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1、大学英语作文讲评大学英语作文讲评The Twoday weekendThetwo-dayweekendnotonlyallowsustorelax,butalsogivesusthechancetotakeupsomehobbies.However,thetwo-dayweekendhascausedafewproblems.Themostseriousoneisthattheweekdaysarefilledwithtoomanylessons.Becauseourclassesarelimitedto5days,MondaythroughFriday,wehavetotakemoreles

2、sonseachdaythaninthepast.Thisleavesuslittletimetocatchourbreathduringtheweekdays.Inordertobenefitmostfromthetwo-dayweekend,Ihavedecidedtomakeagoodplanforthatrestperiod.Duringtheweekend,Iwillnotonlyrestandtakeupsomehobbies,butIwillalsosetasideenoughtimetostudy.5.“MyViewonDisposableProducts”1.随着人们生活节奏

3、的加快，一次性用品随着人们生活节奏的加快，一次性用品（Disposable Product）越来越多。）越来越多。2.使用一次性用品的利与弊。使用一次性用品的利与弊。3.我的看法。我的看法。MyViewonDisposableProductsLifeisbecomingincreasinglyconvenient,andespeciallyforbusypeoplewhoarealwaysonthemove,disposableproductsareaconveniencefactor.Byusingdisposablelunchcans,peoplecanhavetheirluncheswi

4、thoutworryingaboutdishwashing.Atthesametimehowever,usingtoomanydisposableproductswillharmtheenvironment.Thehighquantitiesofaccumulatedgarbageresultingfromtheuseofdisposableproductshavebecomeapollutionproblem.In my opinion,the existence of disposableproducts is perfectly justified,but its use should

5、berestricted限限 制制.More eco-friendly保保护护生生态态的 methodssuch as thorough cleaning and reusing should beintroducedtoachievebothconvenienceandconservationoftheenvironment.点评：本文紧扣提纲展开，每个观点仅用一到两句话就点评：本文紧扣提纲展开，每个观点仅用一到两句话就点明主题、论证观点，简洁明了，词汇运用得当。点明主题、论证观点，简洁明了，词汇运用得当。6.“FamilyEducation”1.现今父母非常重视家庭教育。现今父母非常重视家

6、庭教育。2.家庭教育的优、劣势。家庭教育的优、劣势。3.你的看法。你的看法。Family EducationParentsinChinaarenowadayspayingmoreattentiontothetrainingoftheironlychild.Atpresent,manychildrenincitieshavefamilytutorsandmorechildrenhavetotakelessonsbeforetheygotoschool.Familyeducationhasbothadvantagesanddisadvantages.Themainadvantageisthatch

7、ildrencanlearnmuchmoreandcandevelopthemselvesasearlyaspossible.Thedisadvantageisthattoomuchfamilyeducationmaycausechildrentolosetheirsenseoflivingandstudying.Also,childrenwillhavelesstimetoplayortodowhattheylike.Inmyopinion,toomuchortoolittlefamilyeducationwillbothdoharmtochildrenandevenleadtodisast

8、rous极坏的，很糟的极坏的，很糟的circumstances境况境况.点评：本文详尽地论述了提纲中的各点要求，每段的段首点评：本文详尽地论述了提纲中的各点要求，每段的段首句点明该段的主题大意，层次清晰，结构分明，用词准确，句点明该段的主题大意，层次清晰，结构分明，用词准确，举例恰当。举例恰当。7.“OnaHarmoniousDormitoryLife”.1.宿舍生活有时会出现不和谐的情况。宿舍生活有时会出现不和谐的情况。2.一个和谐宿舍生活的必要性。一个和谐宿舍生活的必要性。3.如何创造和谐的宿舍生活。如何创造和谐的宿舍生活。OnaHarmoniousDormitoryLifeDormito

9、rylifeisanindispensable必不可少的，必需的必不可少的，必需的partofastudentslife.Butsometimestheharmonyinthedormitorywillbedisrupted扰乱扰乱.Forexample,somememberslistentomusiclateatnightandcauselight欠缺欠缺的、不够的的、不够的sleepers（容易醒的人）toberestless焦躁不安的；静焦躁不安的；静不下来的不下来的.（heavysleeper不容易醒的人）Asiscommonlyknown,aharmoniousdormitoryli

