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1、阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所谓段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。It was 1954 when a young traveler named Robert Beach was hitching rides (搭便车) on his way from Tampa, FL to Lost Angeles, CA. His rides broke down at one chilly night in De-ming, NM. Beach was 24 when he was dropped off in Deming. Beach was tired, hungry and cold.

2、 With no money in his pocket, he wondered where he might spend the night.Police officers approached Beach standing downtown and he begged them to take him to jail so that he could be warm. The officers of course refused his request as he had not committed a crime. Beach found a business doorway and

3、settled in for the night. When morning came, Beach recalled an Asian man walked out of the building and asked him how he might help and then walked to hand him a bag of cookies. These were likely the best cookies Robert had ever tasted.Sixty-seven years later, Beach contacted the Deming-Luna Chamber

4、 of Commerce and told his story about his brief stay in Deming to the new Executive Director Debbie Troyer. Beach told Troyer he phoned the chamber to say that he had never forgotten this mans kindness. After 50 years serving as a judge and entering retirement, Beach wanted to say “thanks” to this k

5、ind man and send him a $1,000 check. Beach told Troyer that he believed the road where this bakery stood was on Demings main street. “What might that look like back in 1954,” Troyer wondered. “Ill ask our community.”Para 1:First, she posted Beachs story on the Chamber of Commerce and Community Faceb

6、ook page.Para 2:Finally, they decided they had come to a dead end, but Beach thought that paying it forward was the best way to thank the baker.简要分析：1. 这篇读后续写所给的材料内容是非常容易的，学生看起来毫无压力，讲述的是一个温暖的故事。1954年一个名叫Beach的年轻小伙子在异地他乡饥寒交迫获得好心人帮助，67年之后，Beach想要回报曾经雪中送炭过的恩人（the hero Baker）。2. 这篇读后续写设置的难度关卡在于它所给出的首句特别

7、是第二段的首句。很多学生一方面无法精准把握come to a dead end背后的潜在含义，另一方面也不懂pay it forward的意思，所以导致续写时“疯狂跑野马，闹得游骑无归”。在我收上来的五六十份读后续写中，有差不多20多个人离题万里，基本上有这样的离奇”思路：情节走向：第一自然段写Beach费劲找到了hero Baker并把1000 dollars 给了他的恩人，还有写Beach努力找寻the hero Baker，结果被人骗走了他要报答恩人的钱，还有写Beach找到了这个曾经帮助过他的好人，并且他的糕点店经营不善，濒临倒闭，第二自然段有写Beach回忆这善举对他的影响，还有写更

8、加用心地去找恩人，然后找到了，还有写Beach帮助他的恩人把糕点店做大做强（你能想象得到我看到这些情节的心情吗？究其原因，就是没有理解第二段的首句里的come to a dead end和pay it forward的意思。从另外一个层面来讲，其实是学生结合生活经验，根据上下文去猜测词义的能力还需要加强。前文讲要找到恩人并报答这份恩情，但无果而终（come to a dead end），那么在“正能量主题”的宗旨下，必然是把这份温暖传递下去。对材料和首句有了准确的把握之后，就可以简单确定如下情节：故事发布在社区脸书上-网友的反应（感动、称赞+热心帮忙、提供信息）-寻找-无功而返-把温暖传递下去

9、-帮助需要帮助的人-主题升华接下来就是行文措辞了。First, she posted Beachs story on the Chamber of Commerce and Community Facebook page.网友的反应（感动、称赞+热心帮忙、提供信息）1.It soondrew much attention. Manynetizensapplaudedfor thebakerskindness but no one knew him. After all, finding a person from so many years ago was really crazy and d

10、ifficult.2. The post immediately received a lot of likes.SomepeoplereachedTroyerandprovidedphone numbers or addresses.寻找1. But they were not going tothrow in the towelso easily. ThenBeach decided to look for hishero baker in person. He visitedthe same streetandwent door from door, hoping to get some

11、useful information.2.Full of expectation, they dialed the number whichturned out to be disconnected.无功而返1.Disappointed and depressed, they wereback to square oneafter all these days search/efforts.2. It seemed that theygot nowhere/made no progress withthe search.Sadly, all their efforts/attemptsprov

