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1、高考读后续写素材积累：奴隶与狮子第二节 读后续写（满分25分）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Once there was a slave namedAndrocles, who was so badly treated by his master that he resolved to run away from him. He therefore secretly left his masters house and hid himself in aforest, some miles distant from the city.After wandering

2、about for some time, he came to a large cave, andovercomeby hunger and tiredness, he lay down in it, and soon fell fast asleep.He was suddenly awakened by the roar of a wild beast; a greatlionstood right at the mouth of the cave. There was no way he couldescape!Androcles expected nothing else than t

3、o be at once torn to pieces, but to his greatsurprise,thelion camegentlytowardshim, withoutshowing anysignsofanger.Itgaveforthalowandmournful（悲哀的）sound, as if it were begging for his assistance. As thelionapproached him, he noticed that one of its feet was swollen.He then went up tothelion, took hol

4、d ofthewounded paw（ 爪子）, and examined it as a surgeon would examine a patient. He was not long in finding out thecauseoftheswelling; for he saw intheball of the foot a verylarge thorn（刺）.The slave pulled outthethorn, and pressed out ofthewound a quantity of matter, which gave the lion immediaterelie

5、f.Then,thelion began to show hisgratitudeby every means in hispower.He jumped about like a playfulspaniel（西班牙猎犬）,waggedhisgreattail,andlickedthehandsandfeetofhis physician.From that moment Androcles became his guest;thelion always shared hisprey.The slave continued to live like this for several mont

6、hs. At length, wandering carelessly through the woods, he was seized by a company of soldiers who were sent by the master to search for him.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:Hewassentencedtobetornbyalioninthepublicarena（竞技场）.Paragr

7、aph 2:However,the liondidntact as most hadimagined.先来了解一下评分细则：一、评分细则：1.本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。2.评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容、语言和衔接程度初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。3.如关键词语出现，但下划线一处都未划，从总分中扣2分（关键词语的变化形式可接受）。词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。4.评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：(1)与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；(2)内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用情况；(3)应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；(4)上下文的

8、连贯性。5.拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。6.如书写较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低1-2个档次。7.如续写主题违背社会主流价值观，可将分数降低1-2个档次。8.如有抄袭现象，视其严重程度，按比例扣分，直至0分。二、各档次的给分范围和要求档次描述第五档（21-25）一与所给短文融治度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。一内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。一所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。一有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑第四档（16-20）一与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开

9、头语衔接较为合理。一内容比较丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。一所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达。一比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。第三档（11-15）一与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。一写出了若干有关内容，应用了4个以上短文中标出的关键词语。一应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义表达。一应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯。第二档（6- 10）一与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。一写出了一些有关内容，应用了3个以上短文中标出的关键词语。

10、一语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的表达。一较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性。第一档（1- 5）一与所提供短文和开头语的衔接较差。一产出内容太少，很少使用短文中标出的关键词语。一语法结构单调，词汇项目很有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达。一缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容不连贯。0自卷、内容太少无法评判或所写内容与所提供内容无关。文章来源伊索寓言；故事主要讲了一个逃离的奴隶帮助了一只受伤的狮子，狮子知恩图报，用自己的行动救下奴隶。文章写出了奴隶与狮子之间的珍贵友情，患难与共，情深意重。（本文不处理情节设计，主要理一理相关语言

11、素材）BOOK 4 LESSON 26Androcles and the Lion（英国语文 第四册）From:Aesops Fables （伊索寓言）Once there was a slave namedAndrocles, who was so badly treated by his master that heresolved to run away fromhim. He therefore secretly left his masters house and hid himself in aforest, some milesdistant fromthe city.（蓝色部分

12、是好词好句）翻译：从前有一个名叫安德鲁克斯的奴隶，主人虐待他，所以他打算逃跑。于是，有一天他悄悄地离开了主人的房子，躲在距离那座城市几英里的一个大森林里。Afterwandering about for some time, he came to a large cave, andovercomeby hunger andfatigue/tiredness, helay downin it, and soonfell fast asleep.翻译：在森林里转了一阵子之后，他来到一个大山洞前，他实在抵挡不住饥饿和疲乏，躺倒在山洞里，很快就睡了过去。Hewas suddenly awakened

