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1、读后续写：脱离困境型Parti ：经典例文（玩具店遇险）1Parti：困境类场景描写4一、环境描写（恶劣）4二、情绪描写（绝望、恐惧+挣扎）6三、转机描写描写声音传来或看见了什么9四、情绪描写（希望+努力）10五、脱险描写11六、情绪描写（感恩+高兴）11七、主旨描写11Part3：灵活应用12例1：瀑布遇险12例2：火灾救老人14例3：森林迷路脱险12Parti ：经典例文（玩具店遇险）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。It was a Saturday afternoon. The color of the sky was changing, first ligh

2、t gray, then dark gray, and finally dark and dense. The wind was blowing heavily,and the trees were swaying in the strong wind. It began to rain cats and dogs. Soon, the road was filled with puddles from the rain.On such a stormy afternoon, my mother took my five-year-old brother, Christopher, and m

3、e to a new big toy store she had read about in the newspaper. So many toys J the advertisement hadshouted in full and flashy color/that we had to get a huge warehouse to fit them四、情绪描写（希望+努力）描写如释重负.就像抓着救命稻草一样，我一遍又一遍地拨号码。As if clutching at straws, I dialed the number again and again.1 .听到这个令人欣慰的消息、，我

4、忍不住激动起来。Hearingthe comforting news, I couldnt help restraining my excitement.（情难 自抑）2 .他的话重新点燃了我心中的希望之火。His words reignited the flame of hope in my heart.3 .我感到一阵自豪，欣慰地微笑着。Smiling in relief （如释重负地微笑）,I felt a rush ofpride（感到一阵自豪）.4 .看到有船来救我们，我和汤姆高兴极了，都松了 一 口气。Overjoyed（狂喜）to see a boat coming to our

5、 rescue, Tom and I breathed a sigh of relief（如释重负地 松了口气）.由于在一个姿势上保持了几个小时而僵硬了，他们慢慢地展开了身体。Stiff from keeping in one position for hours, they slowly unfolded their bodies.五、脱险描写.船终于到达了我们身边，把我们所有人都带回了岸边。The boat finally reached us and took all of us back to the shore.1 .Joe大声大叫，试图安慰我，让我相信这是逃离危险的最好方法。Yel

6、ling at the top of his lung, Joe tried to soothe me and convince me that it was the best way to escape the danger.六、情绪描写（感恩+高兴）1.当我们想象欢乐的场景是什么时，我心中有解脱，幸福写在我的脸上。When we pictured what the merry scene would be, relief lay in my heart and happiness was written on my face.2.我如释重负，不停地想整个 事件。我知道如果他们再在海 里，就

7、会死 了。Sighing in relief, I couldnt stop thinking about the whole event. I knew they would have died if they had been in the sea for any longer.七、主旨描写1.我突然想到，帮助别人是无价的，每个人都应该是一个救生员。It occurred to me that helping others was priceless and everyone should be a lifeguard.3 .这是，的情绪第一次充分利用他，眼泪从他的脸颊上滴下来。For t

8、he first time since., ones emotions got the best of him and tears trickled down his cheeks.4 .直到那时，我才意识到是Joe 一直在照顾我。Only then did I realize that it was Joe who had been caring for me through thick and thin.5 .我如释重负，被内疚和悔恨所淹没。我喃喃地说，想着我应该认真对待 他的警告 o Sobbing in relief, I was overwhelmed by waves of gui

9、lt and remorse.I murmured sorry, reflecting that I should have taken his warning seriously.6 .这一切只花了几分钟，但贝蒂永远不会忘记那段可怕的经历。AH this took only a few minutes, but Betty would never forget the frightening experience.Part3 ：灵活应用例1：瀑布遇险It was last August. We were on vacation, having driven from our home in

10、Washington, DC, to New Hampshire. We wouldnt see friends or family一it would be just me, my husband, and our two kids out for a nice,safe, socially distanced week away.We had hiked about half a mile to a popular spot called Dianas Baths, near the town of North Conway, where the water falls off a seri

11、es of flat boulders layered up the mountainside like an M.C. Escher drawing. The baths were full of families, so we made our way to one of the upper levels of rock to keep our distance.Both where we sat and down below, the water cascaded and fell into small pools, where kids in swimsuits were splash

