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1、Continuation Writing(After-reading Writing)Teaching Objectives:1. Knowledge Objective:Use different sentence types to continuation writing.2. Ability Objective:Cultivate several thinking methods of continuation writing and polish the writing skills.3. Emotional Objective:Foster students to cultivate

2、 positive attitude towards study and life, and enrich students spiritual world.Teaching Important Points:1. The thinking methods of continuation writing.2. The writing methods of continuation writing.Teaching Difficult Point:How to have a good command of the methods of thinking and writing on contin

3、uaion writing.Teaching Methods:Task-based language teaching.Teaching Aids:Handouts, a blackboard and chalks.Teaching Procedures:Step 1 Lead in【考情回顾】2014年，浙江省首次考察读后续写这一考试题型。2017、2018年，其他省市逐渐开始把 读后续写题型加入到了期中、期末考试当中。2021年，湖南、湖北、广州、福建、重庆、河 北、辽宁、江苏这8个省市区都加入了新高考，都开始考察读后续写。【考纲解读】读后续写出现在高考英语试卷写作题的第二节，该题提供一段

4、350词以内的语言材料，要 求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语进行续写(150词左右)，将其开展成一篇与给定材hide躲藏(5)描写太阳set落下set落下come out出来rise升起be bathed in沐浴在中2、常用形容词(1)描写风/雨gentle / soft 轻柔的 pleasant令人愉悦的 strong / violent 猛烈的 bone-chilling 刺骨的(2)描写雪feathery鹅毛般的pure纯洁的(3)描写星星lovely可爱的pale暗淡的(4)描写太阳warm温暖的warm温暖的icy / freezing 冰冷的howling呼啸的dreadfu

5、l可怕的tiny极小的clean干净的shining / glowing 亮闪闪的starless没有星星的burning火辣辣的三、环境描写的高分素材1. It was beginning to snow, and snowflakes were blinding my eyes.天开始下雪了，雪花让我看不清了。2. The sun was breaking through the blanket of mist.太阳穿过薄雾。3. Summer sees the mountains turn bright green with growing rice. During autumn, th

6、ese samemountains are flash gold, and in winter they are covered in sheets of white frost.夏天，水稻生长群山绿意盎然。秋天漫山铺金，冬天银装素裹。4. A little way off was a little brook, rushing and sparkling along between green banks.不远处有一条小溪，在绿色的两岸之间奔流不息，波光粼粼。Continuation WritingPsychological descriptionTeaching ObjectivesKno

7、wledge Objective:Students can learn some words and expressions about psychological description.Ability Objective:Students can utilize different psychological descriptions in continuation writing.Emotional Objective:Students can enrich their expressions about psychological description and gradually c

8、ultivate their interest and confidence in learning English.Teaching Important PointStudents can master some words and expressions about different emotions.Teaching Difficult PointStudents can freely and correctly utilize various psychological descriptions in their daily continuation writing.Teaching

9、 MethodTask-based language teaching.Teaching AidsHandouts, a blackboard and chalks.Teaching ProceduresStep 1 Review读后续写解题关键：（1）抓 5W1H （when、where who、why、how、what）；（2）找出续写要解决的问题、矛盾点；（3）把握续写一二段之间的衔接性、上下文的相关性展开续写，正能量美好结局。Lead in【2021年新高考I卷】双胞胎终于看到妈妈吃到他们亲手做的早餐，请描述他此刻的喜悦。彳列 1 ： Mom finally enjoyed their

10、 breakfast, and the twins were very happy.例 2： Seeing mom enjoying the breakfast prepared by them, the twins were overjoyed, delightspreading through the house.当Tom来到客厅，看到一颗漂亮的圣诞树，请描述他此刻的惊讶。例 1 ： Little Tom was surprised when he saw the beautiful Christmas tree.例2： Wow! Little Tom shouted with his e

11、yes widely open after discovering a beautiful Christmas tree.总结：续写文章会围绕人物进行描写，其中丰富出彩的心理描写是续写的亮点。Step 2 Presentation & Practice【例文探究】读片段并分析人物心情：Part 1 :One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unplea

12、sant subject came up and they started to quarrel.此刻Jane的心情： 生气形容词：angry/furious/mad/annoyed/indignant-A 名词：anger/fury/madness/annoyance/indignation/rage/ee 惊慌/害怕/紧张形容词：terrified/frightened/afraid/scared/fearful/worried/anxious/nervous* 名词：terror/horror/astonishment/fear/panic/worry/anxiety 短语：(1)吓得张

