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1、阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Lee took a deep breath and let it out slowly. When his lungs felt comfortable, he dived beneath the water. Looking up, he could see the bright sun shinning on the waters surface. “Soon,” Lee thought, “I shall be able to hold my breath as long as David. Then I, too, shal

2、l be able to dive for pearls. ”With lungs burning, he quickly surfaced and gasped(喘气) for breath. Lee was small for his twelve years, and he hated being treated as a child. David, his old brother, had been looked upon as a man long before he was Lees age.Now, every day as the sun warmed the bay, Dav

3、id and the other young men went out to dive for oysters (牡蛎). With luck, there would be pearls in many of them. Many times Lee begged to go along, but David always refused.So every day Lee would go to the shallow water to practice. With each days effort, his diving improved and he felt much at home

4、in the water. “Tomorrow I shall challenge David. ” Lee decided. The next morning, Lee rose early, hurrying to catch up with David, who was already on the beach. “David, wait! ” called Lee.The group of men around David grew quiet. Lee continued, “David, I say that I can hold my breath under the water

5、 as long as you can. If I win, I ask only that you treat me as a man and let me dive by your side. ”The men of the village gasped(倒抽气) and began to laugh. David looked amused, “And what if when you lose?”“I will not lose!” He took a breath, “But if I should, I promise not to ask to go with you for a

6、 full year!The men of the village are here to judge. ”Hearing this, David looked surprised.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为100左右；2. 续写部分分一段,开头语已为你写好；But with all of his friends looking on, David had no choice but to agree._文本分析01Readforvocabulary4.2 With each days effort, his diving improved and hefelt much at homei

7、n the water.感到舒适自在02Read for appreciation1.2Looking up, he could see the bright sunshiningon the waters surface.分词短语（前）作伴随状语分词短语（后）作宾语补足语2.1With lungs burning, he quickly surfaced and gasped for breath.with的复合结构4.3 Leeroseearly,hurryingto catch up with David, .rose：rise的过去时，意为“起床”hurrying：分词短语作伴随状语6

8、.1-2What ifwhen you lose?省略结构：What should I do if .8.1Hearing this, David looked surprised.分词短语作伴随状语03Read for plots写作分析ANALYSIS OF WRITING TECHNIQUES01运用“三条线索”推导，丰富故事情节在构思情节时，借助人物线、地点线和情感线三条线索，并结合要求中100词的词数限制，对续写故事情节进行推导。01人物线LeeDavid(Lees brother)other young man根据续写文本首句推断，续写情节中主要是两人的互动。02地点线waterb

9、each从续写文本推测，故事主要发生在沙滩上。03情感线根据人物线的推导，确定故事发生的主要人物和基本情节（本文主要为兄弟二人的互动行为），并据此将合理的情感表达融入故事情节中。情节一：随一声哨响，两人深呼一口气，把头探入水中（Lee紧张）。情节二：Lee憋气很轻松。David渐显吃力（脸部表情）。Lee故意认输。情节三（结局）：David明白是自己输了，承诺第二天和Lee一起潜水捞珍珠去（Lee的兴奋情绪）。04挖掘原文本的信息增强衔接衔接：原文本文末提及哥哥David有点吃惊，续写文本中弟弟Lee应该是赢得了比赛；为了增加故事情节的冲突性，可写Lee故意输给了David。为了在情节合理的基

10、础上使文本词汇和句法结构运用的更加高级，需有意识的加入人物的情感描写和动作描写，这样才能把高级句式结构充分发挥出来。下水范文续写情节展示But with all of his friends looking on, David had no choice but to agree.With the whistle sounding, Lee and David both took a deep breath andplungedtheir headsintothe water. Liwas bent onwinning the game,his heart racing.Each and ev

11、ery days effort, however, paid off eventually. Li seemed to be holding his breath in the waterwithout the slightest difficulty. After a few minutes, he gave a glance to his old brother andfound Davids cheeks rosy with exertionunder the water.It occurred toLithatlosing the game meant more than just f

12、ailing in the game. He surfaced and pretended to gasp for breath. David knew he wasnt the winner.Breathing heavily, he stepped forward, patted Lee on the shoulder and said, Tomorrow you can go with us and dive for pearls!The sea breeze, soft and warm, kissingLees cheeks, he wasall smiles. (139words)

13、译文随着一声哨声响起，李和大卫都深呼了一口气把脑袋潜入水中。为了赢得比赛，李还是比较紧张的。不过，每天的坚持训练终有回报，李在水里憋气显得异常轻松。过了几分钟，他瞥了一眼大卫，感觉大卫似乎有些力不从心，撑不住了。此时，李突然意识到这场比赛对于大卫而言，输了的可能不仅是一场比赛。于是李率先浮出了水面。大卫当然知道是自己输了。看到弟弟为了自己故意输掉比赛，他边喘着粗气边走上前去拍着李的肩膀说，“明天你可以和我们一起去找珍珠去！”和煦的海风拂面，李开怀而笑。下水范文解析ANALYSIS解析利用各种高级表达提升语言的丰富性：1. with the whistle sounding, .运用了with的

14、复合结构2. plunge . into .扎进.里3. be bent on专心于某事4., his heart racing.运用独立主格结构5. each and every .连用两个近义词表示强调6. without the slightest difficulty不费吹灰之力（形容轻松）7. . found Davids cheeks rosy withexertion形容词充当宾语补足语8. It occurred to sb that某人突然想起某事9. Breathing heavily, .分词短语作伴随状语用，意为“喘着粗气”10.The sea breeze, soft and warm, kissingLees cheeks, he wasall smiles.前半分句为独立主格结构be all smiles意为“满脸笑容”学科网（北京）股份有限公司