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1、2023年新高考英语读后续写提分技能2.09续写段落的8种首句接话技巧背景回顾1 如何写好读后续写在高考中博取阅卷老师的眼球获得梦寐以求的高分？如何让学生的作品在高考中脱颖而出获得高分？这是很多老师和学生一直在不懈努力的课题。那么，读后续写的开头如何写呢？可以使用哪些写作技能和手法？我们知道，一个好的故事开头就好比是一堂成功的课的导入，能够迅速抓住学生和老师们的兴趣，并且愿意听下去，跟着授课老师的思路走。一个好的故事开头就好比是一个带着香味十足的诱饵，诱使读者上钩并且饶有趣味地看完。而一个拙劣的故事开头，定会让读者大倒胃口，恹恹欲睡。“well begun is half done！”可见，写

2、好一个好故事的好开头是多么的重要。那么，在时间紧迫的考场上如何写出靓丽的开头呢？我们可以从语法手段和写作涉及的内容来探索。方法策略2续写段落的8种首句接话技巧 1.用副词显现做出动作反应时的时间特征等例如： (2016. 10浙江卷)Para1：But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the forest. 【分析】用时间时间副词承接所给首句中的“it getting dark again”，同时衔接后文的环境描写“the darkne

3、ss ruled the forest”。副词衔接自然、顺畅。2.用形容词（短语）凸显人物的情感情绪例如： （1）(2016.10浙江卷)Para 1: But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Desperate and hopeless, Jane knelt down, tears streaming down her face. 【分析】用形容词短语“ Desperate and hopeless”凸显了人物的情绪状态，与后面的动作“knelt down”一起再现了情境中的人物的精神状态。 （2）(2016.

4、10浙江卷)Para 2: It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance. 【分析】用“状态形容词+as/though 引导的倒装句”结构体现了人物早上起来后的精神状态。 （3）(2018.06浙江卷)Para 1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. Afraid that I might hurt the lovely small

5、 creature, I automatically let out a cry to stop my horse. 【分析】用“情绪形容词+从句”结构阐释了人物见到兔子后的心理反应。（4）(2018.06浙江卷)Para 2: We had no idea where we were and it got dark. Exhausted and hungry, I wondered if we could find our way back. 【分析】用并列的表示心理状态的形容词，体现了人物心力交瘁的状态。 3. 用分词（短语）体现人物的心理变化等例如：（1） (2016.10浙江卷) Pa

6、ra1: But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Feeling disappointed, Jane had to stay alone for another night. 【分析】用“现在分词+情绪形容词”结构体现了人物失望的心理状态。（2）(2016.10浙江卷) Para 2: It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Feeling refreshed, she continued to walk along the stream to find the way out.【分

7、析】用“现在分词+状态形容词”结构传递了人物早上醒来后的精神状态。4. 用直接引语增强情境效果 例如：(2017.06浙江卷)Para 1: The car abruptly stopped in front of him. Get into the car. Paul shouted at Mac. 【分析】用含有祈使句的直接引语与首句提示中的“abruptly stopped”形成呼应，进一步烘托了紧张的情境。5. 添加背景描写以烘托场景例如：(2017.11浙江卷)Para 2: We drove through several states and saw lots of great

8、sights along the way. I looked out of the car window, winding rivers, lofty mountains, sunny beaches and deep valleys holding me entirely in their fascination. 【分析】用“视觉+环境描写+拟人修辞”结构与首句提示语中的“lots of great sights”遥相呼应，再现了美丽风景对视觉的冲击效果。6.引入新动作创造新的情境例如：(2017.11浙江卷)Para 1: The next day we remembered the b

9、rand-new tent we had brought with us. Dad exchanged a glance with me. Why not camp to satisfy Mom? 【分析】用“动作描写+问句衔接”结构承接首句提示语创造了一个新的情境，即“露营”。7. 借助声音效果增强描写功效例如：BOOM, CRASH! The wind was howling outside of my house. We were having a terrible thunder storm. I was very scared.【分析】用“ howling”这一声效进一步拓展了首句所

10、设定的情境效果。8.用疑问句引出新的话题或对事件的新的看法例如：Why does trouble always follow me around? Do I have a kick me sign on my back or something?【分析】用一般疑问句承接首句的特殊疑问句，进一步凸显了作者对“trouble”的看法。实践强化31阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。I was ten the summer my dad helped me buy my first ten-speed bicycle from a second-hand sto

