书面表达讲评与指导.ppt

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1、书面表达练习讲评书面表达练习讲评暨写作技巧指导暨写作技巧指导What makes a good composition?5分分6分分21分分21分分What makes a good composition?1. Good handwriting假设你是李华，你写信给假设你是李华，你写信给Annie寻求帮助，寻求帮助，具体内容如下：具体内容如下： 你家附近有一家工厂，经常倾倒垃圾到你家附近有一家工厂，经常倾倒垃圾到河里，污染水资源，导致饮用水不安全；河里，污染水资源，导致饮用水不安全；还排放有毒气体，影响人们健康。还排放有毒气体，影响人们健康。你想叫他们停止排放污水和有毒气体，你想叫他们停止排

2、放污水和有毒气体，但是因为你父亲是该公司的经理，这样做但是因为你父亲是该公司的经理，这样做会使他失去工作。他已经向当地人道歉并会使他失去工作。他已经向当地人道歉并且赔款，你想原谅他，但是你又认为父亲且赔款，你想原谅他，但是你又认为父亲工厂排污做得不对。你该怎么办。工厂排污做得不对。你该怎么办。请以此为内容写一封英文求助信，字请以此为内容写一封英文求助信，字数数80-100字。字。Is the following a good passage? Dear Annie, There is a factory near my home. It often pours the waste into t

3、he river. This causes unsafe drinking water. It gives out poisonous gases. It has a bad effect on the peoples health. I cant stand seeing this. I want to ask them to cut back on the production. I also want to stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases. However, my father is the manage

4、r of the factory. This will make him lose his job. He has apologized to the local people for this and given them some money. I want to forgive him, but I dont think he is right. What should I do? Dear Annie, There is a factory near my home. It often pours the waste into the river. This causes unsafe

5、 drinking water. It gives out poisonous gases. It has a bad effect on the peoples health. I cant stand seeing this. I want to ask them to cut back on the production. I also want to stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases. However, my father is the manager of the factory. This will

6、make him lose his job. He has apologized to the local people for this and given them some money. I want to forgive him, but I dont think he is right. What should I do? What makes a good composition?1. Good handwriting2. Proper paragraph structures Dear Annie, There is a factory near my home. It ofte

7、n pours the waste into the river. It gives out poisonous gases. This causes unsafe drinking water. It has a bad effect on the peoples health. I cant stand seeing this. I want to ask them to cut back on the production. I also want to stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases. Im writi

8、ng to you for your advice. However, as my father is the manager of the factory, this will make him lose job. He has apologized to the local people for this and given them some money. I want to forgive him, but I dont think he is right. What should I do?Looking forward to hearing from you soon. yours

9、, Li HuaWhat makes a good composition?1. Good handwriting2.Proper paragraph structures3.Good beginning and ending.4.The fewer errors, the betterI really dont know what should I do.I should 1.句子结构问题句子结构问题There is a factory which near my home.is我学到的写作技巧我学到的写作技巧He has already apologized to the people f

10、or what he had done and gave/give some money to them.given2.谓语动词形式问题谓语动词形式问题The waste water was flowed directly into the river.flows That have resulted in unsafe drinking water.has我学到的写作技巧我学到的写作技巧3.词汇用法问题。词汇用法问题。It always pushes/pulls/flows waste into the rivers and gives out poisonous gases. poursI

11、 suggest them cut back on production.they Suggest (建议建议)+ n.(that) + _ + _（_ ）+ 动名词动名词主语主语(should) do宾格宾格/所有格所有格them/ their cutting赵老师建议我们买本英语字典。赵老师建议我们买本英语字典。Mr Zhao suggested that we (should) buy an English dictionary. Mr Zhao suggested us / our buying an causes unsafe drinking watermakesThe facto

12、ry often pours lots of waste into the river, which causes the drinking water unsafe.cause sth.cause sb. sth.cause sb. to doIf I do so, hell loss his job.losen.I want to forgive for him.forgive meforgive sb. for doingIt makes bad/harmful effects on peoples health.has/brings aboutLooking these, I cant

