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1、读后续写11.确定人物、动物或者物品信息（who、when、where）2.找动词（推动故事发展的节点、间接体现人物感情）3.找形容词（直接体现人物感情）“Im going to miss you so much, Poppy,” said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents，and smiled， trying not to let his emotions（情绪）get the better of（胜过，占上风） him情节：

2、人物：场景：情绪：离别父母和儿子送别依依不舍（hug一词出现两次）His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty（泪汪汪

3、的） eyes and then laughed.情节：人物：场景：情绪：不变不变不变由泪到笑含泪送别总结：第一段和第二段讲述同一个情节：父母含泪送别儿子The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed（闪现出） a bright smile. “I guess this is it. ” he said. “Ill see you back home in a month, okay?” His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight （视野之外）

4、 into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boys mother turned to the dog,“Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”情节：人物：场景：情绪：仍是送别，变成父母和狗狗送别狗狗 Poppy不变不变从这一段开始将会有新的情节开展The house seemed quiet as a tomb（坟墓） without the boy living there. All that week，Poppy didnt seem interested in her dinner,

5、 her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit, Poppy didnt.情节：人物：场景：情绪：Poppy和父母想小男孩（主要是Poppy）不变家里不舍变成难过，伤心，失落They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter（花生酱） treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old gir

6、l just wasnt her usual cheerful self（自我）. Her owners started to get worried,“What should we do to cheer Poppy up?”asked Dad. “Weve tried everything.” 情节：人物：场景：情绪：Poppy闷闷不乐，相思情绪浓厚不变不变Poppy：sadparents：sadunhappyworried“I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy,”smiled Mom. “Without anybody left i

7、n the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Lets get a little dog for Poppy. ” It didnt take long before（没过多久） they walked through the front door carrying a big box. Poppy welcomed them home as usual, but when she saw the box, she stopped. She put her nose on it. Her tail（尾巴） began waggin

8、g （摆动） ever so slowly，then faster as she caught the smell.高潮部分情节：人物：场景：情绪：父母找了一只小狗为Poppy作伴父母，Poppy，a little dog不变Poppy的情绪大转变情节线：感情线：Poppy： Parents：一家人含笑泪别男孩回到家中Poppy闷闷不乐回到家中Poppy闷闷不乐茶饭不思父母想办法哄Poppy寻一直小狗作伴sadlonelyhappysadunhappyworriedhappy技巧一：（情节上）首先看给出的段首句来去判断大致的情节走向。技巧二：（结构上）第二段首句要与第一段所写内容的末尾情节连接

9、起来。技巧三：（内容上）1.Poppy approached / got closer with caution.2.Poppy tried not to scare/frighten the Poppy.3.Only moments later the ball of fur lifted its head out of the box to peek at new home and its new friend.4.Mom and Dad watched delightedly.5.The two made acquaintances.6.They were glad to see Pop

10、py coming back toher usual self.7.Poppy guided the little dog on daily walks and even introduced to it her favourite toy.8.Poppy heard the boys jags(一阵) unloaded(卸载)a crying jag 一阵哭泣9.Poppys ears pricked up.10.She was on all fours.11.The boy was greeted with a cheerful high-pitched(音调高的） bark.12.The

11、 front door popped open.13.Poppy threw himself into his arms.14.Poppy was followed by the little dog.15.The little dog licked his fingers fondly.16.The boy smiled ever so brightly.17.The boy called out to his parents.18.Parents offered him a long hug.19.It was the cold autumn wind.20.Their home warm

12、 love and reunion.点亮主题优点：故事情节走向正确； 感情线正确； 结尾有升华主题部分缺点：句子结构单调。长难句少，全部都是短句，没有从句如何进行润色？句式升级？1.用从句 2.用非谓语（-ed，-ing，to do）3.用连词连接两个短句 4.用特殊句式（如强调句，倒装句）用现在分词的形式来连接两个句子，前提是两个句子的主语是同一个主语，并且两个动作几乎同时发生。（1）和（2）1.Poppy approached / got closer with caution.2.Poppy tried not to scare/frighten the Poppy.Poppy appr

13、oached / got closer with caution, trying not to scare/frighten the puppy（小狗）. He stopped talking. He hesitated about which way to go. 改：He stopped talking，_ (hesitate) about which way to go. 没有连词连接两个动词，只能用非谓语形式hesitatingAfter a days work, people went out of the office, _（enjoy） themselves in the sun

14、shine.enjoyingThe survey _(conduct) by the company shows that there is a large increase in this year. conducted用强调句：It is/was +强调的部分+that +句子剩下部分3.Only moments later the ball of fur lifted its head out of the box to peek at new home and its new friend.It was only moments later that the ball of fur l

15、ifted its head out of the box to peek at new home and its new friend. 用连词：and, or, but, as(当) .4.Mom and Dad watched delightedly.5.The two made acquaintances.Mom and Dad watched delightedly as the two made acquaintances. 现在分词作状语6.They were glad to see Poppy coming back toher usual self.7.Poppy guide

16、d the little dog on daily walks and even introduced to it her favourite toy.They were glad to see Poppy coming back toher usual self guiding the little dog on daily walks and even introducing to it her favourite toys.用状语从句：时间状语，地点状语，原因状语.8.Poppy heard the boys jags(一阵) unloaded(卸载)9.Poppys ears pric

17、ked up.After she heard the boys jags unloaded,Poppys ears pricked up. 这里可以用现在分词做状语吗？表示两个动作同时发生？不能，两个句子的主语不一样过去分词作状语或者定语12.The front door popped open.13.Poppy threw himself into his arms.14.Poppy was followed by the little dog.15.The little dog licked his fingers fondly.The front door popped open and

18、 Poppy threw himself into his arms, the little one.followed bywho licked his fingers fondy.16.The boy smiled ever so brightly.17.The boy called out to his parents.18.Parents offered him a long hug.Smiling ever so brightly, he called out to his parents who offered him a long hug找句子与句子之间的联系，特别是找相同部分。用

19、适当的介词合并：because of, despite, due to.19.It was the cold autumn wind.20.Their home was filled with warm love and reunion.Despite(prep.) the cold autumn wind, their home was filled with warm love and reunion.Although it was the cold autumn wind, their home was filled with warm love and reunion.谢谢聆听！Thank you！