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1、ContinuationWriting阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Peter,a 5-year-old boy,showed such great interest in sea shells that he would rush to pick them up with his 3-year-old sister,Shirley.They screamed out their joy as Peter collected his treasure into his pock

2、ets.For Peter,sea shells lay shinning on the peaceful beach,waiting for him,just like stars twinkling(闪烁)in the sky.As waves touched them,they seemed to be flowers blooming(绽放)in gentle wind.One day,Peter was wandering through market with Shirley,win some shells in his pocket.Suddenly Peter found hi

3、s younger sister was lagging(落后)behind.He stopped and looked back,finding Shirley was standing in front of a toy shop and was staring at something with great interest.The boy went back to her and asked,What do you want?Shirley pointed at the doll,wearing a smile on her innocent face.Peter held his y

4、ounger sisters tiny hand,walking into the shop.He tiptoed(踮起脚尖)to reach for the doll，and like a responsible elder brother,gave the precious doll to Shirley.Holding tightly the doll,the sister was very very happy.The shopkeeper was watching everything and getting amused to see the matured(成熟的)behavio

5、r of the boy.Now the boy came to the counter and asked the shopkeeper,How much does this doll cost,Sir?”The shopkeeper was a cool man,who had suffered from something in his life.So he asked the boy with love and affection,Well,what can you pay?Peter reached into his clothes for money that was intend

6、ed for these two little guys break fast.Having counted the money,Peter put it carefully on the counter,asking again,Sir,is it enough for my little sisters doll?”The amusing scene just in front of the shopkeeper eventually brought a smile on his face.Shaking his head slightly,he replied,My boy,I am a

7、fraid it seems not to be enough.”Paragraph1：WithhiseyesfixedonPeterspocket,hewonderedwhatPeterwoulddo.Paragraph2：SeeingPeterleavinghappilywithhissisterholdingthedolltightly,anassistantinthatshopgotsurprised.CONTENTSPART1PART2PART3PART4Reading for settingReading for plotInferringthe developmentHowtod

8、eveloptheplot?PART5Possibleversion考场作文PART6Reading for settingReading for settingWhoWhenWhereOnedayPeter-a5-year-oldboy;Shirley-a3-year-oldgirl;Peterssister;shopkeeper-acool/amusedman;hasatoyshopThroughmarket;infrontofatoyshop;intheshopReading for plotrelativeemotionswiththedevelopmentofthestoryline

9、relativeemotionswiththedevelopmentofthestorylineTheywerehappywhenpickinguptheseashellsPeter,a5-year-oldboy,pickedupseashellsattheseasidewithhis3-year-oldsister,Shirley.Peterwasaresponsiblebrother,andShirleywasinterestedandhappyShirleystoppedinfrontoftheshoponthewaytohavingbreakfast,becauseshelikedth

10、edoll.Peterenteredtheshopandgotthedollforhissister.Theshopkeeperwascoolandamused.Theshopkeeperwatchedeverythinganddecidedtoamusetheboy.Hesaidhismoneywasntenoughforthedollonpurpose.thethestorylinestorylinethetheemotionsemotionsReading for plotClimaxBeginningRisingactionEndingFallingactionPicking up s

11、ea shellsIncitingaccidentWhen Shirley stared at somethingPeter gave the doll to ShirleyPeter paid for the doll,and the shopkeeper said it was not enoghhappy;excitedinterestedhappyPeter:responsiblebutsadShopkeeper:amusedInferringthe developmentInferringthe developmentParagraph1：Withhiseyes fixedonPet

12、ers pocket,he wonderedwhatPeterwoulddo.Paragraph2：SeeingPeterleavinghappilywithhissisterholdingthedolltightly,anassistantinthatshopgotsurprised.InfertheendingoftwoParagraphs.Peterboughtthedollforhissister.Peterboughtthedollwithhisseashells.上文：上文：Shakinghisheadslightly,hereplied,Myboy,Iamafraiditseem

13、snottobeenough”.PeterwassadandShirleywasdisappointed.Theshopkeeperexplainedwhyheonlychargedseashells.Paragraph1：Withhiseyes fixed onPeters pocket,hewondered whatPeterwoulddo.Paragraph2：SeeingPeterleavinghappilywithhissisterholdingthedolltightly,anassistantinthatshopgotsurprised.Inferringthe developm

14、entRaiseseveralquestionstobeansweredinthefollowingtwoparagraphs.Tips:theplotshouldbemadereasonableandcomplete.WhatwasthereactionofPeterwhentheshopkeepersaidthemoneywasnotenough?HowdidPeterpayforthedoll?Howdidtheshopkeeperagree?Paragraph1：Withhiseyes fixed onPeters pocket,hewondered whatPeterwoulddo.

