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1、读后续写专题 郑鲲鹏2023.8.23教学步骤教学步骤step 1 原文呈现原文呈现step 2 逻辑构思逻辑构思step 3 词汇激活词汇激活step 4 写作成文写作成文step 5 典例示范典例示范step 6 评分标准评分标准step7 经验分享经验分享内容贴近学生生活，故事性强，培养学生的分析材料，深度解读材料的能力，逻辑能力，和语言驾驭能力和应用能力通过语言理解和表达的过程内化为思维锻炼、学习积累、应用创新的过程，也是语言学习的任务，侧重于思维的创新，触动学生的写作欲望，创新新颖、丰富、合理的内容。体现了高考的创新性。引导学生具备良好的的品质，学习坚韧乐观的生活态度，符合社会主义核

2、心价值观，传播正能量，彰显试题育人的导向作用。深化高考考试改革，逐渐摒弃语言测试中过多的人为设置语言障碍，将语言测试回归本源，达到真正能体现语言能力的测试目的与宗旨。体现语言的基础性。命题立意-深化高考考试改革，回归语言本源n第二节：满分25分n阅读下列材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。n注意：n1、续写词数应为150左右；n2、请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。读后续写题型要求和分析提供一段350词以内的语言材料，多以记叙故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主，故事情节有曲折、有起伏，故事线索的逻辑性比较强。考生需依据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写(150词左

3、右)，将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。占高考全卷分数的六分之一，可见读后续写能力的提升十分关键。强调原文和段首语的提示作用不可再进一步分段强调故事的完整性回顾高考考点回顾高考考点分析分析卷别卷别写作任务写作任务20202020年新高考年新高考文章以助人为乐为线索展开。在经济衰退时期，Meredith女士和她的孩子们对Bernard一家伸出援手。孩子们制作爆米花，Bernard销售，最终他们成功帮助Bernard一家走出困境。20212021年新高考年新高考文章以母亲节为线索展开。文章讲述的双胞胎Jenna和Jeff为了给母亲做一份美味的早餐，自己动手做饭.但不幸的是他

4、们连连失败，后来在父亲的帮助下获得成功.20222022年新高考年新高考文章以赛跑为线索展开。文章讲述了主人公David因脑疾导致行动不便，教练担心他被嘲笑而让他自己选择是否继续参加越野赛跑，在作者的鼓励下David重新站在起跑线上三篇文章均为乐于助人、团结友爱乐于助人、团结友爱等宣传正能量的话题。文本选材紧贴考生生活，主题思想明确，内容积极向上，语言难度适中，充分体现“以续促写、以续促学以续促写、以续促学”的命题特点三篇文章以生动地道的语言给考生提供语言输入，以人物的情感变化培养考生的文化意识；以构思后续情节，考查考生的思维品质；以结构完整、情节融洽为续写标准，检查考生的学习能力和语言水平，

5、发挥了考试的积极导向作用和评价功能。读后续写试题考查英语综合运用能力，包括理解文章内容、结构和上下文逻辑关系，合理发挥想象力创造新内容，运用丰富的词汇和语法结构进行准确、连贯的表达等。新高考试卷写作局部的读后续写材料内容贴近日常生活，情节简单清楚，语言通俗易懂，学生不仅能够读得懂，还能产生共鸣与联想，从而写出恰当的续写语篇。12Five years ago,I had a nine-to-five job,and I usually commuted(通勤)to work by bus.Those long tiring hours of travelling were always anno

6、ying.But one day,it was healing.It was a warm March evening,and Id just taken a seat on the bus that would take me home.I sat in the third row,by the window,on the drivers side.It was nearly 6:00 p.m.,but the bus was not yet full and the driver gave no signs that he intended to get the bus on the ro

7、ad anytime soon.34A middle-aged woman took a seat opposite me.She was crying.Not speaking to anyone in particular,she tearfully told her story.She had come to the city to visit her daughter.On the way to the last stop,a thief had stolen one of her bags.It had contained half of the money shed brought

8、 with her.The other half was rolled in a handkerchief and hidden under her blouse,so she fortunately still had some money left.56The bus conductor,driver,and other passengers listened to her story.After a few minutes,she stopped crying,took out some cheese bread from her bag,and began to eat,looking

9、 still worried.An old man in tattered(破旧的)clothes got on the bus.He sat in the seat directly in front of the woman.After a few minutes,all seats were taken.The driver got behind the wheel and started the engine.The bus conductor collected tickets and began asking us where we were getting off.When he

10、 came to the old mans seat,he became doubtful and asked the old man whether he had any money.The old man admitted that he did not.He explained that he had spent all his money this morning when hed accidentally got on the wrong bus and now he was trying to go home.7注意：1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作

11、答。Upon hearing this,the bus conductor ordered the old man to get off the bus._The woman seated behind the old man was also listening and observing the whole thing._Upon hearing this,the bus conductor ordered the old man to get off the bus.售票员的做法（允许？驱赶？）老人的反应（下车？落泪？乞求？愤怒？其他？）司机的做法（施以援手？）环境描写（欢快？沉默？）场

