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1、2016高考英高考英语写作复写作复习公开公开课平均分：峰值：约15分1719分最吃亏学生群：中等左右学生书面表达是提分最大的潜力股高考满分作文 Im very pleased to tell you the changes in my life since our homework has reduced.Before that,learning during the day was very simple.Having class and doing homework was the only thing we should do.In the evening,we also had a l

2、ot of homework to do.We could not go to bed until 11:30.Nevertheless,since reducing the learning load,my life has become much more interesting.I often visit museums and computer rooms and draw pictures in my spare time.In the evening,I also have time to watch TV and read newspapers.I no longer stay

3、up late;on the contrary,I go to bed at about 10 pm.In short,I am quite satisfied with my life now.高考英语作文第五档高考英语作文第五档(很好很好)要求要求:(21-25分分)1.完全完成了试题规定的任务，覆盖所有内容要点。完全完成了试题规定的任务，覆盖所有内容要点。2.应用了较多的语法结构和词汇应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。3.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。4.语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为

4、尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。Shooting,originated as a means of survival,developed into a sport only in the late 19th century.The sport,which first appeared in 1896,was ever suspended during the 1904 and 1928 Games.It was only four years before the sport returned to the Olymp

5、ic.However,not until 1968 were women first allowed to compete in the Olympic shooting.With the sport becoming more and more popular,it has grown steadily from just 3 shooting events at the 1896 Olympic Games to 17 today.经典案例：广东经典案例：广东0808高考高考句子表达有何亮点？句子表达有何亮点？写作中复合句常见的错误写作中复合句常见的错误1.1.只有从句，没有主句只有从句，

6、没有主句 The keeper who had lived in the light tower for a long time,so he could keep calm in the storm.The keeper,who had lived in the light tower for a long time,could keep calm in the storm.2.2.以逗号代替句号以逗号代替句号,把两个简单句当成一个句子把两个简单句当成一个句子 The old man thought of his son,tears came down from his face.The ha

7、ll is different from all other buildings,it is made of glass.3.3.刻意使用从句，表达不自然刻意使用从句，表达不自然 There are over fifty students in this school who are going to take part in the sports meet next Sunday.Over fifty students in this school are going to take part in the sports meet next Sunday.The hall is differ

8、ent from all other buildings,which is made of glass.The old man thought of his son,with tears coming down from his face.4.4.过多地使用并列句组合信息过多地使用并列句组合信息 We were driving out into the country,and we saw our English teacher riding in a bus,and the bus was crowded.It is a beautiful day,and the sun is shinin

9、g and a breeze is blowing.It is a beautiful day with the sun shining and a breeze blowing.As we were driving out into the country,we saw our English teacher riding in a crowded bus.My English Learning It is six years since I began to learn English.With the help of my teachers and classmates,I have m

10、ade progress in my English.Now Im doing well both in writing and reading in English.But I still find it hard to learn English,such as some difficult idioms.Difficult as it is,I have made up my mind to master this useful language by my hard work.请看范例请看范例 从上述例子同学们可以明白什么样的句子叫从上述例子同学们可以明白什么样的句子叫“规范的英规范的

11、英语句子语句子”。其实，其实，“规范的英语句子规范的英语句子”就是就是我们经常讲的三种我们经常讲的三种句子句子：A)Simple sentence:Hearing the news,he was happy.B)Compound sentenceA:He gave me a book but I forgot to bring it back home.C)Compound sentence B:What he is doing has nothing to do with me.=When he heard the news,he was happy.Here are 3 ways to m

12、ake sentences:I.巧妙运用短语，写出规范的简单句：巧妙运用短语，写出规范的简单句：1)借助名词短语做同位语借助名词短语做同位语 如：如：李立，男，李立，男，19岁，岁，1986年生；年生；籍贯：广东。籍贯：广东。Li Li,a boy of 19,was born in Guangdong in 1986.2)借助介词短语做定语借助介词短语做定语 如：如：李飞，男，李飞，男，10岁，棕色短发，身岁，棕色短发，身穿白色茄克。穿白色茄克。Li Fei is a ten-year-old boy with short brown hair and a white jacket.如：如：

13、有了有了Tom的帮助，我们很快就的帮助，我们很快就找到了他们的村子。找到了他们的村子。With the help of Tom,we soon found their village.4)借助非谓语动词短语做定语或状语借助非谓语动词短语做定语或状语 如：如：他们站在大树下，等待着总统的到来。他们站在大树下，等待着总统的到来。They are standing under the big tree,waiting for the president.3)借助介词短语做状语借助介词短语做状语II.II.巧用连接词，写出规范的并列句：巧用连接词，写出规范的并列句：如：如：他给我钱，我不要。他给我钱，