15、Paragraph2：SeeingPeterleavinghappilywithhissisterholdingthedolltightly,anassistantinthatshopgotsurprised.Inferringthe developmentRaisethreequestionstobeansweredinthefollowingtwoparagraphs.Tips:theplotshouldbemadereasonableandcomplete.Howdidtheshopkeeperexplaintothesurprisedassistant?Howtosublimateth

16、ethemeofthepassage?Paragraph1：WithhiseyesfixedonPeterspocket,hewonderedwhatPeterwoulddo.Paragraph2：SeeingPeterleavinghappilywithhissisterholdingthedolltightly,anassistantinthatshopgotsurprised.Inferringthe development1.Peter took out the seashells to pay for the doll.2.The shopkeeper agreed.3.They l

17、eft with the doll happily.(为什么Peter开心）4.The shopkeeper explained to the assistant.5.Love is the most precious.第五点是正能量结尾，可以有其它升华Howtodeveloptheplot?WhatwasthereactionofPeterwhentheshopkeepersaidthemoneywasnotenough?Showmorethantell!Tip1:Showemotionbyaction.Howtodeveloptheplot?HowdidPeterpayforthedoll

18、?Howtodeveloptheplot?Showmorethantell!Tip2:Consecutiveactioncantell!Howdidtheshopkeeperagree?Howtodeveloptheplot?Tip3:Indirectdescriptionmatters!Showmorethantell!Howtodeveloptheplot?Howdidtheshopkeeperexplaintothesurprisedassistant?Showmorethantell!Tip4:Dialoguecanalsotell!Howtodeveloptheplot?Howtos

19、ublimatethethemeofthepassage?Howtodeveloptheplot?Tip5:Surroundingsandsimilearealsosignificant.Showmorethantell!ConclusionTip1:Showemotionbyaction.Tip2:Consecutiveactioncantell!Tip3:Indirectdescriptionmatters!Tip4:Dialoguecanalsotell!Tip5:Surroundingsandsimilearealsosignificant.PossibleversionParagra

20、ph1：Withhiseyes fixedonPeters pocket,he wonderedwhatPeterwoulddo.Possibleversion1.Peter took out the seashells to pay for the doll.Watching Shirleys smile fading away,Peter frowned.After a while,he seemed to make up his mind.He took out all the shells from his pocket,giving them to the shopkeeper,wh

21、o took them and started to count as if he had been counting the money.2.The shopkeeper agreed.Then he looked at Peter.Peter asked him,“Is it enough now?”The shopkeeper replied,These are more than the cost,Saying so,he kept only two shells and returned the remaining and the money.3.They left with the

22、 doll happily.(为什么Peter开心）Peter put these shells back into his pocket very happily,leaving with Shirley holding the doll tightly.Paragraph2：SeeingPeterleavinghappilywithhissisterholdingthedolltightly,anassistantinthatshopgotsurprised.Inferringthe development4.The shopkeeper explained to the assistan

23、t.5.Love is the most precious.第五点是正能量结尾，可以有其它升华 He asked the shopkeeper,Sir!You only charge them for 2 shells?!”The shopkeeper said with a smile,For us these are shells,but for the boy they are treasures.His love for his sister is the most precious.Watching the lovely kids until they were out of sig

24、ht,he continued,When he grows up,he will remember he purchased a doll for his sister with the shells from a shopkeeper.He will cherish love and warmth in life-cherish every little shining sea shell in his heart.PS：本次监测续写，大多数同学反应第二段写得不好，其实就是正能量结尾，可以有其它升华，以下选取几个角度供参考店店主主也也有有喜喜欢欢贝贝壳壳的的妹妹妹妹，看看到到这这个个男男孩孩

25、对对妹妹妹妹的的爱爱，让让他他想起了自己的妹妹。因此想起了自己的妹妹。因此店主帮助店主帮助Peter妹妹达成愿望妹妹达成愿望。店店主主想想起起了了自自己己童童年年时时一一样样的的处处境境，得得到到陌陌生生人人的的成成全全，因因此愿意回报兄妹俩此愿意回报兄妹俩。店店主主对对助助手手解解释释，贝贝壳壳不不值值钱钱，但但哥哥哥哥对对妹妹妹妹的的爱爱是是无无价价的的。考场作文考场作文11.内容合理性方面内容合理性方面第第一一段段故故事事线线和和情情感感线线非非常常好好，可可惜惜第第一一段段结结尾尾没没有有写写出出Peter 和和妹妹妹妹拿拿到到玩玩具具后后的的快快乐乐心心情情和和离离开开商商店店的的动

26、动作作，与与下下文文第第一一段段首首句句衔衔接接度度稍稍差差。第第二二段段升升华华了了主主题题，还还有有意外的是结尾意外的是结尾Peter出现出现。2.语言准确性方面语言准确性方面 语语言言基基本本流流畅畅，表表达达清清楚楚，较较为为丰丰富富的的词词汇汇。有有适适当当的的对对话话描描写写、心理描写。心理描写。3.衔接和连贯性方面衔接和连贯性方面 衔接基本合理衔接基本合理；语言连贯。；语言连贯。考场作文21.内容合理性方面内容合理性方面第第一一段段故故事事线线和和情情感感线线非非常常好好，第第一一段段与与下下文文第第一一段段首首句句衔衔接接度度完完美美。第第二二段段升升华华了了主主题题，还还有有意意外外的的是是结尾结尾Peter出现出现。2.语言准确性方面语言准确性方面 语语言言基基本本流流畅畅，表表达达清清楚楚，运运用用丰丰富富的的词词汇汇 多多样样性性的的表表达达。非非谓谓语语动动词词，感感叹叹句句，从从句句，with复复合合结结构构等等，有有适适当当的的对对话话描描写写、心心理理描描写。写。3.衔接和连贯性方面衔接和连贯性方面 衔接基本合理衔接基本合理；语言连贯。；语言连贯。Thanks!