2023年考研英语短文写作真题分析含评分标准.doc
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1、考研英语短文写作十年真题分析第十节 2023年Section III Writing2023年考研英语考试结束了。今年走出考场的考生普遍感觉今年的试题较往年难度有所减少,特别是写作部分两道题目难度适中,大家基本发挥出了正常水平。下面针对小作文和大作文分别给予点评,并提供阅卷的范文供大家参考。Part A51. Directions:Restrictions on the use of plastic bags have not been so successful in some regions. “White pollution” is still going on. Write a let
2、ter to the editor(s) of your local newspaper to 1) give your opinions briefly and 2) make two or three suggestionsYou should write about 100 word. Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter. Use Li Ming instead. You do not need to write the address. (10 points)一审题构思小作文去年考的道歉信,2023小作文规定写一封建议信
3、。今年的建议信相比2023的建议信规定更加具体,且话题更为熟悉。考生对这个话题可写的东西比较多。且在平时大作文的训练中考生都接触过不少表达观点见解和提出建议的方法,特别在环境保护方面的建议措施接触的更多,因此这篇小作文题材大家非常熟悉,难度适中。假如同学在考前临阵抱佛脚,只要把建议信的套话背下来,比如建议信的第一句话怎么写,中间怎么写,最后一句怎么结尾,直接把有关内容换成白色污染即可。二框架思绪确切地讲,今年的小作文仍然是没有脱离开过去的老套,又是一封信,而这封信对同学们来讲,是我们很熟悉的白色塑料袋的使用问题。有很多商家为了争取自己定期的常客,他们也许会想到促销的手段或者销售的途径,那就是说
4、送给你塑料袋,方便你使用。但是这些顾客们也许有些人是懂得或者说环保意识很强的,有些塑料袋,他们总是反复地去用;可是有一些不尽然,像年轻人这样,用过后就扔掉。谈到了白色污染这个话题,就想给编辑写封信,信中反映的是你对这个现象的一个见解,之后,你应当提出一些解决的措施,所以这封信里面要讲的话一点都不难写,最重要的是我们要做一个对社会有责任的人,由于只有如此我们才可以用我们的心去感知这个社会的问题,才干真正从我们内心想出一些方法,使我们的社会更加洁净,这样才干更加和谐。 本文可以按三段解决,首段直接谈白色污染的情况,中段讲出解决问题的建议和措施,最后再次提醒编辑关注此事刻不容缓,并加强礼貌语气。三参
5、考范文Dear Editor(s), I am writing this letter to draw your attention to“White Pollution”. No one can avoid using plastic bags in our daily lives and too many plastic bags bring about many problems. How to solve this problem has become a hot issue among many people in recent years.To address this probl
6、em, I would like to lodge several suggestions. On the one hand, the authorities should set up rules and regulations to control the production and circulation of the plastic bags. On the other hand, people should realize the significant of protecting our environment and not use too many plastic bags.
7、I sincerely hope that you can take my letter seriously. Thank you very much for your time and consideration.Yours faithfully,Li Ming (126words) 亲爱的编辑:我写此信是为了让您关注“白色污染”这一问题。在平常生活中人们总是会用到塑料袋,而塑料袋过多会产生很多问题。如何解决这一问题成为近年来很多人关心的话题。 为了解决这一问题,我想提如下的建议。一方面,政府当局应当制定一些规章制度来控制塑料袋的生产和流通使用。另一方面,人们应当意识到保护环境的重要性并不使
8、用太多的塑料袋。 我真诚地希望您能认真对待我的信。感谢您拨冗关注。您真挚的李明四文章点评:范文为缩进格式。由于本信函属于公务信件,题目提供的名字就是编辑,所以要按较正式的口吻来写作,文章开始的称呼为Dear Editor,语气就比较正式。第一段开门见山,使用draw your attention to结构直接表达请求关注。首段使用了and连接两个并列句的信息。语法上,最后一句使用了How to引出的名词短语作为主语,点明了文章的中心。第二段承上启下,按议论文模式设定了段首句,提出的两种方案用On the one hand和On the other hand灵活列出。本段中,动词address和
9、lodge较有特色。第三段中,作者再次请求关注。按照信函写作“感谢客气不能少”的原则,应连续两次使用传达礼貌的句型。五阅卷样文五档:9分Dear editor,Im a sincere reader of your newspaper and I like your discussion of the social problems. Now I want to give some opinions of myself about the “White Pollution”.As we know, regulation was made to solve the problem in June
10、 1st of 2023. The use of plastic bags was restricted in the supermarket and many other shops freely. At the beginning, it was carried on well, but now I found plastic bags were used in some small shops for free or with no pay.I am writing to tell you that we should solve this problem soon with the h
11、elp of your newspaper. You could make some investigators about it and write some reports of it, so as to appeal to all the peoples attentions of our society.Sincerely, Li Ming评语:本文很好地完毕了试题规定的任务,与目的读者完全产生了预期的效果: 1内容包含了所有的内容要点,该文第一段的内容更吻合题目的规定。 2所使用的语法结构和词汇比较丰富。 3语言比较自然流畅,尽管存在个别的语法(例如,时态)和用词错误。 4有效使用了
12、各种衔接手段,层次清楚,组织也比较严密。 5格式与语域恰当贴切。 四档:7-8分Dear Editor Wang,I am a senior student living in Beijing. Being a citizen in our capital, I care a lot about our environment. But, although the law of not using plastic bags had been enforced since June, the effect is not very good. I am afraid “White Pollutio
13、n” will still exist for a long time.I believe there are ways to improve the situation. Our communities could offer bags free, which will substitute plastic bags. Meanwhile, some education on environment and White pollution should be held to local people. Besides the above two, much more can be done.
