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1、第二讲抽丝剥茧攻克读后续写第一节应试流程经典剖析典例展示阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。(2021新高考全国卷)三线文本剖析时间线：The twins had a plan for Mothers Day. The big day came at last. The pair began to carry out the plan at 6 am. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread.情节线：本文以母亲节为线索展开，讲述了双胞胎Jenna和Jeff为了献给母

2、亲一份美味的早餐，自己动手做早餐。但不幸的是，他们连连失败。情感线：首段交代背景时的兴奋之情(The twins were filled with excitement.) 第二段开头时的迫不及待(The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 am. The pair went down.) 初遇状况时的信心满满(Jenna threw the burnt piece.and put in the other slice of bread. She turned down the fire .Jeff stayed calm and turned

3、off the gas.)再遇状况时的惊慌失措(Jenna panicked. Jeffs hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain.)两段续写提示第一段提示句表明在两个孩子失望透顶、无所适从时，人生导师爸爸出现了。再根据第二段提示可知，第一段应该以描写孩子们是如何在父亲的指导下成功地为妈妈准备了爱心早餐。本段第二句最好的描写方向是爸爸出现后，两个孩子的反应(全文是立足于他们进行推进的)以及在父亲的指导下，如何做的。第二段提示句表明接下来要写妈妈与两个孩子间的互动。为回应文章开头(How pleased and proud Mo

4、ther would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.)，要侧重描写妈妈的感受高兴、骄傲及感动。本段第二句最好的描写方向是妈妈的惊讶(映照文章标题A MOTHERS DAY SURPRISE)。一核价值取向该材料的价值取向是关注“母亲节”这个特别的节日所传达的情怀感恩母亲的付出以及亲密家庭关系的建立。家庭纽带(family bond)的培养与发展靠的是父母对孩子的付出与指导，孩子对父母对家庭的责任与担当。A MOTHERS DAY SURPRISEThe twins were filled with excitement as they th

5、ought of the surprise they were planning for Mothers Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to d

6、o.The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 am. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jen

7、na found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the s

8、ink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off

9、the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeffs hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece

10、of bread in the pan had turned black as well.注意：续写词数应为150左右。As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. 【参考范文】As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Fathers appearing w

11、as like a savior to the two children. Under the guidance of their father, they took positive actions and started all over again. They made the bread and then went on cooking porridge. Father helped them adjust the fire, which was the key to success. It was all right this time. Delicious breakfast wa

12、s ready. How happy they were!The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. When their mother saw the delicious and perfect breakfast in front of her, she was very surprised. It was not only the gift, but the love of the children for her that moved her very much. The two children

13、 could finish cooking a breakfast, which she didnt expect. The children said loudly, “Happy Mothers Day！” Mother hugged them tightly and kissed them again and again.名师点评：续写内容抓住了文章的主要情节，围绕着主要人物(twins及mother)展开，结构紧凑、语言丰富。续写内容与两个提示句衔接自然，逻辑合理，且文风一致，思路积极向上。符合高分范文的标准与要求。另外，在对细节的处理上体现了较高的知识储备，如Mother hugge

14、d them tightly and kissed them again and again就富有极强的画面感。即时训练阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。(2021浙江卷1月改编)Pumpkin (南瓜) carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpki

15、n. My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home, and as the eldest child I have an advantageI carried an 85pounder back last year. This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14yearold brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately we forgot to weigh them

16、 before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. Im unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time. W

17、ith the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over and pressed my head against the opening. At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit, my nose briefly prevented entry. Finally I managed to put my whole head into it, like a cork (软木

18、塞) forced into a bottle. I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders.My excitement was shortlived. The pumpkin was heavy. “Im going to set it down, now，” I said, and with Jason helping to support its weight，I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest. It was

19、 only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use. “I c

20、ant get it out！” I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space. 注意：续写词数应为150左右。It was five or six minutes though it felt much longer. The video was posted the Monday before Halloween. 三线文本剖析时间线：We picked pumpkins in the field We forgot to weigh I bent over and pressed my head a

