2024高考英语考前冲刺：读后续写的最后一讲.pdf

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1、1 作者：孙三五（公众号：飚记英语）2024 高考英语考前冲刺：读后续写的最后一讲高考英语考前冲刺：读后续写的最后一讲作者：孙三五（江苏南京）（注：可以只看 1-2 页，后面几页是具体分类的语言描写规律，有时间浏览即可）好的读后续写一定包含：1.合乎逻辑的主题和情节合乎逻辑的主题和情节情节不要觉得太简单不敢写，读后续写强调的是故事完整和符合逻辑，绝不是情节的曲折和动人有趣（那是语文作文）。有的同学觉得简单写不长，你试试看：几个心理情绪描写就能拓展 20个词了。加上动作描写，只会超出词数的。我们的读后续写说到底是看你的英语造句和成文的基本我们的读后续写说到底是看你的英语造句和成文的基本功的功的（

2、即即：把句子写准确把句子写准确，把情节写完整符合逻辑把情节写完整符合逻辑，就就至少至少 17+）。（但 21+的作文会看出学生的文学功底的，显出思维和语言的灵动活力。）近年来，读后续写第二段开始出现纯粹感悟式，这才是棘手的，因为要写的情节第一段都写完了，这个时候就不要硬塞进去情节动作描写，把你的感悟分类，譬如先感悟从文中涉及到的情节中学到什么（譬如感慨要不是他，这个事情就不会圆满完成），然后感悟升华（譬如未来自己也要如此，简单举个例子）2.合适的情绪描写合适的情绪描写（体现丰富的句式：非谓语；形容词短语作状语等）3.动作连动动作连动4.过渡时间体现出的连贯过渡时间体现出的连贯和应用文一样的道理

3、。应用文的连贯衔接体现在 so,therefore 等，而读后续写除此之外，很大一部分依靠时间推进词语。5.主题特别重要主题特别重要，可惜太多的学生走马观花，文章都没看完看懂就写，那纯粹是白费劲。不少学生第一段下了很多功夫雕琢，到了第二段泄气了，写不下去了，于是匆忙结束，就连书写都远不如第一段。这很傻啊！阅卷老师重点看的就是第二段，尤其是看你结尾，结尾的主题就能看出你是不是看懂了文章。聪明的考生都知道结尾很多时候是：1.照应前面的线索照应前面的线索（主题在文章中大都能找到线索的，尤其是前面两段），譬如高考题考过母亲节到了，孩子准备妈妈母亲节的惊喜。开头都这样了，那么结尾就是这是最难忘的母亲节惊

4、喜照应，至于如何照应，方法多了，或者自然结尾，譬如我和爸爸相视一笑，永远珍藏这个惊喜背后的秘密，或者感悟式，从妈妈角度或从我的角度都可以，这是最难忘的母亲节，不仅仅是给了妈妈的意外的惊喜，还有我们体会到的家庭的爱；2.或者顺着线索去或者顺着线索去拓展拓展，不只是照应，还要推进，譬如我一开始不喜欢写作，然后老师鼓励我写，并获奖，结尾是 Inever stopped pursuing my passion for writing，这就是顺势推进。不过总体上，第一种最多，即照应线索为主，根据情节的需要决定是否升华，这种升华要自然，千万不要无中生有，无病呻吟，现在的读后续写阅卷越来越反套路了，因为都卷

5、起来了，就必然返璞归真，这是写作的进步。请看这几年的结尾（11 套卷）：1.Now,shes adapted to high school life and everything beyond that,certainly with the help of her special trick.2.We could never have imagined that my Halloween story could cause chain effects of fun-positiveresponses,heartfelt comfort and so on.Above all,so many p

6、eople find such empathy with us!3.It is kindness that makes every cloud have a silver lining.4.Mother bit into a sandwich and said it was the best she had ever tasted.Jeff immediately wanted to have a bite.Jenna caught her fathers eye and they winked at each other secretly.5.And despite the challeng

7、es of writing in a second language,I never stopped pursuing my passion for writing.6.That day,David got a special award for his courage.He also got respect of all students.To him,that was wortha whole lot more than an award.7.Dad was wrong.It was not the job but his silent love and selflessness,whic