12、ing around. I watched as some younger parents nervously corralled their toddlers away from the rocks edges, feeling grateful that my husband and I were out of that stage- that our kids, at six and eight, could navigate their physical space with more confidence. Dont get me wrong: I was still terrifi

13、ed as I saw my two boys jump between the slippery rocks. No running/5 I said again and again. Stay away from all those edges.”But I soon relaxed, and we were all having fun, splashing in the pools, my kids laughing as my husband dunked his head under the cold running water. Then, seconds later, ever

14、y fear Id ever had rose to the surface.I turned and saw my son Wyatt sitting down between two boulders （大圆石） in a fast-moving stream. I yelled at him to get out. He yelled back something that I couldnt hear, and then he disappeared over the edge.My husband was already sprinting down the rocks. I fin

15、ally looked. Wyatt was sitting up-he was alive. My biggest fear was erased.While everyone else looked on from a distance, too afraid or unbothered to help, a lady with a mask didnt hesitate. In fact, by the time I had climbed down the rocks and my husband had pulled Wyatt out of the water, she had a

16、lready called 911.Paragraph 1:She told me that she was a nurse.Paragraph2:The rescue team came.【参考答案】She told me that she was a nurse. She gave Wyatt a red, white, and blue striped towel to put under his head. She implored us to keep him still and on his back in case he had injured his spinal cord.

17、I finally had the wherewithal to ask her name. LisaJ she said, And Im not leaving you. She looked at me so deeply, as if she were trying to take every bit of energy, love, and strength in her body and push it out through the only part of her face I could see.她告诉我她是一名护士。她给了怀亚特一条红、白、蓝条纹的毛巾放在他 的头底下。她恳求

18、我们让他保持不动，以防他伤了脊髓。我终于有了钱问 她的名字了。“丽莎，”她说。“我不会离开你。她深深地看着我，仿佛她想 把身体里的一切能量、爱和力量，从我唯一看到的脸推出去。The rescue team came. They took Wyatt out of the park on a stretcher. An ambulance took us to the small local hospital where he was undergoing tests and scans. As soon as I knew that Wyatt was going to be OK, my t

19、houghts fell to Lisa. If she had not stepped up, would someone else have done so? Perhaps. But it was her. She was the one who went toward the unthinkable instead of turning away.救援队来了。他们用担架把怀亚特带出了公园。一辆救护车把我们送到当地的小 医院，他正在那里接受检查和扫描。我一知道怀亚特会没事，我的思绪就落到丽 莎身上了。如果她没有站起来，还有其他人会这样做吗？也许吧。但那是她。她 是那个走向不可想象的事情而

20、不是转身离开的人。例2：火灾救老人阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。The event that stands out in Toms memory happened one morning when Tom was only ten years old. He was at home with his elder sister Jane. Tom was doing his homework when he heard raised voices. At first he thought nothing of it since customers in the mo

21、torcycle shop directly below their flat often became loud, but he soon realized this time it was different.Quick!Quick!Remove the motorcycles from the shop. someone yelled.Then a thick burning smell filled the air. When Tom opened the front door of their flat to investigate, a thick cloud of smoke g

22、reeted him. The motorcycle shop had caught fire and people were running and crying.Jane, who had been playing the violin in her room, hurried to the living room. They rushed out of the door and along the corridor（走廊）through the smoke.They were heading towards the stairway at the far end of the corri

23、dor when Jane suddenly stopped.She turned around and headed back the way they came. Tom had no idea what she was doing, but he followed her.Jane had suddenly remembered the lady in her 70s who lived next door to them, who they called Makcik. Jane began banging on Makciks door, but got no answer. As

24、the smoke thickened around them, Tom could see many of their neighborssome still in their pyjamas-running for safety. The thought of fear crossed his mind.“She would have run for safety like everyone else!” Tom cried. However, Jane refused to give up. I know Makciks still inside. She said she was fa

25、miliar with Makciks daily routine andwas certain she would still be sleeping. She pounded against the door. Go downstairs. Go now!Go!”注意：1 .所续写短文的词数应为150左右；.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；2 .续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:Tom noticed the flame was reaching up.Paragraph 2:Luckily, som