10、feisimportanttostudentsorworkmatesandbenefitsallmembers.Itallowsustorelaxandfocusonourstudiesorwork.Also,wewillgetalongbetterandenjoy喜爱喜爱eachotherscompany同伴同伴(们们).Thereareseveralwaystocreateandmaintainaharmoniousdormitorylife.Firstly,youhavetogetridofyourbadhabits,ifthereareany.Secondly,whenanannoyi

11、ngsituationarises,youlljusthavetolearntodiscussthiswiththepersonsinvolvedandhopefully抱着希抱着希望地望地haveasolution,orelse否则，要不然否则，要不然youwilljusthavetotolerate容忍，忍受容忍，忍受andco-exist和平共处和平共处witheachother.写作提纲提示：写作提纲提示：第一段：举例说明宿舍生活的不和谐之处。第一段：举例说明宿舍生活的不和谐之处。第二段：从正反两方面论证和谐的宿舍生活很重要。第二段：从正反两方面论证和谐的宿舍生活很重要。第三段：提出营

12、造和谐的宿舍生活的三个方法。第三段：提出营造和谐的宿舍生活的三个方法。点评：本文是一篇贴近学生生活的议论文。从叙述点评：本文是一篇贴近学生生活的议论文。从叙述问题着手，阐述和谐宿舍生活的重要性，提出创造问题着手，阐述和谐宿舍生活的重要性，提出创造和谐宿舍生活的方法。和谐宿舍生活的方法。8.“MyViewontheNewTuitionPolicy”1.高校收费是一个客观事实，人们对此认识不一。高校收费是一个客观事实，人们对此认识不一。2.高校收费带来的一系列影响。高校收费带来的一系列影响。3.你的观点。你的观点。MyViewontheNewTuitionPolicyAccordingtoChin

13、asnewtuitionpolicy,studentswillhavetopayfortheireducation.Somepeoplethinkthiswillbedetrimental不利的不利的tostudentsandtheirfamilies,whileothersthinkthispolicywillbebeneficialinthelongrun从长远看从长远看.Thenewtuitionpolicyhasprofound深刻的深刻的influencesonstudents.Firstly,itwillbeinevitably必然地必然地stressfulforfamilies.

14、Secondly,thenewpolicyradically.根本地根本地altersthetraditionalobligation义务，责任义务，责任ofthestatetofund给给拨款拨款 universitytuitionfees教学费教学费.Ithinkweneedtoadvocatethenewpolicy.Itrelievesthegovernmentoftheburdenofsupportinghighereducation.Atthesametime,weshouldhelpthosestudentswhocannotfinance提供资金提供资金theirtuition

15、fees,makingsurethattheywillnotdropoutbecauseoffinancialproblems.点评：本文结构清晰，层次分明，遣词造句得当，对提点评：本文结构清晰，层次分明，遣词造句得当，对提纲各点的论述较详尽合理，观点明确。纲各点的论述较详尽合理，观点明确。9.“PsychologyinOurLife”1.试着谈谈心理健康的重要性。试着谈谈心理健康的重要性。2.结合自身情况，谈谈如何保持心理健康。结合自身情况，谈谈如何保持心理健康。PsychologyinOurLifePsychologyplaysanimportantroleinourdailylives.

16、Ifyouarepsychologicallyhealthy,youwillhavetheconfidencetocopewithdifficulties.Ifnot,youmayfeelsadandfrustratedthroughoutyourlife.Sohavingahealthypsychologyisnecessary.Thereareatleastthreemethodsofstayingpsychologicallyhealthy.First,trytocontrolyourselfwhenyouareinamess脏乱状态；困境脏乱状态；困境.Second,believein

17、yourselfafteryouhaveassessed评价评价yoursituation状况状况carefully.Third,youshouldbeselfdisciplined自律自律,whichallowsyoutobesensible明智的明智的whenyouarereallyattheedgeofanoutbreak爆发爆发.AsfarasIamconcernedasfaras.beconcerned就就而言而言,applyingthesethreemethodsisimportanttostaypsychologicallyhealthy.Tome,thisisthepsycho