14、我不要。I was just walking down the street corner when I saw you.如：如：我刚到拐角处，就见到你啦。我刚到拐角处，就见到你啦。He gave me a lot money but I refused.III.III.用好从句和引导词，写出规范的复用好从句和引导词，写出规范的复合句：合句：1)名词性从句名词性从句 如：如：老师生气。原因：王力迟到。老师生气。原因：王力迟到。That Wang Li came late to school made the teacher very angry.2)定语从句定语从句 如：如：中国，地处亚洲东部

15、；特点：中国，地处亚洲东部；特点：地大物博、人口众多、资源丰富。地大物博、人口众多、资源丰富。China,which lies in the east of Asia,is a great country with a large area and population as well as rich natural resources.3)状语从句状语从句 如：如：雷锋还活在我们心中，我深受感动。雷锋还活在我们心中，我深受感动。I was deeply moved by this,because I know Lei Feng is still living in our hearts.学学

16、会会运运用用复复合合句句和和非非谓谓语语动动词词 Kate is a new student.She comes from a northern province.She speaks a dialect.We find it hard to understand her dialect.Kate,a new student from a northern province,speaks a dialect which we find hard to understand.用一句话表达用一句话表达不是人人都能学好英语，小学生同时不是人人都能学好英语，小学生同时学汉语和英语反而会影响汉语学习。学

17、汉语和英语反而会影响汉语学习。学学会会运运用用复复合合句句和和非非谓谓语语动动词词第一步：拆分成几个简单句第一步：拆分成几个简单句不是人人都能学好英语。不是人人都能学好英语。小学生同时学汉语和英语。小学生同时学汉语和英语。这会影响汉语学习。这会影响汉语学习。第二步：分别翻译这几个简单句第二步：分别翻译这几个简单句 Not everyone is good at learning English.Children from primary school learn English and Chinese at the same time.This will affect their Chines

18、e study.Not everyone is good at learning English.Children from primary school start to learn English and Chinese at the same time.This will affect their Chinese study.第三步：合并句子第三步：合并句子 That children from primary school start to learn English and Chinese at the same time will affect their Chinese stud

19、y because not everyone is good at learning English.Not everyone is good at learning English.Children from primary school start to learn English and Chinese at the same time.This will affect their Chinese study.第三步：合并句子第三步：合并句子 If children from primary school start to learn English and Chinese at the

20、 same time,this will affect their Chinese study方法方法2 2：because not everyone is good at learning English.学学会会使使用用复复合合句句和和非非谓谓语语动动词词你来试试你来试试现象现象 学生作文中出现很多错别字学生作文中出现很多错别字原因原因1.1.上网聊天时经常使用网络语言。上网聊天时经常使用网络语言。2.2.每天有很多作业做，没有记住生字。每天有很多作业做，没有记住生字。参考词汇：参考词汇：错别字错别字:wrongly-written characters网络语言：网络语言：web lang

21、uage要求：要求：1.1.用用两句话两句话表达表格内容表达表格内容 2.2.两句话要有两句话要有连贯性连贯性第一句（两个信息点）：第一句（两个信息点）：1.1.学生作文中出现很多错别字学生作文中出现很多错别字 2.2.（他们）上网聊天时经常使用网络语言。（他们）上网聊天时经常使用网络语言。There are many wrongly-written characters in students compositions.The reason why there are many wrongly-written characters in students composition is tha

22、t they often use web languages when chatting on line.合并句子：合并句子：They often use web languages when chatting on line.1.They have so much homework to do every day that they fail to memorize the new characters第二句第二句:1.1.每天有很多作业做每天有很多作业做 2.2.没有记住生字。没有记住生字。They have much homework to do every day.2.With so

23、much homework to do,they fail to memorize the new characters.3.Because they have so much homework to do,they fail to memorize the new characters.合并句子：合并句子：They fail to memorize the new characters.连接两句话：连接两句话：The reason why there are many wrongly-written characters in students composition is that the

24、y often use web languages when chatting on line.Moreover,they have so much homework to do every day that they fail to memorize the new characters.Exchange and discuss your partners composition,then give each other a score according to the following criteria.Criteria（标准）（标准）Mark Content（内容）（内容）（是否用（是

25、否用5 5句话表达了全文要点）句话表达了全文要点）0 8 分分 Language（语言）（语言）（句子结构及用词是否得当）（句子结构及用词是否得当）0 12 分分 Coherence（连贯）（连贯）（是否用了恰当的词语来衔接句子）（是否用了恰当的词语来衔接句子）0 5 分分Pair work1.一个乞丐在路边讨钱一个乞丐在路边讨钱(ask for money)。李先生匆忙赶。李先生匆忙赶路上班，没有注意到那个乞丐。路上班，没有注意到那个乞丐。2.乞丐很生气，伸出乞丐很生气，伸出(stick out)拐杖，差点把李先生绊拐杖，差点把李先生绊倒了倒了(trip over)。3.李先生意识到他是个残

