六级英语写作14.ppt

《六级英语写作14.ppt》由会员分享，可在线阅读，更多相关《六级英语写作14.ppt（25页珍藏版）》请在淘文阁 - 分享文档赚钱的网站上搜索。

1、Thereisnoonebutlongstogotocollege.Anygovernment，whichisblindtothispoint，maypayaheavyprice.Nowadays，manystudentsalwaysgointorapturesatthemerementionofthecominglifeofhighschoolorcollegetheywillbegin.Unfortunately，formostyoungpeople，itisnotpleasantexperienceontheirfirstdayoncampus.ItisindisputablethatT

2、heinformationIvecollectedoverlastfewyearsleadsmetobelievethatthisknowledgemaybelessusefulthanmostpeoplethinkDespitemanyobviousadvantagesofbicycle，itisnotwithoutitsproblem.Partoftheexplanationsforitisthat.Oneofthemostcommonfactors(causes.isthat.Anothercontributingfactor(cause.is.Perhapstheprimaryfact

3、oristhatButthefundamentalcauseisthatTheadvantagesfaroutweighthedisadvantages.AmaybepreferabletoB,butAsuffersfromthedisadvantagesthat.Forallthedisadvantages,ithasitscompensatingadvantages.However,thesameisnotapplicabletoB.WonderingasAis,ithasitsdrawbacks.Itwillexerciseaprofoundinfluenceupon.Asisshown

4、/demonstrated/illustrated/depicted/describedinthecartoon/picture/graph/table,Suchastatementmainlyrestsontheassumptionthat.Contrarytowhatiswidelyaccepted,Imaintainthat.LearnedwordsandPopularwordsFamePrestigeComplexintricateDislikeAbhor,loatheDangerousPerilous,hazardous1、individuals，characters，folks代替

5、people，persons2、positive，favorable，rosy(美好的)，promising(有希望的)，perfect，pleasurable，excellent，outstanding代替good3、dreadful，unfavorable，poor，adverse(有害的)代替bad如果bad做表语，可以有belessimpressive代替。eg.Anarmyofcollegestudentsindulgethemselvesinplayinggames，enjoyingromancewithgirls/boysorkillingtimepassivelyintheir

6、dorms.Whenitapproachestograduation，asaresult，theyfindtheiracademicrecordsarelessimpressive.4、(anarmyof，anoceanof，aseaof，amultitudeof，many，ifnotmost)代替many注：用many，ifnotmost一定要小心，many后一定要有词eg.Manyindividuals，ifnotmost，harbortheideathat.同理用most，ifnotall，代替most5、asliceof，quietafew代替some6、harbortheideath

7、at，taketheattitudethat，holdtheviewthat，itiswidelysharedthat，itisuniversallyacknowledgedthat)替think因为是书面语，所以要加that7、unique,distinctive代替only8、shared代common9、reaphugefruits代替getmuchbenefit10、frommystandpoint，frommyownperspective代替inmyopinion11、Increasing(ly)，growing代替moreandmore。（注意没有growingly这种形式。所以当

8、修饰名词时用increasing/growing.修饰形容词，副词用increasingly）eg.Sthhasgainedgrowingpopularity.Sthisincreasinglypopularwiththeadvancementofsth.12、littleifanything，或littleornothing代替hardly。13、beneficialrewarding代替helpful,bebeneficialof。14、invariably，代替always。15、exceedingly，extremely代替very。16、hardlyunnecessary，hardl

9、yinevitable.代替necessary，inevitable17、sthappealstosb，sthexertsatremendousfascinationonsb代替sbtakeinterestin18、captureonesattention代替attractonesattention。19、facet，dimension，sphere代aspect。20、beindicativeof，besuggestiveof，befearfulof代indicate，suggest，fear21、giveriseto，leadto，resultin，trigger代替cause22、The

10、reareseveralreasonsbehindsth代替.reasonsforsth23、crucial,significant代替important24、pourattentioninto代替payattentionto25、bearinmindthat代替remember26、arduous代替difficult27、interaction代替communication28、frownonsth代替beagainst，disagreewithsth29、tonameonlyafew，asanexample代替forexample30、nextto/virtuallyimpossible

11、，代替nearlyimpossible CETCET写作写作评分标准评分标准（106.543.5）49.5分/2分条理不清、思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子都有错误，且多数为严重错误。58.5分/5分基本切题，表达思想不清楚连贯性差，有较多严重语法错误。67.5分/8分基本切题，有些地方思想表达不够清楚文字勉强连贯，语言错误相当多，其中有一些严重错误。85.5分/11分切题，表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语法错误。100.5分/14分切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性好，基本上无语法错误，仅有个别小错。信：六级05年1月试卷评析05年1月YourHelpNeededDirections:

