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1、2023年托福写作常见错误托福写作常见错误1Some people think it is the best approach for students to learn if school start the day at a early time in the morning. But someone think the school should start the day at late time. Which one do you prefer? Use specific reasons and detailed examples to support your answer.题目大

2、意：学生是否需要起早去上学。老师建议大家选择反对，即认为孩子可以晚点去上学，因为一方面可以保证孩子的休息，从而提高课堂效率，另一方面避免孩子遭遇早高峰，有助于保证好的心情，从而减少对学习的干扰。托福写作模板及参考答案：托福写作范文参考一:Many schools are planning to postpone the first class in the morning for less lateness and better educating quality. However, the schedule of late classes will cultivate students in

3、dolence, and pose many other negative effects. As a result, starting class late would not effectively reduce the rate of lateness and cannot secure the educating efficacy.Firstly, early classes in the morning will force the students to keep a disciplined life style. In order to attend the first clas

4、s, students have to get up early in the morning. This habit brings many benefits. For example, young people will live a much healthier life. Keeping the schedule in mind, they would no longer dally at night before sleep, and save their time in the morning. Then, they can have a good rest in the even

5、ing and keep themselves energetic at daytime. Besides, they could also shape many of their excellent characteristics, like self-discipline or persistence. Leaving the cozy bed requires a powerful willpower when we start a new day, and doing this every day asks for a strong self-control. Both of thes

6、e virtues are keys to success. And one of the well-known, Kobe Bryant, is a beneficiary of starting his day early in the morning. He once gave his secret to become the MVP in the basketball playground. It was his getting up early in the 4 AM that contributes him. In conclusion, both physical and psy

7、chological benefits can be gained by the disciplined life style led by the early classes.In addition, early start in the morning also leaves more extracurricular time for students. Earlier starting class generally results in earlier off-class. More spare time after class enables students to conduct

8、other activities, such as further exploring in study, deepening their interests or doing some other activities. Those activities would help students to improve themselves. In spare time, students can do some practical experiments to apply knowledge into practice, which allow them to have in-depth un

9、derstanding in knowledge learnt in class. Students would be also capable of learning instrument, painting or doing sports with abundant of time after class. Those extracurricular activities help students to achieve complete development. Obviously, earlier start in the morning means a longer day, pro

10、viding more spare time for students to enrich their life and promote themselves in learning.Late classes, to a degree, may lower the absence rate at the beginning. This is because that students do not need to be hurry in the morning, especially for those who cannot get up early. In the long run, how

11、ever, the original purpose cannot be realized effectively. The allowance of starting class later would indulge the bad habits of procrastination. Some students will tend to put off all tasks late at night, if they do not need to get up early. Staying up later would in turn make students get up later

12、. This is a vicious circle. As a result, students biological clock will be re-adjusted, making it harder for them to get up on time. Therefore, the absence rate would be decreased again.In summary, compared to making classes late in the morning, starting the day early would bring many benefits in le

13、arning. Students would be able to maintain a healthy life physically and mentally, and to explore in study, all of which contribute to a higher quality of learning.范文参考二:In the contemporary society, the length of study time on the part of students has become one of the most hottly debated issue amon

14、g the general public. When it comes to whether students should be required to arrive school at the early time in the morning, peoples notions may vary from one to another. In my eyes, starting school day at a late time is a better choice for the following reasons.To begin with, arriving school at th

15、e late time will ensure students have a good rest and thus contributes to the improvement of their study efficiency. As is common sense, the increasingly heavy study burden on the shoulder of students has squeezed their leisure time so much that their sleeping time cannot be guaranteed. As a result,

16、 with the implementation of starting school day in a late time, the quality of their rest will be improved, with the consequence that their attention will be more concentrated in class. On the contrary, shortening their rest time by requesting students begin class early will definitely produce a neg

17、ative effect on their study. To be specific, it will be common to observe that students feel so sleepy as to have a short nap during the class.In addition, students who start school day in a late time will obviously avoid being stuck in traffic jam and thus have a better mood in the morning. Undoubt

18、edly, under the drive of a cheerful frame of mind, children will raise their efficiency of study to a large extent. The experience of my cousin, Tom, can serve as a good example to shed some lights on the above reasoning. Tom, a student in a middle school of Beijing, used to be required to arrive sc

19、hool at 8 a.m. every morning in order to prepare better for the National Examination of College Admission. However, the problem is that according to the regulations of most companies, employees also have to start work at 8 a.m. Therefore, it is not hard to imagine that the subways, buses and taxis a

20、re crowded with people in the morning. According to Toms recounting, no one will feel good after such a experience, let alone immediately devoting him/herself to study.Taking what has been discussed into consideration, we can draw the conclusion that it is wise to require student to arrive school at

