2024年读后续写沉浸式步步写作专题03 如何设置合理结尾.docx

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1、专题03 如何设置合理结尾一、首尾呼应法首尾呼应，形成闭环。文章的开头和结尾在内容上要有着密切的关系，对同一情况做出解释、说明，使文章浑然一体，更有突显文章主旨大意的作用。 2017年高考真题【与健忘妈妈一块去旅游】【开头】I had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because of my motherloving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. 我有一个有趣的童年，充满了惊喜和娱乐，都是因为我的母亲有爱心的、温柔的，但心不在

2、焉且健忘的。【结尾】Despite moms being absent-minded and forgetful, she was still a kind and nice mom. 尽管妈妈总是心不在焉，健忘，但她仍然是一个和蔼可亲的妈妈。【结尾时候回到文章的开头再次重申妈妈的性格，深化主题，首尾呼应。】2018年高考真题【爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩迷路】【开头】It was summer and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the

3、 Wild West.那年夏天，爸爸想带我去一次前所未有的度假。他决定带我去西部荒野之旅。【结尾】Never had I had such a thrilling yet dangerous vacation before. The special trip to the Wild West was deeply engraved in my mind.我从来没有过这么刺激又危险的假期。这次去西部的特别旅行，深深地印在我的脑海里。【结尾时候回到文章的开头再次提及这次西部荒野之旅，深化主题，首尾呼应。】2016年高考真题【亚瑟的欢乐经历】【开头】A funny thing happened to

4、 Arthur when he was on the way to work one day.一天， 亚瑟在上班的路上发生了一件有趣的事情。【结尾】What a funny day. Arthur couldnt stop laughing whenever he looked back on this hilarious experience. 多么有趣的一天啊，每当亚瑟回想起这次欢乐的经历，他就忍不住笑个不停。【结尾时候回到文章的开头再次提及这次欢乐经历，深化主题，首尾呼应。】真题赏析1.【2023 年新高考I&I 卷】【开头】When I was in middle school, my

5、 social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing.【结尾】I owe my success to my social teacher who is a beacon in my life on the road to writing.2.【 2020年高考I卷】【开头】The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline

6、, some people in the town had lost their jobs . Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet . People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.麦迪斯一家住在一个小社区。由于经济衰退，镇上的许多人都失业了。许多家庭都在艰难维持生计。人们也在努力帮助彼此迎接这次的挑战。【结尾】Bernard business worked out quite well . The smile on his face was as

7、 brilliant as the sun on a spring day . He also decided to do what he could to help those in need.伯纳德的买卖很顺利。他脸上的笑容就像春日里的阳光那样灿烂。他也决定尽他所能去帮助那些有需要的人。【结尾呼应开头那句人们都在相互帮助渡过难关，再次凸显人们在困难时相互帮助的主题。】二、人物动作的画面定格读后续写中营造画面感可以增强文章的可读性和真实感，引导读者进入情节，更好地理解故事发生的背景和人物性格。在文章的结尾以人物的动作描写勾勒出一个画面，给读者留下深刻的印象。2017年6月浙江卷When Ma

8、c gradually regained his calm, three friends waved goodbye to Paul and Becky until their car disappeared into a line of sight. And the three friends continued their bicycle trip to Alaska pleasantly.Mac慢慢恢复了平静，三个朋友向Paul和Becky挥手告别，直到他们的车消失在视线中。三个朋友继续愉快地进行他们到阿拉斯加的自行车之旅。【动作画面定格】And the three friends co

9、ntinued their bicycle trip to Alaska pleasantly.真题赏析1.【2021年高考浙江卷6月】I understood immediately what my parents were worried about. They were worried that I was too selfish to give. I realized that my labor was very hard, but my growth and our whole family had been depending on the hard work of my pare

10、nts! Dad never complained about unfairness! He even seemed to think that was fair. I thought, “Ive only worked for two weeks, but how many years my father has worked!” In the evening, Dad came back. I proudly took out my own money and handed it to Dad. 我立刻明白了父母在担心什么。他们担心我太自私了，不能给予。我意识到我的劳动非常辛苦，但我的成长

11、和我们整个家庭一直依赖于我父母的辛勤工作！爸爸从不抱怨不公平！他甚至似乎认为这是公平的。我想：“我只工作了两个星期，但我父亲工作了多少年！晚上，爸爸回来了。我自豪地拿出自己的钱递给爸爸。【动作画面定格】In the evening, Dad came back. I proudly took out my own money and handed it to Dad. 2.【2021年新高考全国I卷】The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. When their mother saw the delic

