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1、阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。“Imgoingtomissyousomuch,Poppy,”saidthetall,thinteenager.Hebentdowntohughisoldfriendgoodbye.Hestoodup,huggedhisparents,andsmiled,tryingnottolethisemotions(情绪)getthebetterofhim.Hisparentswerenotquiteabletokeeptheirsundercontrol.Theyhaddriventheirsonseveralhoursoutoftownto

2、theuniversitywherehewouldsoonbelivingandstudying.Itwastimetosaygoodbyefornowatleast.Thefamilyhuggedandsmiledthroughmistyeyesandthenlaughed.Theboyliftedthelastbagontohisshoulder,andflashedabrightsmile.“Iguessthisisit,”hesaid.“Illseeyoubackhomeinamonth,okay?”Hisparentsnodded,andtheywatchedashewalkedou

3、tofsightintothecrowdsofhundredsofstudentsandparents.Theboysmotherturnedtothedog,“Okay,Poppy,timetogobackhome.”Thehouseseemedquietasatombwithouttheboylivingthere.Allthatweek,Poppydidntseeminterestedinherdinner,herfavoritetoy,oreveninherdailywalk.Herownersweresadtoo,buttheyknewtheirsonwouldbebacktovis

4、it.Poppydidnt.Theyofferedthedogsomeofherfavoritepeanutbuttertreats.Theyevenlethersitonthesofa,buttheoldgirljustwasntherusualcheerfulself.Herownersstartedtogetworried.“WhatshouldwedotocheerPoppyup?”askedDad.“Wevetriedeverything.”“Ihaveanidea,butitmightbealittlecrazy,”smiledMom.“Withoutanybodyleftinth

5、ehousebutus,thisplacecoulduseabitoffun.LetsgetalittledogforPoppy.”Itdidnttakelongbeforetheywalkedthroughthefrontdoorcarryingabigbox.Poppywelcomedthemhomeasusual,butwhenshesawthebox,shestopped.Sheputhernoseonit.Hertailbeganwagging(摆动)eversoslowly,thenfasterasshecaughtthesmell.续写要求：续写要求：1.所续写短文的词数应为所续

6、写短文的词数应为150左右；左右；2.至少使用至少使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.Paragraph2:Afewweekslater,theboyarrivedhomefromtheuniversity.划线词解读，规划续写细节划线词解读，规划续写细节1)分类划线词人

7、物人物parents，boy环境环境university事物事物Poppy，dog，box动作动作hugged，watched，back情感情感cheerful2)构思具体情节第一段情节：父亲打开盒子新伙伴胆怯的露出脑袋然后是爪子扒着盒子（box）波比（Poppy）绕着盒子跑了两圈爸爸把小狗（dog）抱出来两只狗开始在房间里跑来跑去父母（parents）和狗狗一起快乐的（cheerful）生活并且等待男孩回家（back）；第二段情节：男孩回来了，和父母拥抱在一起（hugged）波比看到男孩，欣喜万分新伙伴远远看着（watched）他们俩一点点靠近嗖地跑上前，也把脑袋凑到男孩身上学着波比的样子，

8、摇摇尾巴男孩和两只小狗一起打闹。Paragraph1:Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.Itslowlyshoweditshead,blinkingitslittleeyes,then,twoclawspickeduptheedgeoftheboxandstoodup.Unluckily,itfellintheboxinasecond.Poppyranaroundtheboxtwice,barkingandbarking.Dadtookthedogtothegroundgently.Atfirst,thedogdidntmove.Poppypu

9、shedhisbelovedtoytothedog.Soon,thetwopuppiesranaftereachotherinthehousehappily.Daybyday,theboysparentslivedacheerfullifetogetherwithtwopuppies,whilewaitingfortheirboytobeback.Paragraph2:Afewweekslater,theboyarrivedhomefromtheuniversity.Assoonasheenteredthehouse,theboyandhisparentshuggedeachother.See

10、ingtheboycomingback,Poppyrushedforwardtotheboysfeetwithdelight,shakingherheadandwagginghertail.Hernewpartnerwatchedthemsilentlyandmovedtothemalittlebit.Atlast,heswishedforward,learnedhowPoppylooked,andwaggedhistail,too.Finally,theboyandtwopuppieswereplayingonthesofaexcitedly.比喻比喻比喻是最常见的修辞手法，是以两种具有共同

11、特征的事比喻是最常见的修辞手法，是以两种具有共同特征的事物或现象进行对比，从而更生动、更深刻地说明道理，物或现象进行对比，从而更生动、更深刻地说明道理，增强语言的表现力。比喻分为明喻和和暗喻。增强语言的表现力。比喻分为明喻和和暗喻。例如：Sheisanangel.是暗喻；而Sheisasinnocentasanangel.是明喻。（1）明喻）明喻直接表明本体和喻体的相似之处，常用的明喻标志词有like,as,seem,as.as,asif,asthough,similarto等。基本格式是：本体基本格式是：本体+比喻词比喻词+喻体。喻体。例如：TheUSAislikeabigmeltingpo