14、 I hope you would consider it carefully.Yours trulyLi Ming评语:较好地完毕了试题规定的任务,基本可以对目的读者产生预期的效果: 1. 包含了所有的内容要点,既简要介绍了自己的观点,又提出了具体的建议。 2. 所使用的句子结构和词汇相对比较丰富,例如:Being a citizen in, I care等。 3. 语言基本对的,当然也存在着一些语法错误和用词的错误,但是并不会严重影响意义的表达。 4. 采用了适当的衔接手段,例如, but, meanwhile, besides等,层次也比较清楚。 5. 格式和语域比较恰当。 三档:5-6
15、分To whom it may concern:As a student of a university, I want to take this opportunity to express some points about “White Pollution”.There is no denying that plastic is destroy our environment is we use it excessively. So the government take some means to deal with it. Restrict to use the plastic ba
16、gs in whole country. But it didnt get successful as we predict. The “White Pollution” is still around our environment in some regions.Takes measures is needed. I want to take some recommends. First and formost, more strength restriction is needed by pollution education. Second, media should spread m
17、ore information concern. Only in this way can we curb the statement. Im looking forward your reply.Sincerely yoursLiming评语:基本完毕了试题规定的任务,对目的读者基本产生了预期的效果: 1. 内容包含试题所规定的两个要点,没有跑题。 2. 具有较多的用词与语法错误,但是读者仍然可以大体领略作者想要表达的意思。 3. 采用了一些简朴的衔接手段,内容还算连贯,层次也算清楚。 4. 格式和语域基本合理。 二档:3-4分I am very sorry to trouble with
18、you. But this is a problem annoying with me. It is White Pollution. With the economic growth widely, white pollution become more and more serious. It is harmonious between the men and nature. White pollution destroy some special. More and more similar issue can be read today in newspaper as well as
19、in magazine.The problem can be solved in some ways. First, attitude is everything. We must make people aware of this issue. Second, we must change with ourself. Its essential that we address our problem before looking to others change. Finally, the acts of pollution must be punishment.Im looking for
20、ward to your reply!Yours sincerelyLi Ming评语:未能按照规定完毕试题规定的任务,不能清楚地将信息传达给读者。 1第一段落的内容离题太远,未能很好地表达题目的第一个内容要点。 2语法和用词错误太多,表白作者缺少基本的英语语法知识或者使用语法知识的能力。 3虽然也使用了一些衔接手段,但是内容上缺少连贯性。 4格式和语域不恰当。例如,此信没有昂首。 第一档:1-2分Dear the editorIm pleasure to write the letter to you. With the development of the socity, white po
21、llution is more and more bad. Our sky is not blue, our earth is not clean and our river is not fish.To solve this question, I have some suggestions. First, every one drive their car less a day in a week than before. Second, when we are shopping, we use environment plastic bags. Third, our government
22、 do some rules. Do you thing my opinion? Look forward your reply.Yours faithfully,Li Ming评语:未完毕试题规定的任务,不能把信息传递给读者: 1文章内容基本离题,有许多不相关的内容。 2作者基本不具有英语的语法常识,句子结构简朴且不完整。 3用词错误太多,词不达意。 零档:0 分dear editor:I am a student of Tianjing University. Recently years our country评语:所传达的信息或者所用的语言太少,内容与规定也无关系,无法评价 Part
23、B52. Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawingIn your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and then 3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSHWER SHEET 2. (20 points) 互联网的“近”与“远”一审题构思2023大作文仍然是图画式作文,题目规定与往年基本相同。图
24、画是一张蜘蛛网上有很多人上网。图画中的中文提醒词为:互联网的“远与近”。写好这篇作文重要在于两点:第一,描述图画。图片描写也许会给一部分考生导致困难,这一点要看学生平时的积累。第二,寓意理解。题目图片看似简朴,实则抽象。揭示主题需结合中文提醒“网络的近与远”,即网络为人们的生活带来的便利以及不便。这一主题比较贴近现代生活,也是当今大学生熟悉的话题:网络虽然非常便利,让人与人足不出户就可以互相联系,但是人与人之间的直接联系却变得稀少了。 二框架思绪大作文今年考的是一个网络的问题,它很像2023的作文风格,也就是说,在解决过程当中,需要同学们对图形自身有纯朴的感受。在创作中,首段需要描述图画。第一
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