12、ious and perfect breakfast in front of her, she was very surprised. It was not only the gift, but the love of the children for her that moved her very much. The two children could finish cooking a breakfast, which she didnt expect. The children said loudly, “Happy Mothers Day!” Mother hugged them ti

13、ghtly and kissed them again and again.双胞胎把早餐端上楼，叫醒了妈妈。当他们的母亲看到眼前美味完美的早餐时，她非常惊讶。让她非常感动的不仅是礼物，还有孩子们对她的爱。两个孩子能做完早餐，她没想到。孩子们大声说：“母亲节快乐！母亲紧紧地抱着他们，一次又一次地亲吻他们。【动作画面定格】Mother hugged them tightly and kissed them again and again.三、主题升华记叙文的结尾融入自己的观点和评价，精彩的结尾可以凸显文章的主题，升华事件的意义，起到画龙点睛的作用。名言式结尾法使用名言结尾往往能给文章增添文采和说服

14、力，同时也能起到深化主旨的作用，这样的结尾可以抒发感情和渲染氛围，合理运用名言警句可以为读后续写起到画龙点睛的作用。同时也应当注意具体文本具体分析，使用名言警句合理得当。【积极向上主旨升华句】1. It s never too late to learn . Each individual has the right to accept more challenges and make more attempts.活到老学到老。每个人都应有权利去接受更多的挑战，做出更多的尝试。2. There is a crack in everything . That is how the light g

15、ets in .万物皆有裂隙，那是光照进来的地方。3. What doesnt kill you makes you stronger .那些杀不死你的必将使你更强大。4. Every cloud has a sliver lining .朵朵乌云衬银边黑暗中总有一线光明。5. Where there is a will , there is a way .有志者事竟成。6. No pains, no gains.不劳无获。【追求梦想主旨句】1.Life without dreams is like a bird without wings.人生没有梦想，就像鸟儿没有翅膀。2.There we

16、re six pence all over the ground,but he looked up and saw the moon.满地都是六便士，但是他却抬头看见了月亮。3. Where there is dream, there is hope. 哪里有梦想，哪里就有希望。4. A journey of a thousand miles must begin with a single step .千里之行，始于足下。【助人为乐主旨句】1.Roses given , fragrance in hand . 赠人玫瑰，手留余香2.You reap what you sow .种瓜得瓜/善有

17、善报3.Sow the wind and reap the whirlwind .种下的是风，收获的是飓风。/恶有恶报。4.Small kindness can bring rich reward .小的善举可以带来丰富的回报。5.Small act can bring / contribute to / give rise to a big difference . 小小举动，大大影响。7. 6.The smallest act of kindness is worth more than the grandest intention .“最小的善举胜过最宏伟的意图。”王尔德7.Never

18、underestimate the power / value of our actions.永远不要低估行动的力量。8.No act of kindness , no matter how small , is ever wasted .无论多小的善举都不会是白费。9.The miracle is this : the more we share the more we have .这就是奇迹：分享的越多，收获的越多。真题赏析1.【2022年高考浙江卷1月】One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious di

19、sease. I felt so sorry to hear that and I thought I should visit him in any case. He was a little surprised to see me when I stepped into his ward with some flowers and fruits. I offered to do the rest work of our project and he invited me to share my ideas to perfect it. We began to work as a fine

20、team and finally finished our project on time. Our hard work paid off and Dr. Hendersons was very satisfied with our wonderful findings. From this project, we also learned the significance of teammates. Just as the saying goes, one person can go far, but a group of persons can travel farther.有一天，我得到

21、消息，他因重病入院。听到这个消息，我感到非常遗憾，我想无论如何我都应该去看他。当我带着一些鲜花和水果走进他的病房时，他有点惊讶。我提出做我们项目的其余工作，他邀请我分享我的想法以完善它。我们开始作为一个优秀的团队工作，最终按时完成了我们的项目。我们的辛勤工作得到了回报，亨德森博士对我们精彩的发现非常满意。从这个项目中，我们也了解到了队友的重要性。俗话说，一个人可以走得更远，但一群人可以走得更远。【结尾升华】Just as the saying goes, one person can go far, but a group of persons can travel farther.2.【20

22、22年新高考全国1卷】I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. The race started. It seemed that the runway was extremely long for young children, not to mention a child with a brain disease. David insisted on running as if he had forgotten all his weaknesses, though he was tripp

23、ed over within the a few kilometers. It didnt take long before he picked himself up again and continued his mission. Classmates all appeared on the racing track, cheering for him. “Come on! You can make it! We are proud of you!” they shouted enthusiastically. To everyones joy, he reached the final l

