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1、读后续写的要求 读后续写任务要求考生在一段350词以内的语言材料基础上，根据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写(150词左右)，将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。续写部分分为两段。原文给出10处左右的标有下划线的关键词语，所续写短文应使用5个以上。第五档（21-25分）1.与所给短文融合度高，与所提供的段 落开头语衔接合理。2.内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标 出的关键词语。3.所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确。4.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，所 续写短文结构紧凑。阅卷时考虑以下几个方面：1.原文与后续的融洽度；2.后续两段间的融洽度；3.逻辑权重高于内容

2、、语言和情感；4.多种可能性，择其优而续写5.所续部分：高立意、正能量、传递积极的情感态度standards of grading Theparentswiththeirthree-year-oldsonwenttoseeafilm.Whentheywalkedintothecinema,theattendantsaidtothem:“Youllhavetogooutifyoursoncries.Butwellrefund(退款退款)youthetickets.”Abouthalfanhourlater,thehusbandaskedhiswife,“Whatdoyouthinkofthefi

3、lm?”“Ive never seen such a boring film.”His wifeanswered,“Itsnotworthseeing.”“Idontthinkmuchofit,either.”Thehusbandsaid,“Wakethechildupand_.”enjoy continuation writinglet him cry0101原文一致原则原文一致原则内容要内容要前后衔接前后衔接，上下连贯上下连贯,语言表语言表达达风格一致风格一致。0202正能量原则正能量原则故事内容一定要故事内容一定要正能量正能量，弘，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了

4、但最终一定回到了家；迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定后一定是言归于好，是言归于好，和睦相和睦相处处；犯错了，最后一定会改；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法，最后一定是绳之以法，等等等等。0303曲折性原则曲折性原则凡是故事都应凡是故事都应有有跌宕起伏跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇其中人物会遇到困难或问题，到困难或问题，但但最终能解决最终能解决。写作指导三大原则三大原则写作指导四个步骤四个步骤3.3.3.3.增加细节，开始写作增加细节，开始写作增加细节

5、，开始写作增加细节，开始写作根据根据“所见所见/遇所想，所遇所想，所为所感为所感”等构思具体细等构思具体细节。节。2.2.2.2.细读首句，构思框架细读首句，构思框架细读首句，构思框架细读首句，构思框架仔仔细细阅阅读读所所给给两两段段的的首首句句，结结合合正正能能量量结结尾尾，思思考考大大致致框架。框架。1.1.1.1.读懂大意，理清脉络读懂大意，理清脉络读懂大意，理清脉络读懂大意，理清脉络读所给的不完整故事，读所给的不完整故事，弄清大意和主题，理清弄清大意和主题，理清故事的主要人物和事件。故事的主要人物和事件。4.4.4.4.修改润色，整洁誊写修改润色，整洁誊写修改润色，整洁誊写修改润色，整

6、洁誊写思考再三，把修正润色后的思考再三，把修正润色后的续写整洁地写入答卷。续写整洁地写入答卷。读后续写读后续写 阅读下面材料，阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为完整的短文。续写的词数应为150150左右左右。One weekend in July,Jane and her husband,Tom,had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest.Unfortunately,on the way an unpleas

7、ant subject came up and they started to quarrel.By the time they reached the lake,Jane was so angry that she said to Tom,“Im going to find a better spot for us to camp”and walked away.With no path to follow,Jane just walked on for quite a long time.After she had climbed to a high place,she turned ar

8、ound,hoping to see the lake.To her surprise,she saw nothing but forest and,far beyond,a snowcapped mountain top.She suddenly realized that she was lost.“Tom!”she cried.“Help!”No reply.If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom.Jane kept moving,but the farther she walked,the more

9、confused she became.As night was beginning to fall,Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night.Lying awake in the dark,Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family.She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.Jane rose at the break of day,hungry and thirsty.She could he

10、ar water trickling(滴落)somewhere at a distance.Quickly she followed the sound to a stream.To her great joy,she also saw some berry bushes.She drank and ate a few berries.Never in her life had she tasted anything better.Feeling stronger now,Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead he

11、r to the lake.As she picked her way carefully along the stream,Jane heard a helicopter.Is that for me?Unfortunately,the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above.A few minutes later,another helicopter flew overhead.Jane took off her yellow blouse,thinking that she should go to an ope

12、n area and flag them if they came back again.(334 words)Paragraph 1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again._ Paragraph 2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up._Part01读懂大意，理清脉络读懂大意，理清脉络主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，特别要弄清故事的人物，时态人物，时态(通常是一般过去时)，事件事件(故事的起因和经过)，语言特色语言特色(以便在续写时语言特色前后一致，保持不变不变)，等等。人物

13、时态和事件人物时态和事件 语言特色不要变语言特色不要变1.Characters2.Tense3.eventsJane,TomsimplepasttenseJanequarreledwithTomandwalkedaway.BeginningClimaxEndingrisingactionfallingactionJanegotlostintheforestandspentanightintheforest.Twohelicopterscameandwent.?语言特色语言特色1.Withnopathtofollow2.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturn

14、edaround,hopingtoseethelake.3.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforest4.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.5.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotired语言特色语言特色6.Lyingawakeinthedark,Janewanted7.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.8.Neverinherlifehadshetasted9.Feelingstrongernow,Janebega