11、re. I put up $60 of my grass cutting and snow shoveling (铲) money, and my dad put up the other half. I would pay him back in installments (分期付款) over the next six months. Although it was a bit out of style, it was my ticket to the adult world. I spent that summer and autumn riding. I was able to rid

12、e to every corner of town. However, my sister Liz, a prisoner of her five-speed bicycle, never had a chance to keep up. Just before the Christmas deadline to pay my dad back, we were hit with several snowstorms. This allowed me to shovel enough driveways to pay off my debt. I was now officially a bi

13、ke owner; it was a feeling unlike any other. While my mom and dad were fantastic parents, they always passed off gloves, sneakers, and shirts as “presents”. Then came that fateful Christmas morning, my father gave me a used portable record player. I was excited. However, my excitement was short-live

14、d after my dad took my sister to the garage. There, on the steps, stood a brand new ten-speed bicycle. I didnt hear her screams of joy-all I could hear was the noisy engine of the lawnmower, the endless scraping (刮擦声) of the metal snow shovel on concrete. Id gone through far too many hours of hard w

15、ork for my used bike while Liz got her shinny new machine less than a week later. “Lets go for a ride, Rob!” Liz sang, my dad holding the bike upright as she got on the shining leather seat. “Too snowy to ride,” I refused, pushing the record player farther away from me. 注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右：2. 请按如下格式在答

16、题卡的相应位置作答。I seethed (生闷气) for the rest of the day. _Reflecting on my dads words, I figured out what he meant. _【参考范文】I seethed(生闷气) for the rest of the day.I locked myself in my bedroom and avoided talking with my family. Noticing my low spirits, my dad pulled me aside and asked, “Everything okay?”

17、Actually, it was the last thing I wanted to talk about. With all the anger and disappointment exploding in my heart, I finally cried, “Its not fair. I worked so hard for my bike, and its not even new. How could Liz get a brand new bike without doing anything for it?” Hearing my words, my dad patted

18、my arm gently and smiled. “We gave her the bike so that she could ride with you. Actually, its a gift for you.” Reflecting on my dads words, I figured out what he meant. After the snow melted, I pushed my bike out once again but this time I invited Liz to ride with me. We really spent a wonderful da

19、y on bike. I had never imagined it would be so exciting and joyful with her riding beside now that Liz could keep up. From then on, we rode all over town together everyday. Gradually I realized that we almost did everything together! Liz and I became true friends. That brand new bike was not a gift

20、for Lizit was a gift for me. My father had given me the gift of my sisters company, which Ive treasured every day since.【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，主要讲述作者通过半年辛苦的劳动挣到了一辆二手自行车，而他的妹妹却只用了不到一周的劳动就得到了一辆新的自行车，这让作者感到很不公平。1.段落续写：根据第一段首句内容“那天剩下的时间我一直在生闷气。”可知，第一段可描写作者生闷气之后父亲对他的开导和解释。根据第二段首句内容“反思父亲的话之后，我明白了他的意思。”可知，第二段可描写

21、作者认真思考了父亲的话之后的做法。2.续写线索：生闷气父亲开导理解父亲的话和妹妹一起骑车感谢妹妹的陪伴3.词汇激活行为类注意到：notice/see爆发：explode/erupt情感类令人兴奋的：exciting/thrilling 高兴的：joyful/happy【典型句式】【句式1】Actually, it was the last thing I wanted to talk about.（由省略连词that引导的定语从句）【句式2】We gave her the bike so that she could ride with you.（由so that引导的目的状语从句）【句式3】

22、After the snow melted, I pushed my bike out once again but this time I invited Liz to ride with me.（由After引导的时间状语从句）【句式4】I had never imagined it would be so exciting and joyful with her riding beside now that Liz could keep up.（由省略连词that引导的宾语从句）【句式5】Gradually I realized that we almost did everything

23、 together!（由that引导的宾语从句）【句式6】My father had given me the gift of my sisters company, which Ive treasured every day since.（由which引导的非限制性定语从句）2阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。As I sat on the bus waiting to arrive at school, the sun shining, I just sat there full of excitement ready to enjoy the fi

24、rst day of spring. At last, the bus stopped and I started my day.The whole day I was waiting for one thing, noon break. As the day passed by, I heard the bell rang and everyone rushed out of the door. I hurried and ate lunch just to get outside.As soon as I was out, my close friend, Riley called me

25、over to play basketball. We all started playing and time flew by as we heard the timekeeper yell, “10 more minutes.” From that point on, the game sped up. Score after score, the competition process was more intense. I passed it to my teammate, Austin, and he dished it back as I pulled up a shot. I f