21、gainst the opening. At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then. Finally I managed to put my whole head into itIt was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized.When I pulled hard.情节线：本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者家有在万圣节雕刻南瓜的传统，今年也不例外，家里所有人都在厨房的餐桌上辛勤地工作着，而作者的妈妈则在拍摄一年一度的活动。结果作者将头伸进了南瓜里，被卡住了，无论如何也无法挣

22、脱出来。情感线：比赛一开始的兴奋和信心满满(determined to prove my point.it seemed to make perfect sense) 过程中的自以为是(got jammed.went on with my task.I managed to put my whole head into) 自傲后的小失落(My excitement was shortlived)意外出现后的紧张、担心和害怕(I got into a panic.moved my head around trying to find the right angle.I shouted.)两段续写

23、提示第一段首句内容“虽然时间只过去了五、六分钟，但还是感觉要长得多。”可知，第一段可描写作者是如何在爸爸的帮助下得救的。第二段首句内容“这段视频是在万圣节前的周一发布的。”可知，第二段可描写作者头被卡在南瓜里这段视频在网上的走红情况，以及视频走红对作者家和作者的影响。一核价值取向该材料的价值取向是面对生活中的意外事件，要有积极的乐观主义精神，要学会接受生活的赐予并积极面对。【参考范文】It was five or six minutes though it felt much longer. All efforts to pull my head out of the pumpkin were

24、 tried, but in vain. “Dad! Emergency! Help needed！” Jason yelled, and called dad for help. Upon hearing it, Dad immediately rushed out and snatched a knife, tearing it open. It was just at that moment that Jason sat on my lap while dad pulled with all his might. “Dont use up all your oxygen，” Mom su

25、ggested. The pumpkin eased past my mouth and then climbed, inch by inch, over the most difficult organmy nose. My head was finally released and it was just at that time that I found my mom had been filming the whole process. The video was posted the Monday before Halloween. To my excitement, when I

26、surfed the Internet, I realized the video had created a huge influence and received likes and comments given by hundreds of thousands of viewers. When I went to the campus the other day, I was recognized by children Id never met. The pumpkin made me a minor celebrity. If this incident were a trick G

27、od played on me, I might as well regard it as my treat for everyone to have an unforgettable Halloween. 第二节知识积累逐项突破一、心理描写(一)兴奋、开心、感动关键词语happy/warm开心的/温暖的thrilled 兴奋的moved/touched/excited 感动的delighted 高兴的joy 开心sweet 甜蜜的cheerful 欢快的eager 热切的willing 乐意的content/pleased 满足的，满意的常用词汇a mixture of excitement

28、 and happiness 既兴奋又开心in cheerful spirits 心情愉快keep up ones spirits 振作精神a satisfied look 满意的表情dance/jump for joy 高兴地跳起来tears of happiness flowing down 流下幸福的泪水feel inspired/encouraged 感到鼓舞be in high spirits 精神高涨be wild with joy 欣喜若狂优美句子1Deeply/Immensely touched，I bent and gave the girl a hug.被深深感动，我弯下身

29、拥抱了小女孩。2Tears filling her eyes，she offered her heartfelt gratitude.她热泪盈眶，表示衷心的感谢。3With tears streaming down her face，she ran out of the room.泪水顺着她的脸颊流了下来，她跑出了房间。4All those present to listen to her sad story were moved to tears.凡在场听到她悲惨经历的人无不感动得流泪。5I was greatly touched by what you told me.你对我讲的话使我大受

30、感动。6It is very moving to see how much strangers can care for each other.看到陌生人之间这般彼此关照，实在令人感动。7His eyes twinkle with pleasure every time he remembers last winter. 每当他想起去年冬天，就喜上眉梢。8He was determined to tell people the truth, but no one could hear his voice.他决心告诉人们真相，但是没有人能听见他的声音。9It filled his mind wi