13、 stand with what they do.seeingput up with我学到的写作技巧我学到的写作技巧 Dear Annie, There is a factory near my home. It often pours the waste into the river. This causes unsafe drinking water. It gives out poisonous gases. It has a bad effect on the peoples health. I cant stand seeing this. I want to ask them to

14、 cut back on the production. I also want to stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases. Dear Annie, Near my home is a factory, which often pours its waste into the river . This causes unsafe drinking water. It gives out poisonous gases, which has a bad effect on the peoples health. I

15、cant stand seeing this. I want to ask them to cut back on the production. I also want to stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases. 我学到的写作技巧我学到的写作技巧 Dear Annie, Near my home is a factory, which often pours its waste into the river . This causes unsafe drinking water. It gives out poi

16、sonous gases, which has a bad effect on the peoples health. I cant stand seeing this. I want to ask them to cut back on the production. I also want to stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases. Dear Annie, Near my home is a factory, which often pours its waste into the river. This ca

17、uses. unsafe drinking water. It gives out poisonous gases, which has a bad effect on the peoples health. Seeing these, I cant put up with what they do. I want to ask them to cut back on the production. I also want to stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases. 我学到的写作技巧我学到的写作技巧 Dear An

18、nie, Near my home is a factory, which often pours its waste into the river . This causes unsafe drinking water. It gives out poisonous gases, which has a bad effect on the peoples health. Seeing these, I cant put up with what they do. I want to ask them to cut back on the production. I also want to

19、stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases. Dear Annie, Near my home is a factory, which often pours its waste into the river. This causes unsafe drinking water. It gives out poisonous gases, which has a bad effect on the peoples health. Seeing these, I cant put up with what they do.

20、My suggestion is that they should cut back on the production. I also want to stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases. Dear Annie, Near my home is a factory, which often pours its waste into the river . This causes unsafe drinking water. It gives out poisonous gases, which has a bad

21、 effect on the peoples health. Seeing these, I cant put up with what they do. My suggestion is that they should cut back on the production. They must be prohibited（禁止）（禁止） from giving out waste water and poisonous gases. 我学到的写作技巧我学到的写作技巧 Dear Annie, Near my home is a factory, which often pours its w

22、aste into the river . This causes unsafe drinking water. It gives out poisonous gases, which has a bad effect on the peoples health. Seeing these, I cant put up with what they do. My suggestion is that they should cut back on the production. They must be prohibited from giving out waste water and po

23、isonous gases. At the same time, ThereforeIn addition,我学到的写作技巧我学到的写作技巧What makes a good composition?1. Good handwriting4.The fewer errors, the better2. Proper paragraph structures5.words,phrases and sentences of high level6.Proper linking words and completeness3.Good beginning and ending.Dear Annie,

24、 Im writing to you for your advice. Near my home is a factory, which often pours much waste into the river. This has led to unsafe drinking water. At the same time, it gives off various poisonous gases, which has a bad effect on the peoples health. Seeing these, I cant put up with what they do. Ther

25、efore, my suggestion is that the factory should cut back on the production. In addition, they must be prohibited from giving off the gases.CompetitionRewrite the rest of the passage and try to use as many writing skills that you have learned as possible.However, my father is the manager of the facto

26、ry. This will make him lose his job. He has apologized to the local people for this and given them some money. I want to forgive him, but I dont think he is right. What should I do? Lets share our writing!我们学到的写作技巧我们学到的写作技巧HomeworkRewrite the whole passage on your own.书面表达练习讲评暨写作技巧指导书面表达练习讲评暨写作技巧指导M

27、ay you make greater progress in the next writing practice! What makes a good composition?1. Good handwriting2.Proper paragraph structures3.Proper linking words and completeness4.The fewer errors, the betterWhat makes a good composition?1. Good handwriting2.The fewer errors, the better3.Proper paragraph structures4.words,phrases and sentences of high level