24、ine and ranked the 20th. It was no more important whether he won the first place or not. It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally.我看着大卫和其他跑步者一起走到起跑线上。比赛开始了。对于年幼的孩子来说，跑道似乎非常长，更不用说患有脑病的孩子了。大卫坚持要跑，好像他忘记了他所有的弱点，尽管他在几公里内被绊倒了。没过多久，他又重新振作起来，继续他的使命。同学们都出现在赛道上，

25、为他加油。“来吧！你可以做到！我们为你感到骄傲！“他们热情地喊道。令所有人高兴的是，他到达了最后一条线，排名第 20 位。他是否获得第一名并不重要。正是他勇敢的心和坚定的信念，才能让不寻常的事情最终发生。【结尾升华】It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally.情感升华法每一个故事的创作不止为了讲清楚一件事情的来龙去脉，还要包含作者想要表达的寓意，想与读者分享的感悟，这种思想往往贯穿全文，并在故事结尾时得到升华，在读后续写的结尾部分可以采用情感升华的方式，让读者产

26、生情感上的共鸣，激发读者思考。【励志故事】1. This story teaches us that with perseverance, we can overcome any obstacle and achieve greatness.这个故事告诉我们，凭借毅力，我们可以克服任何障碍，实现伟大。2. Their unwavering determination and resilience turned ordinary lives into extraordinary ones.他们坚定的决心和韧性为他们平凡的生活增添了不非凡的色彩。3. The closing chapter of

27、this inspiring tale reminds us that dreams are within reach, and the human spirit is limitless.这个鼓舞人心的故事的结尾提醒我们，梦想是可以实现的，人的精神是无限的。4. They transformed setbacks into stepping stones and proved that true strength comes from within.他们将挫折化作跃升的踏脚石，证明真正的力量源自内心。【家庭关系】1. Mothers Day is a heartfelt reminder t

28、o honor and appreciate the selfless sacrifices and boundless love that mothers give, shaping our lives with unwavering dedication.母亲节是一个深情的提醒，要尊重和感激母亲们无私的奉献和无尽的爱，她们用坚定的奉献塑造了我们的生活。2. Their bond as parent and child grew strong, united by love that knows no boundaries.作为父母和子女的纽带变得坚固，被无边界的爱所团结。3. They d

29、iscovered the beauty of a lifelong parent-child connection, bringing them strength and comfort through laughter and tears.他们发现了终生父母与子女之间的美，无论欢笑还是泪水，都给予他们力量和安慰。4. With gratitude in their hearts, they realized that the true treasure of a parent-child relationship lies in the moments of connection, cre

30、ating a lifelong bond that goes beyond words.怀着感激之情，他们意识到父母与子女关系真正的宝藏在于连接的时刻，创造了一种超越言语的终生纽带。【助人为乐】1. They realized that helping others brings happiness and leaves a lasting impact.他们意识到帮助他人可以带来快乐并留下持久的影响。2. In the end, they discovered that true fulfillment comes from selflessly assisting others, cre

31、ating a world where compassion knows no limits.最终，他们发现真正的满足来自于无私地帮助他人，创造一个慈悲无限的世界。3. From this experience, they understood that by helping others, they not only brightened someone elses life but also found purpose and satisfaction in their own.通过这次经历，他们明白了通过帮助他人，不仅点亮了别人的生活，也在自己的生活中找到了目标和满足。4. They r

32、ealized that a small act of kindness has the power to create a chain reaction, touching and inspiring countless lives.他们意识到一小片善举有着创造连锁反应的力量，触动和激励了无数生命。【人与动物】1. They learned that living in harmony with animals brings joy and teaches us the importance of love, respect, and interconnection.他们学到了与动物和谐相处

33、带来喜悦，并教会我们爱、尊重和相互联系的重要性。2. Through their experiences, they realized that the bond between humans and animals is built on love, trust, and mutual respect, enriching both lives.通过经历，他们意识到人类与动物之间的纽带建立在爱、信任和相互尊重的基础上，使彼此的生活更加丰富。3. They discovered the wisdom of living in harmony with nature, nurturing a d

34、eep appreciation for the delicate balance between humans and animals.他们发现与自然和谐共处的智慧，培养了对人类与动物之间微妙平衡的深刻赞赏。4. Their compassion and empathy taught them the invaluable lesson that treating animals with kindness and respect creates a world of love and harmony.他们的慈悲和同理心教给他们宝贵的一课，善待动物并尊重它们创造了一个充满爱和和谐的世界。【有

