5.25 读后续写具体4步技巧与方法.pptx

读读后后续续写写作作文文Continuation阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Jennywasaprettyeight-year-oldgirl.Onedaywhensheandhermotherwerecheckingoutatthegrocerystore,Jennysawaplasticpearlnecklace(项链),bywhichshewastotallydefeated.Howeagerlyshewantedit!Butwhenshesawtheprice,herheartsankalittle.Shegathereduphercourageandaskedhermotherifshewouldbuyitforher.Hermothersaid,“Well,itisaprettynecklace,butitcostsanawfullotofmoney.Icanbuyyouthenecklace,butwhenwegethome,weshouldmakeupalistofhouseworkthatyoucandotopayforthenecklace.”Jennyagreedimmediately,feelingaburstofjoy.Sohermotherboughtthepearlnecklaceforher.Jennyworkedonherhouseworkdeterminedlyandearnestlyeveryday.SoonJennypaidoffthepearls.Jennyhadaverylovingdaddy.WhenJennywenttobed,hewouldreadJennyherfavoritestory.Onenightwhenhefinishedthestory,hesaid,“Jenny,doyouloveme?”“Oh,yes,Daddy,youknowIloveyou.”thelittlegirlsaiddelightedly(高兴地),withabroadsmileonherface.“Well,then,givemeyourpearls.”Hearingthat,Jennyfrozethere,ananxiousexpressiontwistingherface.“Oh!Daddy,notmypearls!ButyoucanhaveRosy,myfavoritedoll.Rememberher?Yougavehertomelastyearformybirthday.Okay?”“Ohno,darling,thatsokay.”Herfatherbrushedhercheekwithakiss,gentlyandcalmly.“Goodnight,littleone.”Aweeklater,herfatheronceagainaskedJennyafterherstory,“Doyouloveme?”“Ohyes,Daddy,youknowIloveyou.”thelittlegirlmurmuredsoftly,tryingtoescapefromherfatherseyes.“Well,then,givemeyourpearls.”“Oh,Daddy,notmypearls!ButyoucanhaveRibbons,mytoyhorse.Doyourememberher?Sheismyfavorite.”Thelittlegirlbegged.“No,thatsokay,”herfathersaid,smilingbroadlyandsweetlyandbrushedhercheekagainwithakiss.“Godblessyou,littleone.Sweetdreams.”注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；读读 后后 续续 写写 范范 例例阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Jennywasaprettyeight-year-oldgirl.Onedaywhensheandhermotherwerecheckingout（结账）atthegrocerystore（杂货店）,Jennysawaplasticpearlnecklace(塑料珍珠项链),bywhichshewastotallydefeated.Howeagerlyshewantedit!Butwhenshesawtheprice,herheartsank（下沉）alittle.Shegathereduphercourageandaskedhermotherifshewouldbuyitforher.Hermothersaid,“Well,itisaprettynecklace,butitcostsanawful（很多的）lotofmoney.Icanbuyyouthenecklace,butwhenwegethome,weshouldmakeupalistofhouseworkthatyoucandotopayforthenecklace.”Jennyagreedimmediately,feelingaburstofjoy.Sohermotherboughtthepearlnecklaceforher.Jennyworkedonherhouseworkdeterminedlyandearnestlyeveryday.SoonJennypaidoff（还清）thepearls.读读 后后 续续 写写 范范 例例Jennyhadaverylovingdaddy.WhenJennywenttobed,hewouldreadJennyherfavoritestory.Onenightwhenhefinishedthestory,hesaid,“Jenny,doyouloveme?”“Oh,yes,Daddy,youknowIloveyou.”thelittlegirlsaiddelightedly(高兴地),withabroadsmileonherface.“Well,then,givemeyourpearls.”Hearingthat,Jennyfroze（僵住）there,ananxiousexpressiontwisting（扭曲）herface.“Oh!Daddy,notmypearls!ButyoucanhaveRosy,myfavoritedoll.Rememberher?Yougavehertomelastyearformybirthday.Okay?”“Ohno,darling,thatsokay.”Herfatherbrushedhercheekwithakiss,gentlyandcalmly.“Goodnight,littleone.”读读 后后 续续 写写 范范 例例读读 后后 续续 写写 范范 例例Aweeklater,herfatheronceagainaskedJennyafterherstory,“Doyouloveme?”“Ohyes,Daddy,youknowIloveyou.”thelittlegirlmurmuredsoftly（轻声细语）,tryingtoescape（逃离）fromherfatherseyes.“Well,then,givemeyourpearls.”“Oh,Daddy,notmypearls!ButyoucanhaveRibbons,mytoyhorse.Doyourememberher?Sheismyfavorite.”Thelittlegirlbegged.“No,thatsokay,”herfathersaid,smilingbroadlyandsweetlyandbrushedhercheekagainwithakiss.