21、 a late time in the morining, in order to ensure the quality of their rest and develop a light heart.范文参考三:Have you experienced struggling with your pillow every morning? Have you ever choked with the traffic jams in the rush hour? Have you ever felt sleepy in the first class? No matter what scienti

22、fic evidence shows us the advantages of having class early, there is a new research from Mark Fischettiof Scientific America convince us that students' efficiency can be improved by going to school later. I totally agree with the statement for its beneficial for both of students and teachers.Fir

23、st, students' efficiency can be elevated. Under the excessive burden, students always stay up late and thats why their sleep time has been shrunk. If they are forced to get up early, their whole day will be windy. Thus, students would waste the most substantial content of study, nevertheless, st

24、udents would be more fresh and have concentrations on the class. According to Kyla Wahlstrom, director of the Center for Applied Research and Educational Improvement at the University of Minnesota. She made a research in Minnesota February that tracked 9000 students in eight public high schools in M

25、innesota, Colorado and Wyoming. After one semester, when school began at 8:35 a.m. or later, grades earned in math, English, science and social studies typically rose a quarter stepfor example, up halfway from B to B+. This conclusion perfectly convinces everyone that students should get up later.Se

26、cond, we should follow students' biological system. Adolescents' physiology has greatly altered from their childhood because of melatonin. The later the delay, the greater the payoff.Following their biological change can make them healthy and wealthy. Take me as an example, as a teacher, mos

27、t of my students would like to finish their homework and chat with friend until the mid night. They can't control their biological clock, which makes they fell very sleepy in the first class. Moreover the rate of being on duty is lower compared with other time periods.Third, traffic problems can

28、 be released. One should know that big cities have the traffic jams all the time, which makes students choked with the road and cant get rid of it. Moreover, students who live far away from the school are hurry to get catch up with the early classes. If schools postpone their time to be later, it wi

29、ll help them stagger the rush time of traffic. Nevertheless, students would start their study restlessly, which influences their mood not mention to the study efficiency. A study in 2012 from California public schools shows that students can avoid transportation problems by changing their class time

30、. What more, their literature and math scores are higher on the average.To conclude, getting up early and attend class are good for both of students and teachers. I suggest that school should postpone their class time and improve students efficiency.素材补充(选自：果壳网)：(Mark Fischetti/文，IvyP/译)我们都有过早上起来与被窝

31、作斗争，最后不得不睡眼惺忪地去上学的经历。这种现象可不是中国特有的大洋对岸的美国家长、学生还有老师们也时常争论，中学的上课时间是不是太早了。而在过去的3年间有越来越多的研究表明，推迟上课时间有助提高学习的效果，并且上课时间越晚越好。生物学研究显示，人在幼童时期倾向于早睡早起;而当人步入青少年时期后，昼夜节律会发生改变，导致青少年睡得更晚，起得也更晚。这种改变是由大脑内褪黑素的变化引起的，这一过程大约开始于13岁，在15到16岁明显增强，而在17到19岁时达到高峰。那么这个现象会对学习效果产生影响吗?根据明尼苏达大学应用研究与教育改进中心主任凯拉瓦尔斯特隆今年2月发表的论文，答案是肯定的。她跟踪

32、调查了在明尼苏达州、科罗拉多州和怀俄明州的8所公立中学里就读的9000多名学生。结果发现，如果上课时间调整到早上8：35或者更晚，一个学期之后，学生们的数学、英语、科学和社会学成绩普遍提高了1/4个等级，例如从B提高到了B与B+的中间位置。另有两篇由瓦尔斯特隆评议但还未发表的研究论文也获得了相似的结论。在美国空军学院进行的一项对照实验也验证了这一结论，因为在大学一年级时不同组的学员开始上课的时间不同。此外，2012年一项研究显示，由于交通问题导致北卡罗来纳州不同地区的学校上课时间不同，结果上课时间较晚的学校，学生的数学和阅读成绩较高。还有其它研究表明，推迟上课时间可以提高出勤率，以及减少青少年

33、抑郁和交通事故的发生率。这些都因为晚点上课可以让青少年获得更充足的睡眠。多项研究表明，与把上课时间从早上7:15调到7:45的学校相比，上课时间从7:30改为8:00的学校里的学生的学习成绩有更大幅度的提高。来自巴西、意大利和以色列的研究也获得了相似的结论。之所以上课时间推迟会获得这些好处，其关键是青少年保证了至少8个小时的充足睡眠，而如果能达到9小时就更好了。相比之下，在欧洲，很少有中学会在上午9点以前开始上课。不支持推迟上课时间的人们曾担心这样会影响学生的正常作息。不过结果表明，学生们在进行课余活动或是兼职工作时，并没有受到上课时间改变的影响。研究结果甚至对校车接送问题也提供了更好的解决办

