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1、阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Mr.Taylorcheckedagain:water,food,bandage,medicines,acompass,andamapwrappedinplastic.Bingo!Heputallthathepreparedforthecominghikingintohisbackpack.Mr.Taylorwasfondofhiking,thistimeinparticular,foritwasthefirsttimeforhimtohikewithhistwosons,HarryandJoel.Joellikedreadingbo

2、oksaboutexplorersandHarryjoinedthehikingclubinhisschoolthisterm.Itwillbeanunforgettableexperience,definitely.hewhisperedtohimself,unconsciouslyasmilespreadingoverhisface.HarryandJoel,however,arguedforthefirstthreemilesoftheirhikingtrip.HarryaccusedJoelofwearingsmellyoldshoes.JoelblamedHarryforusinga

3、llofthebugspray.HarrytoldJoelhesmelledterrible,JoelcalledHarryacoward.Willthetwoofyoujustquietdownandenjoyourhiketogether?theirfathersaid.Youremissingallofthebeautifulscenery!Itwastrue.NeitherJoelnorHarryhadtakennoticeofthebeartheirfatherhadspiedatthestartoftheirtrip.Theyhadntlookedupattheeaglehepoi

4、ntedoutoverhead.Worstofall,theyhadntpaidanyattentiontotheturnsandtwistsalongthewaywhiletheycontinuedtheirargument.Joelthrewastickatme!Harryscreamed.Thatsnottrue!Joelshoutedback.Mr.Taylorcouldnolongercontainhisanger.Andbothofyouneedtostoparguing!heerupted.Asheturnedtofacethem,hisleftfootcaughtonaroot

5、.Heslippedbackwardanddownmuddybank,fallingintotheriverthatranalongsidethepath.HarryandJoelracedtotheirfathersassistance.Theyhelpedhimupoutofthewater,andthendraggedhiswetbackpackupontoland.Fortunately,theirwet-throughfatherfoundhimselfjustslightlyinjured.注意：续写词数应为150左右：Paragraph1:Buthisglassescameoff

6、whenhefellinthewater.Paragraph2:Justcalmdown.Mr.Taylorshouted,Withoutmyglasses,weneedtoworktogethertofindourway.01 先读后写，串联文本信息，理清因果关系Who（人物）+what（性格）：Mr.Taylor：careful；encourage kids to work togetherHarry：like hikingJoel：liked reading books about explorersWhat（事件）：Mr. Taylor and his two sons went on

7、 hiking，but the two sons argued with each other frequently, and itled to the injury of their father who tried to stop their quarreling.Emotional changes（情感变化）：two sons: excited(准备徒步）- disacouraged（沿途争吵）-regretful(错过美景）-worried （父亲落水）-.Conflict（冲突）：two sons argued all the way and blamed each other;th

8、e father fell into water and lost glasses-nobody guided the wayTheme（主题）：cooperation can overcome difficulties02关注原文信息，捕捉续文伏笔原文伏笔续文可能的对照Mr. Taylorchecked again: water, food, bandage, medicines, a compass, and a map wrapped in plastic.（para.1)面对爸爸的现状，兄弟俩如何处理呢，准备了哪些工具和设备？Joel liked reading books about

9、 explorers and Harry joined the hiking club in his school this term.(para.2)我们为什么会成功成功摆脱困境？they hadnt paid any attention to the turns and twists along the way while they continued their argument.(para.4)可以帮助我们脱险的环境因素是什么？Just calm down. Mr. Taylor shouted, Without my glasses, we need to work together

10、 to find our way.(给出续写段2）兄弟俩最后意识到了什么？03研读段首句，合理情节分析首句内在逻辑，合理规划情节（Para2首句暗示Para1的结尾）Tip：conflict（冲突）-action行动-解决方案solutionPara1：Fortunately, their wet-through father found himselfjust slightly injured.Buthis glasses came offwhen he fell in the water.情节线（plot)Dealwiththeinjury-nooneguidedtheway-blame/

11、argue情感线（emotion）Nervous-discouraged&angry-hopelessPara2：Just calm down.Mr. Taylor shouted, Without my glasses, we need towork togetherto find our way.情节线（plot）：With the help of compass&map-analyze-findthewayout-lesson：learntocooperate情感线（emotion）:Excited-delighted/proud04确定四个衔接句S1：首段开头第二句（一定把段首句的名词

12、或动词用在第二个句中，实现语义连贯）Buthisglasses came off whenhefell in the water.Sighingdeeply,Mr. Taylorquicklytook off his wet clothes and squeezed the waterout.Mr.Taylorwas stunned for a moment, wondering what to do next.S2：首段最后一句（一定要有与第二段段首句中的同词或同义词，实现无缝衔接）Just calm down.Mr. Taylor shouted, Without my glasses,

13、weneed to work together to find our way.Harryblamedthe accident on Joel, glaring at him with burning eyes.Afterwards, his two sons beganarguingwith each other again.S3：尾段开头第二句（和本段首句实现语义连贯）Just calm down. Mr. Taylorshouted, Without my glasses, weneed towork togetherto find our way.AfterHementioned th

14、e map and m compass, the boys approachedreluctantly .Joelwiped Harrys tearsaway and it hit Harry that they had brought a map wrapped in plastic!S4：尾段最后一句（一定要呼应原文中体现主题或伏笔的主题词，实现主题升华）From this unforgettable hiking, they realized what matters iscooperation. 05语料积累1.Tears mixed with sweat poured down my

15、 cheeks, blurring my vision.2.He yelled, glaring at him with burning eyes.3.Theywereallinadilemmaand felt a kind of sorrow mixed with regret. (消极情绪）4.“.”, sbmurmured, with his heart sinkingand his palms sweating. (引出对话）5.All of the sudden, a thought entered his mindlike an electric shock.（想出主意）6.Soe

16、xcitedwashethathe jumped in the air.（积极情绪）7.Exhausted and terrified, I felt my arms aching and my lung burning.感悟：1.This unforgettable hiking willbe rooted intheir minds.2.It dawnedmethatnothing is more important than cooperation to overcome difficulties.3.What really mattersis cooperation.4.There w

17、as nothing we could do butworktogether. 06范文赏析Buthisglasses came off whenhefell in the water. Sighing deeply,Mr. Taylorquickly took off his wet clothes and squeezed the water out.Seeing his father wrapping the wound with the bandage, Joel felt that a thought entered his mind like an electric shock.

18、How could they continue hiking if Dad was unable to see clearly? If only Harry stopped arguing earlier with me!hemurmured, with his heart sinking and his palms sweating. I hate you! Harry yelled, glaring at him with burning eyes.Afterwards, his two sons beganarguing witheach other again.Just calm do

19、wn. Mr. Taylor shouted, Without my glasses, weneed to work together to find our way.Joelwiped Harrys tears awayand it hit Harry that they had brought a map wrapped in plastic!Joels eyes twinkled with merriment and reached the map out instantly. I love reading books about explorers, so I can definite

20、ly use this map to find our way! Joel screamed out, They tried their best to go back home and their anxiety disappeared and then their bravery started to grow.Eventually, they got home successfully.This unforgettable hiking will be rooted in the two brothers minds,because they realizedit is not quarrel but cooperation that help them overcome difficulties.学科网（北京）股份有限公司