读后续写（2016年浙江卷）导学案- 高三英语一轮复习.docx

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1、读后续写一、Learning Aims1.Know some steps to analyze the reading material 2.Know how to develop a coherent and logical ending to the given passage according to the given information3.Read for the key information of the given passage and write a coherent and logical ending for the given passage according

2、to the given information 二、Leading-in（合理得讲故事）李华今天出门，_,最后得到了路人的称赞。三、Explanation选材特点：（1）所需阅读的短文词数在350左右；（2）多以记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主，故事情节有曲折、有起伏，但是，故事线索的逻辑性比较强。评分参考：（1）与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；（2）内容的丰富性；（3）应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；（4）上下文的连贯性；（5）字迹工整。需要注意：（1）所续写短文的词数应为150左右（词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分）；（2）续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。四、Wr

3、iting-Steps阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that sh

4、e said to Tom, “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp.” and walked away.With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapp

5、ed mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to st

6、op for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to

7、 a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane hear

8、d a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右；2.

9、 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para 1：Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark.Para 2 :ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.How to complete a story？Step1 浏览所给信息，确定大意主题whoJane,TomwhatJane was lostwhereIn a forestwhenOne weekend in JulywhyA quarrel with Tom,her husbandMain ideaJane was lost in the forest for three days and su

10、rvived in the endThemeJane learned how to control emotions and deal with conflictsStep2 梳理已知段落，确定主要情节Main plotbeginningstarted to quarrelwas lostdevelopmentkept movinghad to stop for the nightRose at the break of dayBegan to walk along the stream and hopeclimax(高潮）heard a helicopterending待定Step3 借助段

11、落开头，确定续写内容研读续写段落的开头语Para.1But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.(切入点）Jane是如何熬过这个夜晚的？1. How did Jane feel then?2. How did Jane struggle through the night?3. Did she fall asleep and what did she think of?Para.2It was daybreak when Jane woke up?(切入点）昨晚Jane 没有被救，今天会发生什么？1. Was Jane

12、rescued and who rescued Jane?2. How was she rescued and how did she feel then?续写内容Para.1Jane是如何熬过那一夜晚的Para.2Jane是如何获救的Step4 刻画细节冲突，优美连贯表达 刻画细节冲突添加细节Jane在当晚和次日的动作，语言，心理描写以及对周围环境的描写。营造冲突1. 扩大Jane在夜晚内心的冲突（后悔与丈夫吵架）2. 渲染Jane当晚与次日与环境之间的冲突（当晚恶劣环境与内心无助和恐惧的冲突；次日让直升机发现自己的困难与渴望被救的冲突）Step5 做到首尾呼应，结构完整合理提升点：为了做到

13、首尾呼应，使文章结构更加完整，考生可以在第二段的结尾回扣文章开头Jane与丈夫的争吵和冲突，充分体现本次经历后二人的感受。优秀范文1But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Immediately, an absolute darkness enveloped the forest. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay down near a stone, missing her family at a distance. All the fantastic memory crowded

14、in and she couldnt help crying, “Hadnt I quarreled with Tom, walked away and climbed to the high place, I wouldnt be trapped in this awful place, confronted with danger of dying.” She bitterly regretted and then fell asleep with shining tears in her eyes.It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Weak as sh

15、e was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance. To her great joy, a helicopter was flying overhead again and again. Eager and exited, she flagged her yellow blouse desperately and spared no effort to yell so as to be spotted. Fortunately, she was eventually noticed and brought

16、 into the helicopter. There, she saw her husband wearing an expression of relief. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything. Besides, they promised never to quarrel again, determining to live the life to the fullest.优秀读后续写点评（一）该篇作文在逻辑、语言、方面做到了平衡、全面、出色。一、逻辑上：合情合理，起初主

17、人公悔恨、恐惧；之后努力求生，最终获救，并且领悟到了一定的人生道理。二、语言上：文章并没一味地用大词、难词，而是在高中词汇范围内精挑细选，活用了许多小词。例如：envelope笼罩；crowd in 思潮涌现；to the full 达到尽可能大的程度; 充分地: enjoy life to the full 尽情享受人生的乐趣。句法上，形容词作状语、虚拟语气倒装、非谓语动词、too to结构to the full充分地；完全地；尽情地Ive always believed in living life to the full.我一直相信充实地生活。to the fullest最充分地My g

18、oal is to enjoy life to the fullest.我们的目标是尽情地享受我们的生活。swallowenvelopeenvlpvt. 覆盖，包围，笼罩Clouds enveloped the mountain tops.云层笼罩着山顶。She was enveloped in a huge white towel.她裹在一条白色的大毛巾里。Darkness fell and enveloped the town.夜幕降临，黑暗笼罩了整个城镇。A feeling of despair enveloped him.绝望的感觉笼罩着他。The mountain peak was

19、enveloped in mist and clouds.山峰被云雾遮蔽。Black smoke enveloped the entire street.黑烟笼罩了整条街。倒装Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance.优秀范文21. (23-24 )But no helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Jane was sad. She sat by the stream, resting her aching feet.

20、 If I hadnt quarreled with Tom, I wouldnt have to be here. Jane thought regretfully, with tears welling up in her eyes. She wanted to say sorry to Tom for losing her temper. However, the only thing she could do was lie by the stream and wait for help. It was getting late and Jane fell asleep.It was

21、daybreak when Jane woke up. She stood up to find something to eat. She walked and walked until she came to an open area where water and berries were available. Suddenly, she heard a helicopter. She took off her yellow blouse and began shaking it widely, hoping someone could see her. She shouted out “Tom”. The helicopter slowed down and landed on the ground. With the door open, Tom ran out. Seeing Jane, he was so excited and couldnt contain his joy. He hugged Jane tightly. “Tom, I wont lose my temper again. I want to stay with you forever.” Jane said in tears. 第 6 页 共 6 页