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1、读后续写原文中文Back last October, I was working at my desk when the phone rang. Your order arrived. And the box is making a lot of noise he said.去年十月，我 正在办公桌 前工作，电话 响了。“您的 订单到了。盒 子里发出很 大的噪音。” 他说。I eagerly opened up the mailbox, and a pile of baby chicksjust a few days oldrolled onto the floor. They were so

2、 cute!我急切地打 开了邮箱，一 堆刚出生几 天的小鸡翻 滚到地板上。 它们太可爱 了 ！u Well,I said to my husband we re now chicken people.w“好吧，”我 对丈夫说，“我们现在 是养鸡人了JThats right. I ordered 15 chicks in the mail. I didn t do it just for the eggs. Instead, I thought they might help with our mental health.没错。我邮购 了 15只小 鸡。我并不是 只为了鸡蛋。 相反，我觉得 它们

3、可能有 助于我们的 心理健康。They give us a reason to go outside every morning and e vening, often around sunrise and sunset（力 情节）to feed them give them water and make sure they re safe in the hen-house fbr the night.它们让我们 每天早晚有 理由出门，通 常在日出和 日落左右喂 它们、给它们 喝水，并确保 它们晚上在 鸡舍里安全。They ve also helped my family learn how

4、to transform nc gative emotions such as anger, fbr positive emotions, such它们还帮助 我家人学会读后续写原文中文as wonder and awe（如何在续写中体现 wonder&awe 呢？）.如何将消极 情绪如愤怒 转化为积极 情绪如惊奇 和敬畏。And that? s exactly what has happened with my family and the 11 beautiful hens we now have in our backyard(unfortunately, not all 15 chic

5、ks survived).这正是我家 和我们后院 现有的11只 美丽母鸡（不 幸的是，并非 所有15只小 鸡都存活下 来）发生的事 情。Every day the hens do mysterious and amazing things. Like taking dirt baths ” says my 7-year-old daughter, Rosy. “Basically they dig a hole in the ground and rub their bodies in the dirt. ”每天母鸡都 会做神秘而 令人惊讶的 事情。“比如 洗泥浴，“我 7岁的女儿 Rosy说

6、。“基 本上它们会 在地上挖个 洞，然后在泥 里擦身子。”One afternoon,we found one of the henswe named her Carmelon our roof. How did she get up there? Do chickens fly?ff My husband asked.一天下午，我 们发现一只 母鸡我 们叫她 Carmel在我们的屋 顶上。“她是 怎么上去 的？鸡会飞 吗？ 我丈夫 问。I had no good answer fbr him but instead just enjoyed the wonder at it. Then th

7、e next night while we were making dinner another hen named Marshmallow came to the kitchen window我没有好的 答案，但却沉 浸在这种奇读后续写原文中文and just stared at us.妙之中。然后 第二天晚上， 在我们做晚 饭时，另一只 叫 Marshmall ow的母鸡来 到厨房窗前， 就这么盯着 我们。For me, the most impressive thing about chickens is their strange and mysterious sounds.对我来说，

8、鸡 最让人印象 深刻的是它 们奇特而神 秘的声音。When the chickens turned 5 months old, they started to make a sound like: buh,buh,buy, bah-gawk, with a strong emphasis on the gawk. The pattern repeats over and over for a few minutes straight.当鸡们五个 月大时，它们 开始发出这 样的声音： 布，布，买， 巴咕，重音 在咕上。这个 模式一直重 复几分钟。When I heard this sound,

9、I immediately stopped what I was doing and thought, “What on earth are they trying t o tell me?”（很小很小的时候家里养过几只小鸡，没有太大 印象了，不过看向往的生活里，记忆中似乎是有这么一 个情节，何老师他们听到鸡叫，出门发现是小鸡下蛋了，当 时他们还说，：“嘿，这是在告诉我们，下蛋了，快来收集 一下”）当我听到这 个声音时，我 立刻停下手 头的事情， 想：“它们到 底想告诉我 什么？ ”续写第一段：Then one day, when I heard this special soundran o