34、法。许多学校都是先接中学生上学，然后再接小学生，而将这一顺序调换可以让高中生们的上学时间推迟。这样做除了可以让他们受益之外，对他们的弟弟妹妹们也有好处有研究表明幼儿在早晨更清醒，更愿意学习。托福写作常见错误2Some people believe that video games could inspire young students' interest and make their study more efficient rather than distracting them and a waste of time, so young students should be al

35、lowed to play video games.范文参考:Many parents with young children fret about the addictiveness of computer games these days. While the negative effects ranging from addiction, increased aggression and various health consequences such as strain injuries get far more media coverage than the positives, t

36、here is now a wealth of research which shows that video games can actually be put into educational use and affect the brain's developmentFirstly, games that are designed to help teach and &brain training& have long and enormous popular appeal. According to an experiment conducted by the Universi

37、ty of California, game players show improved performance in perception, attention and cognition. One of the redeeming qualities of all games, even those with violent content, is enhanced information-processing, logic-thinking and problem-solving abilities in novel contexts. In fact, while playing ga

38、me, your brain is in the learning mode constantly, to move to the next level, you are vigorously improving your hand-eye coordination, enhancing split-second decision making and boosting auditory perception. Moreover, other carefully-designed studies have shown that video games improve several aspec

39、ts of brain activity, including multitasking. Considering Pac-Man as an example, in that game, you must navigate your character through a spatial layout while monitoring the separate paths of four additional objects, while keeping the overall goal of clearing the small pellets in memory, as well as

40、keep track of the remaining large pellets.Secondly, games that convey positive social messages never fail to boost the children's confidence, encourage cooperation and teamwork. Games help children feel a sense of achievement, through those puzzles, exploration and discovery, players learn to su

41、cceed in ways that our brains actually prefer. Most games are designed to introduce a new concept and then provide players with an opportunity to master it. Children are then free to explore and utilize and achieve success with this new skill, growing in confidence all the while. Besides, many games

42、 today emphasize the cooperative aspects of game play, in which two or more players need to work together to reach a common goal. Taking a game called &World of Warcraft& as an example, children as young as 10 years old are learning to delegate responsibility, promote teamwork and steer groups of pe

43、ople toward a common goal. As video games themselves are not created by just one person, it is essential for the game players to pool everyone's talents together in order to require the desired product.Admittedly, it is worth to consider the real concerns that today's parents have with video

44、 games, but it is also worthwhile to consider the benefits and positive aspects that contemporary interactive entertainment choices provide. Digital media such as computer games could inspire young children's interest, grow their intelligence and offer them a chance to escape from the mounting a

45、cademic stress, as long as coupled with strong parental and teacher involvement.From all the discussions mentioned above, we may safely draw the conclusion that today's young students should be allowed to play computer games for the tremendous benefits they bring.托福托福写作常见错误3一.句子成分缺失句子不完整这个错误是由于很

46、多同学缺乏common sense， 不知道啥叫一个句子的完整，为啥自己写的就不完整。什么样的句子是完整的?一个主语+一个谓语已经可以构成最简单的完整句子。举个最简单的例子“我愿意”=“I do”这个“I do”就已经是一个简单完整的句子了。缺主语，或缺谓语，不能构成一个完整的句子。A.缺谓语例如：The society develops rapidly.The society是主语，develops是谓语，此时这个句子 就是完整的。常见的错误写法：The society developing rapidly.此时这个句子是缺谓语的。我们需要改写成:The society develops r

47、apidly.或The society is developing rapidly.b.出现两个或两个以上主谓结构一个句子有且只能有一个主谓结构。“我干，他不干”这句话正确的表达方法是：I do, but he does not.或: I do. He does not.然而常见的错误形式是：I do, he does not.此时这句话出现了两个主语：I, he.那么这句话肯定就是错误，我们需要用连接词but隔开，或直接句号后另起一句话。我们举一个难一点的例子：Some people agree with the first statement, I disagree with it.这种错

48、误的表达常见于同学们的写作第一段。这句话出现了两个主语：Some people; I.出现了两个谓语：agree; disagree.按照我们刚才已经讲过的，一句话不能出现两个主语判断，这句话是有问题的。正确的写法是：Some people agree with the first statement. However, I disagree with it.或：Some people agree with the first statement, but I disagree with it.二.主谓不一致这是同学们最容易犯的错误，常见指数5颗星!在中文的动词形式中，不管是：你，我，他、她、

49、它，动词形式都一样。然而在英文中，你我、TA的动词形式不同。I do; you do; she does; he does; it does.例如：A. Intelligence leads to success.常见错误写法：Intelligence lead to success.b. The professor provides great opportunities for students to expand their horizons.常见错误写法：The professor provide great opportunities for students.三.平行结构我们常用逗号，或连接词如：and，not onlybut als