托福作文写作范文详解owes.docx

托福作文写作范文详解题目: The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.内容要点重点一是比较各种交通工具的运输量大小，注意直在最高位和低线重点二是注意比较各条线之间的共同和不重点三是注意极值、交叉明显 波动和平稳注意重要的起始点、结束以及峰值交叉所涉到具体数据都需引用The information given by the line chart is about the weight of goods delivered in Britain from 1974 to 2002 by four different kinds of transport.（首段概括全表格内容，点明描述对象和时间）Road was always the most popular kind of transport. The amount of goods transported by road rose from 70 million tonnes in 1974 to 100 million tonnes in 2002. As for the weight of goods transported by water, it fluctuated around 60 million tonnes from 1980 to 1998 before it rose to the highest point in 2002. In addition, the least popular transport was pipeline, although there was an obvious growth over the 28 years.（描述曲线图第一个重点：比较各条曲线并分析曲线特征）The quantity of goods transported by rail fluctuated around 40 million tonnes during the 28 years. Its lowest point was in the year of 1994 (30 million tonnes). Moreover, it is interesting to note that data for all the four ways of transport peaked in 2002.（描述曲线图的动态和峰值，重点提出四种交通方式在2002年达到顶 峰）All in allz it is clear to see that there was a big difference in the quantities of goods in the country transported by four different modes of transport from 1974 to 2002.（全文总结：各种交通方式运输量差异很大）满分要素剖析：语言表达 本文用到很多表示波动、发展趋势和比较的表达。仔细研习这些表达, 会加强对此类曲线图的描述能力。1 The information given by the line chart is about the weight of goods delivered in Britain from 1974 to 2002 by four different kinds of transport.雅思小作文首段统一对原题进行paraphrase.本句用weight替换 quantities,用 deliver 替换 transport,用 Britain 替换 UK ,用 from. to替换 between.and.o 并运用句型:The information given by the. （+图表名称）is about（+描述对象、地点、时间）As for the weight of goods transported by water, it fluctuated around 60 million tonnes from 1980 to 1998 before it rose to the highest point in 2002.注意fluctuate表示波动，这个词在曲线图里常会用到。本句用before 连接前后两层含义，简洁明了的将曲线的发展趋势描述出来。这一类的 连接词在原文中很多，如：although, next, after that , as for, in addition, Moreovero逻辑结构本文是典型的总分总结构的小作文。开篇先paraphrase原题，第二第 三部分描述线图的细节。细节部分分为两个层次：分析各个线图各自的 发展趋势，以及比较每条线的重点细节。最后一句话对全篇进行了高度 概括。题 目： The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.内容要点此图为流程图，第一个流程图描述了水泥的生产过程，包括设备，材料 和步骤；第二个流程图描述了混泥土的生产过程，包括设备，材料和步 骤。描述的时候注意图中提到的所有概念都必须在文中写出。The process given by the flow charts is about the detailed steps and facilities which are utilized in the production of cement and concrete.（首段概括流程图内容，点明描述对象细节）As for the first chart, cement production involves the following certain steps. At first, limestone and clay are set into a crusher, by which they become powder. After being mixed, the powder is transmitted into the next rotating process and it will be heated. Next, the mixture goes into a grinder where the cement comes out. Finally, the cement can be packed in bags.（详细描述制作水泥的全过程）In terms of concrete production, in the first step, 25% sand and 50% small stones are put together, with a combination of 15% cement and 10% water. In the next stage, the mixture can be poured into a concrete mixer. Finally, the production of concrete is successfully completed.（详细描述制作混凝土的过程）All in all, it is clear to see that compared with the production of cement, that of concrete is rather simple.（全文总结，对比两种材料的制作过程）满分要素剖析：语言表达本文表达简洁明了，没用任何的长难句，以描述准确为主要目的。应主 要学习流程图的写法。例如，描述流程时多用被动，这样描述更客观, 体现英文的写作习惯。1 As for the first chart, cement production involves the following certain steps.注意as for,常用语开始描述某一幅图或某一个点，下一段中的in terms of 也是如此。Involves the following certain steps 通用于流程图题。2 注意表示步骤的连接词：in the first step, in the next stage, finally 等。3 All in all, it is clear to see that compared with the production of cement, that of concrete is rather simple.That of代表the production of,是很好的避免上下文重复的方法。逻辑结构本文是典型的总分总结构的小作文。开篇先paraphrase原题，第二部 分描述第一个流程图，第三部分描述第二个流程图，最后做总结。