睛，她发现孩子们正站在床边，用期待的目光看着她。(运用非谓语动词结构)Opening her eyes,Mother found the children standing on the edge of the bed watching her with eyes full of hope.8.爸爸没有慌张，相反，他冷静地环顾厨房，心中已有了主意。(运用介词短语)Instead of panicking,Father calmly looked around the kitchen with an idea in his mind.9.一切都解决了，爸爸离开了厨房，答应为他们保守秘密。(独立主格，非谓语V-ing动词结构）Everything settled,Father left the kitchen,promising to keep their secret.10.Jeff手里端着早餐，心依然像小鹿乱撞一样，不禁加快了脚步。(运用明喻)Jeff held breakfast in his hand with his heart still popping like a deer and quickened his pace.04.参考范文参考范文As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.His eyebrows narrowed and his hands rested on his hips.Judging from his His eyebrows narrowed and his hands rested on his hips.Judging from his expression,it was evident that he was about to exploded after seeing the expression,it was evident that he was about to exploded after seeing the mess.mess.To their relief,To their relief,To their relief,To their relief,having learned their plan,he knelt down,patted them having learned their plan,he knelt down,patted them on their shoulder and said,“Time is on our side.Lets do it together”.on their shoulder and said,“Time is on our side.Lets do it together”.Without the slightest hesitation,Without the slightest hesitation,Without the slightest hesitation,Without the slightest hesitation,they cleaned up the mess,cooked the they cleaned up the mess,cooked the porridge and toasted the bread once again.porridge and toasted the bread once again.Before long,Before long,Before long,Before long,armed with the armed with the experience of failure and an extra helping hand,the breakfast was ready,experience of failure and an extra helping hand,the breakfast was ready,giving off pleasant smell.giving off pleasant smell.20212021年新高考年新高考I I卷读后续写范文卷读后续写范文赏析赏析 The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.H Happy Mothers Day!”appy Mothers Day!”yelled yelled the twins.“a big surprise for the twins.“a big surprise for you!”Their father laughed heartily and told her that the twins had you!”Their father laughed heartily and told her that the twins had prepared breakfast for her.So shocked and delighted was she that she prepared breakfast for her.So shocked and delighted was she that she hugged the twins tightly,tears of joy welling up in her eyes,“Thankshugged the twins tightly,tears of joy welling up in her eyes,“Thanks，my dear kids.”Her face lit up with happiness.She tasted a piece of my dear kids.”Her face lit up with happiness.She tasted a piece of French toast and said that it was the best breakfast she had ever had.French toast and said that it was the best breakfast she had ever had.Love filled the whole room.What a beautiful and sweet surprise!Love filled the whole room.What a beautiful and sweet surprise!20212021年新高考年新高考I I卷读后续写范文卷读后续写范文赏析赏析sothat,sothat,倒装倒装独立主格独立主格生动的语言生动的语言感叹句感叹句总结：读后续写（母亲节的惊喜）解题指导总结：读后续写（母亲节的惊喜）解题指导05.续写思路及评分标准续写思路及评分标准05 05 续写思路及评分标准续写思路及评分标准1 1、写作思路、写作思路(1)(1)基本情节：基本情节：前文大意：本文以母亲节的惊喜为线索展开，讲述了一对双胞胎在母亲节给妈妈送上一份惊喜的感人故事。双胞胎打算亲自做一份美味的早餐献给妈妈，但不幸的是，他们连连失败，后来在爸爸的帮助下，他们成功做好早餐并将其献给亲爱的妈妈。续写思路：续写思路：双胞胎正感到失望的时候，爸爸出现了。看到厨房的景象，在得知双胞胎的计划后，爸爸没有责备，安慰他们，主动提出要帮忙。孩子们又变得兴奋起来，帮忙收拾厨房，第一种情况：爸爸熟练地做好了早餐，他让孩子们保守秘密，继续实施他们的惊喜计划，然后自己偷偷回到卧室。第二种情况：双胞胎在爸爸的指导下，姐妹俩亲自为妈妈做好早餐（体现了爸爸的爱和理解）。做好早餐后，双胞胎把早餐端上楼，叫醒了妈妈。妈妈看到早餐既惊奇又感动，爸爸也假装很惊讶。紧紧地抱着孩子们并表示感谢。使她非常感动的不仅是这个惊喜，还有孩子们对她的爱。孩子们和爸爸也会心地一笑。多么美丽的一个惊喜！1.写作思路写作思路(2)续写要点（建议）：续写要点（建议）：续写首句核心词：Mothers Day，the twins,disappointment,their father appeared;the breakfast,woke their mother up第一段：看着厨房里的一切,爸爸非常惊讶。Jeff告诉爸爸计划,爸爸没有责备，反而安慰他们，决定帮她们。她们清理了厨房,重新做好了早餐。第二段：孩子们说:母亲节快乐,妈妈看到早餐,感动流泪。妈妈品尝早餐,夸赞并拥抱孩子们。升华:房间里充满爱,多么美好的惊喜啊!(3)重点细节：重点细节：爸爸如何帮助双胞胎完成早餐。妈妈看见双胞胎制作的早餐，妈妈的反应及与孩子的互动05 05 续写思路及评分标准续写思路及评分标准05 05 续写思路及评分标准续写思路及评分标准2.评分标准评分标准（1）评分原则评分原则给分公平、公正；宽严并济，不能过严或过松；得分有理，扣分有据。立意积极、情节合理、语言水平及风格（语言风格与前文一致）、书写美观。三个逻辑一致原则：续写部分与所给短文之间的逻辑一致；续写两段内容之间的逻辑一致；续写部分与所给开头语之间的逻辑一致。（2）评分程序）评分程序阅读第1遍：根据续写总体情节及重点内容描写，初步确定所属档次。阅读第2遍：根据写作语言（修辞、句式，词汇等），确定或调整档次。阅读第3遍：看词数（少于130个，从总分中扣2分）；看书写（书写及卷面较差的降一档次）。05 05 读后续写评分标准读后续写评分标准（3 3）评分档次）评分档次本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。05 05 读后续写评分标准读后续写评分标准（3 3）评分档次）评分档次本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。THANK YOU