读后续写：遇险类 绝处逢生 讲义-高三英语写作专项.docx

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1、【文本再现】As an enthusiastic climber, I would make an annual trip to the peak of Mount of the Holy Cross.This year, my new partner Merle a young and athletic dog,climbed with me. I hadnt thought twice about taking Merle; actually,I expected him to beat me to the peak.Before setting off,I filled my backp

2、ack with bottled water, dry food,and-a can of beef.Having put the collar(颈圈)-with his name and my phone number on Merle,I started my big adventure with him. Several hours later,while we were rushing towards the peak,Merle still seemed energetic and I also felt energized by the clear mountain air.Whe

3、n reaching the peak, I heard a short bark and thought Merle would be seconds behind me. He was incredibly close to me and always followed me.I took a photo of the view, called out to Merle, and headed back down the path. However, Merle was nowhere to be seen.“Merle! Merle!”I called. “Where are you?”

4、 I felt panic rising within me, as there was no sign of him.Then I saw something moving in the basin below. It was Merle! After nearly an hour, I made it to the basin and saw Merle standing on a large rock. A feeling of relief washed over me. Soon, I was close enough to see that his legs were badly

5、injured. When I was within a few feet of him, he dived into a crack(缝隙) at the edge of rocks.I immediately struggled to clear snow and rocks but could only stick my head in the crack. Seeing nothing in the darkness, I just heard the jingle of Merles collar. I yelled. No response. Then I went to the

6、scene of the fall and saw the path Merle had taken. Hed slid about 700 feet down the upper snowfield, fallen off a 40-foot cliff(峭壁),and then rolled down another 100-foot cliff to the lower snowfield. “Merle may be on the edge of death,”I said to myself.Paragraph 1: I returned to the crack and calle

7、d Merle again.Paragraph 2: Three weeks later, I received a call claiming to have found Merle.【文本解析】本文是一篇记叙文，讲述了作者和他的狗Merle一起爬山，Merle不幸掉进岩石的缝隙中,作者施救未果,三周后却意外找回Merle的故事。第1段交代了故事发生的背景，即作者期望和新伙伴Merle一起爬圣十字山;第2-5段为故事的发展阶段:作者发现Merle不见后努力找寻，最后发现他掉进了岩石的缝隙中且受伤严重;第6段是故事的高潮部分，主要描述了作者施救Merle的过程。文章运用了大量的动作描写、心理描

8、写和环境描写来塑造人物形象和描述Merle遇到的险境。各种细节描写：动作描写（filled my backpack with,put the collar;rushing towards the peak;headed back;dived into; struggled to clear snow and rocks;stick my head in the crack;yelled;slid; fallen off;rolled down)心理描写：（feel energetic; felt panic rising inside me ;a feeling of relief rushe

9、d over me)环境描写：（clear mountain;basin below;a large rock; 700 feet down the upper snowfield; a 40-foot cliff;another 100-foot cliff;the lower snowfield)【思路分析】根据前文最后一段及续写第一段提示语可知，作者查明Merle遇险的经过后，又回到了缝隙处，即Merle现在待的地方。那接下来会发生什么呢?Merle的情况如何?作者的心理活动是怎样的?他会采取什么办法救Merle呢?续写第二段提示语提到三周后，作者接到声称找到了Merle的电话。由此可推

10、断，作者那天未能成功救出Merle，所以在续写第一段时需涵盖此内容以保证故事情节的连贯性及逻辑性。续写第二段时应展开合理想象描述作者接到电话后的一系列行为和心理活动。此外,前文提到Merle很亲近作者，所以续写时可涉及Merle获救后和作者重逢时的亲昵表现。【下水作文】I returned to the crack and called Merle again.Still no response. I opened the can of beef and left it at the mouth of the crack to attract Merle, but in vain. I spe

11、nt another hour crouching outside until the jingle of the collar stopped. At that moment,I thought Merle might have died, so I blamed myself for that. If only I hadnt taken Merle with me! After a while the sun wassetting, and I had to leave the crack and go home.Three weeks later, I received a call

12、claiming to havefound Merle.Though I couldnt believe my ears,Iimmediately rushed into my car to pick him up.When Iheard the familiar bark, I knew my“lost”friend was back. Upon seeing him, I gently touched his skinny body. He wagged his tail and licked my face.Over the next week, Merle recovered well. I now firmly believethere is a close bond between Merle and me.【续写感悟】读后续写材料中通常会运用大量的肖像、心理、动作、环境等细节描写来刻画人物的鲜明形象，呈现人物的内心情感变化，交代故事的背景和渲染气氛，从而推动情节的发展。细节，才是王道。学科网（北京）股份有限公司