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1、第七届全国创新英语作文大赛优胜作文选登复赛试题：Directions:With the development of computers, more and more people are working with computers. But, we know that computers are harmful as well as useful and helpful .Here, you are asked to write an essay on the topic “The Advantages and Disadvantages of Computers”. You can gi

2、ve some examples and facts to support your opinion. Your essay should be written in English with no less than 300 words within 60 minutes.The Advantages and Disadvantages of Computers李彦妮辽宁市鞍山市第一中学10届14班Nowadays, the idea of progress loorns so large in the modern world, and the progress of a particul

3、ar kind is actually taking place around us. In this circumstances, computers which have a great help come out with the wisdom and hard-working of human beings. It do have given human a tremendous help, it, however, has brought to us its harmness at the some time.The computers can make a great help f

4、or us in this high speed society. In the light of this statement, it is computers that can store documents for us which is essential for us, it is computers that can shorten the time in seeking useful information instead of looking for knowledge from a large sums of books and it is computers that ca

5、n make it possible to comunicate with different people who are far away from you. In a word, we cant live nomally without computers in such a high-tech society.On the contary, having helped us a lot, computers are harmful to people at the same time, especially the adolescents. First of all, sitting

6、in front of the computer may do harm to our eyes. On the other hand, computers not only bring us useful information but also entertainments. Being weak in controlling themselves, those poor adolescents are more easier to get crazy about the fantasy world. Seeing a vivid picture which is about a son

7、who gets stuck in computers and phones to his parents downstairs to bring dinner for him. I realized deeply that the computers really have their disadvantages.According to the statements above, it can not be superficial to simply say that computers are good or bad for us as every coin has both sides

8、. Personally, I still consider that a computer can bring us convinience and high speed which is extolled to all the people even though it is a two-edged weapon. We can learn well punctuated by those purchasable wells of wisdom - computers.专家建议：本文个别语言使用不够地道并且偶尔出现句子表意不明的情况，因此建议该考生在平时的学习中尽量多阅读原汁原味的英语(论

9、坛)文章，有意识地积累地道的英语表达，不断提高语言运用能力。专家点评：本篇文章段落结构基本清晰，第一段交代文章主题，第二段主要说明计算机的优势，第三段罗列计算机给人们带来的害处，最后一段是对文章的总结和作者个人看法，整篇文章思路比较清晰。文章用词较为准确，也出现了不少词组及句型，语法多样性也有所体现。能看出这绝对是高中生中佼佼者完成的文章。不足之处在于有个别语言点不够地道，希望以后能进一步雕琢语言，使写作水平进一步提升。The Advantages and Disadvantages of Computers.曹欣平安徽省黄山市屯溪一中高一2班Currently, with the devel

10、opment of Internet, more and more people voico focus on the issue that whether it is right to have got a computer. As we all know, a coin has two sides, and a computer has both advantages and disadvatages. Sometimes, we insist that it is rather useful to get a computer, but on the other hand, we fin

11、d it much more hamful. In a word, however, nothing goins more discussion than computers.For one thing, we regard computer convenient, in that we can use a computer to draw pictures, write essays and sum up countless numbers. We work on computers and comminicate by Internet. Because of e-mails, on-li

12、ne shopping and trimendous, number of imformations on Internot, we adnire the useful computer. Whats more, computer and Internet can work in a fantastic speed, which makes our work swiftly. No one com deny that, human can live and work well without computers.For omother, however, computers bring har

13、mfulnesses to us as well. First, computer games are at large nowadays. Teenagers can be octlracted by them easily. They plays computers night and day, forgetting anything including study. They spend their valueable youngth hurting thies active bodies. Glasses on their faces show their weakness of si

14、ght. Meanwhile internet provides too many things and people cannot tell bad ones from right ones promptly sometimes. As a result, their spirit can be damaged. Nothing can be worse than this. The last but not the least, internet offers many ways to crime. Meanwhile, it is hard to find out. For instan

15、ce, some bad sayings spread well on internet but the police can do nothing to stop them.As for as I am concerned, I consider that the computer is rather useful. Whether you may be damaged by computers and internet depends on yourself to the core. You would not be hurt if your, eyes were bright enoug

16、h to tell right from wrong. As for me, I use computers to write articles, watch movies and communicate with each other and I do not fancy any computer games. Besides, the Governmout should focus their attention to protecting teenagers from computer games. At last, I would say that despite the disadv

17、antages still exist now, computers play a very significant part of role in modern life.专家建议：建议该生多读英语议论文章，揣摩正规议论文的段落内部的逻辑关系是怎样做到严谨合理的，培养对一件事发表议论的能力。另外，平时应该多练习写作议论文，并在写作过程中要求自己思路清晰，明确自己究竟要写什么，为什么要写这句话，句与句之间到底有没有关系，有什么关系。希望对作者有所帮助。专家点评：本文结构设置清晰明了，词汇及句型句式的运用较为高级和丰富，语法应用也比较准确和多样。不足之处在于本文段落内部逻辑的混乱，句与句之间的逻

