2022年高三开放作文教学设计.docx

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1、精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - 学习必备 欢迎下载“ 开放作文” 的讲评一、设计思路英语课程标准 对八级的写作有这样的要求： 能依据用文字及图表提供的信息写短文或报告； 能写出连贯且结构完整的短文, 表达事情或表达观点和态度；能在写作中做到文体规范、语句通顺；以上是我们平常让同学练习写作时的指导思想,详细到这次考试我们在通过用考试说明 上的要求来评判一篇作文外更主要的是让同学体会到以 下几点：12平常的努力所花费的功夫没有白费,只要依据老师的要求去做 就能有好的收成,在考试中取得抱负的成果；在考试中查漏补缺,看看平常的练习中仍有哪些缺陷,文章中有哪些漏洞,哪些没有留意到的东西

2、；在今后的学习中确定更 明确的努力方向；作为老师的我们更要通过一次重大的考试审查自己在教学中的得失,帮忙同学树立信心,提高水平；我所面对的同学在海淀区属于中等稍偏上的位置,针对他们的详细情况,我认为通过这次考试应让他们更明确自己的水平,正确地面对自己的长短,明白考试的方向与要求； 通过认真分析区书面表达的精神和自己班级的 情形,使同学提高写作水平；二、实施过程Step I I. 写作要把住以下这一主方向：文章是否扣题,内容是否充实健康；思维是否活跃,规律是否清晰；语言是否规范,交际是否得体；II.全班同学共同学习区里下发的“ 书面表达讲评” 的课件；（依据本班详细情形加以适当的改动）I重新审题

3、1 请依据下面提示,写一篇短文；词数不少于50；In your English class, the teacher shows you the following picture and asks the class to discuss it. Your classmates have different understandings. Look at the picture carefully and tell your classmates how you understand it. 名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 1 页,共 5 页精选学习资料 - - - - - -

4、- - - 学习必备 欢迎下载通过认真阅读所给文字及图片我们可得以下等写作内容：文体和话题：口头谈论文；看漫画有感,语言：较正式情形：向同学阐述见解人称：第一人称 I （谈论）；第三人称（画面说明）时态：一般现在时；画面说明用现在进行时；要求：你对这幅画的懂得；no honey, telescope, crying, mobile 在图中我们可抓住以下主要信息：phone, some flowers 2 指出同学们在审题的过程中显现的错误：对图片的懂得比较肤浅,不能体会到图片内涵；懂得比较偏激,不能抓住主要含义,而是从一个较偏的角度来发表自己的看法；不能从图片中找到支撑自己论点的论据；II 学

5、习范文Possible Versions: After seeing the picture, I feel just as confused as the bees. The reason why there is no honey is that the flowers are all artificial ones. To my understanding there might be at least two causes. Perhaps plants and flowers have all died from pollution and now there are only ar

6、tificial substitutes. Of course the bees cannot find the honey. As for another possible cause, people have designed those flowers in order to beautify the living environment. Consequently, the bees take those flowers as real ones by mistake. We can learn from the picture that it is probably best to

7、be aware of the superficial phenomenon around us and learn to distinguish fact from fiction. 名师归纳总结 III学习对评分标准的懂得第 2 页,共 5 页IV学习开放作文的阅卷步骤V学习各档次的给分范畴及要求- - - - - - -精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - VI学习必备欢迎下载同学在写作过程中显现的问题面对画面,不会进行发散思维,不清晰画面的寓意是什么,为立意 不清或立意平平；论点不清,干瘪,不够丰满,不知所云；语言规律性差,没有层次,语序纷乱；不善于组织语言表达思想或者没有

8、足够的语言基础支持思想,表现 为语言不流畅；存在着凑数的现象；时态,人称纷乱；常规问题：汉语思维；卷面书写脏乱；Step II 1 同学作文展现及讲评（利用 Microsoft Office 中的修订功能参考区里下发的评分标准当众修改以下三篇作文,并指出其优缺点； ）Student A Score:10 From the lively picture, we can see some bees are confused about the flowers which won t provide any honey. To my understanding, the reason why flo