8、h I might never surpass,that helpedme grow up.8.Honestly,it was the first time that I had heard him laugh.I knew we achieved something more satisfying thanan Aa life-long friendship.9.Since then,I have been reaching out to those in need,just like the Mexican family,paying the kindnessforward.10.Ever

9、y time I thought of the time I spent in the chicken soup,I knew it was a really good thing to do.11.The hummingbird was lucky to have encountered my help,but I was even luckier to receive such a special giftfrom nature.2 作者：孙三五（公众号：飚记英语）最后说一下语言。我一开始说几个心理情绪描写就能拓展 20 个词了，这可能会给人误解：是不是尽量堆砌情绪高级句子？大错特错。近年

10、来，此类辅助材料太多，学生就一股脑堆砌，让阅卷让阅卷老师读完后的感觉是老师读完后的感觉是：只见描写只见描写，不见情节不见情节。请大家记住请大家记住，语言是为情节服务的语言是为情节服务的，一般而言，你的情绪描写也只是情节的一个部分，但不是全部。建议越简单易懂越好，现在阅卷老师对高级情绪描写并不偏爱了，所以不会因为它们来加分。现在的读后续写的描写多温和类动作，看不到猛烈动作和极端消极情绪了，请大家看副本具体规律总结（来不及看就不要看了，能用对已有的词汇就可以，譬如你要写：我非常感激。想不到好句子，就说 He was greatly grateful.这个句子就非常好了，丝毫不比 His eyes

11、sparkled with gratitude差）常用的常用的温和类词汇：温和类词汇：1.看一看（看一看（各种情绪都可以通过看的动作来体现）（1）look at/stare at sb.with delight/in surprise/in horror/in amazed disbelief/indisappointment(with 或 in 都可以互用)cast a happy/nervous/glance at sb（2）感情词+in ones eyes(独立主格句),主句He pat her on the shoulder,joy in his eyes.或 Eyes shining

12、/sparkling with+积 极 感 情 词（happiness,joy）如果是消极的，用 eyes filled with或者 his face clouded with(这还是独立主格，如果完整的句子是：sadness clouded his face 或 his face was clouded with sadness)（3）其它：Tears of gratitude streaming down his face（独立主格句）His eyes got misted/wet.眼湿润了。2.笑一笑：笑一笑：smiles spread across his face(如果用独立主格结

13、构 spreading)spread 一般过去时同原形比较安全的是：be overwhelmed with写情绪不要夸张，譬如害怕紧张：写情绪不要夸张，譬如害怕紧张：普通害怕：Fear crept on my heart.I have butterflies in my stomach.非常紧张：My hands were sweating and my legs were shaking.表示惊讶，是不是必须 My jaws dropped，那是特别惊讶，否则一般的就是：look at sb in disbelief表示被触动：be shocked/moved by有时候，情感描写是组合拳的

14、，但不要超过 3 个，譬如：I looked at him in amazed disbelief,my eyes shining with tears of gratitude.我必须再强调一句：读后续写不是感情描写的堆砌，也不是生僻词汇或小说里好词好句的照搬，只要你有就可以了，重点还是情节和主题。3.想一想想一想：这个部分可以不用引号，：这个部分可以不用引号，可以可以用疑问句、感叹句。用疑问句、感叹句。动作连动：动作连动：读后续写很常用的细节动词：和手有关：抱（hug:hug sb tightly=give sb a tight hug），拍(pat sb on the head/shou

15、lder)，推(push)，摸(stroke),拉：pull sb aside；pull sb in ones armsthrow/castat扔；grab 抓；hold 握着；hand 递给；catch 接；swing(过去式：swung)挥舞（也可以说 wave）at；和腿有关：inch 慢慢走+to the door；struggle to ones feet 艰难站起来；jump to ones feet 跳起来；stagger 蹒跚（这个词不及物动词，稍微超纲，也可以用）；dash to 飞奔过去；其它动作：turn around 转过身；stick out(过去式 stuck)on

16、es head 伸出头；jump at 朝扑过去；exclaim 大声说；murmur 喃喃道;sigh in great relief遗憾的是，有很多同学是汉语构思时，想到了很多 powerful expressions，但无法用英语表达，于是硬编，大忌！你需要根据已有的你需要根据已有的熟悉熟悉动词去配上动作动词去配上动作，好比根据已有的食材去做菜好比根据已有的食材去做菜，而不是根而不是根据想象中的动作去找动词据想象中的动作去找动词，你会做满汉全席，但你手头上就豆腐青菜，你怎么搞？你只能把豆腐青菜做到极品。写好后，不要和同学一对答案，发现自己的主题似乎不大好而沮丧，没有必要，只要你的逻辑和文