18、logyinourlife.点评：论题稍显抽象，但心理健康问题是近年关点评：论题稍显抽象，但心理健康问题是近年关注的热点问题之一。本文结合实际情况进行阐述，注的热点问题之一。本文结合实际情况进行阐述，层次分明。层次分明。10.“Long-distanceEducation”1.在中国，远程教育发展迅速。在中国，远程教育发展迅速。2.远程教育加强了发达地区与贫困地区、国内院校与国远程教育加强了发达地区与贫困地区、国内院校与国外院校之间的联系。外院校之间的联系。3.然而，中国的远程教育还很不发达。然而，中国的远程教育还很不发达。Long-distance EducationWiththepopul

19、arizationofcomputerandinformationtechnology,longdistanceeducationhasdevelopedatarathersurprisingspeedinChinaandprovestobeaneffectivewayoflearning.Thankstodistancelearning,manypeopleinlessdevelopedareascanenjoyequalopportunitiesasthoselivingindevelopedareas.Whatismore,itenablesstudentsinChinatohaveth

20、esameaccesstoinformation,asthosestudentslivingabroad.However,longdistanceeducationinChinaisstillfarfromperfectandneedstobeimprovedintwoareas.First,facilitiessuchascomputers,andinformationnetworkfordistancelearningarestilllackinginsomeareasandshouldbeinstalled.Second,moreinformationandcoursesinChinas

21、houldbeavailablethroughdistanceeducationtomeetthegrowingneeds.点评：目前远程教育是一个比较热门的话题，本文按照点评：目前远程教育是一个比较热门的话题，本文按照提纲的三点要求顺次展开，层次分明，段与段之间联结提纲的三点要求顺次展开，层次分明，段与段之间联结紧密。紧密。11.“Wealth and Health”1.有人认为财富意味着一切。有人认为财富意味着一切。2.实际上健康比财富更重要。实际上健康比财富更重要。3.试比较说明。试比较说明。Wealth and HealthWhenaskedwhattheaimoftheirlifei

22、s,thevastmajorityofpeoplesay“makingmoney”.Foronething,wealthcanensurethemacomfortablelife.However,asfarasIamconcerned,ifIhadtochoosebetweenwealthandhealth,Iwouldpreferhealth.Ontheonehand,richpeoplecanaffordeverythingtheydreamof.Butsometimeswealthcannotbuyhealth.Ontheotherhand,peoplewhoarehealthybutn

23、otwealthycanmakemoneythroughtheirowneffortsandcanenjoythefruitoftheirlabor.Inconclusion最后最后,总之总之,healthismoreimportantthanwealth.Thosewhoarerichbutarenothealthy,andtheyareactuallysuffering痛苦痛苦.分析：本文紧扣提纲展开论述，观点明确，条例分析：本文紧扣提纲展开论述，观点明确，条例清晰，用词较准确。清晰，用词较准确。12.“Woman in Modern Society”1.Roleofwomeninmode

24、rnsociety.2.Prejudices偏见偏见anddiscrimination.歧视歧视againstwomen.3.Mycomments.WomaninModernSocietyWomenplayanimportantpartinmodernsociety.Nowadays,manywomengointospecializedfieldssuchasmedicine,lawandengineering.Theycomprise构成，组成构成，组成 alargepartoftheworkersinbusinessesandfactoriesandtheyaremakingoutstan

25、dingcontributionstomodernsociety.However,peoplearestillasserting肯定地说，断言肯定地说，断言thatmenaresuperiorto比比优越优越(好好women.First,therearemanyjobswhichcannotbecarriedoutbywomenbecausetheyarenotphysicallystrongenough.Second,mostoftheworld-famousscientistsandstatesmenaremale.Finally,mostofsociety上流社会上流社会seemstob

26、edominated占首要地位占首要地位bymen.Personally亲自；就个人来说亲自；就个人来说,Iamafeminist男女平等主义者男女平等主义者andstandforwomansrights.Sincebothmenandwomenareequallyimportantinhumanlifeandactivities,theyshouldhaveequalstanding地位地位.分析：本文紧扣提纲，立足于实际，展开论述。论点鲜明，分析：本文紧扣提纲，立足于实际，展开论述。论点鲜明，用词较丰富。用词较丰富。13.“TheRoleofMigrantWorkers”1.外来工对城市建

27、设的贡献。外来工对城市建设的贡献。2.外来工带来的问题。外来工带来的问题。3.我们应怎样面对。我们应怎样面对。TheRoleofMigrantWorkersAsiscommonlyknown,migrantworkershavemadeagreatcontributiontotheprosperityofcities.Theyareanindispensable必不可少的必不可少的partofourworkforce.However,migrantworkersalsobringproblems.First,theyhavetroublegettingtheirchildrenintochil

