读后续写：火海脱险 讲义-高考英语二轮复习.docx

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1、原文：Lightning flashed through the darkness over Sibsons bedroom skylight (天窗). Sibson was shaken by a clap of thunder before he knew what was happening. The storm had moved directly through his two-story wooden house. Then he heard the smoke alarm beeping.Sibson rushed down the stairs barefoot tochec

2、k. He opened the door to the basement,and flamesexploded out. Sibson ran back upstairs to call 911 from his bedroom. I feltglad because the room had a separate outdoor stairway, he explains to the media later.But the phone didnt work, and when he tried to go down the outdoor stairway, he wasstopped

3、by a wall offlames. Sibson realized he was trapped. Suddenly, a piece of wood fell from the roof. Sharp pain raced through his body as he looked down and found his leg bleeding.Sibsons house was three kilometersoff the main road and was so well hidden by trees that he knew calling for help would bef

4、ruitless.Up a hill nearby lived Sibsons neighbor, Huggons. He was lying in bed when something like a smoke alarmstruck his ears. He jumped out of bed, took hisphone and flashlight, and headed down the hillside toward thenoise. That was when he saw the rolling heavy smoke.Huggons dialed 911, and the

5、operator warned him not toenter the house. But Huggons said, There is no way I am going to listen to Sibsonscream and die in that fire.Anyone there? Huggons called out. Then he heard Help! Im trapped! coming from the second floor balcony . He entered the house, but soon had to run back to catch hisb

6、reath.After one moreattempt to get inside the house, Huggons gave up andcircled around back. The wind parted the smoke just for him to catch sight of Sibson. But there was no way to get to him.Para1:With the wind fueling the fire, there was no time to waste and the second floor seemed to be falling

7、down in the next minute.Para2:“Go. Leave me alone.”shouted Sibson with desperate tears in his eyes,”It will kill you,too.”一故事要素分析Who: Sibson HuggonsWhen: at nightWhere: on the second floorWhat: Huggons tried to save Sibson二故事情节分析Para.s 1-4: Sibson was trapped in the fire.Para.s 5-8: Huggons tried to

8、 rescue.Climax/ conflict: How to rescue.三读写预测Para.1: Try to rescue but in vainPara.2: Succeeded in saving e to the rescue.(在改卷过程中发现，段一学生有两种思路。一种是在二楼之外找攀爬工具试图进入却未果的情况，第二种是成功进入二楼却因为Sibson身体原因未能成功救出。我们讨论之后觉得只要能和段二紧密衔接都是可取的。修改后的例文是以学生的原型为基础而进行的打磨，他的恰恰是第二种情况，衔接还算紧密自然）四词汇、高级句型准备1.词汇积累行为类：Huggons: search f

9、or, climb, comfort, pich up the ladder, wet the clothes, cover the face,rush to.Sibson: cry, shout, move the bleeding leg.情绪类：Huggons: in anxiety, courageous, perseverance, in relief.Sibson: desperate, comfort, shocked, grateful.2. 高级句型：分词作状语， as引导的倒装句，独立主格结构，名言警句应用，while引导让步状语从句，no sooner倒装句，虚拟语气等等

10、。但同时，更重要的是连句成篇之后的流畅自然。反之，满是华丽辞藻却整篇来看磕磕绊绊的花架子并不能打动人心。）以下是学生作文原篇:Para.1: When Huggons saw this dangerous situation, he was worried and anxious. He wanted to get the second floor to save Sibson even though there was no way to get t him. Though it was danderous, he didnt give up. Then he looked for high

11、 enough to get to the second floor. After a while, he found it and got the second floor. He catched Sibson, Sibson was lying on the floor, wseat rolling down his face because of tiredness and pain. Huggons struggled to move him, but he was too tired to move. Sibson squeezed a sad smile, he tried his

12、 best to push Huggons.Para.2: Hearing Sibsons words, Huggons was very moved. But he didnt want leave him alone. Although he was tired and painful, he still caught Sibson, putting one of his arms around his shoulder. Huggons supported Sibson slowly to move. While they were walking, they heard fireman

13、s voice. After a while, the fireman looked for them and saved them. Then they were saved to the hospital.学生作文分析：该生是在班级中中等偏上的学生，但成绩并不拔尖。思路大体符合故事发展方向，但从作文中不难看出，有些许语法错误，简单句偏多，句式比较啰嗦。但值得表扬的是，分词作状语运用自如，平时我们在翻译句子所下的功夫或许有一定作用吧。其次，很多同学也注意到“. was lying on the floor, wseat rolling down his face because of tir

14、edness and pain. ”和“squeezed a sad smile,”范文：With the wind fueling the fire, there was no time to waste and the second floor seemed to be falling down in the next minute. When Huggons saw this dangerous situation, anxiety took over him. He struggled to the second floor but in vain. Looking around, h

15、e accidentally noticed a ladder,which could help him. Dangerous as it was, he wouldnt give up his neighour. So he wetted his clothes, covered his face and climbed to the second floor. In the big fire, he caught sight of Sibson, who was lying on the floor, sweat rolling down his face because of tired

16、ness and pain. Huggons struggled to help him move ,but Sibson was too tired to move a bit. In order not to cause damage to Huggons, Sibson tried his best to push him away,squeezing a grateful smile.“Go. Leave me alone.”shouted Sibson with desperate tears in his eyes,”It will kill you,too.”Hearing hi

17、s words, Huggons was deeply moved but determined. A friend in need is a friend indeed, so he wouldnt leave Sibson alone. While he was exhausted and painful, he held Sibson firmly, putting one of his arms on his shoulder. Then Huggons supported him slowly to the balcony. When they were walking painfully in the fire , the firefighter came to their rescue. Luckily, no sooner had they been rescued than the house fell down in a sudden. Looking at Huggons and firefighters, Sibson was overwhelmed by a sense of gratitude. He said gratefully, “But for your help, I would lose my life.”学科网（北京）股份有限公司