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1、读读后后续续写写-以以2021年全国年全国I卷高考真卷高考真题为题为例例提提供供一一段段350词词之之内内的的语语言言材材料料（记记叙叙文文/shortstory），要要求求考考生生依依据据该该材材料料内内容容、所所给给段段落落开开头头语语进进行行续续写写（150词词左左右右），将将其其发发展展成成一一篇篇与与给给定定材材料料有有逻逻辑辑衔衔接接、情情节节和结构完整和结构完整的短文。的短文。什么是什么是读读后后续续写？写？读读后后续续写能力要求写能力要求一、记叙文阅读理解能力一、记叙文阅读理解能力二、由读到写的思维能力二、由读到写的思维能力三、记叙文书面表达能力三、记叙文书面表达能力主题、语篇

2、结构、关键信息等主题、语篇结构、关键信息等创造性思维创造性思维语言运用的准确性和丰富性语言运用的准确性和丰富性读读后后续续写的基本步写的基本步骤骤1.Readforthetheme2.ReadfortheplotSet-upProblemRisingactionClimaxFallingactionEndingTheme读读后后续续写的基本步写的基本步骤骤1.Readforthetheme2.Readfortheplot3.Read for the organization(the order of time/place,changeofmood/attitudeifnecessary)4.R

3、eadforthepointofview5.Readfortheforeshadowing1.ReadforthethemeLovebetweenfamilymembers.2.Readfortheplot1)set-upwho:where:when:Twins(JennaandJeff)/Mother/FatherKitchenMothersDay2.Readfortheplot2)Problem3)Risingaction4)Climax/FallingAction5)EndingAtthebeginning,everythingwasgoing_.Turningpoint:Thepanw

4、astoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Thekitchenwasina_.Para1:Para2:smoothlymess3.Readfortheorganizationtheorderoftime:thechangeofmood(thetwins):at6a.m.,firstnext,thistimethenthenextminutenowExcitedConfidentFineThetwinsplannedabreakfastandtheythoughttheyknewthejob.The beginning went welluntilt

5、hefirstpieceofbreadgotburnt.The porridge became a mess andthesecondbreadturnedblack.ContinuationPara.2:Thetwins carried the breakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherupContinuation Para.1:Theirfatherappeared.PanickedDisappointedHappy;RelievedSenseofachievement4.ReadforthepointofviewThethird-personnarrative

6、.研究所给首句，寻找原文线索，构思情节研究所给首句，寻找原文线索，构思情节承上Q1(心理）：Howdidfatherfeelonseeingthemess?Q2（语言):Whatwouldtheirfatherandthetwinssay?Q3（动作）：Whatdidtheirfatherdowhenheknewtheplan?Q4（动作）：Howdidtheirfatherhelpthetwins?Q5(心理)：Didtheycookthebreakfastsuccessfully?（启下）Para 1:As the twins looked around them in disappoin

7、tment,theirfatherappeared.Para2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.研究所给首句，寻找原文线索，研究所给首句，寻找原文线索，构思情节构思情节承上：Q1（动作、语言）：Whatdidthetwinsdoandsaytocheeruptheirmother?Q2（动作、面部表情等）：Howdidtheirmotherreactandfeelwhenshesawthebreakfast?Q3(动作、心理)：Howdidthetwinsfeel?点题：LovePara2:Thetwinscarr

8、iedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.续写续写:Para1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Para2:The twins carried the breakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.负能量负能量正能量正能量反反转转在父亲的帮助下在父亲的帮助下,早早餐顺利做好了餐顺利做好了母亲非常惊喜母亲非常惊喜!段首句段首句 决定故事走向决定故事走向不随意添加新人物不随意添加新人物 段首句段首句 决定故事走向决定故事走向负能量

9、负能量-转转-正能量正能量唯物主义，不科幻不玄幻不魔幻不童话，积极乐观正能量，结局大圆满，不能出现人物死亡l内容合理内容合理l语言丰富言丰富写写l语篇篇连贯语语言丰富言丰富语法法结构构1）with复合复合结构构2）分）分词作状作状语3）形容）形容词短短语作状作状语细节描写描写Desperateandhopeless,Janekneltdown,tearsstreamingdownherface.Spottingthemessysituation,theirfatherimmediatelyunderstoodwhattheywereupto.Withtearswellingupinhiseye

