读后续写2024年九省联考课件--2024届高考英语作文复习专项.pptx
读读后后续续写写2024九省九省联联考考CONTENTS目目录录01 阅读阅读分析分析02 写作流程写作流程故事框架整理故事框架整理故事大故事大纲纲BackgroundRising Action+ClimaxFalling ActionResolution人物人设问题：矛盾/冲突如何解决故事结局文章结尾原文回原文回顾顾 Last summer,Hilda worked as a volunteer with dolphin trainers at a sea life park.Her job was to make sure the tanks were free of any items so that the trainers could train the dolphins to fetch specific items.However,one day after cleaning,one of the dolphins,Maya,presented Hilda with a candy wrapper from the tank.When Katherine,the trainer,saw this,she blamed Hilda for her carelessness.Upset but not discouraged by this event,Hilda decided to do some spying on Maya.人物介人物介绍绍主要冲突：主要冲突：K责备责备H H有有错错，后面改正，后面改正H没没错错，K道歉道歉故事框架整理故事框架整理故事大故事大纲纲BackgroundRising Action+ClimaxFalling ActionResolution人物人设问题：矛盾/冲突如何解决故事结局文章结尾人物人物MayaHildaKatherine人人设设海豚海洋馆清理工海豚训练师矛盾矛盾/冲突冲突在Hilda打扫干净水池之后，Maya衔来了糖纸，Katherine认为Hilda没有认真工作如何解决如何解决？原文回原文回顾顾 Last summer,Hilda worked as a volunteer with dolphin trainers at a sea life park.Her job was to make sure the tanks were free of any items so that the trainers could train the dolphins to fetch specific items.However,one day after cleaning,one of the dolphins,Maya,presented Hilda with a candy wrapper from the tank.When Katherine,the trainer,saw this,she blamed Hilda for her carelessness.Upset but not discouraged by this event,Hilda decided to do some spying on Maya.人物介人物介绍绍Hilda 决定追踪决定追踪Maya 一探究竟一探究竟原文回原文回顾顾 The next morning,Hilda arrived at the park early.She put on her scuba gear(水下呼吸器)and jumped into the tank for her usual,underwater sweep.Finding nothing in the tank,she climbed out of the water just in time to see Katherine jumping in on the other side.After what happened yesterday,Hilda knew what she was doing.She watched as Katherine performed her underwater search,but Hilda wasnt surprised when she surfaced empty-handed.次日，次日，Hilda 下水下水检查检查没有没有发现发现任何任何东东西西同同时时看到，看到，Katherine 也下水也下水检查检查，不出意外，也没有任何，不出意外，也没有任何东东西西Katherine 对对Hilda 的工作不放心，不信任的工作不放心，不信任原文回原文回顾顾 During the tank sweeps,Maya had been swimming playfully,but now the dolphin stopped suddenly and swam to the back part of the tank where the filter(过滤)box was located.She stuck her nose down behind the box and then swam away.What was Maya doing back there?Hilda wondered.She jumped back into the water and swam over to take a look behind the box,and her question was answered.Hilda then swam across the tank following Mayas path and emerged from the water to find Katherine removing her scuba gear.As Katherine turned around,her mouth dropped open.There was Maya at the edge of the tank with a comb(梳子)in her mouth waiting for her treat.Maya 游到游到过滤过滤器之后，把鼻子伸器之后，把鼻子伸进过滤进过滤器后面器后面Hilda 疑惑地再次跳入水中，疑惑地再次跳入水中，发现发现了了Maya的秘密的秘密Maya给给Katherine衔衔来了一把梳子，并等待她的投喂来了一把梳子，并等待她的投喂原文回原文回顾顾 “Maya!Where did you get that?”demanded Katherine,taking the comb and throwing her a fish.“I know where she got it,”declared Hilda climbing out of the tank with a handful of items still wet from their watery,resting place.“Whats all this?”Katherine asked,obviously confused.Katherine 对对Maya 衔衔来的梳子感到疑惑来的梳子感到疑惑Katherine 对对我手里的我手里的东东西感到疑惑西感到疑惑知道真相的我，爬出水面，手里拿着一把知道真相的我，爬出水面，手里拿着一把东东西西原文回原文回顾顾Para1:“This is Mayas secret,”Hilda said with a big smile.Para2:Now Katherine realized what had been going on.Hilda 的解的解释释Katherine 的道歉的道歉逻辑逻辑梳理梳理Para1:“This is Mayas secret,”Hilda said with a big smile.Hilda 的解的解释释Maya 的秘密的秘密手里的手里的东东西西糖糖纸纸和梳子从哪儿来和梳子从哪儿来是什么是什么过滤过滤箱之后箱之后为为什么什么过滤过滤箱之后箱之后会有会有这这些些东东西？西？Maya 做的做的为为什么什么这这么做？么做？写作框架写作框架Para1:“This is Mayas secret,”Hilda said with a big smile.Hilda 说说1、糖、糖纸纸和梳子是从和梳子是从过滤过滤箱之后找到的。箱之后找到的。2、是、是Maya 做的，因做的，因为为原因。原因。3、我手里的、我手里的东东西是西是。写作框架写作框架Para1:“This is Mayas secret,”Hilda said with a big smile.Hilda 说说1、糖、糖纸纸和梳子是从和梳子是从过滤过滤箱之后找到的。