13、by the roar of a wild beast; a greatlionstood rightat the mouth ofthe cave.There was no way he couldescape!翻译：他忽然被一声野生动物的吼叫惊醒，他急忙跑到洞口发现洞外正站着一头雄狮，正面对面地堵着他的路，让他连逃跑的可能都没有！Androclesexpected nothing else than to be at once torn to pieces, but to his greatsurprise,thelion camegentlytowardshim, withoutshow

14、ing anysignsofrage/anger.Itgaveforthalowandmournful（悲哀的）sound,as ifit werebegging forhisassistance.Asthelionapproachedhim, he noticed that itlimped withone of its legs, and one of its feetwas swollen, as if it had been wounded.翻译：安德鲁科斯觉得他除了马上被撕成碎片之外没有别的出路，但是，他惊奇地发现那头狮子正温柔地靠近他，没有一点凶狠的样子。它靠过来的时候喉咙里发出一

15、声低沉而痛苦的呜咽，好像正在乞求他的帮助。当狮子终于靠近之后，安德鲁科斯才发现它是跛着一条腿挪过来的，它的脚肿胀着，好像受了伤。He then went up tothelion, took hold ofthewounded paw（ 爪子）, and examined it as a surgeon would examine a patient. Hewas not long infinding out thecauseoftheswelling; for he sawintheball of the foota verylarge thorn（刺）.The slaveextracted

16、/pulled outthethorn, and pressed out ofthewound a quantity of matter, which gave the lion immediaterelief.翻译：他于是走向狮子，握住它那只受伤的脚掌，像医生对待病人一样仔细检查起它的伤势。很快他就发现了这头狮子脚掌肿胀的原因它的脚掌底部扎着一根大刺。奴隶帮助狮子把刺拔了出来，又替它把伤口处的脓水挤了出来，这些做完后，狮子马上就像是从痛苦中解脱出来，松了一口气的感觉。Then,thelion began toshow hisgratitudeby every means in hispowe

17、r.Hejumped about like a playfulspaniel（西班牙猎犬）,waggedhisgreattail,andlickedthehandsandfeetofhis physician.From that moment Androcles became his guest;thelion always shared hisprey.(and the lion never sallied forth in quest of prey without sharing the produce of his chase with his friend.)翻译：这之后，狮子用力所

18、能及的的各种方式表达了对奴隶的感激之情。它高高地跃起，像是一条顽皮的西班牙猎犬；它朝着奴隶使劲地摇着尾巴；除此之外，狮子还舔着它的医生的手脚。从此以后，奴隶安德鲁克斯成为了狮子尊贵的客人，而狮子在每次出去打猎之后都要与它的朋友分享战利品。The slave continued to live like thisforseveral months.At length,wandering carelessly through the woods, he was seized by a company of soldiers who were sent by the master to search

19、 for him.翻译：奴隶就在这种野蛮人的生活状态下过了几个月。因为粗心大意，在一次穿越丛林的时候，他被一伙派出搜寻他的士兵抓个正着，于是他们逮住他，把他送回到他的主人手里。积累素材：原文：One of its feetwas swollen, as if it had been wounded.拓展：我低头看着自己肿胀的脚，知道自己最后一丝希望正在消逝，我流下了痛苦的眼泪Looking down at myswollen(肿胀的)foot,I wept bitter tears, knowing my last glimmer of hope was fading.（2019年4月台州市高

20、三年级调考）他刚想张嘴，不知怎的，他的舌头因愤怒而肿了起来，一句话也说不出来The instanthe attempted to open his mouth,somehowhis tonguewas swollen with rage, unable to utter a word.他的双颊鼓起，嘴唇紧闭，肿胀的脸上是一种呆滞、愤怒的红色His cheeks werepuffed, his lipscompressed, his swollen facewas of a dull,angryred.（The Forsyte Saga）原文：He jumped about like a pla