12、Forthispart,youareallowed30minutestowriteanopenletteronbehalfofthestudentunionaskingpeopletogivehelptoastudentwhoisseriouslyill.Youshouldwriteatleast150wordsfollowingtheoutlinegivenbelow:1，对病人的简单介绍：目前的病情和家庭情况2，目前的困难：无法继续承担医疗费用，需要护理3，希望捐助，联系方式本次作文英文指令要求提到的病人是大学生，写信人应代表学生会写一封公开信。如未能按照此要求写作，应酌情扣1分。题目类型

13、原因现象描述类文章。表面上看，这是信，但就其实质上说，还是以前的老题型，给出23个提纲，要求按照提纲所示内容完成作文。应注意的事项一、要强调的一点，本次作文，除了提纲外，还应该在文中表明两个要素1、病人大学生；2、写信人代表学生会。这次考试中有不少学生只注意了前面所列出的三项要求，而忽略了后面的这两个要求。二、此类文章的构思。四六级作文旨在考查学生的英语基本表达能力，而非逻辑思维和分析能力，因为这是语言考试。所以，广大考生也就没有必要对具体内容的合理性去严谨推敲。三、结构安排。原因现象描述类文章的最佳安排方法是，把提纲变为英文体现在每段第一句作为中心句，后面再用逻辑词或链接词把每段内的分支观点

14、串成一篇文章。第一段要求讲出病人的病情和家庭情况。另外，这是信，所以要在前面加上称呼。作为文章的开头段，应该简要介绍就行，这样也可以避免详细描述。因为大多考生语言基础不足以支撑详细的细节描述。第二段原因列举表述段。用提纲变来的用中心句统领全段，之后讲出几个不同的困难。困难很容易列出，如钱不够，家庭条件差，要人看护等显而易见且简单的原因。第三段呼吁捐助和列出联系方法。当然在行文中号召的语言是需要的，同时在结尾处要标明自己是代表学生会提出这个请求。DearStudents,Iamwritingtoyouallforthesakeofapoorstudentfromouruniversity.The

15、boywhosenameisLiMingisnowstudyingmathematicsinouruniversity.Unfortunately,lastmonth,somethingterriblehappenedinhislifethatshouldhavebeenhappyandpromising.Hehasgotcancer!Thediseaseislikeabigbombtohisfamilyandhimself.Theyareshockedandworried,becausetheirfamilymonthlyincomeisonly1000yuan.Howcantheyaffo

16、rdtocurehiscancer?11pointsNowtheeverydaycostofLiMingsdiseaseif800yuan.Obviouslymorethantheycanafford.Andalargeamountofmoneyisbadlyneededforthecomingtreatment.Hisparentshaveusedalltheirsavings,buttheyarejustnotenough.AlltheclassmatesofLiMinghaveattendedtohisalternatively,andthatmakeshisparentsmuchrel

17、ieved.Butourhelpisnotenough,weneedmore.WeneedyourhelptomakeLiMingrecoverfromhisillnessandcometotheuniversityagain.Weneedyoutoassisthisfamilyandgivethemmoresunshine.Ifyouarewillingtohelpus,Pleasecall65109083atanytimeasyoulike,orcometoouruniversity.Youwillfindtheroomyoucangotoattheschoolgate.Weneedyou

18、rhelp,really.TheStudentUnionDearfriends,Imwritingtoyou,onbehalfoftheStudentUnion,toaskforhelpforourschoolmate,LiMing.Hesseriouslyillandhastohavealungtransplantatonce.Tomakethingsworse,hecomesfromthewestofourcountry,whichmeansthathisfamilyisquitepoor.LiMingisnowconfrontedwiththefollowingdifficulties.

19、Tobeginwith,hecantaffordthemedicalexpenses.Hisfamilydoesnthaveagoodfinancialbackgroundandmoreover,hisparentshavealreadyborrowedalotofmoneytosendhimtouniversity.Inviewoftheirlowincomeandseverefinancialsituation,wehope14 pointsyoucanshowoursympathy.Inaddition,hisfamilyisfarawayandheneedssomeonetotakec

20、areofhimdayandnightinsteadofhisparentswhoarethousandsofmilesfromhere.Onlyundercarefulcarecanourfriendrecoverfromhisdisease.Onnoaccountcanweseeourfriendsufferwithoutgivinghimahand!Hesindesperateneedofyourhelp,especiallyinfinancialdonationstohelppayhisexpenses.A.Please!Yours,JohnChairmanoftheStudentUn

21、ion本文特点第一段，作者开门见山，直接把最后两个要素在第一段就标明，即生病的是学生，要代表学生会“onbehalfofthestudentunion,toaskforhelpforourschoolmate”。然后，用两句话就说清病情和家庭情况。并且用了一个较少能见的链接短语“Tomakethingsworse”。第二段，列举困难直接把中心句放在段首，本段的基本结构可以这样认为：“LiMingisnowconfrontedwiththefollowingdifficulties.”“Tobeginwith”“moreover”“Inaddition”。并且，使用比较地道的短语beconfro

