高三英语写作专项读后续写（微笑的力量）学案.docx

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1、读后续写:微笑的力量Kathy was a young woman in her 20s who worked in a small restaurant as a waitress.One day, as shewent about her shift with her usual angry look, a kind old man walked in and sat down at the counter Heread the menu and politely told her what he wantedKathy took his order and yelled, Your fo

2、od will be ready soon.”As she turned to leave.the man saidA smile costs nothing.” Kathy rolled her eyes at him and walked away.She brought his order, cleared his plates, and gave him the bill, for which he left a nice tip.Each time the old man saw her he smiled and thanked her. This only made her an

3、grier.A week went by, and every day the man came for lunch and the same thing happened. And each time Kathy took his order he would say A smile costs nothing.But a week later, Kathy picked up a menu,wrote the words“ SMILE.$20” at the bottom, and placed it on the counter for the kind old man to see.H

4、e came, and Kathy waited for his reaction as he read the menu. The old man made his usual order and added. And a smile. if you dont mind.Kathy was so surprised. She laughed out loudNow now.The man jokingly scolded 1 ordered a smile, not a laugh.So Kathy put on a brightsmile and said, Coming right up

5、, Sir.”And to her surprise, he left $20 tip!A few years went by and the two bonded like family Charie the kind old man was a retired manager whose wife passed away long ago. He spent most of his time at home.with the exception of his frequent restaurant visits. Every day Kathy spent her break talkin

6、g to him.文章主题The theme of this story is the power of kindness and the importance of a smile这个故事的主题是仁落的力量以及微笑的重要性。文章中的好句式1.状语 1+状语 2+并列动作(谓语)1.One day.as she went about her shift with her usual angry look, a kind old man walked in and sat down at the counter2.并列作(谓语)(1He read the menu and politely to

7、ld her what he wanted(2)Kathy took his order and yelled, Your food will be ready soon.?(3Kathy rolled her eves at him and walked away.(4) ”So Kathy put on a bright smile and said, Coming right up, Sir.(5)The old man made his usual order and added . Anda smile. if you dont mind.(6)Each time the old m

8、an saw herhe smiled and thanked her. 语+动3.动作链(1)She brought his order, cleared his plates, and gave him the bill, for which he left a nice tip动作链+定从(2) But a week later, Kathy picked up a menu,wrote the words1 SMILE.$20” at the bottom, andplaced it on the counter for the kind old man to see.4.并列简单1)

9、He came, and Kathy waited for his reaction as he read the menu.并列简单句+状从2)A few years went by.and the two bonded like family5.同位语+定从Charlie.the kind old man,was a retired manager whose wife passed away long ago.6. 简单+状从He spent most of his time at home,with the exception of his frequent restaurant Vi

10、sits Paragraph 1:One day he didn t come to therestaurant参考情节:凯茜没法集中注意力工作邻居告知他昨晚已经去世知道查理一直跟癌症斗争葬礼上回忆不断闪现Paragraph 2. Several days after the funeralKathy received a very important-looking letter in the mail参考情节:打开信，查理表达了凯茜陪伴他的感激之情，凯茜感动凯茜明白由于查理的帮助自己的变化，意识到微笑的真正含义修改过程:Para. 1:One day he didn t come to t

11、he restaurant.1.Kathy standing by the counter her eyes were fixed on the door searching for every hint of Charlies appearance but in vain.(这句话的结构没有毛病,感觉还挺好的:有独立主格结构,有分词作状语还有转折,用词也不错但是个人觉得,把站这个动作做主动作,把眼睛盯着门作为伴随动作(种态)更恰当。) Kathy stood by the counter her eyes _the door for any ._of Charlies arrival but

12、 in wain.2.As time slowly ticked away the initial anxiety and fidgety(坐立不实的) converted into worry and concern.(超纲词适当点缀下就行,尽量用我们学过的,用词关键在准确;anxiety and restlessness 无灵主+gave way to 有灵动词)As time slowly ticked by ,the initial _and(不安)_ gradually_ worry and concern3.what has happened to him?Why doesnt h

13、e come or at least tell me that he cant come due to other(应该是直接心理描写,字数需要缩藏)things?Why doesnt he come? she thought.4.Picking up a glance at customers chatting beside, Kathy with surprise notice the sorrow written on their face.(beside 介词后须跟上宾语;用 be surprised to do sth,这个结构更好;face 需要加 s)Casting a glan

14、ce at customers chatting beside her.Kathy was surprised to notice the sorrowwritten on their faces.结构 再提升 :Suddenly,Kathy spotted,when she the customers chatting beside her the sorrow on their faces.5.A few words wafted into her ears from which she caught messages of the old man. Being asked.the cus

15、tomers told Kathy the death of the old man and his funeral today.being done 表正在进行+被动,显然有问题pass away 比 death 更委婉A few words wafted into drifted into her ears, from which she caught messages about the old man. When asked, the customers told Kathy that the old man had passed away and his funeral was to

16、day.结构再提升:A few words(飘进)_ Kathys ears，_she gleaned messages about the old man._(ask) the customers informed her that the old man had passed away and his funeral was to be held that day7.That night Kathy went to the funeral.as still as a sculpture.with grief and remorsement swelling in her mindThat

17、night Kathy went to the funeral. Her face was as sad as a _ (静止不动的）marble sculpture. Her heart heavy with_(悲伤)and_(后悔).8.If only I gave him one more smile(If ony 引导与过去相反的虚拟语气)If only I_(give) him one more smile.Para.2.Several days after the funeral, Kathy received a very important-looking letter in

18、the mail1.Gingerly opened it with shaking hand Kathy found Charlies handwritten words(opened 无论是过去式或过去分词都不对,因为逻辑主语是 Kathy)Kathy_(小心地) opened the envelope with_(颤抖的)hands and foundCharlies_(手写的) words inside. 并列动作2.Tears sprang up from behind the eyes and streamed down her cheeks. ( 并列动作挺好)Tears_her

19、eyes and_her cheeks3. Thank you for instilling me with hope and happiness everyday.Your smile always eased me like asoft breeze,bringing sparks to the darkness of my life.”(everyday应该为 every day;微风不能带来sparks犯了逻辑错误Your smile is like_(一缕阳光)_(照亮了)the darkness of my life(注入了） me with hope and happiness

20、every day.参考答案Paragraph 1:One day he didn t come to the restaurant Kathy couldnt concentrate on her work the whole day.Even when the restaurant was going to close, Charlie didnt show up,and she was trapped in anxiety After work Kathy hurried to Charlies home.only to be told by his neighbors that he

21、had passed away last night. Not until then did she know that he had fought against cancer alone during the past years.Kathy couldnt trust her ears when she heard this. She was totally overwhelmed by grief. At Charlies funeral, the happy memories with Charlie kept flashing in her mind.Paragraph 2Seve

22、ral days after the funeral Kathy received a very important-looking letter in the mail She opened the letter with her hands shaking slightly. At the sight of the familiar handwriting,tears welled up in Kathys eyes. Charlie expressed his gratitude for her company these years.Looking at the words “. an

23、d you must continue to smile at life , she couldn t contain her sorrow and tears poured down her cheeks .lt suddenly dawned on Kathy that with the help of Charlie. She transformed from the previous angry-looking waitress to a smiling girl.Only then did she realize the true meaning of smile: bring others warmth and company. At the thought of this, a faint and long-expected smile flickered across her lips .学科网（北京）股份有限公司