26、e neighbors passing by stopped and offered help.【参考答案】【写作提示】这是一篇比较典型的具有正能量,而且故事性比较强的文章。文 章讲述了在一次火灾中,Jane和Tom不顾安危去救援一个邻居老人的故事。文章 的第一部分叙述了两个孩子在大火中表现出的勇敢和善良。那么续写部分就应该 延续这种故事情节和赞扬的态度。根据第一段的提示句，该段应该是对他们在敲 门救邻居时火势蔓延的描述，当然更应该涉及两个孩子在这种情况下的表现。而 第二段的提示句提示我们有其他的邻居来帮忙，那么应该是一个幸运的结尾。Paragraph 1:Tom noticed the fl

27、ame was reaching up. Frozen with fear, he stood rooted to the spot. He comprehended the gravity of the situation and held Janes hand tightly. Both of them were coughing and their eyes were stinging. Time seemed to stand still, though they were probably there for only two or three minutes. Tom begged

28、 Jane to run for safety as quickly as possible. Jane tried to shield her nose from the choking smoke and shook her head. She kept pounding against the door. Tom burst out crying.汤姆注意到火焰正在升起。他被吓得冻僵了，深深地站在那里。他明白了形势 的严重性，紧紧地握着简的手。他们俩都在咳嗽，眼睛都在刺痛。时间似乎停滞 不前，尽管他们可能在那里只有两三分钟。汤姆请求简尽快跑安全。简试图保护 她的鼻子不受窒息的烟雾，并摇了

29、摇头。她不停地敲敲门。汤姆突然哭了起来。Paragraph 2:Luckily, some neighbors passing by stopped and offered help. A sense of strength immediately re-placed the mounting fear and anxiety in Janes mind. She told them Ms. Makcik must be still inthe room. They forced the door open with all their might. Sure enough, Makcik w

30、as lying in bed,unconscious. She was carried downstairs and then rushed to the hospital, where she finally came to herself. People in the neighborhood felt relieved and Jane and Tom were very happy.幸运的是，一些路过的邻居停下来提供了帮助。一种力量感立刻使简的心中充满 了越来越强烈的恐惧和焦虑。她告诉他们，马克西克女士一定还在房间里。他们 竭尽全力地强行打开了门。果然，马克西克正躺在床上，失去了知觉

31、。她被带下 楼，然后被紧急送往医院，最后苏醒过来。附近的人都松了一口气，简和汤姆也 非常高兴。高级语块 pound against猛敲 with all ones might竭尽全力 佳句背诵 Frozen with fear, he stood rooted to the spot.A sense of strength immediately replaced the mounting fear and anxiety in Janes mind.例3：森林迷路脱险Deep in the forest, my husband and I had fun climbing over and

32、crawling under the downed trees that blocked the dirt path before us. It was May, yet we walked up a snow-covered hill. When we noticed our jeans were wet up to our knees, it did not dampen our spirits Not once did we say, Lets turn around. This was our vacation, and we were on an adventure. Little

33、did we know this was the beginning of many more surprises.The trail was marked as an easy one-kilometer like yet we were already walking a long distance. Our lightheartedness stopped when we came out into a clearing and saw a parking lot without our rental car in it. As my eyes scanned the surroundi

34、ngs, nothing looked familiar. My heart raced. I realized we were lost in a national park that did not officially open for another week.Usually, I am the calm one in the relationship, but my husband surprised me with his calmness. This did not comfort me; in fact, it heightened my fear. As we walked,

35、 I asked my husband to call for help, but there was no cell-phone signal in this isolated （偏僻的）area.It was awfully quiet except for our footsteps hitting the road, and my heavy breathing. My husband suggested we conserve energy and walk slower. With each step on the road, my feet and thighs hurt whi

36、le my mind raced with thoughts about people who got lost in the Canadian woods for days.My vision sharpened. I noticed everything around me: the trees, rocks and snow. I thought we could eat the snow on the ground in case we needed water. For the first time in my life, I was ready and willing to get

