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1、 高考英语写作开放作文赏析高考英语写作开放作文赏析2005请根据下面提示请根据下面提示,写一篇短文。词数写一篇短文。词数不少于不少于50。In your English class,the teacher shows this picture of a little boy looking into a mirror,and asks the class to discuss it.Your classmates have different understandings.Look at the picture carefully and tell the class how you unde

2、rstand the picture.Write what you would say on the next page.试题分析试题分析试题分析试题分析本文要求考生观察并发现矛盾本文要求考生观察并发现矛盾,进而调动自己的想象力进而调动自己的想象力以开阔的思路用英语为其提出合乎情理、能够自圆其以开阔的思路用英语为其提出合乎情理、能够自圆其说的阐释。说的阐释。要完成这一写作任务，考生除了必须首先观察到图画要完成这一写作任务，考生除了必须首先观察到图画所展示的矛盾现象所展示的矛盾现象（一个小男孩再镜子中看到的影像（一个小男孩再镜子中看到的影像和他实际的样子不一致）和他实际的样子不一致）之外最重要的

3、是广开思路，之外最重要的是广开思路，编出一个合情合理、符合逻辑的说法。由于写作任务编出一个合情合理、符合逻辑的说法。由于写作任务在构思方面有一定的挑战性，因而考生在语言使用方在构思方面有一定的挑战性，因而考生在语言使用方面首先要力求达意清楚，不要勉强使用自己不熟悉的面首先要力求达意清楚，不要勉强使用自己不熟悉的词汇或驾驭不好的语言结构。只要把握住这条原则，词汇或驾驭不好的语言结构。只要把握住这条原则，考生就能完成这项写作任务。考生就能完成这项写作任务。可以把镜子中的影像解释为小男孩在梦想中可以把镜子中的影像解释为小男孩在梦想中看到未来的自己看到未来的自己 已经长大成人的自己。已经长大成人的自己

4、。可以联想到我们每个人都有梦想，这个梦想可以联想到我们每个人都有梦想，这个梦想可以驱使我们尽自己的努力去取得成功。可以驱使我们尽自己的努力去取得成功。构思一：构思一：Topic:A dream in the boys mind构思二构思二 可以想象镜子中的人物是小男孩的父亲，可以想象镜子中的人物是小男孩的父亲，在他考试不及格时给他支持与鼓励。在他考试不及格时给他支持与鼓励。Topic:The boys father encourages him to be confident.构思三：构思三：镜子中的影像是小男孩的愿望，他希望自己镜子中的影像是小男孩的愿望，他希望自己尽快长大、变得强壮，想要独

5、立，不依靠父尽快长大、变得强壮，想要独立，不依靠父母。进而阐述母。进而阐述“父母应该给孩子机会独立做父母应该给孩子机会独立做事事”Topic:The boy wants to be strong and independentPossibilities Topic1:A Dream in the Boys MindTopic2:The boys father encourages him to be confident.Topic3:The boy wants to be strong and independent.YouandyourAustralianfriendJimarevisiti

6、ngacityinChinawhereyouseethestreetsculpturesasshownbelow.YouandJimarediscussingwhattheartististryingtosay.NowyouaretellingJimhowyouunderstandthispieceofartandwhatmakesyouthinkso.提示词：提示词：雕塑雕塑sculpture笔记本电脑笔记本电脑laptop 某城市街头雕塑某城市街头雕塑 20062006北京卷北京卷 审题审题 主主审审 人称（人称（he）时态（现在）时态（现在）文体（说明）文体（说明）Possibiliti

7、es;1.in my opinion,the meaning of the sculpture is the way of learning knowledge in different ways with the development of technology.In the past,.However now2。Perhaps the old man standing by the chair represents traditional culture。The girl sitting and using computer stands for modern culture。With

8、society developing rapidly，modern culture is in place of traditional culture，But in that way we may lose.It is the best way for us to find the point where modern and traditional culture can be balanced.3.The sculptures show that great changes have taken place in our society with time passing by.4.I

9、think the sculptures shown in the picture represents a kind of combination.This kind of combination is related to the modern and traditional cultures.Besides,the sculptures also shows that despite the rapid development of our city,our whole nation have not forgotten where we orignally came from and

10、who we really are.第二节开放作文（15分）Onepossibleversion:Ithinktheartistwantstoshowchangesinthecity.ThemanstandsfortheoldgenerationinChina:heiswearingold-fashionedclothesthatdatebacktothebeginningofthetwentiethcentury;heislookingatthelaptopingreatcuriosity,unabletofigureoutwhatitis.Thegirl,ontheotherhand,is