13、大嘴巴(2) 心跳加快(3) 吓得呆假设木鸡(4) 吓得发抖(5) be struck dumb with astonishment 吓得目瞪口呆(6) breathless with anxiety / took a deep breath焦急地喘不过气来句子：1. 她被一种深深的恐惧感所控制，手心开始出汗。2. 一阵恐惧涌上她的心头。3. 她吓得脸色苍白，额头冒汗。4. I was scared to death with eyes full of horror. 吓得要死，眼睛里充满 了 恐惧。5. I felt so scared that my throat tightened an

14、d my knees felt weak.嗓子发紧，膝盖发软。6. I froze with terror, too scared to move an inch.吓呆了，不敢动弹。Part 3:Tom! she cried. nHelp!n No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fa

15、ll, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.此刻Jane的心情：伤心/绝望 形容词：sad/depressed/sorrowful/heart-broken/heartbreaking/desperate/hopelesse 名词：sadness/dep

16、ression/sorrow/griedesperation/hopelessness 短语：(1) /sink into sadness突然大哭/陷入悲哀(2) 潸然泪下(3) be lost in/ be overwhelmed with endless sorrow 陷入无穷无尽的悲伤(4) break ones heart 心碎(5) on the verge (边缘)of tears接近哭的边缘(6) bury ones head in hands 双手掩面 句子:1. 伴随着伤心后悔，女人终于入睡。（形容词置于句首作伴随状语）2. 她感觉自己漂浮在悲伤的海洋中。3. My prev

17、ious desperation was immediately erased by great bills. 2021 年 6 月浙江卷】She regretted with endless anxiety, and fell asleep with shining tears in eyes. 2020 年 10 月浙江卷】4. As the result of the accident, Tony was suddenly thrown into a world of darkness and sank into hopelessness.被投入黑暗之中，陷人绝望。5. She felt

18、 extremely sad and was blurred with tears/ burst into tears.伤心得快要哭了。6. The loneliness and grief comes in waves.孤独和悲伤不断涌上心头。Part 4:Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落)somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great jo

19、y, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better.此刻Jane的心情：开心 形容词：happy/cheerful/pleased/delighted/overjoyed/satisfied/thrilled/excited-ee名词：happiness/delight/joy/pleasure/satisfactione*短语：(1)脸上露出灿烂的笑容(2) 笑得合不拢嘴 jump/dance for joy 手

20、舞足蹈(4) wear a smile on one*s face 面带笑容(5) get/rise to onefs feet in excitement 激动地站 了起来(6) jump/spring to onefs feet with joy 高兴地跳了 起来句子：1. 她的脸上露出灿烂的笑容。2. 看到美味的食物，她的眼睛像钻石般闪耀。3. The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planningfor Mothers Day. 2021 新高考 I 卷】4. Th

21、e twins were overjoyed, delight spreading through the house. 2021 新高考 I 卷】She couldn*t contain(控制)her excitement and danced for joy.她激动得手舞足蹈。5. Her eyes twinkled with excitement/pleasure.她激动得两眼放光。惊呆：形容词：surprised/shocked/amazed/astonished/dumbfounded 名词：surprise/shock/amazement/astonishmenteee短语：1.

22、raise the eyebrows 扬起眉毛2. couldnt believe ones eyes 难以置信3. with one eyes/mouth widely open 瞪大眼睛/嘴巴4. freeze/stand still/stop dead/be numb with shock 惊 呆了5. cant help letting out screams 忍不住尖叫6. be shocked beyond words / was speechless with shock 惊讶地说不出话来7. ones jaw dropped in amazement 惊掉下巴轻松(reliev

23、ed)1. He breathed a sigh of relief.他松 了 一 口气。2. He felt greatly relieved and his joy was immense.他感至如释重负，快乐无限。3. He began to calm down and his heart started slow down.4. He could feel the tension released and a warmth spread through his body.他能感觉到紧张感的释放，一种温暖的感觉传遍全身5. He regained his calmness and cou

24、ld think straight clearly.他恢复了镇静，头脑清醒。尴尬(embarrassed/awkward)1. She scratched her head, hoping to Hnd a hole to hide herself.她搔了搔头，想找个洞藏起来。2. He bit his lips, not knowing where to rest his hands.他咬着嘴唇，不知道把手放在哪里。3. All the air seemed to disappear and she felt as if the whole world were watching her.