17、章逻辑对接也没问题的。3 作者：孙三五（公众号：飚记英语）副本：副本：（说明：语言总结来自真题和近一年的优秀模拟题 140 套，真题范文来自新高考英语写作王中王，版权所有）近五年读后续写分为四类：问题解决问题解决;困难克服困难克服;态度转变态度转变;人和有灵生物人和有灵生物一、一、人和有灵生物人和有灵生物（动物、昆虫、鸟、鱼）（动物、昆虫、鸟、鱼）（考到的可能性最大）（考到的可能性最大）1.蜂鸟被救后（直接写）（浙江：具体写我的感受）A few weeks later,I went to the farm again.I was just about to leave when the hum

18、mingbird appeared.2.海豚藏东西的秘密被发现（间接写）（九省联考）“This is Mayas secret,”Hilda said with a big smile.Now Katherine realized what had been going on.规律总结：分为三种情况规律总结：分为三种情况1.动物和人的和谐关系动物和人的和谐关系，情节情节：描写偶遇以及它们的可爱或者陪伴带主人公的开心。2.动物救人动物救人，情节情节：人遇难，动物奋不顾身去救，最后人感激（紧紧抱住它，流泪），从此不离开。3.人救动物人救动物，情节情节：动物通常是被抛弃，或濒临死亡，人带它去医院，或

19、悉心照顾，动物痊愈，对人表示感谢的行动，主题是：人救了动物，同时也是心灵上被它救了。还有一类是动物和人的冲突，这种以前浙江卷有不少，但后来不再有了。和谐相处爱爱抚抚动动物物1.With the bird in my cupped hand,I looked around to see how she had gotten in.2.At the sight of Allen,Mary unhesitatingly spread her wings and flew,chirping all the way,intoAllens cupped hand.His mother was right

20、after all:Mary always found her way back to Allens heart.3.Pleasantly surprised,I reached out my cupped hands expectantly.And sure enough,it gently settledinto my palms,lying on its back to reveal its snow white chest.4.I rubbed his face and he extended his pectoral fin.5.“Maya is so clever,”she utt

21、ered with pride,reaching into the bucket and throwing Maya anotherfish.6.Cradling the cat in her arms,Maria answered happily,“Lucky,because together we have found anew life.”动动物物的的可可爱爱相视不语：1.For a very long moment,this tiny creature looked into my eyes,turning her head fromside to side.Then she flew

22、 quickly out of sight.2.She again looked directly into my eyes,then let out a squeaking call and was gone.For a moment,all were speechless.似乎要说：3.It appeared out of nowhere and hovered above my head,as if to say,.欢快的动作：4.It flapped its wings,its tiny eyes darting back and forth.5.The happy dolphin d

23、ove to the bottom of the tank,and then leapt out of the water.闻闻声声1.Curiosity got the better of us,and we ventured towards the source of the sound.2.I looked around,and it was so quiet,with only the occasional sound of a frog croaking.动物救人危危险险Seized with panic,Margie rubbed her leg hard to relax the

24、 muscle but in vain.狗狗救救人人1.Seeing her struggling in the water,Onyx immediately swam to the side of Margie and then put herhead beneath the girls right arm.But much to my joy,with Margie tightly grabbing Onyxs collar,our little furry friend began digging deep,slicing through the water with her paws

25、and swimming fasttowards the bank with every ounce of strength.2.In a split second,a splash of brown,out of breath,quickly jumped into the lake.It was One-Eyed!Itbarked,swimming toward Danny with all its might.On spotting One-Eyed,Danny seemed to see a rayof hope,attempting to move towards it instan

26、tly.Instinctively,Danny grabbed the tail of One-Eyed.Ultimately,they managed to climb ashore,exhausted.3.Exhausted but excited,Onyx eagerly ran to Margie and gently licked her face to make sure she wasOkay我我的的感感动动1.My emotions were high by the time I took off my mask and I felt love,concern and care

27、 from thewhale.2.I gasped in relief and then proceeded to sob.Overcome with gratitude and emotion,I felt moremotivated than ever to protect these beings.细细心心照照顾顾The following days were filled with me meticulously preparing his meals,tending to his injured wingand ensuring he received the warmth and