28、dcarecentersandschoolsbecausetheyareunregisteredresidentsinthecity.Second,mostofthemigrantworkersswarm云集云集intobigcitiesjusttomakemoney.Beingunskilledandinexperienced,someofthemcanbarely几乎不几乎不affordtoliveabasiclife.Therefore,theyareapotentialthreattothepeaceandstabilityofthesociety.Inmyopinion,weshou

29、ldappreciatethegreatcontributiontheyhavemade,butatthesametimemonitortheresultingproblems.点评：本题是近年来讨论的热点问题，本文紧扣提纲，点评：本题是近年来讨论的热点问题，本文紧扣提纲，展开论述。首段先明确了外来工对城市建设的贡献，展开论述。首段先明确了外来工对城市建设的贡献，第二段一一列举出外来工潜在的问题，最后一段提出第二段一一列举出外来工潜在的问题，最后一段提出个人见解。个人见解。14.“Whatdoesfriendshipmean?”1.友谊是认识永恒的主题。友谊是认识永恒的主题。2.友谊到底意味着

30、什么。友谊到底意味着什么。3.友谊的重要性。友谊的重要性。WhatdoesFriendshipMean?Whatdoesfriendshipmean?Thereisnodefiniteanswer.Asoneternal无休止的；永恒的无休止的；永恒的theme主题，主题，题目题目inliterature,friendshipisindispensabletodailylife.Friendshipisveryimportanttoourlife.Whenyouarehappy,friendshipislikeaddingflowerstocarpet;whenyouaresad,having

31、friendsareaconsolation安慰，慰安慰，慰藉藉;ifyouareintrouble,friendswillsurroundyouandremovethebarriersforyou;ifyouarefacingdifficulties,youcanturntofriendsforhelp.Weadmire钦佩钦佩,羡慕羡慕thegreatfriendshipbetweenMarxandEngle,whichdrewthemtogetherandpushedthemontheroadtoexploringandfulfillingcommunism.Friendshipisno

32、talmighty全能的，万能的全能的，万能的,butnoonecanlivehappilywithoutit.点评：本文类似抒情式的议论文，第二段中运用了排比点评：本文类似抒情式的议论文，第二段中运用了排比句，并巧妙地运用恩格斯和马克思的例子来证明友谊的句，并巧妙地运用恩格斯和马克思的例子来证明友谊的重要性。重要性。15.ALettertoaSchoolmateYoudonotneedtowriteyourownaddressandyourrealname.TheletteristoagoodfriendJohn,congratulatinghimonhisadmission准许进准许进(加

33、加)入入toaprestigious.有名望的，有威信的有名望的，有威信的university.Youshouldbaseyourcompositiononthefollowingoutline:1.对朋友进入大学表示祝贺。对朋友进入大学表示祝贺。2.介绍大学生活和中学生活的异同。介绍大学生活和中学生活的异同。3.对如何成功地过好大学生活提出自己的建议。对如何成功地过好大学生活提出自己的建议。ALettertoaSchoolmateAugust16th,2006Dearfriend,ThelasttimethatImetyou,Iwassurprisedtofindthatyoureyeswe

34、reswollenandyourfacewaspale.LaterIwastoldthatyouhavebeenaddictedtoonlinegamingforalongtime.Asiscommonlyknown,itisveryharmfultospendtoomuchtimeplayinggamesonline.Firstly,itisawasteoftime.Secondly,itdoesgreatharmtoyourhealthifyouoftenstayuplateatnights.Thirdly,yourmentalhealth身心健康willbeseriouslyaffect

35、edtoo.Ihopeyouwillshiftyourattentiontoyourstudiesandwork.Trytotakeregularexercises,communicatewithothersmoreoftenandconcentrateonyourstudies.Inthisway,youwillhaveamore富有成效的富有成效的lifestyle.Ilookforwardtoyourreply.YoursSincerely,Chen点评：本文是一封建议信，信中劝告朋友戒玩网络游戏，说明沉溺于点评：本文是一封建议信，信中劝告朋友戒玩网络游戏，说明沉溺于网络游戏的危害，并提