“Godblessyou,littleone.Sweetdreams.”Paragraph1：Severaldayslater,whenJennysfathercameintoreadherstory,Jennywaswaitinganxiously（焦急地）forhimonthebed._Paragraph2：Holdingtheplasticpearlhisdaughteroffered,thefatherdraggedout（拿出）abluebox._构构 思思 续续 写写 的的 内内 容容STEPS Thorough ReadingPlot planningMake a draftPolish your draftThorough Reading0 0 1 1读六要素（Who,What,When,Where,Why,How）Person（人称）：First person?Second person?Third person?Tense（时态）:The simple past tense?The simple present tense?Thorough ReadingThorough Reading以记叙文为例注意：有时候一个文本并不具备所有的要素，可能只会涉及其中的三到四个Thorough ReadingThorough Reading读六要素（Who,What,When,Where,Why,How）Whoisthemaincharacter?Whendidthestoryhappen?Wheredidthestoryhappen?Whathappenedinthestory?Whydidhewantthenecklace?Howwasthestoryended?Jenny,her mother and daddyOne night when her daddy finished the storyAt Jennys bedroomHer daddy wanted her plastic pearl necklace.He wanted to know which is more important to Jenny,he or her necklace.Jenny didnt give it to her daddy.Thorough ReadingThorough Reading读六要素（Who,What,When,Where,Why,How）Who:Jenny,her mother and daddyWhen:One night when her daddy finished the storyWhere:At Jennys bedroomWhat:Her daddy wanted her plastic pearl necklace.Why:He want to know which is more important to Jenny,he or her necklace.What is the story about?Jennydidalotofhouseworkinexchangeforaplasticpearlnecklace.Herdaddyaskedhertwicewhethershecouldgivehimhernecklace.Shesaidnotoherdaddy.How:Jenny didnt give it to her daddy.Thorough ReadingThorough ReadingPerson：First person?Second person?Third person?A:Third personTense:The simple past tense?The simple present tense?A:The simple past tensePlot planning0 02 2Plot planningPlot planning情节:一般包括开端、发展、高潮、结局等部分。CharactersJenny,hermother,herdaddyBeginningJennydidalotofhouseworkinexchangeforaplasticpearlnecklace.developmentHerdaddyaskedhertwicewhethershecouldgivehimhernecklace.Andshesaidnotoherdaddy.Climax?Ending?(youropinion)?Plot planningPlot planningInfer the plot development according to the given sentencesParagraph1：Severaldayslater,whenJennysfathercameintoreadherstory,Jennywaswaitinganxiouslyforhimonthebed.Paragraph2：Holdingtheplasticpearlhisdaughteroffered,thefatherdraggedoutabluebox.Tip2:先留意所给第二段的开头语，里面的一些关键信息必须要在第一段里面有所体现Plot planningPlot planningParagraph1：Severaldayslater,whenJennysfathercameintoreadherstory,Jennywaswaitinganxiouslyforhimonthebed.Tip3:展开推断思考：根据第二段开头，可知Jenny把项链给了爸爸。可以从动作，对话，情绪等几方面去考虑1.门打开了，爸爸走进来。2.爸爸发现Jenny心事重重，问她发生什么事了。3.Jenny坐在那，不回答。4.Jenny问她爸是不是真的想要她的珍珠项链5.答曰是。6.Jenny把项链给了爸爸。续写的三大原则原文一致性原则：内容，风格正能量原则：基于故事线和感情线，预测正能量结局曲折性原则：人物遇到困难，但终会解决Make a draft0 03 3Make a draftMake a draft1.门打开了，爸爸走进来。_2.爸爸发现Jenny心事重重，问她发生什么事了。_3.Jenny坐在那，不回答。_4.Jenny问她爸是不是真的想要她的珍珠项链_5.爸爸说是的。_6.Jenny把项链给了爸爸。_The door opened,and Jennys father came in.Jennys father found her daughter upset,and asked her what had happened?Jenny just sat there.She said nothing.Jenny asked her father whether he really wanted her pearl necklace.Her father said yes.Jenny gave it to her daddy.Polish your draft0 04 4Polish your draftPolish your draft1.修改:确保语法正确，替换高级词汇，然后运用各种从句、复合结构、非谓语动词、以及强调句和倒装句等特殊句式2.扩写:增加一些语言描写、动作描写、情绪描写、环境描写，增添语言的丰富性。1.The door opened,and Jennys father came in.When the door opened,her dad came in,with a story book in his left hand.2.Jennys father found her daughter upset,and asked her what had happened?Seeing Jenny sitting on the bed with an anxious look,he went over,held her hands,and asked what was the matter.Polish your draftPolish your draft1.修改:保证用上划线的词汇，确保语法正确，替换高级词汇，然后运用各种从句、复合结构、非谓语动词、以及强调句和倒装句等特殊句式2.扩写:增加一些语言描写、动作描写、情绪描写、环境描写，增添语言的丰富性。