9、wers wont produce honey anymore is because of the pollution which human caused. They pollute the air and the water, and pollutions can be seen nearly everywhere. In that way, the circle of lives is dying. So, stop cutting your own ways of lives. Only in that way will human and animals have safe live

10、s and live happily ever after. Student B Score: 9 “Your majesty, theres no honey.”After hearing this from the phone, the queen felt disappointed. Without honey, the queen had been hungry for a few days already. Look at the flower blooms, there were many bees looking for honey. But they still could g

11、et nothing. Why didn t the flowers produce honey. Because of the pollution of the metal industry, the dirty air made the environment worse and worse. When will humans not only care about themselves but also the animals, the plants and the earth. The queen of bees is desperate. 注：以上两篇作文能够做到“ 观点基本明确,论

12、据和谈论有肯定的说服力；所用语法和词汇满意了任务的要求；语法或用词方面有一些错误, 但不影响懂得；文章结构紧凑基本达到写作目的； ”但是表达不出较强的语言运用能 力,错误较多没有很高级的语言运用；Student C Score: 6 “Hes lying.” shouted one of my classmates. “Why can t the flower produce honey.” the picture showed that some bees flying upon the flowers, but one of them told the others that theres

13、 no honey, 名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 3 页,共 5 页精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - 学习必备 欢迎下载so others had to fly away. Sharing happiness and good things with others is a good way to make more friends and get more experience. Although the bee which lied got more honey than the others, he may lose friendship. Don t b

14、e that jealous and private. 注：此表达不是很切题；谈论过多且没有从图片中找到能支撑其观点的论据；语法,用词方面错误较多,影响了对写作内容的懂得；未恰当完成任务；2 给同学供应一些写此类作文可用的词汇：As can be seen in the picture, As is shown in the picture, To my understanding, I would assume that My understanding is based on the fact thatMeasures should be taken toStep III 总结通过展现区里

15、的作文讲评试卷课件, 我们已经明白到该如何写好开放作文；再通过看自己同学的作文及当众的修改,同学们又进一步明白了自己的问题所在, 知道该如何修改自己的作文,特别是这个环节, 同学们能做到一 目了然,心中有数；那么我们来通过作业进行进一步的巩固；Step IV 作业 1. 修改自己的作文 2. 依据老师今日所讲的要求写“ 西城期末试卷” 中的开放作文西城作文：请依据下面提示,写一篇短文；字数不少于 50；In an English class your teacher shows you a picture as below and asks how you understand it and

16、what makes you think so. 名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 4 页,共 5 页精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - 学习必备 欢迎下载（附以上同样三位同学的西城作文,们的进步；）Student A Score: 12 虽然仍旧存在缺陷, 但我们可以看到他From the picture, we can see a fat boy pointing at his school report card sadly. It obviously shows that the boy is good at his major courses while mu

17、sic and P.E. are poor. Nowadays, too many people judge students by their grades while other abilities are ignored. To my understanding, this isn t the right way to decide whether a student is good or bad. We should consider all sides of students. Student B Score: 11 As we can see from the picture bl

18、ow, the boy who take the school report does well in Chinese, maths and also in English. On the contrary, he gets bad grades in both P.E. and music. It is clearly that the boy is overweight and he is worried about the result. The picture warns us to keep an eye on doing some sport exercises in case o

19、f overweight. Besides, we students also can listen to music in our spare time to relax. Student C Score: 9 This picture shows the phenomenon in China nowadays. More and more students wearing glasses and getting fat. They do very well in subjects such as Chinese. Maths and English. On the contrary, t

20、heir achievement of music and P.E. are getting worse. And the most important thing is that healthy are too far from the students. 三、教学反思提高同学的写作水平功夫应用在平常,做到至少一周一次, 每次都以考试的标准给同学评判, 展现好的作品, 分析不足与问题； 那么在大的考试中 更应当如此, 领悟贯彻区里的精神, 让同学们用正规的标准对自己的作文进行评判,修改在练习； 这样认真地进行一次讲评对他的水平提高起了很大的 作用,受益匪浅；（该“ 设计” 获 2006 -2007 学年度“ 海淀区高三年级系列优秀教学设计评比 活动” 二等奖）名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 5 页,共 5 页