28、attention he required.Days turned into weeks,and mydedication to nursing the little finch back to health never wavered.I tried to drop water in his mouth and fed him with food bit by bit.I never gave up hope of getting himsaved.Many times I would stroked his neck,whispering into his ears to encourag

29、e him to hold on.4 作者：孙三五（公众号：飚记英语）人救动物动动物物痊痊愈愈I watched as he regained his strength,his once-shuttered eyes now bright with curiosity and his winghealing.He would cling to me as I went from room to room and even nestle on my hair.She spoke softly to him and gently stroked his chin with her little f

30、inger.As the days passed,the catbegan to purr and the sparkle returned to Marias eyes.动动物物感感谢谢The skunk nodded a thank-you before slipping away into the woods at the back of the garden.As he finished gobbling the last bit of the marmalade,he turned and looked at us,those big brown eyesseemingly show

31、ing his gratitude.He wagged his tail from left to right as if to say“Thank you”.感感悟悟No longer did I feel adrift or isolated in a foreign land and the routine of caring for him had given me arenewed sense of purpose.The hummingbird was lucky to have encountered my help,but I was even luckier to recei

32、ve such aspecial gift from nature.What would have happened if I hadnt stepped out on that stormy night?Care and kindness really madea difference,to both of us.参考范文：参考范文：1.Afew weeks later,I went to the farm again.As I walked past the same window where I had found the trappedhummingbird,I couldnt hel

33、p but glance at it.To my relief,the window had been fixed and the broken hole hadbeen patched up.My friend seemed to read my mind,chuckling,“The hummingbird might come back againsomeday.”I looked around,and it was so quiet,with only the occasional sound of a frog croaking.I felt a mix ofhappiness an

34、d sadness.I was happy that the little bird was safe and sound,but sad that I could not see it again.I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.It appeared out of nowhere and hovered above myhead,as if to say,“Hey there,old friend,nice to see you again!”It had grown much larger than befo

35、re.It flappedits wings,its tiny eyes darting back and forth.Did it blame me for being late?Pleasantly surprised,I reached outmy cupped hands expectantly.And sure enough,it gently settled into my palms,lying on its back to reveal itssnow white chest.It was so adorable!The hummingbird was lucky to hav

36、e encountered my help,but I was evenluckier to receive such a special gift from nature.2.“This is Mayas secret,”Hilda said with a big smile.She could feel a surge of excitement about solving themystery.Then she raised her voice,“Maya has been collecting items and hiding them behind the filter box.”A

37、sHilda shared her discovery,Katherines confusion turned into amazement.She decided to go and investigate the“crime scene”in person.They put on the scuba gear and jumped into the water.Guided by Hilda,Katherine swamover to the box,from where they brought back some more items.Now Katherine realized wh

38、at had been going on.It wasnt Hildas fault.Mayas love for treats had driven herto create a treasure hiding place.“Maya is so clever,”she uttered with pride,reaching into the bucket andthrowing Maya another fish.The happy dolphin dove to the bottom of the tank,and then leapt out of the water,performi

39、ng an impressive twist in mid-air.Katherine turned and faced Hilda,who was now a proud“detective”.“You also deserve a treat!”Katherine said jokingly.They both burst into laughter.二、二、问题解决问题解决（考得最多）（考得最多）1：如何找到教室的路？（浙江：重点写具体办法）：如何找到教室的路？（浙江：重点写具体办法）作者初到学校，找不到去教室的路，后参加长跑，以为自己跑不了，就把跑道分为一段一段的去记P1:When C

40、oach Pitt said“Nice work!”to her at the finish line,Eva was surprised.P2:Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.2：如何把头从南瓜里拔出来？（浙江：重点写爸爸帮忙）：如何把头从南瓜里拔出来？（浙江：重点写爸爸帮忙）万圣节和弟弟比赛，看谁选的南瓜好，我们把南瓜掏空，我把头伸进南瓜里，却取不出P1:I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer.P2:Th

41、at video was posted the day before Halloween.3：如何帮助小区的贫困孩子一家？（全国：重点写具体办法以及成效）：如何帮助小区的贫困孩子一家？（全国：重点写具体办法以及成效）经济危机时，小区男孩 Bernard 家贫困，父母生病，Mrs.Meredith 和孩子们想通过教他卖爆米花去帮助他P1:When Mrs.Meredith heard of Johns idea,she thought it was a good one,too.P2:With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new bus

