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1、托福作文写作范文详解Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.1 .题目翻译：出外吃饭还是在家吃饭好？2 .审题关键词:Restaurants; Eat food at home3.3.论证分析：节省时间，自己做饭很麻烦 能够品尝各种各样的美食 能够促速和朋友的感情

2、范文:Some people like to eat out at food stands and restaurants, while others like to prepare food at home. This preference depends on the kind of lifestyle people have. Those with very busy jobs outside the house dont always have time to cook. They like the convenience of eating out. Overall, though,

3、 it is cheaper and healthier to eat at home.此段结构第一句话为本文提供了社会背景。第二、三、四句话对此通行了分析。 第五句话用overall对本段通行了总结，告诉了我们作者对此的观点。此段功能本段是文章首段，对文章要讨论的内容提供了背景和社会上激烈讨论的 话题，然后点明了作者立场，并提出论点。While eating in restaurants is fast, the money you spend can add up. When I have dinner at restaurant with a friend, the bill is us

4、ually over twenty dollars. I can buy a lot of groceries with that much money. Even lunch at a fast-food stand usually costs five or six dollars for one person. Thats enough to feed the whole family at home.此段结构 本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨。后面几句话对主 旨通行了简要分析。没有分层次，结构比较简单。此段功能 本段是文章的第二段，也就是正文第一段，写了支持作者立场的第一

5、个 分论点。是从出去吃的弊端来论证的。Eating at home is better for you, too. Meals at restaurants are often high in fat and calories, and they serve big plates of food-much more food than you need to eat at one meal. If you cook food at home, you have more control over the ingredients. You can use margarine instead of

6、 butter on your potatoes, or not put so much cheese on top of your pizza. At home, you can control your portion size. You can serve yourself as little as you want. In a restaurant, you may eat a full plate of food because you paid for it”.此段结构本段是一个总分的结构。本段分为两个小部分。第一句话是本段主旨。 本段第一个小部分说了在外面吃饭可能会很不健康。第二

7、个小部分用 at home来引领，告诉了我们在家吃饭非常健康。这两点做了对比和 利弊分析。此段功能 本段是文章的第三段，也就是正文第二段，写了支持作者立场的第二个 分论点。是从在家吃的好处来论证的。Its true that eating out is convenient. You dont have to shop, or cook, or clean up. But real home cooking doesnt have to take a lot of time. There are lots of simple meals that dont take long to make.

8、 In fact, theyre faster than eating out, especially if you think of the time you spend driving to a restaurant, parking, waiting for a table, waiting for service, and driving home.此段结构本段是一个让步转折的结构，分为两个小部分。第一个小部分承认了出 去吃确实有时候比较方便。二第二个小部分说，其实在家吃更方便，因 为我们节省了开车，停车，等菜等等的时间。先抑后扬，结构非常充实。此段功能本段是文章的第四段，也就是正文第

9、三段，写了支持作者立场的第三个 分论点。Both eating at restaurants and cooking at home can be satisfying. Both can taste good and be enjoyed with family and friends. I prefer cooking at home because of the money and health aspects. Ultimately, people will make the choice that fits their lifestyle best.此段结构本段第一、二句话肯定了在家

10、吃和除外吃都有好处。但是第三句话用一 个prefer点出了作者的观点,并阐述了理由。最后一句话对本文通行 了升华，告诉了我们其实如何选择还是要因人而异。此段功能本段是文章的尾段，对上文通行了承接，并对论点通行了概括分析，最 后重申论点，让文章更加立场明确，并通行了适当的升华。满分因素剖析一、语言表达本文语言朴实，并没有应用很多华丽的辞藻，用到的词汇多是高中和四 级词汇，但表达清楚,逻辑清晰，通俗易懂。在句式方面，本文句式多 变，作者熟练使用复叩句结构，且句子长短得当，表达自然流畅，并没 有刻意炫技。这样的文章很清晰，考官看起来不会很费力，也会取得高 分。1. Some people like

11、to eat out at food stands and restaurants, while others like to prepare food at home此句中出现了一个托福作文开头段常用的结构some., others.,意 思是一些人怎样，而另一些人怎样。这种结构常用语开头段的第一句， some和other后面跟着题目中对立的两个观点,用于引出后面的作 者的观点。2. This preference depends on the kind of lifestyle people have.此句中,people have前面省略了 that，做lifestyle的定语,起修 饰

12、作用。这句话的意思是在家吃还是在外面哪个更好是由每个人的生 活习惯决定的。3. While eating in restaurants is fast, the money you spend can add up.此句中,while引导让步状语从句,相当于虽然的意思。主句中暗含 定语从句，you spend前面省略了 that，做money的定语，起修饰 作用。动词短语add up的意思是“累积。此句虽短，但字字珠矶，暗 含多种结构，可以显示出作者的语言功底。二、逻辑结构本文是正正正的大正型支持文章，结构标准，逻辑清晰。文章段内结构 非常丰富，使用了让步，对比等论证方法。这些论证方法都使得文章更 有可读性。拿最后一个正文段为例，这一段是一个让步转折的结构，分 为两个小部分。第一个小部分承认了出去吃确实有时候比较方便。二第 二个小部分说，其实在家吃更方便，因为我们节省了开车，停车，等菜 等等的时间。先抑后扬，结构非常充实。