26、疾人，便在口袋里找钱给他。李先生意识到他是个残疾人，便在口袋里找钱给他。4.李先生拿出了一张百元钞票李先生拿出了一张百元钞票(a 100-yuan note)。突然。突然一阵风把钞票吹到了空中。一阵风把钞票吹到了空中。5.乞丐迅速跳起来去追那张钞票。乞丐迅速跳起来去追那张钞票。李先生站在那里，惊得合不拢嘴。李先生站在那里，惊得合不拢嘴。实战演练实战演练实战演练实战演练：以下是你根据图画内容和题目要求，经过以下是你根据图画内容和题目要求，经过观察、整理排列成的五个信息块，请分别用一个句子观察、整理排列成的五个信息块，请分别用一个句子表达出来，并组成一篇连贯性的短文。表达出来，并组成一篇连贯性的短

27、文。A beggar A beggar One day,Mr.Li hurried on his way to work.A beggar on the roadside was asking for money.Mr.Li paid no attention on him.The beggar got angry and stuck out his walking stick.It almost tripped Mr.Li over.When he realizing the beggar was a disabled person,Mr.Li began to search for som

28、e money in his pocket to give him.He took out a 100-yuan note,but it was suddenly blown into the air by the wind.Seeing this,the beggar jumped quickly to run after the note.It made Mr.Li so surprised that he stood there with his mouth open.A beggar One day,when Mr.Li hurried on his way to work,a beg

29、gar on the roadside was asking for money,but Mr.Li paid no attention on him.As a result,the beggar got angry and stuck out his walking stick,which almost tripped Mr.Li over.Realizing the beggar was a disabled person,Mr.Li began to search for some money in his pocket to give him.He took out a 100-yua

30、n note,which was suddenly blown into the air by the wind.Seeing this,the beggar jumped quickly to run after the note,which made Mr.Li so surprised that he stood there with his mouth open.1.1.审题审题2.2.列要点列要点3.3.依要点依要点,拟草纲拟草纲,组织成句组织成句.4.4.构篇章构篇章,扩句成文扩句成文.5.5.检查润色检查润色6.6.书写书写写作解题步骤：写作解题步骤：如何提高作文档次？如何提高作

31、文档次？(1)字迹工整字迹工整(2)避免低级错误避免低级错误:避免避免语法和拼写语法和拼写的低级错误，的低级错误，避免被扣印象分避免被扣印象分.多样化句式多样化句式(1)用it is/was that强调句强调句式.(2)用作状语的介词短语开头的完全倒装完全倒装句或用以only in this way 等开头的部分倒装部分倒装句.(3)用with的复合结构的复合结构(with+宾语+宾补)作状语.(4)用非谓语动词非谓语动词简化状语从句或并列结构.(5)用what引导的名词性从句引导的名词性从句.(6)用独立主格独立主格结构.(7)恰当运用感叹句感叹句,被动句被动句等.(8)适当使用插入语插入

32、语,如to be honest,I guess,I think,personally等.(9)尽量用短语短语代替单词来表达同样的意思.1.表示平行、对等或选择关系表示平行、对等或选择关系and，bothand,as well as,together with,neithernor,also,not onlybut also,eitheror,as well.2.表示转折关系表示转折关系but,yet,however,nevertheless(然而然而),in spite of,although,otherwise,while,after all.3.表示对比关系表示对比关系on the con

33、trary,instead of,on one handon the other hand,just like,4.表示因果关系表示因果关系so,for,therefore,as a result(of),because,owing to,due to,thanks to,三三、学会使用恰当的连接词、学会使用恰当的连接词5.表示时间、顺序关系表示时间、顺序关系shortly afterwards,next,finally,in the end,eventually6.表示递进、强调关系表示递进、强调关系besides,furthermore(此外此外),whats more,in additi

34、on,moreover(而且而且),worse still,to make matters worse,7.表示解释、说明关系表示解释、说明关系namely(也就是也就是),actually,such as,for example,for instance,that is to say,in other words,and so on,to tell you the truth,according to this8.表示结论表示结论in short,in brief,in a word,in general,as you know,as far as I know,on the whole,i

35、n conclusion,at last,finally三、学会使用恰当的连接词三、学会使用恰当的连接词（3）注意表达的高级化注意表达的高级化一、使用较高级的词汇一、使用较高级的词汇it doesnt matter whether they will go to college or not.it doesnt make any difference whether they will go to college or not.*高级高级(句式句式)1.80%students hold the view that 注意：注意：There are 80%students hold the vie

36、w that There are 80%students who hold the view thatThere are 80%students holding the view that非谓语非谓语定语从句定语从句同位语从句同位语从句二、巧用精彩句式二、巧用精彩句式分析原因（注意一句多译）分析原因（注意一句多译）Several factors contribute to such changes.(reasons)lead to result in cause be responsible foraccount for展开论述变化的原因展开论述变化的原因Homework Rewrite the composition and hand it in.谢谢观赏谢谢观赏