12、ed to bein vain.(或者用我们最近学的proceed说things did notproceed as anticipate的）Finally,they decidedthey had come to a dead end, butBeachthoughtthatpaying it forward wasthe best way to thank the baker.把温暖传递下去1. As a result, Beach was determined to usethe money to set up a charityorganizationin Deming to help

13、thosewho were homelessor met with financialtroubles andhe even namedthe charityorganizationCookiesin memory of the most delicious cookieshed ever tasted.2.Beachboughtlarge amounts of cookies with the money andallocatedthem to the poor and the homeless.Seeingthe happy and grateful faces, he took a bi

14、te of the cookie himself, Oh, its the most delicious cookies, too.主题升华In thisstory, notonly did thelocal peopleapplaud and memorizethe bakerskindness but alsoadmireBeach for his gratitude. Additionally, it teaches us a valuable lesson-no act of kindness is ever wasted and all of them will findtheir

15、way into other peoples heart.Possible version1:Para 1: First, she posted Beachs story on the Chamber of Commerce and Community Facebook page.This touching story soon attracted much attention. Many business owners, to help Beach, voluntarily shared it with others. Before long, information about baker

16、ies that stood on the main street for decades started to appear in the comment section. Yet, considering the city had gone through dramatic changes during the period, no one was absolutely certain. Troyer talked with people having promising leads and even visited some bakeries in person but the warm

17、-hearted baker was nowhere to be found. She shared what she did and found with Beach every step of the way.Para 2: Finally, they decided they had come to a dead end, but Beach thought that paying it forward was the best way to thank the baker.At the age of 91, Beach was determined to carry out his p

18、lan himself, trying not to leave any regrets. Upon arrival at the Deming train station, it was about 9 am. First, he visited Troyers office. After expressing his gratitude for her help, he handed her a $1,000 check and hoped that she could choose a bakery to provide free breakfast for people in need

19、 for three days. Then, a taxi took him to the main street. Sixty-seven years had gone by and the street didnt resemble anything he had remembered. Yet standing in the bright sunlight, a wave of warmth flooded his body and soul. That feeling, however, was all the same.Possible version2:Para 1Please h

20、elp me find the baker who gave me a free breakfast in 1956, Beach wrote to Troyer, the director of the Chamber of Commerce and Community. He told her his story of being a poor traveller who was touched by the kindness of a stranger on the main street of Deming. Troyer was moved by his story and deci

21、ded to post it on their Facebook page. Do you know this baker? she asked the online community.The story soon went viraland many business owners shared it with their networks.Comments flooded in with informationabout old bakeries that used to operate on the main street.Troyer followed up on every lea

22、d, calling and visiting some of them personally, but none of them matched Beachs description of the warm-hearted baker.Sheupdated Beach regularlyon her progress and he thanked her for her efforts.Para 2After weeks of searching, they realized they had hit a dead end.The city had changed too much over

23、 the decades and the bakers identity remained a mystery.But Beach was not discouraged.He told Troyer that he wanted to pay it forward and donate money to a bakery that would provide free breakfasts for people in need for three days. Thats very generous of you, Troyer said. But you dont have to do th

24、at.I do, Beach insisted.Its the least I can do to honor the bakerwho helped me when I needed it most. At 91 years old, he was determined to carry out his plan himself and booked a train ticket to Deming. He arrived at the station around 9 am and took a taxi to Troyers office. He hugged her warmly an

25、d handed her a $1,000 check. Please choose a bakery for me, he said.I trust your judgment. Then he asked her to take him to the main street where he had met the baker 67 years ago. He stepped out of the car and looked around.The street was unrecognizable from his memory; new buildings and businesses had replaced the old ones.But as he walked along the sidewalk,he caught a whiff offreshly baked bread and pastries from one of the shops. He smiled and felt a surge of warmth in his heart. It reminded him of that fateful morning when he received an unexpected gift from a kind soul.学科网（北京）股份有限公司