满分写作周周赢 PPTWednesday 考场作文研析 (9).pptx
满分写作周周赢应用文写作/读后续写高中英语赢在微点高中英语满分写作周周赢Week 4申请信申请信&兄弟姐妹情类读后续写兄弟姐妹情类读后续写Wednesday考场作文研析Week 4配套使用满分微练第一部分 10分钟随堂微练4Week 4 申请信申请信&兄弟姐妹情类读后续写兄弟姐妹情类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第4页赢在字里行间读后续写满分技巧4巧用4种途径解决4类故事冲突高考读后续写选材主题主要为“Conflict/ProblemSolution”模式。所涉及的冲突主要有4类:人间自有真情(主人公遇到贫困、残疾或孤独、失败或自卑等困境);迷路;脱险(摆脱野兽攻击、水灾、火灾等);争吵矛盾(误解、背叛或伤害)系列。解决冲突/问题基本通过4个途径:他人的:encouragement、comfort、kindness、love和help;他物:如河流、太阳等;自己的:courage、bravery、effort、calmness、wisdom和inspiration;彼此的:突出和谐、宽恕、改变与成长。Week 4 申请信申请信&兄弟姐妹情类读后续写兄弟姐妹情类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第5页赢在字里行间好题探索阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。Alice and her family went on a camping trip along the seaside.Upon arrival,Dad called for a meeting.He announced,“There are lots of jobs to be done.Its no fun on holiday if Mum and I do all the work,so I come up with this pocket money chart.In this way,everyone has to do something,and you must do your own job every day!If you do your jobs well,you will get some extra pocket money!”Looking at the chart,which had their names on it next to a list of jobs,the kids frowned at the idea.Unwillingly,they began to do their jobs.Alice washed up the dishes.Mike,the youngest brother,dried the dishes.Jeff,Alices twin brother,took their dog for a walk.(短句叙述)Week 4 申请信申请信&兄弟姐妹情类读后续写兄弟姐妹情类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第6页赢在字里行间The next day they went to the beach.After playing some time in the sea,they went to look for shells along the beach.Suddenly,Alice found a strangelooking rock.She picked it up and showed it to Dad.“Youve found a fossil(化石)!It was once a shellfish and has turned into a rock after millions of years!”Dad said happily.Greatly inspired,Alice continued her search,determined to find a better one,but she failed.Darkness fell,and Alice had to head back to the campsite with her family in disappointment.On the way back they stopped at a shop,where Alice spotted some amazing fossils!But soon she found them too expensive!Back at the camp,Alice was still thinking of the amazing fossils in the shop.Suddenly an idea occurred to her,“Ill do everyones jobs and then I can get all the extra pocket money to buy a fossil!”The next morning,Alice offered to dry the dishes and walk the dog,which greatly pleased Mike and Jeff.But things didnt go as Alice planned.Week 4 申请信申请信&兄弟姐妹情类读后续写兄弟姐妹情类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第7页赢在字里行间注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。When Dad saw Alice walking the dog,he was confused.Later that morning,Mike and Jeff approached Alice when they found her unhappy.(请参考附录一五)Week 4 申请信申请信&兄弟姐妹情类读后续写兄弟姐妹情类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第8页赢在字里行间主题链接主主题特点特点兄兄弟弟姐姐妹妹情情类类常常涉涉及及:兄兄弟弟姐姐妹妹之之间间的的矛矛盾盾、包包容容、接接纳纳和和学学会会分分享享;兄兄弟弟姐姐妹妹之之间间的的关关爱爱、互助和共同成长。互助和共同成长。三步法三步法第一步:问题/矛盾的产生或事情的缘起;第二步:在父母/兄弟姐妹的帮助或鼓励下找到问题/矛盾的解决办法;第三步:兄弟姐妹之间矛盾的化解,学会包容、分享、互助,关爱彼此实现共同成长或亲情变得更深。Week 4 申请信申请信&兄弟姐妹情类读后续写兄弟姐妹情类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第9页赢在字里行间提分步骤1读原文理基本要素和2线CharacterAlice,Mike,Jeff,DadWhenWhenduring a camping tripWhereWherealong the seasideWhat爱丽丝和家人海边露营,她的爸爸提出大家都要做家务,孩子干活能赚取零花钱。第二天,爱丽丝在海滩上发现了一块化石,为了买商店里昂贵的化石,她决定做所有的家务活多赚零花钱。