15、ntoPart02由续写的第一段首句由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第与第二段首句确定第一段的框架。一段的框架。两段首句定一框两段首句定一框第二段的框架，由第第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结二段首句与正能量结尾来确定。尾来确定。二框二首正能量二框二首正能量细读首句，构思框架细读首句，构思框架Paragrah1Who was there in the second night?What did Jane do when the night fell?How did she feel in the night?What should be the last sentence about?Pa

16、ragraph1：Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.（天又黑了）（天又黑了）Paragraph2：ItwasdaybreakandJanewokeup.（天亮了）（天亮了）两段首句定一框两段首句定一框 即由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架。即由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架。由第一段首句可知，没有直升机再来了，天又黑了。而从第二句首句天亮了，Jane醒了来推测，Jane在第一段中应该是在森林又度过了一个晚上。本段还可添加合理的细节来丰富内容，如Jane在黑暗中又走了一段路，最终体力不支找了一个地方睡着了，

17、注意结尾要与下段语义衔接。Paragrah2What did Jane do after waking up?What did she do next?Was she rescued finally?If yes,did she rescued herself or was she rescued by someone else?Paragraph2：ItwasdaybreakandJanewokeup.（天亮了，（天亮了，Jane醒过来了）醒过来了）二框二首正能量二框二首正能量 第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定。第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定。由第一段框架+第二段首

18、句可知，这一定是一个正能量的结尾。可在首句后描写Jane获救之前所做的事情。还可以结合前面正文的内容来写，如找到一个开阔的地方，挥动黄衬衣。Part 03增加细节，开始写作增加细节，开始写作 在已定框架范围内，依据情节发展和生活在已定框架范围内，依据情节发展和生活常识，推断故事中人物所见、所闻、所思、常识，推断故事中人物所见、所闻、所思、所说、所做等给所说、所做等给每段增加每段增加5 5至至8 8个具体细节。个具体细节。Mindmap2023/2/27Jane Tom lake walked climbed at a distance stream to her great joy helic

19、opter yellow blouse lake,streamJane,Tomwalked,climbedhelicopter,yellow blouseat a distance,to her great joy toolsactionslocationscharacterscluesWriting Janepossible feelingspossible actions 注意：1.写作时注意细节描写，如描述人物的动作、神态和心情。2.贯彻一致性原则。除内容上要语义衔接，上下连贯外，语言风格也要一致，如使用分词短语和从句。3.注意使用关联词语。Comment on WritingPrese

20、ntation of the WritingswalkedalongthestreamclimbedtoahigherplaceforthenightheardanimalsatadistancemadeafiremissedTomtiredParagraph1JanescaredlonelyfellasleepwokeuphungryandtiredwalkedalongthestreamsawahugeflatrockthehelicopterappearedagainclimbedontoitandwaitedParagraph2Janeflaggedtheyellowblousethe

21、helicopterlandedmeetTomatesomeberriesjoyhopeful How to complete a narrative articleStep one:Analyse the given passage.(who;when;where;what;why;how)Step two:logical plotting(the plot,the given two sentences,reasonable ending)Step three:vivid writing(linking words,details,sentence structures)Part04修改润

22、色，整洁誊写修改润色，整洁誊写u要点有无遗漏，u时态是否一致，u主谓是否一致，u文理是否连贯，u句型有无变化，u词数是否符合要求，（少于（少于130130130130扣扣2 2 2 2分分）u拼写、标点符号是否有误等。要敢于创新，用更精彩的词、句替换平淡的词、句，特别注意开头、结尾的精彩度，创造亮点。续写中的常用语法项目：续写中的常用语法项目：1.1.非谓语动词，尤其是非谓语动词，尤其是现在分词短语现在分词短语；2.2.介词短语，尤其是介词短语，尤其是with短语短语；3.3.状语从句，尤其是状语从句，尤其是时间状语从句时间状语从句；4.4.宾语从句；宾语从句；5.5.形容词修饰名词；形容词修

23、饰名词；6.6.副词修饰动词。副词修饰动词。语法应用原则：内容、词汇和形式三者的统一增加内容 运用词汇 丰富形式Paragraph 1:But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again.The temperature got lower at night than in the daytime.Jane put on her yellow blouse.At that moment,tiredness surrounded her.She felt exhausted both physically and emotionall

24、y.But she continued walking forward because she really wanted to meet Tom as soon as possible.She walked slowly and carefully in darkness.Following the stream for about two hours,Jane couldnt support her physical strength,so she found a flat ground to spend the long and hard night.(78 words)Paragrap

25、h 2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up.She felt hungry and tired.After a short adjustment,she began the hard trip.A few hours later,she caught sight of an old man cutting woods.To her great joy,the old man,who was very familiar with the geographical characteristics,informed her of the way to the lake

26、.Seeing the lake meant seeing hope in the air.Fortunately,a helicopter flew overhead just at that moment.Jane flagged her yellow blouse wildly.This time,the helicopter found her and took her to her husband.They gave each other the warmest hug they had ever received.(97 words)HomeworkPolish your writing according to the tips for continuation writing.Grade the writing with each other and tell the reasons.