42、iness.4：如何给给妈妈做早餐？（全国：重点写爸爸帮忙）：如何给给妈妈做早餐？（全国：重点写爸爸帮忙）母亲节到来，我和妹妹想偷偷做早餐给妈妈吃，做饭失败时，父亲赶过来P1:As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.P2:The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.规律总结：规律总结：分为两种情况：分为两种情况：第一种：续写原文中没有提供解决问题的途径，需要续写中自己写，例如：1，4第二种：续写原文中给出

43、了解决问题的途径（提示），续写中进行照应，例如：2，35 作者：孙三五（公众号：飚记英语）而具体到第二段又分为两种情况：第一种：续写第一段就已经解决了问题，第二段或者谈效果，或者谈感受，例如：2，4第二种：续写第一段解释解决问题的途径，第二段谈如何执行和效果，例如：1，3无论哪一种，我们会发现写作有很多共通之处：情节情节：遇到一个问题，首先首先是焦灼，然后然后有人来安慰帮忙或者自己独立想办法，接着接着想到什么（往往照应文章中的某个线索）有了主意，内心很兴奋，于是开始于是开始做起来（手，腿等动作），不久不久事情完成。完成后，完成后，三种可能：三种可能：可能 1:跟另外一个人说，对方难以置信，拥抱

44、主人公;可能 2:松了一口气，扑向某人怀中;可能 3:群众的反应：或掌声响起，或被感动。最后主题：最后主题：某种背景环境下（考虑是否照应线索）主人公内心想到（或说什么，或自然动作等，这些都必须指向主题）。但也有一开始并非焦灼的，而是主人公意外发现自己的某件事的效果，难以置信，突然想到方法。情节模式：情节模式：（这里只根据范文来整理，其它都是结合模拟卷范文）焦灼焦灼晕了；怕了；慌了With seconds ticking by,my worry gave way to fear,my head spinning.安慰安慰别怕，别慌，慢慢来；我来了，我们一起完成1.Just at my wits

45、end,my fathers voice came to my ears.“Dont panic.Here I come!”2.“Dont panic!”he handed each one a wet towel,helping them clean the mess quickly.方法方法毫不犹豫做；迫不及待；一听到/看到就；突然有了主意：1.Suddenly,it dawned upon him that.2.When catching sight of.,this smart girl hatched a plan-3.without any hesitation.Upon its

46、arrival,they couldnt wait to.情绪情绪怎么可能？做梦也没有想到；不相信自己的眼睛/耳朵；（笑了）眼里因为发光；兴奋（从眼、声音、脸描写）1.How could it even be possible?She turned around in disbelief,only to find.2.Never in her wildest dream did she expect the result.3.Even Eva herself couldnt believe how much progress she had been making!4.Hearing the

47、good news,Bernard broke into a smile,eyes shining with excitement and gratitude.5.After that,Jeff stammered out their plan,his face flushing.6.At this,Jenna and Jeff almost jumped to their feet,joy in eyes.执行执行接下来的时间做；开始，尽管如此，想着终于，松了一口气（动作：手、腿）；一段时间后，完成了（时间长/短：After what felt like）1.Despite that,wit

48、h strong determination,she managed to make her way to.2.After what felt like forever,out came my hair and then my nose.3.The next few hours witnessed them popping and packaging the corn./The next few hours were filledwith them popping and packaging the corn.4.it didnt take long before.were ready.Eve

49、rything settled,主句.回应回应某人先好奇后惊喜/扑向某人哭泣；拥抱；掌声；赞许的目光；被感动；沐浴在幸福中1.As my family read them,we couldnt help laughing now and then and the whole house wasbathed in happiness.2.Mother gave them a tight hug,“Unbelievable!You can cook!”结尾结尾正是带来了；从未想过能带来；这是他/我过的最难忘/最好的；如今，他已经，正是靠1.We could never have imagined

50、that my Halloween story could cause chain effects offun-positive responses,heartfelt comfort and so on.2.Though not a big sum,the money was enough to brighten his gloomy days.It is kindness that makesevery cloud have a silver lining3.Mother bit into a sandwich and said it was the best she had ever t