18、辑关系更是令读者一头雾水。值得一提的是，本文还多处出现了议论文章的大忌讳，那就是主观猜测出的毫无依据支持的信息以及缺乏客观性的极端信息，希望作者日后避免此类错误。Computers常悦辽宁省大连市育明高中高二12班Computer is one of peoples greatest inventions in the last centry. Meanwhile, it brings about as many problems as the convienience it offers. This essay will look at the advantages and disadvan

19、tages of computers.To begin with, there are numerous reasons to say computers do good to our daily life. Firstly, computers make it possible for students to gain knowledge online with a simple click, instead of ckecking thousands of books. A veriaty kinds of information on all subjects are stored in

20、 computers, available to everyone, Moreover, thanks to the computers, people can “talk” to others, who are millions of miles away, even overseas. Computers offer a great alternative of communication, which develops peoples view and enables us to know different cultures. A third point is that compute

21、rs make a great contribution to building up a globle village. By shopping online, one can buy Japanese sushi, HongKong clothings and Italian wine in America.Nevertheless, despite the advantages of computer, therere many drawbacks of it. First of all, because of the attractive computer games, many ad

22、olescents give up studying. Computers have a damage effect on youngsters health and accdamic education, whats more, they even cause juvenile crimes. A second point is that when people get too used to communicating on computers, they loose their ablity of talking face to face. A report has shown that

23、 over 69% of people choose to use e-mails or tax messages to communicate. Furthermore, computers, in some degree, make developing and developed countries more devided, because while some countries are wired to communicate, others remain isolated.In summery, nothing has gained more praise and blame t

24、han computer. In my point of view, computer is just a tool. Its advantages and disadvantages mostly depends on how we use it. If we make a good use of it, it will be a great assistant of mankind.专家建议：作者基本掌握了议论文的写作要领，只在文章个别之处逻辑存在一些诸如思维跳跃度过大的问题，另外就是有的表达不够地道和准确。因此建议该考生在平时的学习中尽量多阅读原汁原味的英语文章，有意识地积累地道的英语表

25、达，不断提高语言运用能力。专家点评：本篇文章段落结构清晰明了，第一段作为引言段交代文章主题并且引出文章主题段落，第二段主要说明计算机的益处，第三段罗列计算机给人们带来的害处，最后一段是对文章的总结和作者个人看法。整篇文章思路清晰，段落主题突出。文章词汇运用较为高级与丰富，语法多样性也有所体现。不足之处在于有个别语言点不够地道，希望以后能进一步完善语言，使写作水平进一步提升。The Advantages and Disadvantages of Computers陈绿思广东省汕头市金山中学高一9班As wereliving in an unusual world with rapidly dev

26、eloping light-technology, theres no doubt that computer, as an indispensable instrument, has been a significant part of ones life.In respect to the office and business, computers can never be over emphasized. It makes it much easier and more convenient to send messages accurately and make a deal. Co

27、mputers also grace our daily life, from which were capable to get the latest information, talk about the social controversial issues and even see doctors and book tickets on line. You may get everything you want, only clicking the mouse.Take, for example, the story of an unknown girl who complaint a

28、 lot about the big earthquake that happened to Sichuan. All the people in sorrow who read the girls comments were very angry and it was the computer that helped the people collect all the imformation of the girl and assisted the police in catching her eventually. How ponerful the computers are!There

29、s a saying goes “Every coin has two side”. So is computer. Personal imformation is exposed to the public attention nowadays, and even ones privacy. It has been reported that some famous stars daily life were seriously influenced as their phone numbers, house address were spread on line. We cant imag

30、ine how terrible it will be if the private imformation is made use of by those with bad intention. Besides, computers with narious functions may exert bad influence on adolescents. They, for instance, me likely to get addicted to playing electronic games that overshadow the other parts of their life

31、, to ondulge themselves in unhealthy imformation that even lead them to criminals.In my humble opinion, whether computer is harmful or useful to us lies in the approach we use it. Only when we use computers in appropriate ways to do right things can we benefit from this kind of high - technology.专家建

32、议：建议该生平时多阅读英语议论文章，观察并模仿规范议论文的文章结构设计，尽量使自己以后的文章做到结构清晰明了。专家点评：本文词汇运用较为准确，高级；句型句式较为丰富；议论语言较有力度。但是，文章段落结构出现了较大的问题：引言段，文章主体以及为支持“计算机优势观点”所举的例子都以平行结构出现在了不同段落中，而文章关于“计算机劣势观点”所举的例子却和其相应的观点挤在一个段落中。所以容易给人杂乱无章的感觉。The advantages and disadvantages of Computers陈瑶江苏省泰州市泰州中学高二5班In this imformation age, computers ar

33、e necessary in our daily life. However, according to personal experience and personality type, some people hold the view that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages while others think the disadvantages corry more weight than the advantages. From my point of view, the computers are harmful as well