10、uts ide to the hen-house and looked inside.（所以我会觉得3 里应该是下蛋了，之前上文出现了鸡飞到屋顶等wonder, 这里应该是下蛋，体现对生命的awe敬畏惊奇）有一天，当我 听到这个特 殊的声音时， 我跑到鸡舍 外面去看。续写第二段：The chicks I mail-ordered last October ended up changin g our life.去年十月邮 购的小鸡最 终改变了我读后续写原文中文们的生活。文本分析 文章大意： 我在网上邮购的小鸡到了。小鸡们很可爱，我们成了养鸡人。不仅如此， 这些小鸡让我们身心更加的健康。有时他们

11、会泥水洗浴，有时会发出咕咕 哒的声音，有时会飞上屋顶，有时会跳到窗台上盯着我们看，非常的有趣。 总之，他们彻底的改变了我们的生活。五要素分析：Who-I , my husband, 1 Ibeatiful hensWhen-one dayWhere-my familyWhatI ran outside to the hen-house and looked inside.WhyI heard this special soundHowthe sound aroused my curiosity主旨：通过养鸡这件小事，懂得感恩大自然，和家人更加紧密联系在一起。续写情节走向：Paral:惊讶的是我

12、发现了一枚新鲜的蛋一母鸡们开始陆续下单-它们的声 音仿佛是宣示它们的成就每次听到这种声音，我都知道会有新鲜的鸡蛋 产下Para2:她们不仅产蛋还带来了更多的快乐一它们教会我们倾听，懂得他们的 独特语言，感恩生活中的小事，珍惜大自然的馈赠-我们越来越多地和家 人们在一起，分享生活中地美好一主旨升华试水作文Then one day, when I heard this special sound, I ran outside to the hen-house and looked inside. To my amazement, I found a freshly laid egg! It was

13、 warm and smooth, and I couldnt help but feel a sense of pride and accomplishment. Our chickens had finally started laying eggs, and I realized then that these sounds were not just random noises. It seemed that their unique sounds were their way of announcing their achievement. From that day on, eve

14、ry time we heard the distinctive nbuh, buh, buy, bah-gawk,M we knew that we would find a new egg waiting for us in the hen-house.The chicks I mail-ordered last October ended up changing our life. Not only did they provide us with fresh eggs, but they also brought so much joy, wonder, and excitement

15、to our daily lives.They taught us to listen and understand their unique language, to appreciate the simple joys of life, and to value the natural world around us. We learned to care for them, to protect them, and to celebrate their achievements. We found ourselves spending more time together as a fa

16、mily, and wc even invited friends and neighbors to come and sec our little flock, sharing our new passion for these fascinating creatures with others. Through the simple act of raising chickens, we discovered a newfound appreciation for the natural world and a stronger sense of connection with one a

17、nother.附：官答参考范文Then one day, when I heard this special sound,I ran outside to the hcn-housc and looked inside It was amazing. Inside the hen-house,two hens,which we named Chocolate and Milkwcrc sitting down, laying eggs. A third hen named Caramel was outside the door of the coop,broadcasting the spe

18、cial sound.I realized at that moment This strange noise is the way chickens signal that a member of the flock is laying an egg!ItJ s the egg-laying signal.Why would chickens want to signal such a special and important time?I have no clue.I think only the chickens know.The chicks I mail-ordered last

19、October ended up changing our life.Now when I feel anger rising in my body or my daughter feels frustrated,! sometimes remind us all of the egg-laying noise: buh,buh,buy, bah-gawk. Buh, buh. buv, bah-gawk. Buh.buh.buy,bah-gawk. And it brings a smile to everyoneJ s face. Thinking back to that phone call from the post office,! can t remember a package that has brought so much wonder into our life.