2情情线情节线:到海边宿营家务活的分工和零用钱在海滩发现化石,未能找到更好的化石商店有很美但是昂贵的化石想到做所有家务活买化石的办法(续写)爸爸看到爱丽丝在遛狗时,很困惑;迈克和杰夫发现爱丽丝不开心情 感 线:不 情 愿(unwilling)激 动(excited)失 望(disappointed)期 待 的(full of expectation)Week 4 申请信申请信&兄弟姐妹情类读后续写兄弟姐妹情类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第10页赢在字里行间提分步骤2思续写情节“以旧带新”2原则(421原则4衔接、2情线、1主题;ARE原则action、response、emotion)两段首句两段首句定一框定一框衔接:开头句衔接首句“当爸爸看到爱丽丝在遛狗时,他很困惑”可写爸爸问了爱丽丝什么?过渡句:爱丽丝如何解释?爸爸是什么反应?爸爸是否批评?(如何与家务分工衔接)衔接:尾句衔接第二段首句中的“迈克和杰夫发现爱丽丝不开心”可写爱丽丝是什么感受?二框二首二框二首1主主题衔接:开头句衔接首句中的“迈克和杰夫发现爱丽丝不开心,就去找她”可写迈克和杰夫说了什么?(提供支持和帮助)过渡句:爱丽丝是什么反应(高兴、感激)父亲的反应接下来发生了什么?衔接:尾句衔接原文首段中的“camping trip”可写露营的收获不是化石,而是在一起共度、共同承担家庭责任的快乐。1主题:learn the importance of teamwork,persistence,and value the things they worked hard to achieve and cherish their time together情感情感线Dad:confusedunhappyrelievedAlice:unhappydelightedgratefuldelightedWeek 4 申请信申请信&兄弟姐妹情类读后续写兄弟姐妹情类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第11页赢在字里行间提分步骤3思伏笔添细节原续更融洽捕捉原文所设伏笔,充盈过渡句细节并合理衔接,以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上更符合原文基调。原文伏笔点原文伏笔点过渡句中可与伏笔渡句中可与伏笔衔接的接的细节Para.1.everyone has to do something,and you must do your own job every day!Para.4But things didnt go as Alice planned.续写第一段可写父亲批评爱丽丝,原因是人人都要做事,爱丽丝不能做其他孩子的工作,说明计划不顺利的原因。Para.3After playing some time in the sea,they went to look for shells along the beach.续写第二段添加描写孩子们在沙滩“寻宝”的场景,强调兄妹在一起开心玩耍的快乐。Para.2Unwillingly,they began to do their jobs.Alice washed up the dishes.Mike,the youngest brother,dried the dishes.Jeff,Alices twin brother,took their dog for a walk.续写第二段添加描写孩子们一起做家务,轮流洗碗、擦干碗碟、遛狗等,从不情愿变得情愿。必要物品pocket money chart,the fossil家务活分工表(责任)和化石(回报),可在第一段和第二段中灵活出现,贯穿全文。Week 4 申请信申请信&兄弟姐妹情类读后续写兄弟姐妹情类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第12页赢在字里行间提分步骤4沿原文特点写3好表达(准确、丰富、地道)原文语言丰富、地道,如利用短句、双连动作链(原文)描写人物动作;非谓语动词作状语+从句+人物神态描写(原文);副词、形容词、介词短语作状语,描写人物情感(原文);无灵主语句描写人物内心活动(原文);在叙述事情经过时,利用短句+长句(含有定语从句)(原文)等。续写时应学会借鉴和仿效,这样才能与原文语言风格保持一致。Week 4 申请信申请信&兄弟姐妹情类读后续写兄弟姐妹情类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第13页赢在字里行间仿效临摹满分手写体Handwriting also counts!Week 4 申请信申请信&兄弟姐妹情类读后续写兄弟姐妹情类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第14页赢在字里行间Week 4 申请信申请信&兄弟姐妹情类读后续写兄弟姐妹情类读后续写高 中 英 语 满 分 写 作 周 周 赢第15页赢在字里行间Version 2When Dad saw Alice walking the dog,he was confused.Obviously,he was not happy about this.When Alice came back,Dad asked why she was doing Jeffs jobs.Alice stuttered,“I.I just want to earn all the extra pocket money to buy that fossil in the shop.”“Im sorry,Alice,Im afraid you cant.You all have to do the jobsnot just you.The point is that we share the jobs.”Dad said.Hearing what Dad said,Alice was taken hold of by a surge of disappointment mixed with sadness(爱丽丝既失望又难过).She thought it was unfair that Dad just ignored her hard work.Later that morning,Mike and Jeff approached Alice when they found her unhappy.They presented a small box and urged her to open it.Alice had no idea what was going on,but seeing her two brothers eyes twinkling with eagerness,she opened it.The moment she saw what was inside,Alice jumped up with joy.It was her brothers extra pocket money,with which she could afford one of the fossils she dreamed about!She threw her arms around her brothers,tears welling up in her eyes(她张开双臂拥抱两个哥哥,热泪盈眶).Jeff said,“Dad told us your plan.”It dawned on Alice that(爱丽丝恍然大悟)Dad was trying to tell her that rules are rules but love between family members never fails.