21、yful spaniel（西班牙猎犬）,waggedhisgreattail,andlickedthehandsandfeetofhis physician.拓展：A Puppy for PoppyBy RV Staff Writer J.C.Her tail beganwagging(摆动) ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.（2020.01浙江高考续写）她使劲摇晃。她高兴得叫了起来。她微笑着，.Shewagged furiously. Shebarked with joy. She smiled, her tonguel

22、olling outas she investigated the surprise.“没过多久，”妈妈说，两只狗在房子里咆哮着，即兴追逐。爸爸笑了。“That didnt take long,” remarked Mom, as both dogswent roaring around the house in an impromptu game of chase.Dad laughed.当他弯下腰来给她一个大大的拥抱时，他摔倒了，一朵金色的小云也飞来舔他的脸。When he bent down to give her a big hug, hefell over in surprise a

23、s a small golden cloud came racing up to lick his facetoo.英语听力模拟试题（十七）I smiled as my dog came running out from the backyard at the sound of my arrival. Hejumped up and licked my face, knocking my briefcase to the ground. I laughed as I pet him on the head. I gathered my things and whistled for the d

24、og to follow me up the path to my home. I stopped at the porch to look at the clear night sky, taking it all in. I shook my keys in the dark until I found the right one.原文：Androcles stood up andwalked to his enemy with slow and heavy steps.拓展：我的腿感觉像绑在一个球和一条链子上My legs felt like they were tied to a ba

25、ll and chain.我每走一步都很费力I labored with every single step.她觉得她无法再往前走了，脚像灌了铅一样沉重和僵硬At least twice, Treadwellwasreduced to a quaking ball of nerves.细读处理：（一）出卷范文：Hewas sentenced to be tornby a lion in the public arena(竞技场).Huddlingatthe corner of arena, Androcles wasovercomeby a strong sense of fear and d

26、espair,withhis heart beating wildly.（心理描写：恐惧，绝望）When thelionwas released from the cage,a thunderous applause burst out fromthe audience.（场景描写：竞技场）“There is no way out!” He sighed deeply,the last gleam of light fading away in his eyes.Takinga deep breath,Androclesstood up andwalked to his enemy with

27、slow and heavy steps.（衔接句：斗兽准备）（73words）However，the lion didnt act as most had imagined.No roaring, no fighting, not even a sign of rage.Itseemed thatthe lion had forgottenits mission as a beast.（衔接句：狮子的反应）“Go! Go! Eat him!” The audiencekept yelling crazily.（对象转换：观众的反应）Much to theirsurprise, the lio

28、n wagged his great tailgentlyat Androcles andlickedhis feet. “Its you! My friend!” Androcles cried inrelief.（对象转换：狮子和Androcles的反应）At the very moment, the lion carried him on his back,stormed out ofthe arena andvanishedinthe distance. (77words)细读处理（二）续写原文：He was sentenced to be torn by a lion in the

29、public arena(竞技场).Whenthe time for his destructioncame,Androclesstood in the middle of the arena calmlyawaiting his fate.Presentlya dreadful yell was heard,which made the audience start to tremble.A hugelionthensprang out of a cage,anddarted/rushed forward upon its victimwith flaming eyesandgaping j

30、aws.It stopped,eyes staring at the poor slave.Then came a thunderous applause.Apparently,the audience in the arena werewaiting for some blood. (77words)However，the lion didnt act as most had imagined.Instead ofspringing upon the man,and tearing himto pieces,itgently lickedAndrocles like a dog!The go

31、vernor of the city ordered Androcles to explain how thefiercebeasthad,inamoment,becomeasharmlessasalamb.Androclestoldhisadventuresintheforests.The audiencewere so delighted withhis story that they begged the governor topardonAndrocles.This he did,andhealsoofferedAndroclesthelionwhichhadtwicesparedhislife.(80words)学科网（北京）股份有限公司