25、所有的空气似乎都消失了，她觉得整个世界都在注视着她。4. His face flushed/burned with embarrassment.他尴尬得脸红了。Step 3:Summary&Consolidation心理描写常用句式回顾：(1) be seized by a strong sense of + 情绪类名词(fear/sadness/relief ) 被某种情绪占据1) Tom如释重负，眼泪从他的脸颊上滚下来 *2)我被深深的绝望感所控制，在水里挣扎，用我所有的力量挥动着我的双手。 *(2) To one为 + 情绪类名词，(surprise/amazement/astonish

26、ment/delight)令某人的是令我们惊讶的是，那个神秘的男人是来自Boston著名的脑科医生。 A flood of +情绪类名词+welled up in Sb. 一阵涌上心头一阵恐惧涌上我心头。(4) Sb. felt that Sb. was floating in an ocean of + 情绪类名词.她感觉自己沉浸在绝望的海洋中。(5) adj.+adj.，句子(形容词置于句首作伴随状语)料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。【体裁分析】读后续写的阅读材料一般以记叙文和夹叙夹议为主。一般来说，记叙文浅显易懂，但故事 情节多曲折动人，故事线索的逻辑性也较强。要求考生续写的局部多是

27、故事开展的高潮或结局。 情节跌宕起伏，线索性和逻辑性较强。考生要抓住故事的叙事线索，依据原文的写作思路叙写 文章，并适当发散。【文章主题】(1)化险为夷(2)暖心故事(3)吵架和好(2016年考过一次，之后考的较少)读后续写要传达的是正能量,结尾千万不要写得过于离谱,不能把家庭旅游写成征服世界, 也不能把半夜扫墓写成盗墓笔记。读后续写写出来的故事一定是一个三观非常正的故事。【能力考查】读后续写是一种将阅读与写作紧密结合的考查形式，旨在考查考生的综合语言运用能力。读后续写就是先读、再续、后写。读后续写的第一步就是读懂阅读材料，确定文章主旨大 意；第二步才是续，在明确前文作者态度和关键信息的前提下

28、，在脑中建立一个对前文的理解 框架，从而明确要续写的内容，建立续写思路；最后一步是写，要求续写的内容和前文保持语 意完整、逻辑连贯。读、续、写三者之间，贯穿了出题人对考生阅读能力、概括能力、思维转换能力、语言领 悟能力、语言组织能力、创造性思维能力以及对上下文逻辑关系的掌握等各项能力的考查。【评分原那么】-一此题总分为25分,分5个档次给分。=第五档(21-25)1、与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。2、内容丰富，应用了 5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。3、所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些错误，但完全不影响意义表达。4、有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑，

29、少于130词，减2分。Step 2 Presentation1）一半惊讶，一半担忧，一种关心孩子的责任感驱使父亲擦干眼泪，“让我们一起做吧【2021新高考I卷】2）他沉默、沮丧地走出了房间。（6） Filled with +情绪类名词,Sb.双胞胎兴奋的喊着“妈妈生日快乐！”【2021新高考I卷】So+adj.+谓+主语+that（结果状语从句的倒装）【2021新高考I卷】妈妈是如此的感动以至于感觉她自己是世界上最幸福的人。Step 4: Homework阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。One weekend in July, Jane and her husban

30、d, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom. Pm going to find a better spot for us to camp and walked away.With

31、 no path to followjane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.“Tom! ”she cried. nHelp!H No

32、reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and h

33、er family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling （滴落） somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy,she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few b

34、erries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better.Feeling stronger now. Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people

35、to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again. 注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.续写局部分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；Paragraph 1But no more helicopters came and it was getting dar

36、k again.Paragraph 2It was daybreak when Jane woke up.Continuation WritingAction DescriptionTeaching Objectives:1. Knowledge Objective:Enable students to have a better understanding of the features of the action description in continuation writing.2. Ability Objective:1) Let students know how to use

37、different strategies in action description of the continuation writing.2) Let students apply action description skills to continue the stories.3. Emotional Objective:1) Enable students to develop the creative and critical thinking.2) Help students cultivate the interest in continuation writing.Teach

