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1、读后续写解题思路分析及范文：爬山绍兴市四月份高三模拟考试读后续写解题思路分析和范文呈现绍兴市四月份高三模拟考试读后续写语篇跳出了人与动物之间恩怨情仇的 常规主题套路，取而代之的是朋友之间的友谊这一新颖话题。但是在结构上说 来，语篇仍然还是遵循先抑后扬的原则，在阅读部分第一段交代基本背景：我 对于登高的内心恐惧。第二段则是描述作者在前年暑假与高中同学一起参加的 爬山活动，在这一段中，作者着力从褒义角度呈现这座秘鲁山脉的景色迷人， 很显然，作者力主采用先扬后抑的表达手法，通过描述美丽景色反衬爬山过程 的波折。第三段使用平淡的语调，承前启后，讲述我们爬山的具体行进过程， 既有先行探险成员的迟迟未归，

2、也有我怀疑选错路线的忐忑不安。第四段隐隐 藏有贬义的色彩，担心会有幺蛾子麻烦事出现。下面请看一下绍兴市四月份的读后续写原文和两句提示段首句子：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完 整的短文。I was terrible of heights. Of course, it was not really a fear of being in a high place. Rather, it was the view of a long way to fall, of rocks far below me and no firm wall between me and t

3、he edge. My sense of security was screamingly absent. I could rely only on my own sure-footedness.Despite my fear, two summers ago I somehow found myself climbing to a high place, while quaking inside and out. Most of our high school had come along on a day trip to the Boqueron, a beautiful and plea

4、sant spot in the foothills of Peru. Its chief attraction is the main waterfall, about 100 feet high, that thunders into a crystal clear pool feeding the Aguaytia River. All around the pool and on down to the rushing river are rocks large and small. The beach is strewn （布f茵）with rocks. On both sides

5、of the fall, the jungle stretches to meet it, rising parallel to it on a gentler slope.After eating our lunches, many of us wanted to make the climb to an area above it. We knew others had done so on previous trips. A few guys went first to make sure they were on the right path. But after they left,

6、 my group of seven decided to go ahead without waiting for them to return. I suspected we were going the wrong way, but I kept silent, figuring that the others knew better. We went along the base of the hill until we reached the climb. It stopped me in my tracks.The climb rose steeply above us. Alon

7、g the right edge, the jungle hugged the rocks; passage through its trees seemed unlikely to be achieved. The majority of my view was filled with rocks. Peering back down toward the river, I saw a steep slope of rocks all the way to the water. All I could think about was how far it would be to fall.注

8、意：1 .续写词数应为150左右；2 .请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。Paragraph 1:My tens。thoughts were interrupted by th。realization that my friends were already beginning to climb!Paragraph 2:My friends kept right on climbing but they did not forget me.思路分析1：根据段首第一句和第二句内容，我们可以看出读后续写第一段必须有负面 的情节，因为第二句段首句含有“but they did not forget

9、 me.”这样的信息，“他们没有忘记我”说明我遇到一些困难，假如我没有遇到困难，我是不可能需要 他们的关心担忧，而第二段必须是解决了我的困难，从而主题得到升华。人生的困难可以细分为三个方面：经济、健康和情感。设想第一段续写内 容只是讲述了我在心理上的犹豫和纠结，而第二段内容也是从友谊的可贵这一 主题进行升华，那么我们在情节上的曲折性不是那么复杂，在写作行文上我们 也容易把控。根据这一思路，我们可以呈现下面一段范文：范文呈现1:Paragraph 1:My tense thoughts were interrupted by the realization that mv friends wer

10、e a卜eadv beginning to climb!My anxiety increased as I watched them. Z/Do I turnback?” My whole being shouted. Yes!” Will I regret it later? I really wanted to get to the top, butI voiced my uncertainties to my friends. They dismissed my fears and encouraged me to stick it out. Questioning my own abi