12、景预设The woman seated behind the old man was also listening and observing the whole thing.女士的反应（默不作声？仗义执言？）女士的做法（说话？付费？分面包？其他？）售票员/司机与作者Battle总结全文（乐于助人旅途？）回扣首段！（tiring+annoying healing）思路点拨第一段首句内容：“由第一段首句内容“听到这句话，售票员命令老人下车。”可知，第一段可描写老人面对售票员的驱赶时的反应，他苦苦哀求未果，司机站出来继续驱赶老人下车，除了司机言辞激烈的话语和老人的啜泣声，整个公共汽车陷入了可怕的沉

13、寂。”Upon hearing this,the bus conductor ordered the old man to get off the bus.第二段首句内容：“由第二段首句内容“坐在老人后面的女人也在聆听和观察着这一事件。”可知，第二段可描写妇女与售票员或司机争论并为老人买了票，还分面包给老人，作者也由此感悟到：当我们可以为身处困境中的他人力所能及地施以援手时，不仅一段车程可以变得轻松愉悦，人生旅途也会因此甜蜜非常。”The woman seated behind the old man was also listening and observing the whole thi

14、ng.公交车售票员听到后，命令老人下车。老人一动不动。当他恳求公交车售票员让他坐公交车，这样他就可以在天黑前回家时，他几乎哭了。一直在听他解释的公交车司机站了起来，走到老人身边，重复了售票员的命令，让老人下车。除了司机的严厉言辞和老人的抽泣，整辆公交车都陷入了可怕的沉默。汉语文本Upon hearing this,the bus conductor ordered the old man to get off the bus.The old man didnt move.He was almost in tears as he begged the bus conductor to let h

15、im take the bus so he could get home before dark.The bus driver,who had been listening to his explanation,stood up,walked to the old man,and repeated the conductors order to ask the old man to get off the bus.Apart from the harsh words from the driver and sobs from the old man,the whole bus was in a

16、 terrible silence.坐在老人身后的女士也在倾听和观察着整件事。当公交车司机和售票员对老人提高声音时，她喊道：“别指责他了！你没看到他只是想回家吗？”“他没有钱！”司机喊道。“那不是把他赶下车的理由，”她坚持说。与此同时，她把手伸进衬衫里，拿出剩下的钱，把车费递给了售票员。“这是他和我的车费，别再让他难过了。”当我们让别人轻松的时候，这段旅程是多么甜蜜啊！The woman seated behind the old man was also listening and observing the whole thing.When the bus driver and condu

17、ctor raised their voices at the old man,she shouted,“Stop bothering him!Cant you see hes only trying to get home?”“He doesnt have any money!”the driver shouted back.“Well,thats no reason to throw him off the bus,”she insisted.Meanwhile,she reached inside her blouse,took out her remaining money,and h

18、anded the fares to the conductor.“Here is his fare and mine.Just stop giving him a hard time.”How much sweet the journey was when we made it easy for others!对作者给出的题眼进行释义典型错误示例1、全文时态错乱：I will meet my friend last week.2、主谓不一致：You is beautiful.3、用词不恰当：We all like him terriblely.4、男女不分：My brother.She is

19、.5、不规则动词变形：stand-standed（）stood（）6、丢落冠词：I will buy ticket for him.7、介词乱用：be good in 8、造词大法：amazation encourag经验总结必备4关系（续写之元气）逻辑思维能力逻辑思维能力1、原文与原文的关系（宏观）2、原文与续写的关系（宏观）3、原文最后一段与续写第一段的关系（微观）4、续写第一段与续写第二段的关系（微观）核心4要义（续写之骨骼）信息分析能力信息分析能力1、人物：主要人物/次要人物其他人物主角（大/小主角）配角关注主要人物和次要人物的言行举止通过关键词给人物“定性”2、事件：主角与主角之间a

20、nd主角与配角之间3、环境：动词类、形容词类4、总结：回扣作者核心观点healinghealing21班出彩4秘籍（续写之血肉）1、高级词汇（动词、形容词）2、从句（主、宾、表、定、状）3、复合结构、倒装句、强调句4、无灵主语句有我之境，以我观物，故物皆著我之色彩。无我之境，以物观物，故不知何者为我，何者为物。续写不是法外之地，全文皆是作者核心思想的外延。小结：戴着镣铐跳舞有造境，有写境，此理想与写实二派之所由分。然二者颇难分别。因大诗人所造之境，必合乎自然，所写之境，亦必邻于理想故也。“造境”是诗人对现实的升华，是诗人在对现实世界仔细观察的基础上，通过浪漫的手法描绘出来的艺术图景。“写境”是诗人对现实的忠实再现，在对现实的再现之中，往往又寄托了作者自身的理想和愿望。因为两者往往融合在一起，你中有我，我中有你，因此王国维说“二者颇难分别”。从人间词话浅析读后续写的“境界”Thank you