36、出如何摆脱网络游戏的忠告。网络游戏的危害，并提出如何摆脱网络游戏的忠告。写作提纲提示：写作提纲提示：第一段：得知朋友玩网络游戏成瘾，非常吃惊，同时感到非常痛心。第一段：得知朋友玩网络游戏成瘾，非常吃惊，同时感到非常痛心。第二段：分析沉溺于网络游戏的种种危害第二段：分析沉溺于网络游戏的种种危害损害身心健康，浪费时损害身心健康，浪费时间和精力。间和精力。第三段：劝告朋友及时从沉迷网络游戏中摆脱出来。第三段：劝告朋友及时从沉迷网络游戏中摆脱出来。16.WritingalettertoafriendwhoislookingforjobAugust17th,2006Dearfriend,Iamwriti

37、ngthislettertoadviseyoutoapplyforthepositionofEnglishtranslatorinourcompany.WeareinurgentneedofgoodtranslatorsandIamsurethatyouhaveagoodchanceofgettingthisjob.Asforthisposition,therearesomerequirements.Firstly,aTEM-8certificateisamust.Secondly,youmustbeabletotranslateanEnglisharticleof2,500wordsinto

38、Chinesewithinaday.Whatsmore,yourtranslationshouldbefluent,andbeasclosetotheoriginalmeaningaspossible.Youshouldreadsomereferencebooksontranslationskills.Also,itisnecessaryforyoutobroaden扩大扩大yourvocabulary,asyouwillnotbeallowedtolookupwordsinthedictionaryduringthetest.Iwishyousuccess.YoursSincerely,Hu

39、ck点评：本文属于建议信。信中说明了建议的内容以及理由，提醒朋友点评：本文属于建议信。信中说明了建议的内容以及理由，提醒朋友主义应聘的要求以及所应该做好的准备。最后，向朋友表示良好的祝主义应聘的要求以及所应该做好的准备。最后，向朋友表示良好的祝愿。写信时，要主义段落之间的过渡要自然。愿。写信时，要主义段落之间的过渡要自然。写作提纲提示：写作提纲提示：第一段：建议朋友应聘翻译一职并说明原因。第一段：建议朋友应聘翻译一职并说明原因。第二段：告知应聘翻译的基本条件。第二段：告知应聘翻译的基本条件。第三段：给出建议，如看一些翻译技巧方面的书籍，并扩大词汇量。第三段：给出建议，如看一些翻译技巧方面的书籍

40、，并扩大词汇量。第四段：祝愿朋友应聘成功。第四段：祝愿朋友应聘成功。17.“AnnualExpensesonLearningEnglish某市大学生购买英语资料的年人均投入某市大学生购买英语资料的年人均投入 时间时间 90年代初年代初 2005年年 年人均投入年人均投入 60 1701.上图为某市上图为某市90年代初和年代初和2005年大学生者购买英语年大学生者购买英语资料变化表，请描述图表内容。资料变化表，请描述图表内容。2.解释发生以上变化的原因（可涉及对英语的重视程解释发生以上变化的原因（可涉及对英语的重视程度增加；科技发展使新的学习产品不断涌现）。度增加；科技发展使新的学习产品不断涌现

41、）。3.我的看法。我的看法。Annual Expenses on English LessonsTheformshowsthataverageamountofmoneyspentonEnglishmaterialshasincreasedfrom60RMBintheearly1990sto170RMBin2005.Fromthis,weknowthatstudentsarenowadaysspendingmoremoneyonEnglishlessons.Somereasonscanexplainthistrend.First,manystudentsrealizetheimportanceo

42、fstudyingEnglishasitiswidelyusedallovertheworld.Second,sinceChinaenteredWTO,Englishlessonshavebecomemorepopular.ItisdifficulttofindadecentjobwithoutfluentEnglishskills.Inmyopinion,thisgrowingtrendmaychange.BecausemostpupilsstartlearningEnglishatveryyoungage,bythetimetheygettocollege,theydonotneedtospendtheextratimeormoneyrequiredtoimprovetheirEnglishskills.点评：虽然是图表作文，但结合了提纲式作文的特点，点评：虽然是图表作文，但结合了提纲式作文的特点，降低了写作的难度。只要结合提纲和图表来展开就不降低了写作的难度。只要结合提纲和图表来展开就不会出现理解错误。会出现理解错误。