12、twhereimmigrantsofdifferentculturesorracesformanintegratedsociety.TheUSA是本体，喻体是meltingpot,比喻词是like,喻体和本体的相似之处都是拥有“包容”的特点。【句型赏析句型赏析】Loveislikethewind.Youcantseeitbutyoucanfeelit.（情感描写）爱如风，你看不见，但你能感受到它。爱如风，你看不见，但你能感受到它。Thehouselookssomethinglikeacastle.（景物描写）那房子看上去有点像一座城堡。那房子看上去有点像一座城堡。(somethinglike.

13、有点像有点像)Kylelookedatthetestwithastareasblankashisnotebook.（情景描写）Kyle茫然地看着试卷，头脑如同笔记本一样的空白。茫然地看着试卷，头脑如同笔记本一样的空白。Asindepthsofmanyseas,myheartwasdrownedinmemories.（情绪描写）如同在大海深处，我的心里沉溺于回忆之中。如同在大海深处，我的心里沉溺于回忆之中。Hemovedlikelighteningbeforethepolicecame.（动作描写）还没等警察到来，他像闪电一样地跑了。还没等警察到来，他像闪电一样地跑了。【练一练练一练】1这本书陪

14、伴了我很久就像一位我的老朋友似的。这本书陪伴了我很久就像一位我的老朋友似的。2我伸手去摸她的脸，发现她的脸像冰一样冰冷。我伸手去摸她的脸，发现她的脸像冰一样冰冷。3他感觉彷佛整个世界都崩塌了。他感觉彷佛整个世界都崩塌了。4这辆公交车走的像蜗牛一样慢。这辆公交车走的像蜗牛一样慢。5我感觉自己像漂浮在悲伤的海洋中。我感觉自己像漂浮在悲伤的海洋中。【参考答案参考答案】1Thebookhasaccompaniedmeforquitealongtimelikeanoldfriend.2Ireachedouttotouchherface,whichwasascoldastheice.3Hefeltasif

15、thewholeworldhadfallenapartonhim.4Thebuswentasslowlyasasnail.5IfeellikeIamfloatinginanoceanofsadness.（2）暗喻）暗喻也叫隐喻，本体喻体都出现，中间常用喻词“是”等连接，有时不用喻词。暗喻的典型形式为：甲是乙，而不用like,as等喻词。例如Moneysometimesisapoison.钱有时候是一种毒药。Herhairwasaflowinggoldenriverstreamingdownhershoulders.（肖像描写）她的头发像是一条流淌在她肩上的金色河流。她的头发像是一条流淌在她肩上

16、的金色河流。Lifeisanunexploredriver.fulloftwistsandturns.(哲理)生活就像一条未被涉足的河流，有各种曲折。生活就像一条未被涉足的河流，有各种曲折。Ifeltalumpinmythroat,tearingwellingupinmyeyes.（情感描写）我如鲠在喉，泪水湿润了眼眶。我如鲠在喉，泪水湿润了眼眶。【练一练练一练】找出下面句子里面的修辞1.Myverythoughtwasliketheghostlyrustleofdeadleaves.2.Helookedasifhehadjuststeppedoutofmybookoffairytales.3

17、.Windandrainnowwhipped（鞭打）thehouse.4.Mymotherislikeacoatinwinter,offeringwarmthtome.5.Thewindsoundedlikearoarofatrainpassingby.6.Householdandmedicalsupliesstreamedinbyplane,train,truckandcar.【参考答案参考答案】1.明喻明喻2.明喻明喻3.暗喻暗喻4.明喻明喻5.明喻明喻6.暗喻暗喻夸张夸张运用丰富的想象，过激的言词，渲染和装饰客观事物，运用丰富的想象，过激的言词，渲染和装饰客观事物，以达到强调的效果。以达

18、到强调的效果。【使用数词或量词使用数词或量词】1.Myheartbrokeinaboutamillionpieces.（情感描写）我的心成了碎片。2.Shewashalfdeadwithfear.（情感描写）她吓得半死。【使用动词使用动词】1.Theyounggirlbroughtthehousedownwithherperformance.（情景描写）这位年轻姑娘的表演博得了满堂喝彩。2.Itmademejumpoutofmyskin.（情感描写）吓得我魂不附体。【使用形容词和副词使用形容词和副词】在日常对话中，人们常用形容词或者副词去修饰微不足道的事情，目的就是为了渲染一种气氛，强调某种意