10、s,hethankedagainandagainforsavinghim.语语言丰富言丰富细节描写描写1）环境描写境描写Itwasaverydarkandfoggymorning.2)心理描写心理描写Ifeltmythroattightenedandmykneesfeltweak.3)动作描写作描写A smile spread slowly across his face.Then,hejumpedup,hiseyestwinklinglikestars.4）对话描写描写Colinglaredather.“Youdidntcometoseeme!”心理描写心理描写兴奋、欣喜、欣喜伤心（哭）心（

11、哭）惊惊讶细节细节描写描写u伤心心upsetfrustratedheart-brokensadbrainstormingdisappointed心理描写心理描写Tearsrolldownonescheekswhenintearsburstintotears/burstoutcryingWithtears(wellingup)inoneseyes,beseizedbyaburstofsadnessu伤心心心理描写心理描写upsetandfrustrated,那那对双胞胎双胞胎眼含泪水，跑到父眼含泪水，跑到父亲跟前解跟前解释了一切。了一切。_,theyrantotheirfatherandexpl

12、ainedeverything._,the twins sat there,notknowingwhattodo.这对双胞胎坐在那里，感到很沮双胞胎坐在那里，感到很沮丧，不知道，不知道该怎么怎么办。那那对双胞胎感到一双胞胎感到一阵悲悲伤，禁不住痛哭起来。，禁不住痛哭起来。The twins_andcouldnthelpcryingbitterly.WithtearswellingupintheireyesUpsetandfrustratedwereseizedbyaburstofsadnessu伤心心场景描景描绘：1.双胞胎由于厨房一双胞胎由于厨房一团糟而糟而伤心心心理描写心理描写u兴奋、欣喜

13、、欣喜faceeyesheart心理描写心理描写u兴奋、欣喜、欣喜OnesfacelitupfaceSbwaswildwithjoywhenOnesheartwasfilledwithexcitementasOnesexcitementbuiltupasheartOneseyesweretwinkling/shiningwithexcitementeyes心理描写心理描写u兴奋、欣喜、欣喜_asshesawthebreakfastmadebyherkids.2.2.当她看到孩子们做的早餐时，她的脸上洋溢着笑容当她看到孩子们做的早餐时，她的脸上洋溢着笑容1.1.听到这些话，这对双胞胎点了点头，眼

14、睛里闪烁着兴奋的光芒。听到这些话，这对双胞胎点了点头，眼睛里闪烁着兴奋的光芒。Hearing the words,the twins nodded their heads,_theireyesshiningwithexcitement.Herfacelitup2.妈妈看到孩子看到孩子们做的早餐做的早餐时的情景的情景1.双胞胎听到爸爸安慰的双胞胎听到爸爸安慰的话/得到爸爸的帮助得到爸爸的帮助场景描景描绘：心理描写心理描写u惊惊讶surprised/amazed/astonished/shockedOnesmouthopenedinastonishmentasOneseyeswidenedatth

15、esightofSbrubbedoneseyesindisbelief.brainstorming心理描写心理描写u惊惊讶他他们的母的母亲惊惊讶地地睁大了眼睛，大了眼睛，“你你们俩做的早餐？做的早餐？”Their mother_.“Youtwocookedbreakfast?”widenedhereyesinastonishment场景描景描绘：1.妈妈看到孩子看到孩子们端来早餐端来早餐心理描写心理描写动动作描写作描写u眼部眼部动作作stareatglareatglanceatexchangeglanceswinkatsbadmirethemoon盯着看盯着看/凝视凝视怒目而视怒目而视瞥一眼瞥