3.Jenny just sat there.She said nothing.Shaking her head,Jenny said nothing.4.Jenny asked her father whether he really wanted her pearl necklace.For a moment,silence filled the room.“Daddy,”Jennys voice broke the silence,“Do you really want my pearl necklace?”Polish your draftPolish your draft1.修改:保证用上划线的词汇，确保语法正确，替换高级词汇，然后运用各种从句、复合结构、非谓语动词、以及强调句和倒装句等特殊句式2.扩写:增加一些语言描写、动作描写、情绪描写、环境描写，增添语言的丰富性。5.Her father said yes.Looking gently into her daughters eyes,he nodded with a delighted smile on the face.6.Jenny gave it to her daddy.“Okay.”Jenny continued,“Despite my affection for the lovely necklace,it is you and mom that I love much better.”Before her dad could say a word,Jenny took out the necklace from under the quilt and gave it to him.读后续写：语法句式升级法第1种句式：非谓语动词 having done01在读后续写中，我们经常会表达“在一个动作之后，做了另外一个动作”，比如“她走了很长时间后，她发现自己迷路了”。三次失败后，他不想再试一次。After she walked for quite a long time，she found herself lost.After he failed three times，he didnt want to try again.我们试着对上面的句子“改造升级”。非谓语动词having done可以表先后，表示分词动作发生在谓语动词之前，常译为在之后；已经了。于是这两个句子就可以改成：1.Having walked for quite a long time，she found herself lost.2.Having failed three times，he didnt want to try again.形式主语it02在读后续写中，我们经常要用到“脑海里突然出现”和“某人突然意识到”的句型。用形式主语句表达，再合适不过了。1.It suddenly occurred to him that the family inside was in danger.第1句中、他突然想到里面那家人有危险，为了避免头重脚轻，该句使用了it 作形式主语的名词性从句，真正的主语为 the family inside was in danger。2.It hit me all of a sudden that I had forgotten her birthday.第2句中，我突然想到我忘了她的生日，为了避免头重脚轻，该句使用了it作形式主语的名词性从句，真正的主语为I had forgotten her birthday。某人突然想到/开始明白.1.It occurs/occurred to sb.that 2.It hits/hit sb.that 3.It strikes/struck sb.that Last StepNeat copying Neat copyingThedooropened,andJennysfathercamein.Jennysfatherfoundherdaughterupset,andaskedherwhathappened?Jennyjustsatthere.Shesaidnothing.Afterawhile,Jennyaskedherfatherwhetherhereallywantedherpearlnecklace.Herfathersaidyes.Jennygaveittoherdaddy.草稿版：Neat copying润色版：Whenthedooropened,herdadcamein,withastorybookinhislefthand.SeeingJennysittingonthebedwithananxiouslook,hewentover,heldherhands,andaskedwhatwasthematter.Shakingherhead,Jennysaidnothing.Foramoment,silencefilledtheroom.“Daddy,”Jennysvoicebrokethesilence,“Doyoureallywantmypearlnecklace?”Lookinggentlyintoherdaughterseyes,henoddedwithadelightedsmileontheface.“Okay.”Jennycontinued,“Despitemyaffectionforthelovelynecklace,itisyouandmomthatIlovemuchbetter.”Beforeherdadcouldsayaword,Jennytookoutthenecklacefromunderthequiltandgaveittohim.升升级级版版Severaldayslater,whenJennysfathercameintoreadherastory,Jennywaswaitinganxiouslyforhimonthebed.Whenlisteningtothestory,Jennywastotallyabsent-minded,withherhandsholdingthepearlnecklacetightlyandfirmly.Whenthestorycametoanend,unexpectedly,Jennyofferedherbelovednecklacetoherfather,withherfingerstremblingautomatically.Nooneknewwhatthenecklacemeanttoher.Shewhisperedtoherfather,softlyandgently,“Daddy,youknowIloveyoumorethanthenecklace.”Then,thenecklaceslidintoherfathershandsdeterminedly.Have a tryParagraph2：Holdingtheplasticpearlhisdaughteroffered,thefatherdraggedoutabluebox.Have a tryParagraph2：Holdingtheplasticpearlhisdaughteroffered,hisfatherdraggedoutabluebox.MuchtoJennysamazement,abeautifulrealpearlnecklacelaypeacefullyinthebox,whichsetherheartracing.Jennyfrozethere,athrilledexpressiontwistingherface.BeforeJenneywasabletosaysomething,herfatherbrushedawarmkissonherfaceandgatheredherintohisarms.Holdingthegenuinenecklaceinherhand,Jennyliftedherlip,tearsbeginningtoblurhervision.感感谢谢倾倾听听T h a n k s f o r y o u r w a t c h i n g