19、义的事情。如副词：extremely；awfully；terribly；perfectly；horribly等等形容词：miserable;horrible;splendid等等例如：Itsbeautiful,heavenlybeautiful.(景物描写)那儿很漂亮，就像天堂那般漂亮。【使用介词短语使用介词短语】1.Shewenthomeinafloodoftears.（情感描写）她泪如泉涌地回家去了。2.Whentheytoldthenews,Iwasoverthemoon/onthetopoftheworld.（情感描写）当他们告诉我这个消息时，我乐不可支。3.Hewasbentouto

20、fshape（情感描写）他非常生气（气到变形）拟人拟人把无生命的事物当作有生命的事物来描写，赋予无生命之物以感情和动作或是把动物人格化，使语言生动，形象，更有感染力。Part1：把自然现象当作人来描写：把自然现象当作人来描写1.Thewindstoodupandgaveashout.(景物描写)大风凛冽，发出怒吼。2.Thebreezegentlykissedhercheeks.(景物描写)微风轻柔地亲吻着她的脸庞。3.Thefeatherysnowflakesdancedinthenightair,makingabeautifulpicture.(景物描写)鹅毛般的雪花在空中飞舞，像一幅美丽

21、的图画。4.Themistswallowedhimup.(景物描写)薄雾把他包围起来。Part2：把含蓄抽象的概念当作人来描写：把含蓄抽象的概念当作人来描写1.Fearseized/swallowedhim.（情感描写）恐惧把他吞噬了。恐惧把他吞噬了。2.Angerchokedmywords.（情感描写）我气得说不出话来。我气得说不出话来。3.Agoodideasuddenlystruckme.（情景描写）我突然想到一个好主意。我突然想到一个好主意。4.Smiletookholdofhim.（情感描写）他笑容满面他笑容满面。5.Anxietytornhimintopieces.（情感描写）她焦

22、虑不安，十分崩溃。她焦虑不安，十分崩溃。Part3：把动物当作人来描写：把动物当作人来描写1.Inthedeadofnight,thecrickets（蟋蟀）playedontheterraceofthehouse.(景物描写)寂静的夜，蟋蟀旁若无人地在房子的阳台上玩。寂静的夜，蟋蟀旁若无人地在房子的阳台上玩。2.Birdsonthetreearesingingabeatifulsong.(景物描写)树上的小鸟在树上唱着美妙的歌曲。树上的小鸟在树上唱着美妙的歌曲。3.Thefrogsaregivingaconcert-mixedchorus.(景物描写)青蛙在举办音乐会青蛙在举办音乐会-混声大

23、合唱。混声大合唱。4.Firefliespatrolthegrasswithsmalllanterns(景物描写)萤火虫提着小灯笼在草丛中巡逻。萤火虫提着小灯笼在草丛中巡逻。【练一练练一练】1.夏天的微风轻轻地抚摸着我的脸。夏天的微风轻轻地抚摸着我的脸。2.细雨轻轻地亲吻着我的脸颊。细雨轻轻地亲吻着我的脸颊。3.我能听到到处都是鸟儿在歌唱。我能听到到处都是鸟儿在歌唱。4.这个教堂目睹了这个城市这个教堂目睹了这个城市20年的变化。年的变化。【参考答案参考答案】1.Thesummerbreezetouchedmyfacegently.2.Thedrizzlekissedmeonmycheekgen

24、tly.3.Icouldhearbirdssingingeverywhere.4.Thechurchhaswitnessedthecityschangesinthepast20years.排比排比也称平行,是把结构相同或相似、意思密切相关、语气一致的词语或句子成串地排列的一种修辞方法，利用意义相关或相近，结构相同或相似和语气相同的词组(主、谓、动、宾)或句子并排(三句或三句以上),段落并排(两段即可),达到一种加强语势的效果。【句型赏析句型赏析】Motherwasverybusygatheringthelaundry,dustingthefurnitureandwashingthedishes

25、.（动作描写）母亲正忙着收拾要洗的衣服母亲正忙着收拾要洗的衣服,掸去家具上的灰尘掸去家具上的灰尘,洗碗。洗碗。Whetherinclass,atwork,orathome,Jameswasalwaysbusy.（情景描写）无论是在课堂上无论是在课堂上,在工作中在工作中,还是在家里还是在家里,詹姆斯总是很詹姆斯总是很忙。忙。Dontmakepromisewhenyouareinjoy.Dontreplywhenyouaresad.Donttakedecisionwhenyouareangry.Thinktwiceandactwise.（哲理）别在喜悦的时候许下承诺别在喜悦的时候许下承诺;别悲伤的