16、一眼赏月赏月相互对视相互对视眨眼眨眼动动作描写作描写Jenna转向父向父亲，他，他们偷偷地互相使眼色。地互相使眼色。2.JennaturnedtoFatherandthey_ateachothersecretly.u眼部眼部动作作winked1.JennaturnedtoFatherandthey_secretly.exchangeglances动动作描写作描写u嘴部嘴部动作作(哭、笑、哭、笑、说)低声低声说尖叫尖叫呼喊呼喊咬咬吞吞嚼嚼murmur/whisperscreamexclaimbiteswallowchew动动作描写作描写u嘴部嘴部动作作(哭、笑、哭、笑、说)“HappyMothe

17、rsDay!”thetwins_inonevoice.Mother_intoasandwichandsaiditwasthebestshehadevertasted.妈妈咬了一口三明治，咬了一口三明治，说这是她吃是她吃过的最好吃的三明治。的最好吃的三明治。“母母亲节快快乐!”双胞胎异口同声地喊道。双胞胎异口同声地喊道。exclaimedbit动动作描写作描写u手部手部动作作givesbahugtakesbbythehandreachintoonespocketreachoutoneshandspatsbonthehead给某人一个某人一个拥抱抱牵住某人的手住某人的手把手伸把手伸进口袋口袋伸出某

18、人的手伸出某人的手拍拍某人的拍拍某人的头动动作描写作描写u手部手部动作作父父亲亲并并没没有有责责备备他他们们的的粗粗心心大大意意，反反而而露露出出灿灿烂烂的的笑笑容容，拍拍他们的头。拍拍他们的头。Insteadofblamingthemfortheircarelessness,theirfather _a bright smile and _themontheirheads.putonpatted动动作描写作描写u脚部脚部动作作偷偷溜溜进/溜出溜出偷偷地溜上楼地溜上楼踮着脚走着脚走进房房间徐徐靠近徐徐靠近慢慢挪步慢慢挪步追逐追逐slideinto/slideoutofsneakupthesta

19、irstiptoeintotheroomedgeclosertoinchforwardchase(after)动动作描写作描写u脚部脚部动作作一切都解决了，他一切都解决了，他偷偷溜回床上。溜回床上。Everythingsettled,he_backtobed.sneaked一切都解决了，父一切都解决了，父亲踮着脚走着脚走进房房间。Everythingsettled,he_intotheroom.tiptoed衔衔接接过过渡渡就在那就在那时突然突然让某人开心某人开心/惊惊讶/放松的是放松的是Justatthatmoment/attheverymomentSuddenly/allofasudden

20、Toonesjoy/surprise/relief出出现转机的机的过渡渡衔衔接接过过渡渡时间过渡渡不久之后不久之后过了一会儿了一会儿没没过多久多久过了很久了很久正在做正在做这时将要做将要做这时beforelongafterawhile/momentslaterItwasnotlongbefore/Itwaslongbefore/afterwhatseemedagesIwasdoing.when/Iwasabouttodo.when范文展示范文展示As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.Wit

21、h tears in her eyes,Jenna ran to her father andexplainedeverything.Totheirsurprise,insteadofblamingthemfor their carelessness,their father put on a bright smile andpattedthemontheirheads.“Doyouwanttogiveyourmotherasurprise?Letmehelpyoufixit.”Hearingthewords,thetwinsnoddedtheirheads,theireyesshiningw

22、ithexcitement.Underthefathersinstructionthetwinswereagainbusyingthemselveswith eggs,milk,rice,and all the other ingredients.Momentslater,everythingsettled,fathersneakedbacktobed.Thetwinspreparedthebreakfasttray,addingacardtheyhadmade.范文展示范文展示The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mo

23、ther up.“HappyMothersDay!”thetwinsexclaimedin one voice.Their mother widened her eyes inastonishment.“You two cooked breakfast?”She shookFatherwhowaspretendingtosnore.Hepretendedtobeastonishedwhenhesawthebreakfast.Motherbitintoasandwichandsaiditwasthebestshehadevertasted.Herfacelitupandhuggedherchildren.Jeffimmediatelywantedtohaveabit,whileJennaturnedtoFatherandtheywinkedateachothersecretly.Lovefilledthewholeroom.Whatabeautifulandsweetsurprise!Thank you for your listening!Kelly