读后续写画面感描写四个妙招 讲义-高三英语写作专项.docx

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1、读后续写画面感描写四个妙招【第一个妙招：多用“下义词”，少用“上义词”】水果（fruit）是上义词，表达一个模糊空泛的概念，而香蕉、苹果、梨等是更具体、更精确的下义词。在读后续写作文，下义词更能准确地塑造人物形象或推动故事情节发展。【例1】一般表达：The music made me think back to the first day I had arrived at the town.画面感：When listening to the music, I letmy mind wandering back tothe first day I had arrived at the down.

2、在例1中，wander原义是“漫步”，形象地描绘“我浮想联翩”的场景。【例2】一般表达：She moved back when she heard the criminal coming.画面感：Sheshrankback as she heard the footsteps of the burglar.在例2中，shrink原义是“缩水”，形象地描绘出一个人“害怕退缩”的画面感。【例3】一般表达：Ann would throw a birthday party; she had invited all the girls except me. I was afraid.画面感：I felt

3、excludedbecause Ann had invited all the girls to her birthday party except me.在例3中，excluded（被排斥或孤立）更为精确地描述“我心中的恐惧状态”，而afraid（害怕）只是一个含糊笼统的上义词。【例4】一般表达：She stood there, frozen with fear.画面感：She stood there,paralyzedwith fear.在例4中，paralyze的原义是“瘫痪；使麻痹”，更能描绘出一个人“被吓得呆如木鸡”的样子，更有画面感。【例5】一般表达：The problem had

4、 been worrying him for months.画面感：The problem had beengnawing athim for months.在例5中，gnaw at的原义是“咬；啃；啮”，用比喻的修辞手法，形容出一个人内心被吞噬，备受折磨的痛苦模样。【例6】一般表达：Everyones eyes were staring at her when she performed the piano.画面感：Everyones eyeswere glued tothe stage when she performed the piano with skilled fingertips

5、.在例6中，glue的原义是“胶水”，在这里更能惟妙惟肖地描绘观众“目不转睛”倾听她演奏的神态。【例7】一般表达：Lily felt foolish and unsure as he was looking at her.画面感：Lily felt foolish and unsure under hispiercinggaze.在例7中，pierce的原义是“扎；刺破；穿透”，形象地描述出“咄咄逼人、明锐的眼神”。【第二个妙招：精准化动作】用一系列小动作，而不用大动作； 用含义比较明确的动词，而不用抽象或虚化的动词来描述 使描写更加具体生动例：小男孩对他妈妈说对不起。普通写法：The lit

6、tle boysaid sorry tohis mother.精准化升级：The little boyhung his headandmumbled an apologyto his mother.(mumble vt. 含糊地说；抿着嘴嚼)要给动词加上适当的修饰成分。 适当的修饰语能细致地表达出动作的时间、幅度、速度、力度等，使人物形象更具活力，能更好地表现人物的鲜明个性与思想境界。 动作描写中最常见的修饰成分就是状语，如副词、介词短语等。如：体现动作的迅速和短暂的修饰语：suddenly、immediately、without pausing、without delay等。例：狼也注意到他

7、们，回头朝保罗和贝基大喊大叫。普通写法：The wolf also noticed them and turned its head back, shouting at Paul and Becky.精准化升级：At the same time,the wolf also noticed them andfiercelyturned its head back, shoutingloudlyat Paul and Becky.(fiercely adv. 猛烈地；厉害地；凶猛地)【第三个妙招：过程化】 记叙文中有不少动作描写是一连串动作过程的展示。 尤其在展示人物个性的动作时,如果我们蜻蜓点水

8、、一笔带过,就很难突出人物形象,也很难给人以深刻的印象。 而通过细节描写展现出动作的过程,表现力便会大增。例：她去捉蝴蝶。普通写法：She went to catch the butterfly.过程化升级：Shecreptalong the path,bentoverswiftlyandcuppedher hands around the butterflygently.【第四个妙招：修辞化】 除了在动词上做调整，还可以利用恰当的修辞手法来帮助描写动作。 比喻、拟人、夸张等修辞手法都能让动作描写变得更有表现力。例1：老人的脸皱了起来。普通写法：The old mans face wrinkl

9、ed.修辞化写法：The old mans facewas like a withered apple.（比喻）例2：我的胃因不按时吃饭而疼痛。普通写法：My stomach was aching for not eating on time.修辞化写法：My stomachwas punishing mefor not eating on time.（拟人）例3：当她听到这个坏消息时，她哭了。普通写法：When she heard the bad news, she cried.修辞化写法：When she heard the bad news,a river of tearspoured out.（夸张） 【分解动作，构建画面】的核心在于把动作描写进一步精准化、过程化和修辞化，让写出的句子和段落有画面感，这样才能打动阅读者，给人深刻的印象，从而获得高分。 建议同学们对比例句，强化理解，并且在写作中有意识的运用，做到熟能生巧。学科网（北京）股份有限公司