26、时候做出回答别悲伤的时候做出回答;别别在愤怒的时候作出决定。三思而行，做出睿智的行为。在愤怒的时候作出决定。三思而行，做出睿智的行为。Painmakesyoustronger,tearsmakeyoubraver,heartbreakmakesyouwiser,sothankthepastforabetterfuture.（哲理）痛苦痛苦,会让你更强大会让你更强大;眼泪眼泪,会让你更勇敢会让你更勇敢;心碎心碎,会让会让你更睿智，所以为了更好的未来感谢过去吧。你更睿智，所以为了更好的未来感谢过去吧。ThisisnotonlyjustwhatIwanted,butalsojustwhatIneed

27、ed.这不仅是我想要的，也是我需要的。这不仅是我想要的，也是我需要的。【练一练练一练】找出下面句子里面的修辞1.Thewindwhispersinthetree.2.Thenoisewasloudenoughtowakethedead.3.Hisspeechbroughtthehousedown.4.TheoldVenicefellasleepagain.5.Thesunbrokethroughthecloudsandjumpedoutofthesea.6.Thebirdsdancedhappilyonthebranch.7.Sheeatslikeabird.8.Theloudmusicalm

28、ostdrovemeupawall.9.Thenightgentlylaysherhandatourfeveredheads.10.Thevolcanospitoutlavafromitsmouth.11.Heisdyingforthisopportunity.【参考答案参考答案】1.拟人2.夸张3.夸张4.拟人5.拟人6.拟人7.明喻8.夸张9拟人10.拟人11.夸张课后练习课后练习AfewweeksbeforeThanksgivingoneyear,mythen-husbandandIdecidedtoinviteaguestoverfortheholiday.Icalledasenior

29、centerandtheysuggestedIlse,awomanIimaginedwouldbequiet,soft-spoken.Unexpectedly,shewasastubborn78-year-oldgambler(赌徒).OnThanksgiving,withinminutesofarriving,Ilsethrewheroversizedpurseonthekitchencounterand,withawidesmile,welcomedtheglassofwinemyhusbandoffered.Wefeltasifshewereanoldfriendafterdining.

30、Twoweekslater,Iinvitedhertolunch.ThemoretimeIspentwithIlse,themoreshebecamelikeagrandma.ShewasntafraidtoshareheropinionortoaskmewhenIwasfinallygoingtohavechildren.“Yourenotgettinganyyounger,”shedsay.Isoonbecameherpersonaldriver.AndInoticedthemorefavorsIagreedtodo,themoresheaskedofme.Sixmonthsafterwe

31、met,Icalledheronlychild,Ralphforhelp,butheclaimedhedidnthavetime.Idoubtedhis“Imtoobusy”excuse.Afewmonthslater,Ralphpassedaway.Afterthefuneral,havingrealizedIlsewastooupsettobeleftalone,Ihelpedherhireacaregiver.Shewaslikefamilytome,Ifeltresponsibleforher.AndIwastheonlyoneleftinherside.EachtimeIstoppe

32、dbyherapartment,Ilseseemedmoredisconnectedthanthetimebefore.Lateoneafternoon,shecalledfromtheemergencyroomtotellmeshehadtrippedoverhercoffeetable.UsingthesparekeyshedinsistedImakebefore,Isearchedherapartmentandtookthetableaway.Thenextmorning,Ilsecalledtoaskabouthertable.Shewasangryandtoldmehowupsets

33、hewaswithoutit.Thenshehunguponme.WhenIlsecalledthateveningtoapologize,ItoldmyhusbandtosayIwasnthome.Iwasstillangryandhurt.续写要求：续写要求：1.所续写短文词数应为所续写短文词数应为150左右；左右；2.至少使用至少使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Pa

34、ragraph1:Thefollowingday,Ireturnedhercallbutwasunabletounderstandwhatshewassaying._Paragraph2:ThemorningafterIlsesdeath,Ipulledherwillout._【范文欣赏范文欣赏】Paragraph1:Thefollowingday,Ireturnedhercallbutwasunabletounderstandwhatshewassaying.Idrovehertotheemergencyroom,wherethedoctorconfirmedshehadsufferedam

35、ildstroke.Duringthenextfewdays,Idroppedbyherapartment,butshewasnolongerthepersonIknew.Attheweekend,Ireceivedanearly-morningcallfromhercaregiver.“Pleasecomeover.Shespassedaway.”WhenIarrived,IsawIlselyingonherbed,motionless,hereyesclosed.Isatontheedgeofthebedandheldherhand,tooshockedtocry.Paragraph2:T

36、hemorningafterIlsesdeath,Ipulledherwillout.IlsehadinsistedItakeacopyofitayearearlier.IstoppedreadingwhenIsawmyname.Shehadleftme$50,000,whichshehadnevermentionedbefore.Ifshehad,Iwouldhaveinsistedshedonatethemoneytocharity.IknewIcouldntspendthemoneyonmyselfsinceIdidntexpecttoaskanythinginreturnformypay.Withouthesitation,Idonatedittovariousfamiliesandcharitieswithchildrentohelpthemwelleducatedinhername.