11、lity, I decided at least to attempt the climb. I chose a path that seemed easiest with my friends ahead of me. When the path led up to an extremely narrow area, the difficulties increased, with scary spots one after another. My breathing sped up, and my heart pounded even faster, growing loud in my

12、ears.Paragraph 2:My friends kept right on climbing but they did not forget me. Someone was always behind me to help hold my feet steady when necessary, while someone else was ahead to offer a hand up. I trusted them more than myself. With friends supporting me by words and actions, I slowly gained g

13、round. Finally we came to the toughest place. Once again I shrank when I peered back at the steep slope of rocks. “You can make it! We wont let you fall. My friends assurances gave me the strength to go on. When my feet made contact with the solid rock on the top, I heaved a huge sigh of relief. I c

14、ould feel all the fear draining out of me. I never felt so alive, and so thankful for my friends and that life.(182 words)思路分析2：假如在读后续写第一段的曲折度更大一点，着力描述我摔倒受伤了，而第 二段相应在主题上必须做出调整，不能再只是简单强调友谊的可贵了，适合语 篇的主题只能是只有在遇到危险的时候我们才能珍惜生命和友情的可贵。根据 这一思路，我们可以再呈现下面一段范文：范文呈现2：Paragraph 1:My tense thoughts were interrupt

15、ed by the realization that mv friends were a卜eadv beHinning to climb! Hesitant as I felt, I still eventually managed to build up enough courage to attempt the climb. One step, one step and another step, I began to feel relieved when all of a sudden I lost my balance and fell onto the ground, thus ma

16、king my knees slightly injured. How I wished that I hadnt started the climbing! However, it was no use regretting and I had no alternative but to stand up and hold on.Paragraph 2:My friends kept right on climbing but they did not forget me. They inquired me patiently about my injury and told me that

17、 they were willing to give me a helping hand whenever necessary. What made me more moved was that some of them even acted as my stick to ease my nervousness and tiredness. With their support I succeeded in arriving at the top of the hill and had the chance to admire the amazing scenery on it. Only a

18、t that time was I better aware of the value of life and friendship.(158 words)对于读后续写的语篇呈现内容，我们还可以分解成以下四个部分，然后对 于这四个部分进行具体表达呈现，这样的分类归纳是为了更好让考生具备知识 积累，为应对考场压力做好充分准备:1.褒义情感呈现1) . So fascinated was I by the picturesque scenery that I held my breath to admire it.2) . I was full of gratitude to all the su

19、pport and comfort that my friends offered me during the climbing trip.3) . Never had I so cherished the significance of life and true friendship before in my life.2 .贬义情感呈现1) . To be frank, I thought of quitting climbing the hill for more than one time because of my fear.2) . Terrified at the though

20、t of falling down, I just held my breath, not daring to look at the front.3) . I was in such a dilemma that I wondered what I should do to handle the situation then.3 .褒义动作呈现1) . When seeing the marvellous sights at the top of the hill I jumped up, waving my hands wildly.2) . I embraced my friends t

21、ightly, murmuring that their timely help made a great difference to me.3) . I could hardly tear my eyes away from the splendid beauty at the top of the hill and hugged my friends firmly.4.贬义动作呈现1) . I fell onto the ground heavily, causing my ankles severely injured.2) . My breathing sped up, and my heart pounded even faster, growing loud in my ears.3) . Once again I shrank when peeing back at the steep slope of rocks.绍兴市四月份高三模拟考试读后续写进行了难能可贵的命题尝试，无论在 命题的新颖性和严谨性上都可圈可点，在主题设计方面也饱含正能量，是适合 高考考生考前备战的优秀题型，对于这样的素材，我们必须要认真分析、仔细 挖掘，从语言、结构和内容三方面具体进行模拟训练，多角度成文欣赏，相信 通过这样脚踏实地针对性训练，广大考生必将能够在即将到来的高考中取得理 想成绩。