2023年GRE写作：丢分原因3篇.docx

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1、2023年GRE写作：丢分原因3篇GRE写作：丢分原因1&Wisdom is rightfully attributed not to people who know what to look for in life but to people who know what to overlook.&It is common sense to think or state that wisdom should be attributed to peopel who only know what to overlook in life. But is should also be attribut

2、ed to people who only know what to look at in life. Reason for this is because all the people should be exposed to this concept of wisdom. Even if the people who tened to overlook at life may have more of a background from farther reading and reading and research which they may have engaged in, ther

3、e has got to be a way to expose the other people who may not be as knowledgable, to this type of wisdom. In this way everyone will be able to take part in variouse discusion or debates that may be held based on the topicof what to Look For In Life. It is also very true that when the topic of overloo

4、king or looking at life comes up in a discussion everyone in the room is likely to have a common of their own to add. Their for the wisdome that may based on it is for everyone and not only the most wise one.Comments:This response received a score of 2, not because of language problems, but because

5、reasoning, analysis, and development are extremely thin and insubstantial.This response displays serious weaknesses in analyzing the issue. Although the response states a position and offers limited support for the position, the reasons given are not always clear. The writer seems to be making an in

6、teresting point - that more people should &be exposed to this concept of wisdom,& but here, too, the meaning is not communicated clearly.The response is further flawed by serious and frequent problems in language and sentence structure, which often obscure meaning.This is not a 1 essay because the r

7、esponse does present a position with some support, and it is able to communicate some ideas clearly.GRE写作：丢分原因GRE写作：丢分原因21. 逻辑混乱。2.过于主观。3.中式思维/表达。4.过分注重用词。大体上来说，同学们的逻辑问题是最多的。逻辑问题有三种，通篇逻辑，段落之间，段落之中。其实这可能和我们高中初中的英语教育有关系，大家都很喜欢一条一条摆原因。Firstly, secondly.然后后面至于这个ly后面是什么就不管了，一顿胡扯。也不管这段落与段落之间的衔接是否自然，反正都有什么

8、ly给打头阵。事实上，中西方的思维总是存在差异，很多时候看管老师们都不懂考生在说什么。考官很困惑，这个例子和这个有关系吗?为什么前面在说A，后面突然B了?和结论什么关系?要记住一点，文章是一个整体，你的开篇结尾和中部内容都是应该有关联的。也就是说，在开头提到的，文中应该有展开，同时在结尾有总结。中文里不也要求行文流畅么，这至少得要求逻辑是通顺的。很多同学都很喜欢写中立观点“A不错，但不够好”，这虽然看起来很客观，但实际上对逻辑的要求非常高，要怎样去组织语言，组织相应的论据论点，非常考验人。有同学想说A事件要瑕疵互见，但是写着写着就乱七八糟，东一块西一块，不知道在讲点什么了。更有厉害的索性冗长的

9、2000来词，讲了个空话。所以建议刚上手的同学，还是选择一边倒，站定脚跟不放松。即便是真的要写中立观点，实际上也都在A和B之间有所偏好。此外，现在很多人会要求练writing的时候先写提纲。于是同学们们就只写一个观点，然后后面的例子乱用，或者根本没有弄清楚什么是例子。事实上，这种展开，可以是实例，也可以是虚拟的假设。实例中往往分自己的经验和他人的经验。那么怎样的例子有说服力呢?一般来说是：名人名事(知名度大)> 众人众事(样本大)>自己经历(体会深)>他人经历。假设往往不够有说服力，因为很难涉及到每一个变量。但是假设在有的时候可以行得通，就是在很难说清楚步骤和因果关系的时候，

10、用一个假设场景来推导会让文章变得浅显易懂。所以建议，在刚开始上手写toefl作文的时候，先不要给自己30分钟的压力，先列出提纲(10分钟)，再用30分钟去写，看能写多少。记住你的举例一定要死死扣住你的观点，不要是和观点打擦边球的。比如我改过之前一个小朋友的文章，她的大观点是电脑对学生来说是有益的，小观点是，可以查到很多资料，然后例子是可以用google查到很多资料，很快捷。ok，乍一看这个没有问题。但是实际上问题大了，用goole查到很多资料，是因为电脑还是internet?这很容易就偏题了，变成internet对学生来说是有益的。例子一定要从论点出发，再回到论点。不要将你的论点发散，后果很可

11、能就是越写越跑题。所以每次写好一篇文章，都看看，论据里的key words是不是和论点里的key words 一样，论点里的key words又是不是和题目里的key words一样。你的key words 可以比大题里的key words更加narrow，但是千万不要更加广泛。最后说的逻辑错误，是段落中逻辑比较容易错的。一般是对接续词的运用。如However, thus, therefore，他们决定了上下文之间的关系，但是很多读起来就很奇怪，两者完全不是转折的关系，用了however，就会让人觉得有些无厘头。或者就是上下文之间完全没有逻辑联系，就是两个单句凑在了一起。还是这句话，一篇文章和

12、流水似的，不能断。中间断了那就不叫好文章了。即使前一句与有一句没有接续词，它们在逻辑上也是要能承接的。GRE写作：丢分原因3&Wisdom is rightfully attributed not to people who know what to look for in life but to people who know what to overlook.&Everyone can agree with this issue or not. I think everyone can have arguments to support it and arguments to not su

13、pport it. It's one of that issue that is not true for everyone. I think if you know what to look for in your life maybe all your efforts can be very concentrated on certain things with the result of obtain what you planned to have in your life, with the result of being satisfied more than people

14、 who ask themselves any kind of questions prior to doing anything or prior to think about anything. These factors summarize to display truth about the issue and the discussion. People can disagree if they choose it. Now the question is wisdom belongs to those who know what to look for or to those wh

15、o know what to overlook and in this behavior they can touch or stop the widom of other people?Comments:This response presents a fundamentally deficient discussion of the issue.The first portion of the response, while referring to &this issue,& never clearly identifies the issue and, instead, contain

16、s statements that could be attributed to any number of topics. As such, there is little evidence of the ability to organize and develop a coherent analysis of the stated claim. The final statement essentially rephrases the topic as a question and seems to try to interpret its meaning, but - without an explanation - the ending merely adds to the overall confusion.The severe and persistent errors in language and sentence structure add to the overall incoherence and the score of 1.