38、ing Important and Key Points:1. Enable students to analyze the sentence structures of the given examples.2. Enable students to master some practical skills about action description in continuation writing.3. Enable students to write more sentences according to the strategies of action description.Te

39、aching Methods:Task Based Language TeachingTeaching Aids:Handout, a blackboard and chalks.Teaching Procedures:Step 1 Lead in:She fell off a ladder and even though Tony was in the next room, he managed to catch her in time. He held her firmly in her arms and she felt the warmth of his body. She screa

40、med, pushed him away and ran to her room for the rest of the day.人教版高中英语教材Module 7 Unit 2 Robots中，当Claire从梯子上掉下来Tony设法接 住她时，描写了 Claire 的一系列动作，screamed pushed him away 和 ran to her room,这一 动作过程就把Claire的惊吓、羞愧和不知所措表现得淋漓尽致。读后续写的写作过程中，成功的动作描写，可以交代人物的身份、地位，可以反映人物 心理活动的进程，可以表现人物的性格特征。相反，空洞、笼统的描写会使内容缺乏生动性，使

41、人物形象不饱满。人物的动作或简单, 或复杂，都不是一下子就能完成的，细心观察都能捕捉到最能表达人物特征的慢镜头。Step 2 Presentation:一.动作精准化怎样使用精准化动作类词汇对动作进行细致描写呢？其实很简单，用一系列小动作而不用 大动作，或者用含义比拟明确的动词，而不用抽象或虚化的动词来描述，可以使描写更加具体 生动。试比拟下面两句：The little boy said sorry to his mother.小男孩对他妈妈说对不起。 The little boy hung his head and mumbled an apology to his mother. 小男孩垂

42、着头，咕哝着向 他母亲抱歉。我们来具体分析一下：第一句中“said sorry to”不带任何感情色彩，而第二句中使用了具 体化的表示“说”的动词mumbled (咕哝)，从而使一个不愿意抱歉又不得不抱歉的小男孩的 形象栩栩如生地复现在读者脑海中。除了精准选用表示动作的词语，而且要给动词加上适当的修饰成分。适当的修饰语能细致 地表达出动作的时间、幅度、速度、力度等，使人物形象更具活力，能更好地表现人物的鲜明 个性与思想境界。动作描写中最常见的修饰成分就是状语，如副词、介词短语(with +情感名 词，with +身体部位，in +名词)等。例如，在表达动作的迅速和短暂时,我们可以添加以下修饰语

43、：suddenly、immediately、 instantly without pausing rapidly swiftly without delay 等。比方下面两句：The wolf also noticed them and turned its head back, shouting at Paul and Becky.狼也注意到他们，回头朝保罗和贝基大喊大叫。At the same time, the wolf also noticed them and fiercely turned its head back, shouting loudly at Paul and Bec

44、ky.与此同时.，狼也注意到了他们，恶狠狠地转过头，对保罗和贝基大声大叫。我们来具体分析一下：第二句中加上了 at the same time与此同时/ fiercely激烈地/ loudly 大声地这三个副词，把这两个人遇到狼这个危险情况生动表达了出来。【活学活用】一.根据提示进行句型升级。1 .当主持人宣布她获奖时，她兴奋极了。(增加细节，注意逻辑关系和语义的合理)When the host announced that she won the prize, she felt thrilled.(1)当主持人宣布她获奖时，她激动得两眼发光。 (twinkle)当主持人宣布她获奖时，她激动得

45、心怦怦直跳。(thump)2 .一听到那个坏消息，她悲伤不已。Upon hearing the bad news, she felt extremely sad.(1) 一听到那个坏消息，她心很痛，眼泪直流。(ache, stream down, cheek)(2)一听到那个坏消息，她感觉到被一股悲伤之感控制，忍不住痛哭。(seize, a burst of, cry bitterly)二.根据题目中所给要求进行扩句。The girl unwrapped her gift box.(1)好奇而激动，这个女孩翻开了她的礼盒。(用并列形容词作状语)充满了快乐，这个女孩翻开了她的礼盒。(用形容词短语作状语)毫不犹豫地，这个小女孩翻开了她的礼盒。(用介词短语作状语)二.动作过程化例1：他上 了车。He got into a taxi.【句型升级】H