2023年全国英语高考1卷读后续写我的写作比赛讲评与示范讲义-2024届高三英语二轮复习.docx

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1、一.读后续写原题目When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest, I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language.举彳列子Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me t

2、o present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail? His reply: Because I love your stories. If youre willing to apply yourself, I think you

3、 have a good shot at this. Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.【写作思路】I chose Paul Revere*s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith （专艮匠） in Boston who rode a horse all night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come

4、 straight from the horse* mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funnj, and unlikely to be anyone else*s choice.【写作过程What did the horse think, as he sped through the night? Did he get tired? Have doubts? Did he want to quit? I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like

5、 Reveres horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, “Great. Now

6、, write it again.n I wrote it again, and again, and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didnt win, I wouldn*t care.当我在中学的时候，我的社会学老师让我参加一个写作比赛，我想都没想 就拒绝了。我不喜欢写作。我的家庭来自巴西，所以英语只是我的第二语 言。写作对我来说是如此困难和痛苦，以至于我的老师允许我通过表演一 个剧本来展示我关于泰坦尼克号沉没

7、的论文，我在剧中扮演所有的角色。 没有人比他笑得更厉害了。那么，为什么他突然强迫我做一件我肯定会失败的事情呢？他回答说.“因 为我喜欢你的故事。如果你愿意努力，我认为你很有可能获得这份工作。” 受到他的话的鼓舞，我同意试一试。我选择保罗里维尔的马作为我的主题。保罗里维尔是波士顿的一名银 匠，1775年4月18日，他整夜骗马去列克星敦，警告人们英国士兵要来 了。我的故事将直接来自马的口述。不是个好主意，但很有趣，不太可能是别人的选择。马在黑夜中疾驰时在想什么呢？他累了吗？有疑问吗？他想辞职吗？我立刻表 示同情。我累了。我有过怀疑。我想辞职。但是，就像里维尔的马一样， 我继续前进。我工作很努力。我

8、检查了我的拼写。我请姐姐纠正我的语法。 我从图书馆借了六本关于保罗里维尔的书。我甚至读了一些。当我把文章交给老师时，他读了后大笑起来，说“太好了。现在，再写一 遍。”我写了一遍又一遍。当我终于写完时，获胜的念头已经让位于写作 的乐趣。如果我没赢，我也不在乎。注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.ParaI: A few weeks Iater, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the newsPara2: I went to my teacher1 office after the award pr

9、esentation.二、审题思考(1)第一段段首句的“news”是什么？根据第二段段首句the award presentat i on而且我要去参加颁奖仪式。可 以推断出消息是我的作品获奖了，(2)我为什么会拿到奖？我的作文很幽默，有意思：让老师大笑，所以是funny自己的潜力直修改持不懈并且从中找到了乐趣。(3)第一段的结尾和第二段开头如何衔接因为第二段段首句说“我要去老师办公室，所以我们应该想为什么我要 去老师办公室。也许是颁奖礼的时候看到了老师鼓堂的身影或者是我回想 起了老师的鼓励。(4)在老师办公室里我们会有怎样的对话？老师祝贺我，肯定我的天赋。我感谢老师的鼓励，让我对写作有了态度

10、上的转变，(5)如何回扣到“马”?“But, I i ke Revere s horse, I kept goi ng. ”三、微情节设计 Paral : A few weeks Iater, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.(1)揭示news是什么(2)我的心情：难以置信(3)参加颁奖典礼(4)观众反应(5)我想到/看到老师Para2： I went to my teacher1 off ice after the award presentation.(1)见面时的动作描写(2)老师祝贺我，肯定我的天赋(3)我感谢

11、老师：想到老师的督促，让自己对写作有了态度转变(4)我的感悟 原创范文：Paral: A few weeks later, when / almostthe contest, there camethe After fierce competition, my contribution stood out and won the first place. Never had I anticipated that my writing competency could receive such recognition. At the award ceremony, hearing my name

12、 called, I strode onto the podium and took the trophy with excitement and an unprecedented feeling of accomplishment. With thunderous applause echoing in the auditorium, scarcely could I wait to share the the honor with my teacher, who contributed a lot to me discovering my potential and passions.Pa

13、ya2:1 to “w teacher 飞 office aft the awa/d DYesentation. As I entered, he looked up from his desk, a radiant smile spreading across his face, and said, Congratulations! Your diligence and perseverance paid off.” But for your inspiration, I could never won the prize. I extended my cordial gratitude t

14、o him for all the guidance and affirmation he offered me. Recalling the hardships encountered for the duration of writing, I perceived that it was the self-assurance in my own potential and persistence that counted the most. With it, I knew that no challenge would be too daunting. And I would keep g

15、oing on my path, like Revered horse.下水文：A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. It was me who won the first prize! Overwhelmed by wild joy, I rose to my feet and punched my fist in the air, shouting out loudly I made it!” Feeling on the top of world, I could instant

16、ly picture my family members hugging me with pride. The following day as I stood on the stage of the award presentation, my tears brimmed over and rolled down my cheeks unconsciously. Through my mind echoed my teachers encouraging words. It was then that I realized that without him I couldt have fou

17、nd myself in such potential. (94 words)I went to my teachers office after the award presentation. Extremely eager and excited, I steppde into his room, expressing my sincere appreciation with my eyes glittering with contentment. The moment a bright smile worked its way across his face, our glances m

18、et briefly. I hope you can insist on writing J said my teacher, holding out a hand and stroking my head slightly. A strong emotion choked my words. It suddenly dawned on me that tough as it was, there was nothing more valuable than the sense of accomplishment. The golden sunlight slid in the office, lighting my face as well as the future path for me to follow my writing dream. (102 wrods)