读后续写：The note 讲义-高三英语写作专项.docx

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1、The NoteMy best friendLisaand I carefully wrote our words with a No. 2 pencil. We took turns writing down the sentences. DearMiss Hanley, we wrote, you likeKathleenbetter than you like us. That isnt fair. Miss Hanley was our fourth-grade teacher. She was in her 20s, with short, dark, curly hair and

2、lively grey eyes. It was her first-year teaching in our public school in the northeast Bronx.Youre a very talentedwriter, Miss Hanley often told me. This excited me. A few weeks into this school year, Lisa and I had co-authored a play based on our favorite novel, Little Women. And we performed the p

3、lay in front of theclass. When the curtain came down, the applause from the students was light. But Miss Hanley clapped strongly, saying, Great! Great! Lisa and I ignored the otherkids, and were high on herpraisefor days.I didnt envy Lisasrelationshipwith Miss Hanley. Sharing Miss Hanley was a bond

4、between us. In Miss Hanleys class, we behaved ourselves, although we couldnt help comparing ourselves with Kathleen, whose demeanor（风度）and dress were perfect. Kathleen lived in her familys big house with a beautiful garden. Lisa and I lived in small apartments. Her eyes were as huge as those of most

5、 film stars. She spoke softly and politely. Her hair was waved, clean and tidy. My hair was loose and wild. Lisa and I wore clothes that didnt always match. I sometimes wore my sisters hand-me-downs. Kathleen did best in her studies and of course Miss Hanley liked her. The funny thing is that I didn

6、t like Kathleen and neither did Lisa. In fact we didnt know why.Lisa and I continued writing ournoteto Miss Hanley, You call on Kathleen more than you call on us. You like her because she is agoody-goody（讨好卖乖的人）. Thats not fair! Just that we are not goody-goodies does not mean you should like us les

7、s.注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为150词左右；2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:My heart was pounding as we left the note before class on Miss Hanleys desk._Paragraph 2:At three oclock, Miss Hanley asked us to stay after class for a few minutes. _文本分析：Question1: Whethe

8、r Miss Hanley likesKathleen better than the two girls? Any supporting evidence?(Para 2)No.Youre a very talented writer, Miss Hanley often told me.the applause from the students was light. But Miss Hanley clapped strongly, saying, Great! Great!Question2: Read the first given sentence, Whats their fee

9、ling after leaving the note?Ss:Nervous / regretful.T: ！细节描写，上！又到了遛小盆友的时间，先来回顾一下如何描写人物情感细节描写：行为，神态，语言，心理，环境本次第一段更容易从“行为，神态和心理”三方面进行描写。When we walked back to the classroom, we met Miss Hanleyby coincidence.The blood immediatelyrushedupto our facebut we managed tosqueeze outa smileto greet her. 描写脸红的句子

10、！用在这里非常贴切呀squeeze out a smile 挤出一个笑容，单元复习刚回顾过，能灵活运用在这个语境，奖励一朵小红花！BTW 脸红我们还补充过一个动词blush，小娇羞小羞愧都可以使用哦I wasabsent-mindedin the next class, wondering if she had read the note or not.心不在焉可以用这个形容词哦兔崽子们经常身体力行着这个词哼！最近读小说看到一句“What happened after that is just a bit ofblur.”也很适合这个语境哦Icouldnt help thinkingwhat

11、Miss Hanley might think about me after reading the note. Would she never praise me anymore?I trembledat the thought of it.句型，I.at the thought of it. 不过tremble在这里使用稍微过了点，老湿不会吃人哟紧张就够了，不需要害怕呀Sonervouswas IthatI was afraid to look at her grey eyes and my hands started tosweat.so 放句首引起的倒装句式加分！her grey ey

12、es这些原文细节信息的使用使得续写部分和原文有延续和联系，I hang my head toavoidher eyesight. However, I feltas ifshe had been staring at me for the whole class. as if 虚！拟！语！气！这位童鞋为我们示范了什么叫学以致用M6新单元刚学的语法哟无敌赞I put my head down immediately andpretendedthat nothing had happened. Lisa was absent-minded as well. How Iwishedthat we h

13、adnt written the note! 又是一个虚！拟！语！气！Sonervouswas Ithat I couldnt pay any attention to the course and felt Miss Hanley would ask me out when she looked at me. I looked around and found Lisa wasas uptight asme. At the break, I just sat in my seat and waited for the time going by. It was such a long day

14、! When Miss Hanley saw me by accident, I quickly buried my head in the book and the blood rushed to my face. Iglanced atMiss Hanley secretly, wondering if she had read my note.偷瞄人家就不要再用look at了，用glance at呀瞥一眼I tried totake a deep breathto calm myself down. My heart beat wildly and my hands became we

15、t. 这两句描写可用于第二段老师谈话前不过第一段里就别心跳太剧烈哦一整天心狂跳直到下午三点小心脏承受不了哇来看一篇完整版的，感受一下几个角度的细节结合在一起的效果My heart was pounding as we left the note before class on Miss Hanleys desk.I began to regret at the moment I got back to classroom. “Great! Great!” thepraisehit me over and over again. What ifMiss Hanleydidnt like us a

16、nymore after this? What if other kids saw thenote? When we were thinking about what would happen, Miss Hanley came in. The class began but I couldnt listen carefully. I was too ashamed to look at Miss Hanley in the eye.At three oclock, Miss Hanley asked us to stay after class for a few minutes.My he

17、art beat violently. Wondering what would happen, I sat withLisalike forever. The time seemed frozen when we waited for her. “You might misunderstand therelationshipbetween Kathleen and me,” She explained, “ You are both talentedwriters, and I never have a preference for anyone.” Hearing this, I real

18、ized that I was wrong. “Im sorry, Miss Hanley.” We said almost together.from 徐丽莹Para1整体的描写已经十分流畅了，但是Para2的说服力还不够强。两个小女孩嫉妒K是出于不自信，那么需要通过鼓励树立她们的自信心。Teacher说的话内容还需补充加强。此处参考范文para2POSSIBLE VERSION:My heart was pounding as we left the note before class on Miss Hanleys desk.Wefoldedit in threes, so nobody

19、 else could see what was written. I was sureMiss Hanleywas going to be very angry. It was a long and hard day. I regretted sending thenoteand was terrified of Miss Hanleys reaction. I couldnt concentrate inclass, and keptsneaking glances atLisa. She glanced back, lookingequallyupset.At three oclock,

20、 Miss Hanley asked us to stay after class for a few minutes.Lisa and I stood before her desk.Fists clenched,I was unable to meet Miss Hanleys eyes. Girls, Miss Hanley saidgently, I have no favorites in my classroom. Eachkidis unique. Her voice was so kind. You girls are very different fromKathleen.

21、Ill tell you what I find wonderful about youyour senses of humor, your imaginations and your passion about life.My fists finally unclenched. There was room in Miss Hanleys heart for me! I didnt need to compete with anyone else. It was an impressive experience that I have never forgotten.语言积累时间Fists clenched,I was . (非谓语)My fists finallyunclenched. （反义词）clench ones fists/ teech 握紧拳头/ 咬紧牙关生气、害怕、紧张的时候，都可以试着用用哦Iclenchedmy fists and glared at him.Iclenchedmy fists in anger.Their fistswereclenchedso tightly that their nails dug deep into their palms.学科网（北京）股份有限公司