26、elt as if the world around me were barely moving, and all I concentrated on was the ball going to the hoop (篮筐). Not knowing I was pushed back hard, I hit the ground. A huge pain entered my left ankle. I wanted to scream, but I didnt, hearing the people around me shout for help. I just lay there as

27、Riley came over to pick me up and Austin fetched a wheelchair from the school clinic. Both of them helped me sit on the wheelchair. It seemed like the whole school circled around me as I was being pushed away.The moment we entered the clinic where I always felt nervous, I didnt think my ankle hurt a

28、s badly as it did just now, so I said, “Im okay.” Then they had to send me back to class without any treatment. The rest of the day I felt my ankle swelling (肿) up and I thought of how stupid I was to say that my ankle didnt hurt in the clinic. “I should have gone home.” I thought to myself as I was

29、 thrown through this terrible pain. After school, I worried how to go back home.注意：1续写词数应为150 左右；2请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Just then I found Riley come in with an ice pack in his hand._As we went out, we were surprised to find Austin holding some medicinal oil._【参考范文】Just then I found Riley come in with an

30、 ice pack in his hand. From his look, I could easily read his concern, which instantly brought tears to my eyes. He asked if my ankle swelled, his voice obviously full of care and anxiety. I nodded helplessly, eyes automatically settling on my aching ankle. Handing me the ice pack, he told me it cou

31、ld help relieve the pain and reduce swelling at the early stage. So moved was I that I extended my heartfelt gratitude to him. He just smiled, saying that we were good friends and offering to send me home.As we went out, we were surprised to find Austin holding some medicinal oil. “I usually use thi

32、s kind of oil when I get hurt and it does work. You can have a try.” he said with sincerity. All of a sudden, I felt I was the happiest person in the world. I hugged my friends tightly, joyful tears rolling in my eyes. Blessed with such friends, I felt I had so much to be grateful for. Joking about

33、my basketball skill, they sent me home.【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者在中午吃完午饭后走出去，好朋友Riley叫作者过去打篮球，比赛很激烈，作者在比赛中被推倒，左脚踝一阵剧痛，Riley过来扶作者，Austin从学校诊所拿了一辆轮椅，把作者推入了诊室，作者认为自己没事，后来脚肿了，作者担心自己该怎么回家。1.段落续写：由第一段首句内容“就在这时，我发现Riley手里拿着一个冰袋走了进来。”可知，第一段可描写Riley对作者的关心和帮助。由第二段首句内容“当我们出门时，我们惊讶地发现Austin手里拿着一些药用油。”可知，第二段可描写Austi

34、n给作者药用油以及作者的感想。2.续写线索：关心地询问给冰袋给药用油感想3.词汇激活行为类询问：ask/inquire递：hand sb. sth./pass sth. to sb.拥抱：hug sb./embrace sb.情绪类感动：moved/touched感激：be grateful/be thankful【典型句式】句式1 From his look, I could easily read his concern, which instantly brought tears to my eyes. (由关系代词which引导的非限制性定语从句)句式2 So moved was I

35、that I extended my heartfelt gratitude to him. (部分倒装句)3阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整短文。Tina was seventeen years old and always wore a bright smile. This may not seem that unusual except that she suffered from a condition that left her muscles stiff and,for the most part, unmanageable. Because sh

36、e had trouble speaking, it was this bright smile that reflected her true personalitya great kid. Tina used a walker most of the time to help her through the crowded school hallways. A lot of times people didnt speak to her. Maybe it was because she looked different and the rest of the students didnt

37、 know how to approach her. Tina usually broke the ice with people she met in the halls with a big “ Hi.”One day,the assignment was to memorize three stanzas(诗节)of the poem“Dont Quit.” I only made the assignment worth ten points since I figured most of my students wouldnt do it anyway. When I was in

38、school and a teacher assigned a ten-point homework assignment, I would probably have blown it off myself. So I wasnt expecting much from todays teenagers either. Tina was in the class, and I noticed a look on her face that was different from the normal bright smile. The look was one of worry. “Dont

39、worry, Tina,” I thought to myself, “its only ten points.”The day the assignment came due arrived and as I went through my roster (花名册)my expectations were met, as one by one each student failed to recite the poem.“Sorry, Mr. Krause,” was the standard reply. Its only worth ten points anyway.right?“ F

40、inally, in frustration and half kidding, I declared that the next person who didnt recite the poem perfectly had to drop on the floor and give me ten push-ups(俯卧撑).注意：1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式作答。To my surprise, Tina was the next._When she finished, a student asked ”Tina, why did you do that? Its only worth ten points!_