箱之后找到的。2、是、是Maya 做的，因做的，因为为原因。原因。3、我手里的、我手里的东东西是西是。范文一：Hilda laid out the items on the ground:a plastic spoon,several candy wrappers,and even a pair of sun glasses.Hilda continued,“Maya has been collecting things from the tank.It seems Maya is playing a game of treasure hunting.She hides the items behind the filter box,which is her own treasure cave.”写作框架写作框架Para1:“This is Mayas secret,”Hilda said with a big smile.Hilda 说说1、糖、糖纸纸和梳子是从和梳子是从过滤过滤箱之后找到的。箱之后找到的。2、是、是Maya 做的，因做的，因为为原因。原因。3、我手里的、我手里的东东西是西是。范文二：Hilda laid out the items on the ground:a plastic spoon,several candy wrappers,and even a pair of sun glasses.Hilda continued,“Maya has been collecting things from the tank,hiding them near the filter box in the back of the tank.The reason why she does this is that she wants to get treats from you.”写作框架写作框架Para1:“This is Mayas secret,”Hilda said with a big smile.Hilda 说说1、糖、糖纸纸和梳子是从和梳子是从过滤过滤箱之后找到的。箱之后找到的。2、是、是Maya 做的，因做的，因为为原因。原因。3、我手里的、我手里的东东西是西是。字数不够怎么办？1、先构建动作完成段落主要内容描述2、补充其他描述（外貌、语言、心理、神态、性格、场景、环境）写作框架写作框架Para1:“This is Mayas secret,”Hilda said with a big smile.范文二：Hilda laid out the items on the ground:a plastic spoon,several candy wrappers,and even a pair of sun glasses.Hilda continued,“Maya has been collecting things from the tank,hiding them near the filter box in the back of the tank.The reason why she does this is that she wants to get treats from you.”性格描写性格描写聪聪明明场场景描写景描写Maya此刻的此刻的动动作作Maya is a clever dolphin.Maya is much more intelligent than we thought.She looked at Maya,who was now playfully swimming in the pool.写作框架写作框架Para2:Now Katherine realized what had been going on.Katherine 道歉道歉故事故事结结局局作者写这篇文章的意义何在？文章文章结结尾尾从故事中升从故事中升华华的道理的道理务实务实！不能不能轻轻易易评评判他人判他人对对海豚的关心海豚的关心从从误误会分歧，到加会分歧，到加强强合作合作Katherine 意意识识到了什么？到了什么？不是不是Hilda 的的错误错误写作框架写作框架Para2:Now Katherine realized what had been going on.1、前文情、前文情节节概括。概括。2、Katherine认识认识到自己的到自己的错误错误，并向，并向Hilda道歉。道歉。3、文章主旨升、文章主旨升华华。写作框架写作框架Para2:Now Katherine realized what had been going on.1、前文情、前文情节节概括。概括。范文一：Those object were not Hildas mistakes or carelessness,but the symbols of Mayas playful nature and intelligence.写作框架写作框架Para2:Now Katherine realized what had been going on.Katherine apologized to Hilda sincerely.2、Katherine认识认识到自己的到自己的错误错误，并向，并向Hilda道歉。道歉。重要情重要情节应该节应该有有浓浓墨重彩的描写。墨重彩的描写。道歉是道歉是动动作也可以是作也可以是语语言。言。补补充神充神态态、心理、原因来表示道歉的真、心理、原因来表示道歉的真诚诚。写作框架写作框架Para2:Now Katherine realized what had been going on.Feeling a mix of regret and guilt.【心理描写】，“I owe you an apology,and I shouldnt blamed you earlier”【语言描写】Katherine turned to Hilda and said sincerely【动作描写】,grateful for her keen observation and patience.2、Katherine认识认识到自己的到自己的错误错误，并向，并向Hilda道歉。道歉。At that moment,the two exchanged a knowing smile and turned their gaze towards Maya.【对道歉动作的反馈】写作框架写作框架Para2:Now Katherine realized what had been going on.This incident remind them of the surprising nature of this clever creature and the trust between a team.3、文章主旨升、文章主旨升华华。From then on,they began to discuss more effective ways to learn Maya so as to improve their approach to dolphin training and care.常常见见描写描写积积累累1、动作描写：拿来东西Maya presented Hilda with a candy wrapper from the tank.2、心理描写：收到批评后的心理Upset but not discouraged by this event,sb decided to do sth.3、动作描写：借鉴昨日经验After what happened yesterday,sb knew what to do.4、语言描写：边做边说“I know where she got it,”declared Hilda doing sth.常常见见描写描写积积累累5、道歉连续动作Feeling a mix of regret and guilt.【心理描写】，“I owe you an apology,and I shouldnt do sth”【语言描写】人人物物A turned to 人人物物B and said sincerely【动作描写】,grateful for 对对方的行方的行为为.常常见见描写描写积积累累6、合作主题This incident remind them of the trust among a team.From then on,they began to discuss more effective ways to interact with each other so as to improve their approach to 工作内容工作内容.