34、 as useful and helful and we should take advantage of the computers properly and avoid the disadvantages of the computers.Among countless disadvantages of the computers, thereve three compiuous ones. Its convenient for us to search for information on the Internet. The Internet is just like a library

35、 that folled with many books. Whenever you have questoons and problems, you can find the answers you want with the computer. Also, communicating with others on the Internet is very convenient and cheap. For instance, if you talk to others with telephones, especially for long-distance phone, you will

36、 pay much money for it, Nevertheless, if you use the Internet to communicate with others, you just need to spend little money. Lastly, its very useful for us students to study with the computers. Take me for an example, I took many exercises that can improve my lestening with the computer in the pas

37、e. I also gain a lot of information which is benefinial to my study on the Internet.In contrast, the computers also has many disadvantages. First, many Students are dedicated in playing computer games, as a result, their grades become very low after playing them. Take my classmate for an example, pr

38、evious to playing computer games, his marks were very high in the examinations, However, after he lost himself in computer garnes, his marks fell down sharply. Furthermore, the Internet will spread some bad things, such as voilence and bule films.Every coin has both sides, and the computer is no exc

39、eption. Its wise for us to reduce the dosadvantages of the computer, and make the computer play its great role. We must keep a clear mind and de what is useful to improve ourselves with the computer.专家建议：建议该生平时在阅读英文读物时，有意识地积累地道的英文表达，相信坚持一段时间，英文写作水平就会有进一步提高。专家点评：本文结构清晰有序，段落设置合理得当，难得的是，文章每一段的第一句都是该段的主

40、题句，对于一个中学生来说，能对写作英语议论文的规范有如此到位的落实，实在不常见。本文词汇运用较为高级，句型句式较为丰富，语法应用较为准确。不足之处在于有些英文表达还可以更地道一点The Advantages and Disadvantages of Computers宫琦陕西省太原市太原外国语中学高二602班In contemporary society, computer is playing an increasingly essential role in our daily lives. But in the meantime, whether computer is a blessi

41、ng or curse has sparked spirited debate. Some people assert that computer has fundamentally beneficial influence on our society while many others argue that it has detrimental effect as well. As far as I concerned, I am in favor of the former view.Convincing arguments can be made that with computers

42、, our lives may become rather colorful. To start with, computers can help the technology developing faster and faster; therefore, most individuals can enjoy efficient lives and numerous companies can combat more issues with the hele of computers. More over, we can buy what we like via Internet, this

43、 usually seems less time-consuming and more economical. Specifically, to illustrate, we can buy a great number of things on Taobao Ebay and Paipai, and the price is not very expensive. Lastly, many youngsters like to play a variety of computer games, the beautiful scenes and complete legends often d

44、raw a magnet on us that is to say, we can relax our bodies and amuse our minds in this way.Admittedly, computer really does harm to ourselves in some occasions. The reason for this is that many websites on the Internet spread violence and sex informations, which can exert a bad influence on adolesce

45、nts to learn and try. Meanwhile there are many hackers steal our Internet bank account and our personal informations through computer viruses. Obviously, the things I described above can lead to social crimes. Even so, we can set up net forces to curb the proliferation of the trend of Internet crime

46、s, and the advantages which computer proride us with proved undeniable in many individuals eyes.Having considered all the arguments above, I would concede that computers may cause many problems to our society. Despite that, computers can truly bring comfortable and convinient tempo of living to us.

47、Overall, I am convinced that the advantages of computers far outweigh the disvantages, and we should use computers in right way to contribute to societal well-being.专家建议：建议该生扩大英文阅读量，阅读不仅可以帮助考生积累更为地道准确的语言表达方式，更能让该生借鉴文章段落结构的设置以及段落内部句子的逻辑严谨的逻辑关系。关于阅读材料，可以选择课外权威英文议论文读物，如英文报纸，期刊等。这些材料中的文章语言准确地道，结构清晰工整，逻辑

48、正确严谨，时刻散发着英文理性的魅力，可以对议论文写作提高有所帮助。专家点评：本篇文章结构清晰，严格按照“总起优势劣势总结”的段落分布。语句基本连贯通顺，词汇运用较为丰富，语法的多样性也有所体现。本文作者的写作水平绝对超出了现阶段高中生英语写作能力的平均水平。但是，本文中出现个别逻辑错误，段落内部句子与句子间的逻辑关系不够紧凑，个别段落间的过度有些生硬，望日后写作时留意。What Computers Bring to Us李潇然辽宁省大连市辽师大附中高三2班With the advent of computers, the worid is changing rapidly and profou

49、ndly. The influence they bring to us is obvious and far-reaehing. Hence, people voice growing concern over what computers buing to us.The vital flavour that computers alo the soicety cant be ignored. In the finst place, for students, theyre beneficial to our studying. By surfing or the Internet, we can gain some knowledge which cant be grasped from textbooks. In the second place, as an approach of meelia, they play a