22、ntedwith.一般来说，短语优先原则是一个比较好的策略。本段中，尽管作者很少使用从句，但并列句和短语的使用是较多的，“alotof，Inviewof，faraway，takecareof，recoverfrom”。第三段，首尾属于传统事务信函的套路。两层意思，一是呼吁捐助，二是联系方式。呼吁捐助的段首句采用倒装，使文章的句式有了不少变化。尽管全文的从句量不多，但句式变化多，如并列句、倒装句、无主句。并且全文的短语使用较多且地道。Dearfriends,Itishightimeforyoutoextendyourhelpinghandstooneofthestudentsoncampus,w

23、hoissufferingfromtheseriousdisease.LiMingisoneofthefreshmeninourschool.Heislongingforthebrightfuturelikeyouandme.Unfortunately,attheendoflastyear,hewasstruckbyleukemia.Nowheishospitalizedandinseriouscondition.WhatisworseisthathecomesfromapoorvillageinthewesternregionofChina.Apparentlyhisfamilycanhar

24、dlyaffordthemedication.15PointsAsyousee,themaindifficultiesforLiMingcurrentlyisthatheneedsbothfinancialaidanddailycare.Ittakeslongtimeandpainfulprocessforhimtocombatthediseaseandcomebacktoschool.Soyourhelpisgreatlyneededandwelcomedinthecriticaltime.Itismoreblessedtogivethantoreceive.Wehopethatallthe

25、peoplecanprovidecareandwarmthtoLiMing,especiallyintheformofdonation.Pleasecontactus.Address:Room112,No.3Building.Tel:65831101.Thankyou!TheStudentUnion A harmonious society1.建立和谐社会成为了一种潮流和趋势2.我心中的和谐社会是.3.为了建立和谐社会，我们应该如何去做?Nowadays,itseemsknowntoeverybodythatoneoftheobjectivesofChinasmodernconstructio

26、nistobuildaharmonioussociety.Allofasudden,aharmonioussocietyhasbecomeafrequently-usedphraseinmedianews,newspaperetc.ItisthetrendofChinasdevelopment.Butwhatisaharmonioussociety?Inmymind,thereareseveralaspectsincludedinbuildingaharmonioussociety.First,aharmonioussocietyhasdemocracyinitspoliticstoensur

27、ethemaximumbenefitsofthepeople.Second,aharmonioussocietyhasequalityandjusticetoprotecttherightsofeverycitizen.Third,aharmonioussocietyhasgoodfaithandfriendlyrelationbetweenpeopletocreateafavorableatmosphereforlivinganddoingbusiness.Forth,aharmonioussocietyhasenergytomakesureitscreativity.Fifth,aharm

28、onioussocietyhasstabilityandordertoprovidepeoplewithacomfortableenvironment.Sixth,aharmonioussocietyhasharmonybetweenhumankindandnatureforasustainabledevelopmentofeconomy.Tobetrue,itneedsjointeffortsofeverypersoninChinatorealizethisgreatgoal.Forme,Iamastudentincollege.WhatIcandoistodevelopgoodrelati

29、onswithpeoplearoundme,tohelpothersasmuchaspossible,tospreadthisawarenesstoasmanypeopleaspossible,andtolayafoundationforthistallbuilding.Directions：Forthispart,youareallowed30minutestowriteashortessayentitledOnGraduationThesisYoushouldwriteatleast150wordsfollowingtheoutlinegivenbelow1每个学校都要求本科毕业生写毕业论

30、文：2有人支持这个做法，有人反对：3你的看法。Shouldpeopleowncarsornot?有人赞成个人买车有人反对个人买车你的看法 PartIWriting(30minutes)Directions:Forthispart,youareallowed30minutestowriteashortessayentitledOnVolunteeringactivities.Youshouldwriteatleast150wordsfollowingtheoutlinegivenbelow:1.越来越多的人从事志愿者工作2.志愿者工作的社会意义3.作为大学生，应该怎么做Inrecentyears

31、,thevolunteeringspirithasspreadamongtheChinesepeople,especiallyamongyoungsters.Accordingtoasurvey,in2008,therewereabout1,700,000volunteerswhoofferedserviceforOlympicGames.Actually,anincreasingnumberofpeoplebecomevolunteerseveryyearinChina.Volunteeringactionsareoftremendousbenefitstoboththoseinneedan

32、dthesociety.OlympicGamesareagoodexample.Asisknowntoall,volunteersplayedanactiveroleinBeijingOlympicGames.Withoutthem,itwouldbeatoughtasktoholdthisun-precedentOlympicGames.Therefore,wecansaythatitwasthosevolunteerswhoensuredthesuccessofthesegames.Asmoderncollegestudents,weshouldgetactivelyinvolvedinvolunteeringactivities.Byparticipating,wecanlearnhowtoworkwellinateam,howtoimproveourinterpersonalskillsandorganizationalability.Undoubtedly,allofthesearecriticalforourpersongrowth.So,weshouldtakethischancetolearnandtogrow.(161words)