37、 a ride, but we did not meet with a single car on the road. Silently, I prayed multiple times. We focused on each other, made joint decisions and connected through gratitude. We managed to stay on the main road and walked straight on.Paragraph 1:My husband suddenly spotted a small building on a hill

38、 in the distance.Paragraph 2:Just then, a friendly woman appeared, sayingHello.”【参考答案】My husband suddenly spotted a small building on a hill in the distance. In no time we found ourselves heading for it. We were filled with hope and excitement to find such a building in the middle of nowhere. We cli

39、mbed up the hill at a swinging pace as if all the pains were gone. As we approached, a sign came into sight, which read: Administration Office. However, it was not open for business. The empty hall made us nervous all at once. We stood there hopelessly, wondering what to do next.Just then, a friendl

40、y woman appeared, saying, “Hello. I could barely hold back my enthusiasm and blurted out, Were lost!” She comforted us and opened a room for us to take a break. Seeing we were cold and hungry, she treated us with hot chocolate. After studying the map, we figured out that our car was parked over thre

41、e kilometers away. She offered us a ride back to our car and we accepted gladly. I felt relieved to see our rental car again. What a blessing to have such an unforgettable experience.all!”Christopher and I couldn*t have been more excited. We ran across the parking lot, through the cold rain, as fast

42、 as our little legs could carry us. We left our motheroutside to battle with the frustrating umbrella, which never worked when she wanted it to. Christine! Take care of your young brother!Mother shouted at the top of her voice.“Christine !Fm going to find the Lego section（乐高积木区）！ Theres a new pirate

43、 ship I want, and I have four dollars! Maybe I can buy it!” Christopher exclaimed and ran off excitedly. I only half heard him. I took a right turn and, to my wide-eyed delight, found myself in the midst of the Barbie（芭比）World.I was studying a Barbie and doing some simple math in my head when sudden

44、ly an earthshaking clap of thunder roared from the storm outside. I jumped at the noise, dropping the doll to the floor. The lights flickered（|闪烁）once and went out, covering everything in a blanket of blackness. Thunder continued to shake the sky and lightning illuminated the store for seconds, cast

45、ing frightening shadows on my mind. 注意：1 .所续写短文的词数应为150左右；.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；2 .续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1:“Oh no J I thought, “Wheres Christopher?”Paragraph 2:“Christine, Pm here.”【参考答案】【写作提示】原文讲述“我”和弟弟以及妈妈去买玩具，结果“我”和弟弟刚进去玩具 店没多久，由于雷电，商店停电，我们都看不到对方。根据第一段的段首句，本段应该 是作

46、者在黑暗中寻找弟弟的情景。在续写时，除了动作,还要注意心理描述。根据 第二段的段首句可知，弟弟找到了“我”。此段应该描述姐弟俩相遇的情景。这里 的描述应该有“劫后余生”的感觉。Paragraph 1:“Oh no J I thought, “Wheres Christopher? Scared, I was frozen on the spot, overcome withthe need to see my brother, hug him and make certain he was all right. My stomach twisted andturned inside. I ra

47、n up and down the aisles through the darkness, panic filling my small chest andmaking it difficult to breathe. I knocked into displays of candy and tripped over toys, all the whilefrantically calling my brothers name. Anxious as I was, I could barely see his figure. Tears of frustration and fear tri

48、ckled down my face, but I continued to run.“哦，不，”我想，“克里斯托弗在哪里？ 我当场冻僵了，需要见到我哥哥， 拥抱他，确保他没事。我的胃扭曲了，转了进去。我在黑暗中跑来来跑去，恐慌 充满了我的小胸部，呼吸困难。我一直在看糖果，被玩具绊倒疯狂地叫着我哥哥的名字。虽然我很焦虑，但我几乎看不见他的身影。沮丧 和恐惧的眼泪从我的脸上滴了下来，但我继续跑着。Paragraph 2:“Christine, Pm here. Excitement took my breath away-there in the dark Lego aisle I foundC

49、hristopher. He was standing alone, perfectly still, hiding under the pirate ship set. I began to cryout from relief, throwing my arms around him and hugged him tightly. Hehugged me back, saying, I knew if I waited here, Christine, you would be able to find me.Then, I took his hand inmine and we went to find our mother, who must b