35、惊无险】1. After surviving the thrilling adventure, they felt a mix of relief and excitement, cherishing the special bond they formed and the memories they created.度过惊险的冒险后，他们感到一种释然和兴奋，珍视着他们所建立的特殊纽带和创造的回忆。2. Looking back at their thrilling journey, they realized that the true joy of adventure lies not o

36、nly in overcoming danger, but also in the lasting friendships and shared experiences they gained.回首他们的惊险之旅，他们意识到冒险的真正乐趣不仅在于战胜危险，还在于持久的友谊和共同的经历。3. From this adventure, they felt the importance of respecting nature and recognized their own limitations.从这次冒险中，他们感受到尊敬大自然的重要性，并认识到自己的局限。4. Through this th

37、rilling experience, we realized that animals have their own territories, and humans should respect their boundaries.通过这次惊心动魄的经历，我们意识到动物有它们自己的领地，人类应该尊重这个界限。真题赏析1.【2022年高考浙江卷6月】I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way. This experience made me realize that there are so many people

38、in this world who need our help. It also made me realize that our small act of kindness can make them feel warm and make a great difference to them. I will never forget the way they looked at me when they were given food. I am anxious to urge the world to do everything possible to help those in need

39、.我很高兴我以这种方式赢得了我的服务时间。这次经历让我意识到，这个世界上有这么多人需要我们的帮助。这也让我意识到，我们的小善举可以让他们感到温暖，并对他们产生巨大的影响。我永远不会忘记他们得到食物时看着我的样子。我急于敦促世界尽一切可能帮助那些有需要的人。【结尾升华】I am anxious to urge the world to do everything possible to help those in need.2. 【2022年新高考1卷】【残障男孩参加越野跑】His usual big toothy smile came back again as the spectators

40、and participants cheered loudly for him when he crossed the finishing line. The boy transformed setbacks into stepping stones and proved that true strength comes from within.【结尾升华】The boy transformed setbacks into stepping stones and proved that true strength comes from within.3. 【2021年新高考1卷】【双胞胎为母亲

41、做早餐】Hearing the words, their mother was moved to tears and she believed that the breakfast was the best Mothers Day gift she had ever received. It was a heartfelt reminder of the selfless sacrifices of their mom and the deep gratitude of her children.【结尾升华】It was a heartfelt reminder of the selfless

42、 sacrifices of their mom and the deep gratitude of her children.4. 【2020年新高考1卷】【Meredith启发孩子帮助社区贫困家庭】Bernard not only earned money to buy medicine for his dad, but was also determined to pass down all the support he had received from Meredith family to other people. More importantly, Mrs. Merediths

43、children realized that helping others brings them happiness and leaves a lasting impact on other people.【结尾升华】Mrs. Merediths children realized that helping others brings them happiness and leaves a lasting impact on other people.5. 【2023年1月浙江卷】【救助被困的蜂鸟】Then, the hummingbird took off, circling around

44、 me a few times before disappearing into the trees. I stood there, feeling touched by the encounter. I realized the bond between humans and animals is built on love, trust, and mutual respect.【结尾升华】 I realized the bond between humans and animals is built on love, trust, and mutual respect.6. 【2022年1

45、月浙江卷】【同学关系】Moved by his trust, I worked day and night to prepare for the presentation. Eventually, it earned the highest scores. More importantly, after that experience, our friendship grew stronger as we embraced each others imperfections and stood by each others side.【结尾升华】More importantly, after

46、that experience, our friendship grew stronger as we embraced each others imperfections and stood by each others side.7. 【2020年7月浙江卷】【拍摄北极熊的探险经历】I raised my camera again and kept pressing the shutter, trying to capture the last glimpse of this huge beast before it vanished from my sight and my life.

47、Through this thrilling experience, we realized that animals have their own territories, and humans should respect their boundaries.【结尾升华】Through this thrilling experience, we realized that animals have their own territories, and humans should respect their boundaries.四、写景画面定格通过描绘细致的场景，给读者留下更深刻、更美好的记

48、忆，并且让他们感到情节仿佛就在眼前，更容易产生代入感。黎明到来的画面The sky was a billion pure eyes of light and the grass green underfoot, it was as if night and day had become one beautiful moment. Dawn had come. 天空像是十亿只纯净的眼睛拼接在一起，脚下是青草，仿佛黑夜和白昼已成为一个美丽的时刻。黎明已经来临。Dawn sent shimmering rays over the placid ocean, bestowing a golden path from the shore to the horizon.黎明在平静的海面上放射出出闪闪发亮的光线，留下一条从海岸到地平线横亘而过的金色道路。