31、th a great, bright light.他的脑子里充满了明亮的光。10He was delighted to receive such impressive recognition for his achievements.他的成就获得大家的认可，他很开心。佳句翻译1他的发言鼓舞人心，让我很受触动。His speech was inspiring and touched my heart.2我心里像喝了蜜一样，甜滋滋的。My heart is as sweet as honey.3她脸上总是挂着心满意足的微笑。There is always a smile of contentmen

32、t on her face.4当主持人宣布她获奖时，她兴奋极了。(一句多译)When the host announced that she won the prize，she felt thrilled.When the host announced that she won the prize，her eyes twinkled with excitement.(激动得两眼放光)When the host announced that she won the prize，her heart was thumping with excitement.(激动得心怦怦跳)When the hos

33、t announced that she won the prize，a wide excitement took hold of her.(兴奋不能自已)5当妈妈亲吻他时，小baby开心极了。(一句多译)When his mother kissed him on the cheek，the baby was happy/delighted/full of joy.When his mother kissed him on the cheek，it seemed as if the baby were on top of the world.(非常开心) When the mother kis

34、sed the baby on the cheek，his face beamed and his bright smile lit up the room.(眉开眼笑；笑容照亮房间)When the mother kissed the baby on the cheek，his eyes danced with joy and sweetness.(欢欣雀跃)语篇训练阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。(2021长郡十五校第二次联考)Once upon a time, two brothers, who lived on adjoining(毗邻的)farms, fe

35、ll into conflict. It was the first serious flight in 10 years of farming side by side, sharing machinery, and trading labour and goods as needed without a hitch.Then the long cooperation fell apart. It began with a small misunderstanding and it grew into a major difference, and finally it exploded i

36、nto an exchange of bitter words followed by weeks of silence.Very early one morning there was a knock on the older brothers door. He opened it to find a man with a carpenters toolbox.“Im looking for a few days work，”he said. “Perhaps you would have a few small jobs here and there. Could I help you？”

37、“Well as it happens there is，”said the older brother.“I do have a job for you. Look across the stream at that farm. Thats my neighbour. In fact, its my younger brother. Once there was a meadow (草地) between us and last week he took his bulldozer (推土机) and plowed a stream between us. Well, he may have

38、 done this to hurt me, but Ill go one better than that. See that pile of wood by the barn? I want you to build me a fence. a 2meterhigh fence, so I wont need to see him or his place anymore.”The carpenter said，“I think I understand the situation. Show me the nails and the posthole digger and Ill be

39、able to do a job that pleases you.”注意：续写词数应为150左右。The older brother helped the carpenter get the materials ready and then he was off for the day. The neighbour，his younger brother，was coming across the bridge merrily with his hand outstretching to the older brother. 【参考范文】The older brother helped th

40、e carpenter get the materials ready and then he was off for the day.The carpenter worked hard all that day, measuring，sawing，digging and nailing. About sunset when the older brother returned, the carpenter had just finished his job.The older brothers eyes opened wide and his jaw dropped.There was no

41、 fence there at all; instead there was a bridge.a bridge stretching from one side of the creek to the other. The neighbour, his younger brother, was coming across the bridge merrily with his hand outstretching to the older brother. “You are quite a fellow to build this bridge after all Ive said and

42、done，” he said. The two brothers then met in the middle of the bridge, taking each others hand and embraced. Their conflict was finally at an end. They then turned to see the carpenter hoist his toolbox on his shoulder. “No, wait. Please stay a few days. Ive a lot of other projects for you，” said th

43、e older brother. “Id love to stay on，” the carpenter said, “but I have many more bridges to build.” (二)紧张、羞愧、绝望关键词语nervous紧张frightened/afraid 害怕ashamed 羞愧的sad/depressed 悲伤、抑郁的shocked 震惊的freeze 僵住disappointed/frustrated 沮丧的downhearted/discouraged 消沉的常用词汇feeling a lump rise in my throat 感到喉咙哽咽a strong sense of loss 强烈的失落感fall into despair 陷入绝望cry ones heart out 悲痛欲绝with a heavy heart 怀着沉重的心情with a sinking heart 沮丧的be down/ in low spirits