11、totallydifferent;shehaslonghairandwearsafashionableshortskirt.Whilethemandoesntknowanythingaboutthelaptop,sheplayswithitskillfully.ThestrikingdifferencesbetweenthetwoshowrapidchangesinpeopleslifeinChina.It is Saturday afternoon.Li Ming,a senior 3 student,is at home.Look at the picture on the right a

12、nd tell why he is standing there and what he is thinking about now.二二00六六 海海淀淀 构思可能构思可能:因病在家不能上学因病在家不能上学,有些着急有些着急学习之余,放松一下,思考如何更好地为高考做准备学习之余,放松一下,思考着高考报什么学校与专业学习之余,放松一下,思考着学习还存在什么问题学习之余,放松一下,希望能与同学一起锻炼身体(打篮球)学习中遇到问题使他备感压力,思考着今后该怎么办 Li Ming is a diligent/hard-working student.It is Saturday.He is busy

13、 working on his lessons in the afternoon at home.At break,he relaxes by the window,expecting to enjoy the sunshine.Yet the busy pouring traffic seems to remind him of something.As a senior 3 student,facing the NMET,time is more or less limited for him.He thinks he must plan everything carefully in o

14、rder to solve the remaining problems with his lessons and prepare well for the coming examination.Meanwhile,he has to take good care of himself.For example,he should have a balanced diet and do some exercise every day.Li Ming is determined to do his best so that he will meet with success.解题指导解题指导-描述

15、画面描述画面描述画面，具体说就是用描述性的语言介描述画面，具体说就是用描述性的语言介绍画面的内容。绍画面的内容。(现在时态）现在时态）描述原则：整体意识，注意细节，注意对描述原则：整体意识，注意细节，注意对象，留意方位，按照顺序，采用恰当的表象，留意方位，按照顺序，采用恰当的表达方式。达方式。（要仔细观察，合理想象，适当（要仔细观察，合理想象，适当补充，按照一定的顺序描述，并揭示画面补充，按照一定的顺序描述，并揭示画面的寓意，以拓展答案的深度）的寓意，以拓展答案的深度）第一步：钻进去第一步：钻进去仔细观察，弄清画面内容。仔细观察，弄清画面内容。第二步：站起来第二步：站起来分析关系，把握漫画含义

16、。分析关系，把握漫画含义。第三步：飞出去第三步：飞出去联想类比，作合理引发。联想类比，作合理引发。第四步：定下来第四步：定下来比较筛选，确立最佳立意。比较筛选，确立最佳立意。漫画提炼观点的方法漫画提炼观点的方法过程：过程：1主体主体 2事情事情 3对不对对不对 4为什么为什么解题指导解题指导-揭示寓揭示寓意意揭示寓意，即通过漫画揭示出事件的本质内涵揭示寓意，即通过漫画揭示出事件的本质内涵。先要认真细致的观察画面的内容，找出其讽刺、颂扬的对象或行为（有标题的，一般多是标题）。要注意：画面的形象主体不一定是讽刺或颂扬的对象，要学会由“实”及“虚”，由表及里。然后挖掘隐含信息挖掘隐含信息，进一步提炼

17、概括画面所揭示的主题。题例题例 例例1 仔细阅读右边这幅漫画，按要求作答。1、简要说明你对漫画内涵 的理解。2、为漫画拟定一个标题。注意：不能以“无题”为题。1.大树以自己的高大荫庇小树，反而妨碍了小大树以自己的高大荫庇小树，反而妨碍了小树的成长。作者借以讽喻当今社会中因过度呵树的成长。作者借以讽喻当今社会中因过度呵护溺爱而导致的弊端。护溺爱而导致的弊端。2.小树希望大树多给小树空间和自由小树希望大树多给小树空间和自由,让小树让小树独立成长独立成长.例、仔细阅读右边这幅漫画，按要例、仔细阅读右边这幅漫画，按要求作答。求作答。1、简要说明你对漫画内涵简要说明你对漫画内涵 的理解。的理解。内涵（寓

18、意）内涵（寓意）Possibilities沉重的爱沉重的爱扭曲的爱扭曲的爱 爱与碍爱与碍大树底下难成才大树底下难成才 溺爱危害成长溺爱危害成长我要独立我要独立 As is shown on the picture,a small tree stands under a big tree which protects it from being destroyed by sunshine,wind and rain.With the love of the big tree,the small tree lives a comfortable life.However,as the small

19、tree grows up,the big tree becomes the factor that prevents it from growing up healthy.So it is with human beings.So eager are the parents to make their children live a good life that they try their best to arrange everything for them.In their opinion,only in this way can their children become healt

20、hy.However,growing up under too much attention of parents,many children have little chance to improve themselves.In my opinion,it is high time that parents changed their thought.Instead of doing everything for their children,they should make them learn to manage their own life at the early age.There

21、 are not more important things for parents to give their children more opportunities to improve themselves properly.Therefore,the majority of them have no ability to adapt to the society.To make matter worse,some children even cannot do very little things without their parents help.请用请用“中秋的等待中秋的等待”为

22、题，用英语写一篇短文，描述下为题，用英语写一篇短文，描述下面内容，并就此发表你的评论。面内容，并就此发表你的评论。要求；要求；1 1。文章必须包括描述和评论两部分。文章必须包括描述和评论两部分 2.W 100 2.W 100 2006江西卷江西卷例例2WaitinginMid-AutumndayAsisshowninthepicture,anoldmanandanoldwomanaresittingaroundabigtableonwhichtherearevarietiesofdishes.Aroundthetablearemanychairs,theoldcouplearewaiting

23、for theirchildren.Itsalready1:30,butnoonecomes.Ofcourse,wearetoobusynow-busyworking,busymakingmoneyforourselves,ourchildren,and,ouroldparents.We buy them big house,expensive clothes,and so on.But is what we give them what they really need?Please look at the picture!The Mid-Autumn days full moon only

24、 sees the old couple waiting in their house lonely.They do not need the big house or the expensive clothes,while our parents do need our love indeed!Dont say“busy”,compared with love,money is too unimportant.We should often go back home to see our parents.No honeymobile phonecrying telescope2007海淀期末

25、开放作文海淀期末开放作文 参考范文Possible Versions:After seeing the picture,I feel just as confused as the bees.The reason why there is no honey is that the flowers are all artificial ones.To my understanding there might be at least two causes.Perhaps plants and flowers have all died from pollution and now there ar

26、e only artificial substitutes.Of course the bees cannot find the honey.As for another possible cause,people have designed those flowers in order to beautify the living environment.Consequently,the bees take those flowers as real ones by mistake.We can learn from the picture that it is probably best

27、to be aware of the superficial phenomenon around us and learn to distinguish fact from fiction.请根据下面提示请根据下面提示,写一篇短文。词数不少于写一篇短文。词数不少于50字。字。In your English class,the teacher shows this picture and asks the class how you understand the picture.Write what you will say on the page.1 父母应该给孩子机会独立做事，父母应该给孩子

28、机会独立做事，过度呵护溺爱会导致弊端。过度呵护溺爱会导致弊端。2 要想获得成功，不仅自己需要付要想获得成功，不仅自己需要付出艰苦的努力，还需父母及他人的出艰苦的努力，还需父母及他人的帮助和支持。帮助和支持。3 艰苦的成功之路。艰苦的成功之路。4父母不要强迫孩子做孩子不愿做的父母不要强迫孩子做孩子不愿做的是不事是不事 构思可能构思可能:The Road to Success It is known to us all that behind sccess are stories full of tears and pains.As it is depicted in the cartoon,a

29、small child is driven to play the piano.The child is nervers,reluctanant and unhappy,but he has to do what he doesnt want to because his parents have whips in their hands and even the teacher also has one.It is a long way to gain success.In my opinion,every child has the right to enjoy a happy-go-lu

30、cky childhood.Under such a circumastance of China nowadays,all the childern face the painful road to success.On one hand,we want to live a happy life in the future,we have to study hard.There is much truth in the saying:”No pains,no gains.”On the other hand,isit really worthwhile to gain so-called f

31、ame at the cost of the happiness of childrenhood?Every coin has two sides.What we have to do is to try our best to do what we can and make full use of our time.We only hope the next generation will have more free time to do what they like.开放作文评分标准 考试说明文章是否扣题 内容是否充实、健康 思路是否清晰交际是否得体语法和用词是否得当 对评分标准的具体理

32、解文章扣题：确立了明确的观点（联想丰富）。Unity(a clear central idea/thesis)内容充实、健康：从画面中找到足够证据，支持你的观点。围绕观点发表议论，有说服力。Suport(reasonable and convincing)思路清晰：文章逻辑性强，层次分明，粘合词的使用有效。Coherence(logical association/cause and effect;including a method of emphatic order,transitions and other connecting words)交际、语法和用词：Sentence skills(老师看描图时细节是否全,然后立意,再议论,词句错误,过渡词连接词的使用)